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Samuel Peralta here…
As a poetic form, the sedoka is one of the rarest forms today, not often seen even within its native Japan.
And yet, some scholars have contended that one of the greatest poems of the Japanese language is a sedoka – a poem composed as a declaration of love by the Princess Nukata.
The Manyoshu, or Collection of Ten Thousand Leaves, is the oldest existing collection of Japanese poetry.
The anthology was compiled during the latter half of the 8th century, and consists of over four thousand poems.
The vast majority of poems in the Manyoshu are written in tanka – the well-known short verse form with five lines of 5-7-5-7-7 syllables.
Also included are examples of choka, long poems of alternating lines of 5 and 7 syllables, closing with an extra line of 7 syllables. Some reach just under 150 lines.
Finally, making up just one-and-a-half percent of the total collection – over half of them by the renowned poet Kakinomoto no Hitomaro – there are sixty-two sedoka.
The sedoka is an unrhymed poem consisting of two tercets with a scheme of 5-7-7 and 5-7-7 syllables, a total of 38 syllables.
As such, the sedoka contains an idea more subtly complex than a tanka but much less complex than a choka.
Each verse presents an independent thought, and is called a katauta, literally a half-song, suggesting that the sedoka’s origins are musical in nature.
This is emphasized by a few sedoka repeating the third and sixth lines, like a refrain, though this isn’t a rule.
The poem’s two verses usually provide two perspectives on the theme, with a sharp division after the third line, and a soft turn after line five, before the conclusion.
Often the first verse will describe a natural image or scene, and the second verse the same scene from a different perspective, or a philosophical or emotional reaction to the first.
Together, the two katautas embody the full theme of the sedoka.
Because the sedoka was essentially a spoken or sung form, only a few classical pieces have survived today, nearly all via the Manyoshu.
Princess Nukata was one of the first Japanese poets to veer away from a tradition that emphasized spiritual themes, pouring lyrical elements into her work.
She was also a favorite of Emperor Tenji, and one day accompanied him on a hunting trip by the eastern shore of Lake Biwa.
Prince Oama, who was also in the hunting party – and alas! the Emperor’s brother – secretly waved his sleeve as a sign to the Princess of his love.
Unknown to all, prior to the Princess being called to the imperial court, she had been the Prince’s consort.
After the hunt, Princess Nukata chided the Prince with the composition now collected as poem 20 in the first volume of the Manyoshu, rendered below as a sedoka:
You ride purple fields
marked as imperial domain,
these Murasaki grasses.
Will the groundskeeper
be so blind as not to see
as you wave your sleeves at me?
Full of pain and yearning – this is the sedoka that many Japanese treasure as one of the most expressive love poems ever written.
Bolder, the response from Prince Oama to his love is collected as poem 21, an envoy to poem 20, and is no less expressive.
In the original it is not a sedoka, though, for pedagogical purposes, I humbly render it as one:
If I did not care
for you, beautiful as the
glowing Murasaki grass –
Would I then dare be,
though your heart is another’s,
someone who still longs for you?
At the time the Manyoshu was being compiled, and while the tanka and other forms grew in popularity in Japan, the sedoka had already fallen into disuse, a dying form.
History also records that Emperor Tenji eventually succumbed to illness, and a struggle broke out between his eldest son and Prince Oama – who eventually won the throne to become Emperor Tenmu.
Some scholars say that the Jinshin War that changed history had already been portended by the secret lovers’ fateful exchange of poetry.
Tonight, in commemoration of that remarkable Princess who was also a poet, I invite you to write and share your own sedoka.
When the doors open today at 3pm, I’ll begin writing one as well – so if you’ve finished and linked first, please visit back to see what I – and others – have come up with…
Finally, I apologize to any lovers of Japanese literature for my imperfect and un-nuanced renditions of what, in the original, are the most beautiful of verses.
Thank you.
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Samuel Peralta – on Twitter as @Semaphore – is the award-winning author of five titles in The Semaphore Collection – Sonata Vampirica, Sonnets from the Labrador, How More Beautiful You Are, Tango Desolado and War and Ablution – all Amazon Kindle top five best sellers in poetry.
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Marya said:
Loved learning about sedoka, Samuel, thank you! Also fun writing one.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks Marya, it was great writing the article, and am looking forward to what you’ve written!
claudia said:
this is a very cool form sam… and even more intriguing now with the story of the princess… happy writing everyone.. and thanks for stretching our poetic muscles sam….
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Claudia, thanks for tapping me on the shoulder, and keeping me on track! Thank goodness I work well under pressure! 😉
brian miller said:
pretty cool….thanks for the insight into yet another pretty cool short form….will play with this one….i kept the syllable count, but need to work on keeping the ideas each in one stanza…ha….
see you out on the trail…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
I had a quick glance at your poem, and it looks like it fulfills all the functional structure… with your usual twist, of course 😉
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Loved this form and reading your introduction. I tried to capture the midsummer weekend in my poem, which is the holiday of love and fertilitly here in Sweden.. I look forward to read all the others.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Bjorn, thanks for stopping by, it’s always amazing looking at things through your unique perspective.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Sam, I just love this form and, as far as that goes, the amazing skill of the Japanese masters. Thank you for this. I look forward to reading as many as I can.
brian miller said:
yep def one i want to study a bit more and play around with….
