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A Martian Sends a Postcard Home, Craig Raine, poetry craft, Samuel Peralta, the Martian school of poetry, William Caxton
Big thanks to Samuel Peralta for bringing us today’s Meeting the Bar article..
A recent article on Imagism got me thinking of some of the other influences on my craft and technique.
In a bookstore in the U.K., ages ago now, I found a poetry book by Craig Raine. It was called “A Martian Sends a Postcard Home”. I didn’t know that, years earlier, this book had launched what would be known as the Martian school of poetry, a movement much like Imagism.
The title poem was a blank verse composition of seventeen couplets, with the first three as follows:
from A Martian Sends a Postcard Home
by Craig Raine
Caxtons are mechanical birds with many wings
and some are treasured for their markings–
they cause the eyes to melt
or the body to shriek without pain.
I have never seen one fly, but
sometimes they perch on the hand.
.
I was intrigued by the title, and the cryptic words, so familiar and yet saying something so alien. That first word, “caxtons” mystified me – but being in a bookstore, a dictionary was close at hand:
Caxton, n [kak’-stuhn] 1. William (1422—91) English printer who published the first book printed in English (1475); he also established the first printing press in England (1477). 2. A book, especially of the type printed by William Caxton. 3. A style of type, style used by William Caxton used in his books
That second definition leaped out at me, like the answer to a riddle – a book – and everything in those six lines was instantly illuminated.
The wings are pages, the markings are words… I bought the book, devoured it. I was breathless, I read through the rest of the poem, thinking “Cars, wristwatches…” The strangeness of looking at the world through Martian eyes underscored its unique clarity, and gave me one more weapon in my arsenal of poetic craft.
You know how it is – when writing, it isn’t difficult to fall into cliché, to use timeworn metaphors and descriptions, especially when writing about ordinary objects and experiences that everyone is familiar with, for example:
The sun shines on the clouds.
From my verse “Not Play”
…The intonation of sun across the clouds…
This Martian sees with his ears! Suddenly that interplay of sunlight across higher and lower elevations of clouds becomes almost a musical scale.
Granted, fully embracing the Martian philosophy – trying to look at things through alien eyes – might be difficult (especially since those aliens may have multifaceted compound non-carbon-based eyes). It may not even be appropriate for all types of poetry.
But it’s an excellent exercise while sifting through ideas, writing first drafts, and it’s that fresh perspective that can lift your writing to another level. You’d be amazed at what comes out of that.
My sonnet “How to Sharpen a Knife” – came out of one such Martian exercise: Despite the title, the poem is actually an ars poetica, (“Your metaphor is your whetstone”), and poetry itself is the knife:
from How to Sharpen a Knife
by Samuel Peralta
Tendered thus, when you thrust the sharpened
blade between unwary ribs, it should rend
as if through parchment, shearing burnished art
past muscle, sinew, deep into the heart.
Go on – sharpen your knife. Come up with the unexpected metaphor, present the alien vision.
You’ll see that, with this technique, you can awaken in readers an immediate sense of wonder and revelation – the same jump of the heart I experienced, in that bookstore, when I first opened the Martian caxton.
ManicDdaily said:
Wonderful, inspiring article, and great sonnet (re Knife.) Thanks, Samuel.
K.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks, glad you enjoyed that drink… have another? 🙂
ManicDdaily said:
Ha. I don’t know that I feel like drinking anything after just finishing my poem! Thanks though.
brian said:
it was a great one though k..you really nailed this…
Shawna said:
AGREED!!!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Yes, she absolutely, positively NAILED it. A round of Martian Caxtons on me!
Shawna said:
Would you like a cherry in yours?
