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Listen to This: Anaphora
What do you notice in this poem of Walt Whitman? And what effect does it produce?
To a Locomotive in Winter
by Walt Whitman
(1819-1892)
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Thee for my recitative,
Thee in the driving storm even as now, the snow, the winter-day declining,
Thee in thy panoply, thy measur’d dual throbbing and thy beat convulsive,
Thy black cylindric body, golden brass and silvery steel,
Thy ponderous side-bars, parallel and connecting rods, gyrating,
shuttling at thy sides,
Thy metrical, now swelling pant and roar, now tapering in the distance,
Thy great protruding head-light fix’d in front,
Thy long, pale, floating vapor-pennants, tinged with delicate purple,
The dense and murky clouds out-belching from thy smoke-stack,
Thy knitted frame, thy springs and valves, the tremulous twinkle of
thy wheels,
Thy train of cars behind, obedient, merrily following,
Through gale or calm, now swift, now slack, yet steadily careering;
Type of the modern–emblem of motion and power–pulse of the continent,
For once come serve the Muse and merge in verse, even as here I see thee,
With storm and buffeting gusts of wind and falling snow,
By day thy warning ringing bell to sound its notes,
By night thy silent signal lamps to swing.
Fierce-throated beauty!
Roll through my chant with all thy lawless music, thy swinging lamps
at night,
Thy madly-whistled laughter, echoing, rumbling like an earthquake,
rousing all,
Law of thyself complete, thine own track firmly holding,
(No sweetness debonair of tearful harp or glib piano thine,)
Thy trills of shrieks by rocks and hills return’d,
Launch’d o’er the prairies wide, across the lakes,
To the free skies unpent and glad and strong.
Public Domain
I’ve no doubt the repetitious use of thee and thy for thirteen lines upfront (with the exception of one the, which sounds the same) caught your attention. Whitman turned to a poetic device called anaphora, employing the use of a repeated sound, word or phrase at the beginning of each line, or possibly, each stanza. In this poem, Whitman is addressing, personifying, exalting the power of the locomotive. The anaphora commands our attention, draws us into the flow, sound and rhythm of the crushing. powerful creature in such a way that the overall effect is musical. Reading it aloud can leave you dizzy and out of breath.
Let’s take a look at another poem with a quite different tone in which the poet uses anaphora. This time I turn to William Shakespeare:
Sonnet 66
“Tired with all these, for restful death I cry,
As to behold desert a beggar born,
And needy nothing trimm’d in jollity,
And purest faith unhappily forsworn,
And gilded honour shamefully misplac’d,
And maiden virtue rudely strumpeted,
And right perfection wrongfully disgrac’d,
And strength by limping sway disabled
And art made tongue-tied by authority,
And folly–doctor-like–controlling skill,
And simple truth miscall’d simplicity,
And captive good attending captain ill:
Tir’d with all these, from these would I be gone,
Save that, to die, I leave my love alone.”
Public Domain
How does this poem compare with Whitman’s work? Again, the repetition of and creates a driving rhythm and intensifies emotions, but the overall feeling or tone of the poem is quite different. The locomotive’s restless pounding gives way to a bit of near-despair that’s allayed in the turn in the final couplet by his devotion to the beloved.
For today’s prompt, let’s write a poem using anaphora. Here are a few suggestions to help you get started:
• Choose an emotion you wish to portray and a word or sound that will help to enhance that emotion and have at it.
• Consider an object or a person you would like to revere or to whom/which you would show scorn and take it away.
• Write a narrative poem, a speech. Martin Luther King’s I Have a Dream comes to mind. Read it over and see how his repetition drives home the point. So, make a point.
• “Google” poems using anaphora. You’ll find a plethora of them. Take one and twist it, using the same phrase but your own thoughtS.
• What about a bit of humor? I couldn’t find any examples, but I bet some of you can come up with something.
