This week’s task is to focus on an object in your environment, preferably an object from the natural world, to really examine it, to try and see it with utmost clarity, and to wait for the word, that first word or phrase that seems to capture, for you, the essence, in language, of that object. Then use that word or phrase to construct a poem that gives a voice to that thing.
Natural objects and manmade objects each have unique challenges. Because the former lie further beyond the zone of human intercourse, it is harder to find a language for them, and the danger is to anthropomorphize them. The trap with manmade ones is to rely on familiar expressions and relationships and to miss the opportunity
of calling attention to their unique properties. I would like to say: our aim is to make the object speak, but we know that is impossible. In the end it is we who speak. Language is always ours, and is of primary importance in our relationships to the world and to each other. And while poetic language is surely one of the most beautiful justifications of human utterance, our version of birdsong, our object is not to be enamored of our own beauty, but to find the truest, most respectful words for that thing. That is the object of our poetics today.
The master of this form of poetic expression is the great French writer Francis Ponge
Ponge describes the process in The Carnation:
Accept the challenge things offer to language. These carnations, for instance, defy language. I won’t rest till I have drawn together a few words that will compel anyone reading or hearing them to say: this has to do with something like a carnation…. What’s to be gained by this? To bring to life for the human spirit qualities, which are not beyond its capacity and which habit alone prevents it from adopting…. What sort of disciplines are required for this venture to succeed? Certainly those of scientific thought, but particularly a large measure of art. And that’s why I think one day such research might also legitimately be called poetry.
Here are a couple of examples:
Fire
by Francis Ponge [translation by Beth Archer]
Fire has a system: first all the flames move in one direction . . .
(One can only compare the gait of fire to that of an animal: it must first leave one place before occupying another; it moves like an amoeba and a giraffe at the same time, its neck lurching, its foot dragging) . . .
Then, while the substances consumed with method collapse, the escaping gasses are subsequently transformed into one long flight of butterflies.
[here is another translation]
Bread
by Francis Ponge [translation by Beth Archer]
The surface of a crusty bread is marvelous, first because of the almost panoramic impression it makes: as though one had the Alps, the Taurus or the Andes at one’s fingertips.
It so happened that an amorphous mass about to explode was slid into the celestial oven for us where it hardened and formed valleys, summits, rolling hills, crevasses . . . And from then on, all those planes so neatly joined, those fine slabs where light carefully beds down its rays – without a thought for the unspeakable mush underneath.
That cold flaccid substratum is made up of sponge-like tissue: leaves or flowers like Siamese twins soldered together elbow to elbow. When bread grows stale, these flowers fade and wither; they fall away from each other and the mass becomes crumbly . . .
But now let’s break it up: for in our mouths bread should be less an object of respect than one of consumption.
You’ll notice that these are examples of prose poetry. Your poem need not be prose. By all means, sing, rhyme, employ any and all means you are comfortable with, as long as they serve the object you have chosen.
Here are some more examples of Ponge’s poetry.
And here is Ponge’s text from which I have taken the title of our prompt.
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Great article, Mark. I’m so pleased that for this time I’m free enough to enjoy all these challenges everyone at dVerse is presenting and this is a particularly good one. To see through the eyes of the “other”. Mine is a minor attempt but it was fun. Thanks.
tashtoo said:
This should prove interesting! First…I must find my object! Awesome prompt, Mark! This is going to be quite the trip! 🙂
Laurie Kolp said:
Great prompt, Mark.
hedgewitch said:
An intriguing and challenging prompt, to try to give the voiceless, not your voice, but its own. Ponge is a fascinating fellow, and a very gifted writer. I’ve chosen a subject he covered, of course in a much more exemplary and deep way than I could, but tried my best, and I’ll say your recent blog post also inspired part of it. Thanks for hosting today, Mark–I always look forward to what you bring us.
brian miller said:
nice mark…had a little fun with this one…and i might have missed the mark a bit but….really enjoyed looking through some of his other work online as well….looking forward to seeing what everyone comes up with…
Kick Out The Jams said:
Good challenge Mark, not sure if I totally lived up to it!
Daydreamertoo said:
Great prompt, as per usual that we’ve come to expect from the pup. Lovely. 🙂
Shawna said:
“to find the truest, most respectful words for that thing” … I love this. I’ll have to ponder your prompt and see if anything comes to me.
Mark Kerstetter said:
OK, I’m finally home from work and can play poetics. So nice to see a number of responses already. I’ll be making the rounds.
