Happy to have an outstanding poet and spoken word artist in the pub today…and handing the mic to Ami Mattison who prepared this wonderful article for us..
There are no hard-and-fast rules for writing spoken word poetry. Like poetry in general, spoken word poetry can’t be boxed-in. Still, how to write spoken word is a concern for poets interested in reading or performing their poetry for live audiences. So, I’d like to highlight a few observations about spoken word poetry as an aesthetic style, examine a specific example, and then offer an exercise for writing a successful spoken word poem.
Spoken word is intended for a listening audience. Thus, it must somehow manage to speak itself in a way that makes its various images and metaphors easily apparent, or accessible, to any listener and not necessarily to someone “schooled” in poetry or even spoken word. Sure, a lot of spoken word poems need to be heard several times to appreciate all the nuances of meanings. But the success of a spoken word poem depends upon being able to convey its meanings in a single performance.
As a result, translucency, or poetic transparency is a key element of spoken word poetry. So, how does a spoken word poem achieve translucency? Well, it does so not much differently than any poem. For instance, the use of narrative, repetition, and direct address to the audience is common to spoken word poetry. Also, spoken word poetry often utilizes language one hears spoken in common parlance and images that manage to be familiar and yet not clichéd. But a popular element of spoken word poetry that I want to focus on is its use of first-person point of view.
Check out Minton Sparks poem “Fill Her Up.”
Watching and listening to Sparks’ performance, you can see why the poem lends itself so well to being spoken to a live audience. Without sacrificing poetic complexity, Sparks’ manages to use rather simple descriptions for a memorable portrait of a woman who works as a gas station attendant.
But the entire piece is framed as Sparks’ personal story. Yes, this is the daughter’s portrait of the mother, but it is also Sparks’ portrait of herself. And because it’s written in first-person, we, as the audience, have a tangible narrator with which to identify in the poem and which is then mirrored by Sparks’ stage presence.
And that’s the rather simple “trick” of utilizing first-person address for spoken word. As an audience, we tend to suspend disbelief with first-person accounts of all kinds, thereby trusting the truthfulness of the narrator. But we are even more likely to believe and allowed to be led by a piece that speaks to us in everyday language with images that are familiar. So, in the final instance, the voice of the spoken word poem written in first-person point of view resonates as immediate, intimate, and familiar.
As an exercise in writing a spoken word poem, consider how you tend to speak to others. Examine your own language choice in your every day interactions. Now, write a first-person account in the unique voice you use every day. Utilize words you’re likely to use or encounter in daily interactions, as well as images that are familiar to you. See what happens when you utilize your poetic skills to take your unique voice and its mundane language and let it speak an interesting and compelling poem written in first-person point of view.
claudia said:
thanks ami for an excellent article…tried my hands on it, inspired by a visit to basle today with the town still breathing carnival…
Ami Mattison said:
Fantastic, Claudia. I’m gearing up my engines to make the rounds!
Laurie Kolp said:
What a challenge… thank you! I really enjoyed the video, too.
ManicDdaily said:
Super article–very instructive and inspiring and yet so simple too in a way. But the simple things (for me at least) can be the hardest to get! I don’t know how much time I have today but will keep thinking of this at least till I can sit down to something. K.
Glenn Buttkus said:
I found a bit of poetics from last year, Ami, shown to “Magpie Tales”, but not yet over here at the stalwart dVerse site; hope you dig it.
claudia said:
just sitting in our living room in the middle of a herd of teenage girls who’re watching “Germany’s next Top Model” with Heidi Klum…and i’m a bit sidetracked…ha…so think i need a bit to make the rounds…
markwindham said:
Whew. Blew off a little steam with that one. Thanks for the article and prompt. Not sure I am on the right page, but…..I never really am. 😉
Maureen said:
Great to see you writing here, Ami!
My son is now writing and performing rap.
Ami Mattison said:
Thanks, Maureen. Good to see you too! And good for your son! Hope he’s having a great time with it.
brian miller said:
very cool maureen…so do you have any samples to share?
snakypoet said:
Coincidentally, just came across a humorous, rhyming piece dashed off last year, which I decided I like enough to put on the blog. That’s one kind of poetry which people relate to well when presented orally. As an old performance poet from way back, I agree that simple, accessible language is best. (Also high drama and political invective go down well!)
snakypoet said:
PS But actually this piece is not in first person. I also agree that usually works best, but so can other things. 🙂
snakypoet said:
So have now added a second piece (another oldie) which is in first person and is a great hit in performance.
Mary said:
Well, I read a few others to determine if I had the right idea. What I came up with today IS in my voice; and I can hear myself reading it aloud. And I hope others can identify a bit in some ‘crazy’ sort of way. Thanks for the prompt.
Beth Winter said:
Hi, all. Wonderful challenge. Mine turned out to be more of what I would call a narrative. I had to write this since it was in my head and wouldn’t let go. If it doesn’t fit the spoken word as expected, if nothing else, it may offer a smile. Thanks so much.