These are just jump starts. Please don’t feel you have to confine yourself to these suggestions. I hope you enjoy working with this most effective device—many poets have.
To participate:
• Write your poem and post it on your blog or web site.
• Copy and paste the direct URL to your post into the Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post. He’ll ask you for your name, too.
• Leave a comment, and may I suggest, if you have any favorite anaphoric poems that come to mind, how about adding the title and the poet’s name?
• Head on into the pub where we’ll be serving fine wine from an amphora of anaphora, read some rhythmic poetry, enjoy the musical quality of the evening and visit the work of your fellow pubsters. They appreciate your comments and, hopefully, will return the visit.
• You may want to put the word out on your social networking media that the doors are open, Thursday, the 27th, at 3:00 EDT. We welcome new visitors and poems searching for a place to commune with other word artisans.
Happy to be hosting this evening at dVerse, this is Victoria. Red, white or rose? Or, if wine isn’t your thing, whatever…but poetry is on tap.
claudia said:
this is a cool poetic tool victoria – but in the poem making found that it is a difficult to use tool as well if you don’t want the poem sound like broken records…big challenge…ha…i went very subtle with mine in the end.. looking forward to read what everyone comes up with
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Yours worked so well, Claudia. And as I said in your comments, creates such a distinct “voice.” Fun.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Welcome to the Pub, Poets. Looking forward to enjoying your poems and your company.
brian miller said:
very cool poetic tool…repetition poems are not always my favs if they are not done well…in these i think you can really use the repetition to build momentum…would be interesting to see a humorous one..maybe someone will take that up…
claudia said:
mine was meant to be humorous…. ha
brian miller said:
ah it was a bit, but had enough reality to it..the needing to know everything culture and worrying about kids…ha…remember my greatest fear is something happening to my kids so that gives it enough edge…though you will have to let me know the bugs response to your poetry…ha….
claudia said:
they asked me if they could come in and watch a movie instead 🙂
brian miller said:
they have no taste….smiles.
claudia said:
true that – and they ate all the ice cream i had in the fridge.. smiles
brian miller said:
ha. at least you can blame them when everyone gets home….smiles.
Victoria said:
Now I want ice cream. My laptop has chosen a terrible time to crap out on me. Using an unreliable back-up. Light candles or something that it will keep working!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I have used this several times before.. great to know it has a name 🙂
claudia said:
ha – true
brian miller said:
funny how that happens at times eh?
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I guess all have been done before 🙂
brian miller said:
and here we think we are something…
only to find we have reinvented the wheel…
smiles.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
There are so many weird little terms out there…mostly Greek.
Marya said:
Oh, Victoria, I love it! And thanks for suggesting I use my “Circumscribbles” — a match made in heaven. Thanks again!
brian miller said:
absolutely love the close on your poem….very nice…i like the embedded anaphora as well…
claudia said:
yours was cool… and hot… smiles
Victoria C. Slotto said:
You got it, Marya…sort of cheating, maybe?
Marya said:
Oh, I dunno, what’s to cheat when we are all learning? 🙂
brian miller said:
ha. true that…smiles…i like it
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Amen, sister.
brian miller said:
what i am really loving is how everyone is making this their own and getting creative with it….
Maggie Grace said:
Mine is dark but it’s what flowed out of me. I do like Charge of the Light Brigade by Lord Alfred Tennyson. He uses anaphora in several ways in same poem.
brian miller said:
who is gonna get in the way o fwhat is flowing…its reality you know…a sad one, but it is…and glad you made it out…smiles.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Mine have all been dark, lately–sometimes that just happens even though I’m not in a dark space.
Laurie Kolp said:
Maggie, when I click on your link, it says your blog has been removed??
Laurie Kolp said:
Nevermind… it’s working now.
Maggie Grace said:
It certainly drives home a point.