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks, Victoria! I’m hoping we come close to the number of sedoka in the Manyoshu, I wonder if that’s possible…
Grace said:
Love the history and nuances of this form ~ Thank you Sam for another interesting session 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Wonderful to see you here! Yes, the history and nuances of the sedoka are intriguing, as I discovered when I did the research for the article.
aprille said:
What an uplifting post, so beautifully sequenced.
Thank you for acquainting us with this form.
makes you think: these poems were written at roughly to same time as Beowulf. such a difference in approach.
brian miller said:
its nice to see you visiting so many today aprille…
aprille said:
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I visit the same number every week, but I’m happy with the gold star 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Hi Aprille… yes, you caught the way the article was sequenced, a very astute eye! I’m glad you appreciated that, it took a while to edit to get the continuity right! 🙂
Madeleine Begun Kane said:
What a cool form! And a great change of pace from my usual limerick fare. I sure hope I did this right:
Snow flows from the sky,
blanketing lawns, walkways, streets,
lovely in its purity.
Commuters condemn
slippery winter’s abuse,
then take the day off and play.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Love it, Mad. You are queen of limericks…but there’s more you have to share.
brian miller said:
ha. your world is much different than mine…
the sun kiss has skin
pink today at my place, aloe
night for sure to heal the love
i will probably
shiver though & might need a
blanket— much like your snow storm
Kelvin S.M. said:
…aww, Brian… a great reply! smiles…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Great riposte, Brian, touche!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Brian, that captures midsummer perfectly.. sitting outide .. freezing.. but we have to be outside…
Laurie Kolp said:
Love this, Bri!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Wonderful.. though feels a little bit far away from midsummer… 🙂
Madeleine Begun Kane said:
That was wonderful, Brian! 🙂 Thanks so much Victoria and Bjorn!
Marya said:
Wow, I was hoping there would be some snow in the mix… Beautifully done.
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
Gorgeous, Mad! And Brian’s clever and funny. A nice appetiser for treats in store.
Madeleine Begun Kane said:
Thanks, Rosemary!
Kelvin S.M. said:
..a total genius for writing sedoka under a limerick spirit… smiles…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Madeleine…. good job! As others have noted, a sedoka with the wry humor of a llimerick! You wield this like a razor!
grapeling said:
Both elegant and funny, and then Brian’s too. Cool reads.
Madeleine Begun Kane said:
Thanks so much Sam, Kelvin, and Grapeling! And thanks Sam for introducing us to such a fascinating form. For a minimalist like me, this one’s a keeper!
Laurie Kolp said:
A well-deserved break!
Walt Wojtanik said:
Much truth in very few words. This appeals to my sense of justice.
bostonpoetry said:
Great poem here! What a great job on the form. And very true too. Many have a love/hate thing with snow. Nice write.
WabiSabi said:
I love this form! Thank you for introducing it. I am looking forward to seeing what others did with it.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Agree, this gives soo much more possibilities
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Glad you both see possibilities in the form, having a bit more to play with than the haiku or tanka can lead to interesting poems.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
It’s 11 pm and still not dark here… but I will head to bed after walking barefoot in the grass … goodnight, will be back to read more tomorrow
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
‘Night Bjorn, see you tomorrow!
http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com said:
Sam your introduction to Sedoka was seductive, but I don’t think I did it justice. I shall have another go.
brian miller said:
have at it viv….hope the house sale goes well…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
That’s what I was going for, Viv… and happy to see you and everyone have more than one go at it!
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
Oh, good; a nice, short form that I was able to do early on my busy Friday — having the subject matter immediately to hand. My attempt has some ambiguities, which I left because I like them. I only hope they aren’t merely confusing! Thanks again, Sam, for another irresistible prompt.
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
PS Off about my business now. Will have to defer the pleasure of reading others until later.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Glad you were able to sneak this one in, Rosemary, I know that everyone’s busy as we slide into the weekend. Looking forward to visiting your blog again!