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Yes please… Cheers!
tashtoo said:
Samuel, this is fantastic. I’ve been reviewing my journey through the blogisphere and am totally put off by how often I tend to rely upon the same phrasing, the same metaphors…the same subject! This exercise will be a huge benefit for myself, and I’m sure many others can relate. Thanks so much for spending some time with us today!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
An absolute pleasure… as I said, will grab some munchies and will make the rounds later on to see what the Martians have come up with… 🙂
st3v3piper said:
Incredible, wonderful.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Merci beaucoup! … Or as the Martians might say…. Klaatu barada nikto! 🙂
Shawna said:
I’d like to read more of Craig’s work. It’s very intriguing. I can’t wait to see what everyone comes up with.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
The other book I can recommend, besides “A Martian Sends a Postcard Home” is Craig Raine’s “The Onion, Memory”. You can see from the title that the thought processes are similar.
Ginny Brannan said:
Fascinating. I have learned to appreciate the use of metaphor, both in my own writing and the writing of others. Some have it so finely tuned, that it is like reading two different poems, what’s on the surface, what’s underneath. I am still honing my own skills on this. Shared a piece on Open Link Night just this week that contained subtle metaphor, though not so alien! http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2012/01/ignoring-current.html
Really enjoyed reading and learning from both your article, and the excerpt of your poem shared. Thank you, Samuel.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Very glad for the opportunity to share. A lot of these tools and techniques are in the subconscious, and it’s only when writing an article of this kind that you can focus that it is a very real technique.
Shawna said:
I often write with unintended metaphor. I begin writing a piece headed in one direction and then begin to see something emerge that I didn’t plan for. I may not “write to it” from that point on, but I do make sure I don’t break the accidental metaphor, if that makes sense. I allow things to grow within my writing that aren’t of my own creation.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
That’s definitely a good way to let a poem grow organically. The poem speaks its own mind sometimes, and when it does, it behooves us to listen.
claudia said:
very cool article sam.. thanks for tending bar at dVerse today… can’t wait to see those everyday things from a different point of view… let’s rock the pub with off-beat metaphors poets.. smiles
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks so much for the invitation, I think I created a new drink for the pub, Martian Caxtons. Similar to a Bloody Mary, but with a hint of coconut.
markwindham said:
Well, it came out unexpected thats for sure.
Intriguing ideas, especially with metaphor not being my strength.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
The unexpected is what you’re aiming for! Good job!
Laurie Kolp said:
Not sure if I did this right…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
If you’re looking through the wrong side of the binoculars… then you did it right. 🙂
Shawna said:
Amen! And that applies to just about anything. 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Just about!
deedee said:
Hi! Brian and Claudia…
Nice job!…I like what you both did with your poetry. [Following the Martian School Of pOeTrY…as a guide] By the way, this entire post is…excellent!
Tks, for sharing!
[Note: It may just be me, but how come every time I visit d’Verse …I always sense the smell Of coffee and bakery goods!…lol
It may be your header… which evokes the “sense(s)” Of smell and also warmth.]
deedee 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks for the kind words, deedee. Don’t know if you saw my last article, “On Free Verse, Picasso and Yachting”…. but maybe we’ll do a reprint somewhere. It was just as much fun to write.
deedee said:
Hello! Samuel Peralta…
You’re very welcome!…Unfortunately, I didn’t read your last article “On Free Verse, Picasso and Yachting” However, I will probably, search d”Verse archives or wait for the re-print.
deedee 😉
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
It’s on “OneStop Poetry” which unfortunately is off the air now. We’ll see if it re-surfaces somewhere. Luckily I kept a back-up copy. Whew!
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Sam, I hope the others did. It was still up last week because I referred to it. It was supposedly paid up for a year. I don’t know why it’s gone down. I may have a few articles (but I’m not sure) in my documents. I’ll check.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
It’s happened to me before on previous websites, it could be a number of things… URL, hosting, re-direct from blogspot (if any), data on credit card changing. Life happens. It’s like submitting manuscripts to a journal or magazine… be sure you keep a copy, you never know.
brian miller said:
ah this was a lot of fun sam…looking forward to getting out on the trail and seeing what everyone came up with…also going to tag that book on amazon
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Glad you thought so. I’ll be firing up the Mars Rover soon to pick up the trail as well.