Heaven (@asweetlust) said:
Thank you for another wonderful post Victoria ~ I will be around to read the links when I get home ~
Have a wonderful day everyone ~
Grace
Victoria C. Slotto said:
You, too, Grace.
grapeling said:
Victoria, it was a quick and dirty write. Thanks for the prompt – Whitman and Will in the same ‘lesson’.
claudia said:
ha – i have a piece of soap ready
brian miller said:
badum tish…
a dirty write…
groan….
ha
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Love dirty.
grapeling said:
my goodness, Victoria!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
As in Earth!
grapeling said:
🙂
Anna Elizabeth Graham said:
This was fun, I used an Innu myth to play with William Blake’s The Tyger!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Can’t wait, Anna. Great myth and poem.
aprille said:
Ever so interesting, Victoria. Never came across this before.The Shakespeare sonnet is surprising. I wonder if the fact that it is sonnet 66 has anything to do with the subject matter.
Thank you for bringing this to our attention. I’ll enjoy having a try at it tomorrow.
Like you, I find ‘dark poems’ came in groups.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I’ll look forward to yours, Aprille. I guess it’s bedtime over there, heh?
Poet Laundry said:
Thanks for the prompt Victoria! Looking forward to reading these entries!
brian miller said:
you did very well…build your voice in a very interesting direction…ha
claudia said:
just picked up my fam at the airport and signing off for the night… they had a great time in berlin and are tired but happy…smiles.. will be catching up in the AM
brian miller said:
nice…welcome home to them….
you did buy some new ice cream right? smiles.
have a great eve catching up…
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Sleep tight and enjoy the family.
brian miller said:
dinner break here…fresh veggies/corn on the cob…yum…
will return later and catch up…
Laurie Kolp said:
YUMMY!
brian miller said:
oh it was…we had to go walk it off…and the walk led to the ice cream trailer…so we had to walk that off….thus why i was away so long…smiles.
Laurie Kolp said:
I really enjoyed this exercise, Victoria. Thanks!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Good luck with all the dears and Deeres, Laurie. Nice to be able to write it out!
Laurie Kolp said:
Yes, it is!
Mary said:
Victoria, I really do love this prompt. I think I could write a poem a day using anaphora Truly. I was busy with my grandchildren today and didn’t know what I would write (that I would want to share). Sometimes I write things that I don’t know if I should share or not. But I decided what the heck, as I sit here with tears flowing down my cheeks. Your poem had a similar subject. I wonder sometimes how personal a poem should be. Do you ever wonder this? Perhaps this should be a topic sometimes for discussion……… Anyway this is a very person poem….as was yours. I will be visitng others this evening. (My grandchildren are still with me.)
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Sometimes (often?) I find my poetry peers in on my personal life and I guess I hope that those who read will respect my truth. We are who we’ve been, what we’ve been through, and it’s bound to creep into our writing. Right now I’m going through a horrible change of medications and maybe that’s why death keeps coming up.
On the other hand, because I do write fiction, often enough I fictionalize a poem. For example, I’ve never been through a broken relationship that didn’t initiate with me, but write of it now and again. Perhaps it’s my work with hospice that taught me to feel what others go through. Or, who knows, a past life experience. :0) Or just writing fiction. I chuckle though when people offer sympathy because I try to underline when something is fictional.
Your poem needs to be written and in my opinion shared. Poetry does leave us vulnerable, doesn’t it? As does blogging. We are at the mercy of one another.
Mary said:
Yes, our poetry does leave us vulnerable indeed. Sometimes I am ready to be vulnerable, and sometimes not. I do fictionalize sometimes as well, but I always think that my fictionalizations are obvious when I do them. Like you, I do hope that when I do allow myself to be vulnerable that others will respect my words…..even if they are in a different place completely. I think writing / sharing poetry (for me) is a leap of faith. Especially the stuff like I have shared the past few days which really are of the personal variety. Take care, Victoria; and thanks again for the prompt….
Mary said:
Brian, I do suggest the topic sometime…..how about discussing how personal poems should be????? Do we really want to say who we are? Or do we want to remain anonymous?