Lisa Fazillah (@oceangirl415) said:
The sedokas were really beautiful and learning the background story just made them more so. I enjoyed it and I really learned about many things tonight. Thank you.
brian miller said:
smiles…always good to see you lisa….the first ever dverse poet…smiles.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Lisa, thanks so much for stopping by and keeping me company! Have a great night!
brian miller said:
randy (cloud), kathleen & nico — thanks for for the visits out of the last 10…
Kelvin S.M. said:
…yet another fantastic form Sam, sir… it’s like an extended tanka divided into haikus… i am always glad to share so many firsts in my writing journey at dverse & yet again i am ever proud to offer here my very first written sedoka… thanks Sam for being such a good mentor & thanks dverse for the opportunity of sharing with you & the rest… smiles…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Very happy to be the pied piper for today, Kelvin, on these days I get to call the tune! And very happy to have so many able poets taking up the harmony. Cheers!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Been a long day for me, so I’m just starting out on the trail tonight. May stop for a bite to eat… but welcome to Form for All, and thank you for reading. I always discover something new while writing my articles, and am so pleased to share the sedoka and the story of the Princess with you all.
jlynn sheridan said:
I think of Japanese poetry as lyrical and light so I was pleased to give this a try. Thank you.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks for joining me today! Looking forward to your sedoka!
brian miller said:
you def gave us a fresh twist of one…
zennjennc said:
ok this was too much fun i couldn’t resist coming back from my break for this one.
brian miller said:
welcome back…smiles
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Good for you!
grapeling said:
Nice bartending, Sam. I enjoy this format, as well as your background research. ~ M
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Thanks – I had much fun doing the research 🙂
brian miller said:
alright poets, have a good eve…see you manana
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Have a good night, Brian!
claudia said:
oh wow…the entries have tripled since i fell asleep yesterday…out on the trail once i had a cup of coffee…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Welcome back, Claudia! I’m just in the middle of the pack right now… have been pretty unsuccessful with a sedoka that I’m comfortable with sharing – except for my adaptations of the classical Manyoshu poems above. Do they count? 😉
ManicDdaily said:
Thanks for cool post, Sam. I especially loved visuals and your adaptations. Lovely. (I confess to confusing the word with the puzzle initially. Ha!) Thanks again. k.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Oh! So glad you appreciated my adaptations. They were challenging to do, but I think with a little more time, I could have captured more of the nuances of the originals.
Cressida de Nova said:
Thank you for this post Sam. These short forms are wonderful conveyors of emotion.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Because the form is so short, you have to concentrate the emotional impact – in the hands of a good writer, it can be very effective.
Imelda said:
Thanks for the prompt. I had a reason to focus on writing something. 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
A reason to write… now that’s a great thing to say!
Poet Laundry said:
Thanks for all the information on this form Sam. A great introduction and I too enjoyed learning a bit about the princess. It’s getting late here and I’ll be traveling tomorrow so I’ll slowly be getting to those links, but I will get to them–I’m looking forward to it!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
There are a good many well-crafted sedoka out there now…. we’re not quite at Manyoshu numbers, but getting close!
Susan said:
I struggled with this yesterday, but this morning I heard its music as I woke. I have not yet had my coffee!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Yay! I’m so glad you heard the music!
Walt Wojtanik said:
Have worked this form before. Thanks for the refresher, Samuel!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Ah, it’ll be good to see work from someone who’s crafted in this form before. Looking forward to it!
brian miller said:
just popping back through and catching up…good stuff out on the trail….
festivalking said:
Thanks for the Education Sam! 🙂
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
You’re welcome, glad you could make it!
festivalking said:
So am I! Hope I go it right … but hey its poetry right? Right could be wrong 😀
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
The beautiful thing is that the sedoka has no definitive modernization timeline, only a truncated tradition. Which means, you can do almost anything with it! Will be around to your blog shortly!
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
I’ve finished all the sedoka contributed so far… and there have been many really good ones (including many lines – and one entire poem – I wish I’d written).
Unfortunately I’ve failed to produce a sedoka of my own that I feel is worthy of sharing, so I’m remiss with that.
I do have a few hours left, so we’ll see whether I come up with something. Hopefully!
brian miller said:
i hope your muse finds you ready sam…smiles…look forward to it and will keep checking back…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Lots of false starts and failed attempts, but nothing final yet… Luckily there’s much good poetry to find out there, so I’m fulfilling my appetite by reading…
claudia said:
hey…just wanted to say hi… was a long day and we’re just coming back from priscilla’s school end celebration…after midnite here already and can’t keep my eyes open for one more minute…will return comments tomorrow…. i promise…smiles… have a lovely friday everyone….
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Have a great weekend, Claudia!
Lydia said:
I loved this post, this prompt. Thank you, Sam.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Lydia, you made it! I’m so glad to see you here… and your sedoka was eloquently personal, begging for a continuation…
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Two hours left, and fifty-one poets have tried their hand at the sedoka. That’s only eleven less than the sixty-two collected in the Manyoshu, so we’ve done pretty well, I’d say!
ninotaziz said:
Sigh, sorry I missed the link. Loved the princess’ poem. They were daring lovers, weren’t they?
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
They definitely were.
It’s not too late, link your poem here in the comments!
rmp said:
I’m sorry I missed this post. I have a bit of a soft spot for this form. I’ve always kind of liked the idea of (1) the brevity and (2) the idea of looking at the same topic from two different perspectives.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
I sure would like to see a sedoka you’ve written – you could post the link here, if you like 🙂