At first I favored writing about natural objects. But upon further reflection realized that manmade objects could offer unique rewards and challenges as well. In revising the post I neglected to remove the phrase “preferably an object from the natural world.” So, just to be clear, I would encourage selecting objects from nature or from the world of man, whichever speaks to you.
Brian Carlin said:
Just read this as I came home from a 14 hour shift…. It seemed to strike right away so hope it fits the theme…and please ignore the first piece with my name…sloppy tired fingers reposting of old prompt….the holiday house lawn was the one I meant to put up…..sorry, I’m a tired, tired man 🙂
brian said:
get some rest brian…headed there myself….g’night all be back in the morning for more…smiles.
ManicDdaily said:
Hi Mark! A wonderful prompt. I’m afraid I let my personality intrude. I do like Ponge, but immediately moved from the object. I will keep this in mind though in other writing! Thanks! K.
Mark Kerstetter said:
I think it’s impossible to avoid that.
Shawna said:
Done. Although, my “object” is an intangible “thing.”
Cressida de Nova said:
I liked the second translation of Ponge’s fire. I still think a distinction should be made between poetic prose and poetry. But then again, I’m a pedantic pain in the @#%+!
Ponge is a great temptation to parody for someone like myself…I will resist the temptation to parody this poet as the last time I did something like this on this site ,the author of the post took great exception to my form of expression. In my opinion my expression was innocuous, witty and humorous (with a few comments to support this view) so perhaps I should put her response down to cultural difference rather than intellectual incompetence.
Mark Kerstetter said:
Your comment is intriguing for several reasons. I preferred the first translation, based solely on how it sounds to my ear. Most of the English translations in print are by Lee Fahnestock, who did the version you prefer. I have two versions she did of ‘The Carnation’. It might interest you to know that in the same passage in which he writes that what he does might someday “legitimately be called poetry” he also writes, “I do not claim to be a poet.” I don’t get worked up over classifications in the arts. I realize that some people don’t recognize the prose poem as poetry. That’s OK with me.
On parody: I suppose it’s obvious that I’m a great admirer of Ponge, but I also enjoy parody, as long as it’s not mean-spirited, and I would love to see your parody of Ponge.
Cressida de Nova said:
OK…I wrote a diluted one..not my usual industrial strength type.
Bodhirose said:
Thank you for the prompt and great article, Mark.
Gayle~
claudia said:
just wanted to say hi and how much i love the prompt mark
unfortunately my weekend is too busy to join you.. was in heidelberg yesterday for a poetry slam workshop, which was fantastic!! and will take a group of sales guys to the swiss mountains today..
some of you already shot me mails and asked if i’m still alive cause they’ve heard about the extreme cold weather we’re having over here in europe at the moment….so far i’ve survived but it will be a real challenge in the mountains today…so i’m dressing warm…smiles
have a great day – and thanks again mark!!
Shawna said:
Just one strong line can a poem. You might find time. 😉
I hope you’re safe and bundled up!
David King said:
Fascinating prompt this. I shall be interested to know whether I’ve pushed it too far and crossed the anthropomorphic line.
yoga-adan said:
well, the object i see most and reminds me most of itself, is my beard –
and i love the idea and use of prose poetry –
so here goes 😉
Heaven said:
Thanks for the wonderful article and post Mark.
You inspired me to write a long post and some other posts as well. I don’t know if I can refine or finish it before the linky expires. But know that you have given me a new way of looking at objects ~
Have a good sunday ~
Mark Kerstetter said:
That’s wonderful. I’d like to see these writings. If you post them and it seems like I may have missed them, don’t hesitate to send me a note.
Mark Kerstetter said:
OK, I’m ready to read more poems – very glad more people checked in.
Pat Hatt said:
Someone added me because I was slow, now that’s service don’t you know..haha
brian said:
that was me pat…sorry i am struggle with the flu symptoms today and thought hey i might just make sure a few pass your way….
Lydia said:
Brian, get thee well.
brian said:
thanks lydia…working on it…been rather much a day on the couch…trying to whip up some inspiration now…
seingraham said:
this one went slow for me – I tried 3 or 4 approaches, didn’t really like what I ended up with but posted it anyway … agh It’s here:
http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.com/2012/02/black-velvet-dress.html
Lydia said:
I loved this prompt and all I learned from it more than I can say.
Dick Jones said:
A great prompt. I’m glad to have discovered dVerse.
http://patteran.typepad.com
Margaret said:
Thank you Mark. I missed the linky, but I did try one. I will post it for Open Link Night. Thanks for your effort!