Bodhirose said:
I blew off some steam with mine too…I don’t know what happened…but I just went with it! Thanks for an interesting prompt today…and I loved the video of the reading…so entertaining.
brian miller said:
ami, you rock…thanks for honoring us here in the pub. still working on mine, so be back in a bit…you were def one of my inspirations last april in making the jump to spoken word and slam…performing in from of my largest audience on the 19th…about 500-700 people for a benefit
Ami Mattison said:
Wow! That’s amazing, Brian. Good for you! And I’m honored. I hope you’re loving every minute of it. I know I do!
brian miller said:
most def….will try to finish up tonight…been a long one…had a kid (not mine) make some really jacked up choices today and just getting home from the hospital….
yoga-adan said:
i’m in 😉 what a treat these prompts are 😉 thanks claudia, thanks ami!
darkangelwrites said:
This is awesome. Spoken word recorded and now live has been a drive of mine for the last year. Hard to do when you tend to be shy like I do, but I’m getting there. This article was very helpful, thanks!
pandamoniumcat said:
Great prompt and Minton Sparks…WOW!
Daydreamertoo said:
Great prompt Ami, nice to meet you. Thanks for the prompt, all at the pub.
Fireblossom said:
I’ll be damned, look who blew in on the breeze.
wcg1670 said:
Hey Ami…first, a glass of Jack, neat please….now, great to see you hear…I recall first reading you last year and watching some vids…impressive, I believe I said aloud
you own your words !…never a hesitating limb or stuttering foot
thank you…*studies golden nectar in short rocks glass*
I offer you a walk home through my youth, with a turn through today’s eyes…I hope you enjoy
Peace ☮
(I was HP then…I’m RD now…I’ll be unknown one day)
S.E. Ingrahams said:
Hi Ami – great article on a form I love from afar and have tried to gear myself up to several times but never quite got there – think it might have to do with the number of intimidating spoken word artists in this town Edmonton’s slam team are the 2011 National champions (not sure how they did at the internationals in Paris yet … but you catch my drift) I do love open mic work tho’ so might get around to the other one of these days … did give the writing of it a shot in any case and appreciate your work immensely!
http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.com/2012/03/vignettes-from-bin.html
brian miller said:
alright poets, mine is written and i will put it up in the morning, look forward to catching up to all of you then…cant wait to read what you have…
Sharp Little Pencil said:
Glad I clicked in to see what was up at dverse. Anyone who knows me will tell you that I actually talk the way I do in the poem I submitted… unless I’m manic, in which case anythingcancomeoutofmymouthatANYTIMEYEAHRIGHT!!!
Amy Barlow Liberatore
wordcoaster said:
Gave this a try–not sure how successful I was
vivinfrance said:
Away from home, I’ve only just arrived here, later than usual, to find the enticing prompt of all prompts. I made the mistake of reading a lot of the poems, and now feel intimidated, and inadequate, they are so good. I promise to have a go when I’m home, but will be way out of time! Good on you, dVerse poets, wherever you are.
vivinfrance said:
Phew, I made it! It’s a bit rough round the edges, and it will probably be pruned a bit later.
brian miller said:
smiles…i thought you did wonderful…and tweaking later is def what it is all about…
Yousei Hime said:
One commenter on my post suggested that this would be a good spoken word poem. It’s not mine but my younger son’s. Couldn’t resist sharing it with you all.
claudia said:
i think it ‘s great….love it when kids grab that pen and write poetry….
managed to play a bit of catch up…now watching “surrogates” with my daughters…be back in a bit…smiles
Shawna said:
I’m not sure if I did what you’re asking, but I wrote as if intending to read to a listening audience, maintaining an easy-to-understand descriptive voice to paint a picture (and make the mouth water). Let me know if I did this right. 🙂
brian miller said:
there she is…how are you shawna?
Shawna said:
I’m great! We’re in Alabama, and spring has definitely arrived. So we’re spending a lot of time outside. Spent the day with Grandpa yesterday and have had some wonderful family time. I LOVE spring!!! How are you guys?
brian miller said:
nice….sounds like fun…
good…the basement got painted today so i think we are done with repairs from the fire..yay! three day weekend here so will look for some fun to get into tomorrow…pouring rain here today
randalldeanscott said:
Chill bumps ran up my spine making their way to my neck and then they danced under my hair follicles on my head, also causing me to blink hard seven times while listening to this. Nicely done, very nicely done. (pardon my redundancy.)
claudia said:
smiles…while my surrogate comments on your poems, i’m eating frozen yogurt…just saying…smiles
Mary Mansfield said:
Great prompt! My entry is a little more ranting than necessarily poetic, but it’s very definitely my voice. And I feel better 🙂
Lydia said:
A difficult exercise, but one I’m grateful for. I need to work more at finding my voice…
ManicDdaily said:
It is a wonderful exercise, and I’m sorry I’ve gotten in so late. A hard couple of days. Thanks. K.
Nikhil Jain said:
Truly thanx for this nice pub….and happy to be here:-)
Regards,
Li’l Poet NJ
ds said:
You gave me an “in” into another challenge I’ve been struggling with. It is difficult, and a concept I am still struggling with. Also, I am taking you literally–yikes!!
Many many thanks for this, Ami and Claudia. The two of you, as well as Minton Sparks, are an inspiration…
Caty said:
Wow, talk about last minute, but I got something put together 🙂
Hannah Gosselin said:
Well, it appears that the widget expired, wouldn’t you figure so I hope no one minds that I place my rhyme here? 🙂
http://wordrustling.wordpress.com/2012/03/03/trying-rhymes/
Truly enjoyed Sparks and your words around this topic were very helpful. I had an excellent time writing this one. Thank you!
brian miller said:
very cool…be over in a minute…our widgets last 33 hours…which gives a little break until the next the same day…poetics starts here in a minute….
Hannah Gosselin said:
I’ll have to be quicker about it next time, to join the fun with everybody! I hadn’t realized how many prompts you do each week. Fun! Thank you!