Daydreamertoo said:
A very interesting challenge. I did a fun one, to support the pub, because I love this pub 🙂 hope it’s ok.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Fantastic, looking forward to look at it through the Martian periscope.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Just got back from work, and whoa, the pub is starting to fill up!
…Thanks to Claudia and the crew at dVerse for the invitation to rock the mike tonight, it was excellent fun!
I’ll just have a quick bite to eat and then come along and have a look at what the Martians have come up with! 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Klaatu barada nikto.
Hey, I’m replying to my own post… definitely one too many Martian Caxtons.
pandamoniumcat said:
Enjoyed this something different…I like that!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Something different is exactly what we were aiming for… thanks!
tashtoo said:
Reblogged this on thebleedingpen.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Reblogging to a Martian would be something like…. re-gifting? 😉
Glenn Buttkus said:
Fun is the operative word today, I’m sure,
coming up with fresh metaphors to illustrate
Martian poetry. Seems like a real chore at
first blush, but like Brian, the lark fluttered
free when pen went to papyrus.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Martian poetry was quite a movement in the U.K., but it never did catch on this side of the Atlantic… until now! Glad you could join the movement!
whimsygizmo said:
I absolutely love this. Thank you! Have written one, and want to explore this concept further.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Can’t wait to see what Martian artifacts you’ve unearthed!
Margaret said:
This is a really cool idea, but I have trouble coming up with a metaphor, let alone off-beat ones! ha ha. If I am unable to rise to the challenge, I will swing ’round and enjoy the efforts of others. Thanks for hosting.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Margaret, thanks for stopping by to shake my tentacle. 🙂 Happy Martian night!
seingraham said:
Really interesting article, great poem – think I lost the idea of perspective as I ended up wanting to walk through the wardrobe rather than be the Martian … sigh.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Walking through the wardrobe and seeing through Aslan’s eyes would be perfectly acceptable. Glad you could join the party!
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Just making it to the pub Sam. So glad to see you at the bar – Joe set ’em up on Tuesday, and now you’re challenging us to color way outside the lines. Love the article and your piece! Wow! I’ve been trying to come up with something. Just now it’s a microbe of an idea. I’ll see what I can do. You’re the greatest! Thanks.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Can’t wait to see what your alien microbes will turn into – hopefully not a chest-burster or something with acid for blood!
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Don’t know how different, innovative or new this is – but hey I wrote it quick and it’s kinda fun.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Different enough that I’m inspired to write my own take on it, aka “The Lovesong of J. Alfred Martian” 😉
hedgewitch said:
Sam, this is great–been out all day, then thought this would be the second part of Gay’s ballade form challenge, which I wasn’t doing, so I’m late to the party, but I promise I’ll do my best to play. This sounds like a lot of fun, as well as a very helpful tool in the craft.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
It’s one of my secret techniques. Damn! And now you all know it. 😉
brian said:
alright, i am back…watched ‘One Day’ this evening with my wife…it has poets in it…ha…def an interesting film…still not sure how i feel about it…any way…catching up on the last couple of verse…
sam you are doing a great job hosting…
Shawna said:
Is it new or old? On Netflix, by any chance?
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
‘One Day’ is pretty new, but available on DVD, so I would guess Netflix would have it. Haven’t seen it yet, but it’s on my To-Watch list.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Cheers, Brian! I’m getting a bit tipsy on all the Martian Caxton cocktails I’m drinking.
brian said:
it is fairly new…anne hathaway…def has a few twists…and…
Shawna said:
I love her!!! Did you see that one … grrr, can’t remember the name … she was a rich-girl thug, wanted to join a gang. Awesome.
brian said:
hmmm not sure….