Laurie Kolp said:
I like that idea a lot, Mary.
Heaven (@asweetlust) said:
An excellent topic Mary ~ I am always torn between writing from personal events & just being creative with my writing under another name ~ Maybe that’s why I have two blogs, ha ~ Your share was really touching Mary ~
Mary said:
Thanks for being touched by my personal share, Grace. Sometimes I cannot help it……you have a gift of being creative without being so personally disclosig. I shoud learn from you. Smiles.
brian miller said:
cool….(sneaks back in)….sorry did not realize i would be gone that long….cool…sounds like a good pubtalk topic…i am up again week after next…
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Sounds like a plan. How was the corn?
brian miller said:
oh it was good…answered laurie above…the veg was great…so great we had to walk it off…and ended up at the ice cream stand…and then walk that off…so…smiles…thus why i was so long…smiles.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Good for you. Envious.
Mary said:
Ya, for pubtalk it might be good. I would be interested in what others would think for sure.
brian miller said:
cool. done.
brian miller said:
some nice stuff out on the trail…come on poets…
17 of the first 20 visiting
and mary of the last 7….
claudia said:
back and out on the trail in a bit…. letmegetacoffeefirst….smiles…good morning
brian miller said:
so without coffee you words just run together eh? smiles…good morning claudia…just getting ready to hit the rack…
ManicDdaily said:
Cool post, Victoria – love Whitman, Shakespeare and was very impressed by reading the King again. Thanks much. I am a bit tired to go around tonight – traveling back and forth, but will try tomorrow. Loved yours and Bri and Claudia’s. k.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Thanks, Karin.
Susan said:
Whew. Hard. I didn’t want to do my usual Whitmanesque cataloguing, so I tried for a sonnet with a mood of tired/amused/joy. Maybe it will strike some as humor.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
How fun.
seingraham said:
Hey Victoria – thanks for this…think I’ve been vaguely aware of the form but have never tried my hand at it before…didn’t mean to get so serious with it but what can you do…Miss Muse goes where she wants mostly…was a good exercise nevertheless
claudia said:
ha – miss muse certainly has her own head sometimes.. smiles
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Yep. She does.
Tony Maude said:
Thanks for this, Victoria. I’d never heard of it before, but have tried my hand at it after my creative writing group this morning. Somehow, I managed to pull the two things together. Now to hit the trail and see what everyone else has done with this … smiles.
claudia said:
anthropomorphic personification… this is way cool tony
Tony Maude said:
Thanks Claudia. It’s more of a Poetics prompt than FFA, though … smiles
claudia said:
we should really do it.. no matter where… ha…just love the word….anthropomorphic personification….anthropomorphic personification….anthropomorphic personification..i’m walking through the house, mumbling it all the time…my fam shakes their heads…smiles
Tony Maude said:
If you’d like me to I’ll start researching an article on it, Claudia. It’s an ancient idea (probably as old as religion) with lots of poetic potential.
claudia said:
that would be great tony
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I agree.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Good morning, all…late getting in this morning. Life has a way of interrupting, doesn’t it? Looking forward to reading the rest now. Have a good day, all…or whatever it is where you hang out!
brian miller said:
just coming in from the pool…was hot and packed today….and now the sky is howl and about to bust open with thunderstorms…smiles…just caught up…
Imelda said:
Thanks, Victoria, for the prompt and the chance to focus on something
Imelda said:
Just to add (my comment was somehow posted before I was done), I realized that this tool makes for a rather dramatic poem. 🙂
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Glad it’s useful to you, Imelda. Look forward to reading it.
jlynn sheridan said:
Victoria, enjoyed this, rollicking in the sound of poetry.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Rollicking. Yes, that’s another way to use it!
brian miller said:
good night everyone…gotta go dust off my mouse ears for mary’s shindig in here tomorrow…i will check back in the morning to see if there are any late joiners…