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
That would be “Havoc”
hedgewitch said:
I’ve linked up an old one I’ve always liked, and I think it fits–if there aren’t enough caxtons, feel free to complain, Sam.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
As I said, not sure about caxtons… but I think I have a new favourite among your poems. This one.
claudia said:
just sneaking in to say hello… sorry so late…was busy with eating Liquorice Wheels off my husband’s toes…well…. it’s all those martians fault..smiles…and off to work now… but be back in the evening and read through the entries..
Semaphore / Samuel Peralta said:
Cheers, Claudia!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Have a good one!
Shawna said:
I was planning to skip this one, but I couldn’t stand it. So mine’s up now. 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
It’s amazing, isn’t it, what you see when you raise up your Martian periscope?
David King said:
Fascinating steer. Thanks.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Live long and prosper!
Lydia said:
This is such an exciting prompt, Claudia! I want to try it and hope something comes overnight while I sleep. 🙂 In any case, I will remember this one.
Lydia said:
I am sorry, Samuel! ……. Obviously, I really do need some sleep if I’m making goofy mistakes like my comment above.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Well, I’m here on Claudia’s invitation, so if it wasn’t for her, we wouldn’t be toasting with Martian Caxton cocktails tonight. Cheers!
Lydia said:
Oh, certainly! That is a given! Thank you to Claudia and all the dVerse team. 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
If you’ve been following the story so far, we’ve been looking at how the ‘extreme metaphor’ technique, from the Martian school of poetry, can help strengthen your poetry.
The way I use it, it’s less a prompt than another arrow in your quiver of poetic techniques.
A poet is really an alien, of sorts – you look through eyes that see the world in a different way from regular human beings. In that sense, we here are all five million years from Earth.
jbjanda said:
I was unaware of the Martian poem until you posted it and I am so happy you did. It was a wonderful poem and the ideas it gives me for my own craft is terrific. Thanks for the article.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Glad that it worked for you. Also try “The Onion, Memory” by Craig Raine, if you’re interested in reading similar work.
Mary Mansfield said:
What an amazing prompt! Nice to give the old grey matter an extra jiggle every now and then 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
My grey matter seems extra jiggly these days… does that mean senility is setting in?
Tony said:
I decided to have a go at this – it’s much. much harder than it looks. As a Scotsman, an outsider’s view of the NFL shouldn’t have been too hard to come up with. NOt sure how happy I am with my effort, but I tried.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
You’re absolutely right, to do it right, you have to work a bit harder than you think. But like anything (including football or rugny), you get better with practice… and that’s when it pays off.
b_y said:
I know I should be making serious art from this and, I promise, I will. It’s just the whole martian (not outsider, Martian) thing is just too much fun to let go of.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
It’s definitely much fun, so yes, don’t let go of it!
nickrolynd said:
Cool idea! Thanks for the prompt!
claudia said:
thanks for your awesome poem
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Cheers! Another round?
Kick Out The Jams said:
Great prompt Samuel, I ran more with the musical motif than the martian I’m afraid but thats the way the words come out sometimes. Now, time for another drink…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Klaatu barada nikto! That’s alien for “Cheers!|”
brian said:
just got back from work…about to play a little catch up on the last 3…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Cheers, Brian!
theyoungpoetry said:
Never encountered this before – everything about the Raine excerpt still stings. Thanks for bringing it to light.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
You’re very welcome… search out the whole poem, it is amazing.
Semaphore / Samuel Peralta said:
Okay, things are winding down, widget’s closed, lights are dimming, but for those of you who are still here with me and headed for the after party… here’s one I baked earlier – “Joy Ride” – http://bit.ly/s4joyride
Thanks for coming to the party!
C.C. said:
Samuel….I love your sonnet..such a unique perspective. And, this is a great article/prompt. Very interesting. I am currently reading a book written from the perspective of an alien (it’s called The Humans by Matt Haig) and whole-heartedly agree at how amazing it can be to see something through new eyes. Thank you for sharing all of this.