When I was growing up, back in the almost-dark, mythologically idyllic 1950’s, we were carefully taught to avoid certain subjects in conversation. You know them: sex, religion and politics.
Other topics were avoided or sugar-coated. Have you have gone to a mortuary to view the body of a friend or loved one and heard (or even said) “Doesn’t he look good (peaceful, serene, whatever)? Uh, well, no, I say to myself. He looks dead. In many cultures we bury our dead in gorgeous hand-carved caskets, inlaid with mother-of-pearl, and place their bodies in well-maintained cemeteries, preferably in the shade of a giant oak. Like it matters to them. As a friend said to me once, “Just flush my ashes down the toilet if you want. I won’t know the difference.”
As poets, most often, we have the guts to face up to and write about those subjects once considered anathema to polite society, but that doesn’t mean that they are easy to express.
One of my favorite poetry how-to books is “The Poet’s Companion: a Guide to the Pleasures of Writing Poetry,” deftly written by contemporary poets Kim Addonizio and Dorianne Laux. There are sections dealing with subjects for writing, as well as the craft of poetry. Included are separate chapters for some of these topics: “The Family: Inspiration and Obstacle,” “Death and Grief,” “Writing the Erotic,” and “The Shadow.” It’s been a couple of years since I read each chapter thoroughly, but one thread that bound them together for me was the usefulness of using imagery and trope to create the desired impression, rather than diving in head-first to a swamp of euphemisms, crudeness, judgment or platitudes. It gets down to that oft-delivered admonition to writers: “Show, don’t tell.”
Perhaps a few examples might help:
Family:
Philip Levine in his poem, “You Can Have It” wrote:
…we were twenty
for such a short time and always in
the wrong clothes, crusted with dirt
and sweat. I think now we were never twenty.
Death:
Tess Gallagher writing of her dead husband, writer, Raymond Carver in “Wake:”
There was a halo of cold about you
as if the body’s messages carry farther
in death, my own warmth taking on the silver-white
of a voice sent unbroken across the snow just to hear
itself in the clarity of its calling.
Eroticism
Jane Hirschfield’s 4-line metaphoric poem, “The Groundfall Pear.”
It is the one he chooses,
yellow, plump, a little bruised
on one side from falling.
That place he takes first.
For today’s prompt, I invite you to choose a difficult or spicy subject and write of it using imagery and metaphor. Here are a few ideas:
• Think of a family member with whom you seem to be in conflict. Write a poem from their point of view. Experience their reality, describing it with imagery.
• Write a metaphoric poem about one of your parents.
• Explore your first experience with death, as you remember it.
• Write a first person point of view poem about your own death, using sensory details.
• Using Hirschfield’s poem as an example, write a poem describing a sexual encounter, perhaps your first.
• Eroticize the landscape.
• Of course, you may take this where you choose. There are lots of possibilities.
(I gleaned the ideas I offered from Adonnizio and Laux. At the end of each chapter, they offer great prompts and exercises. If you haven’t read this book, it’s a keeper.)
For those of you who are new to the pub, here’s the drill:
• Write your poem and post it on your blog or website.
• Access Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post. Copy the direct URL to your poem in the space he gives you and add your name or identifier.
• Come on back to the pub to visit and comment on the work of your fellow poets.
• Enjoy yourself.
This is Victoria, acting as your hostess for Meeting the Bar. Here in the Northern Hemisphere, autumn is bringing a bit of colder weather and color. And those of you below the equator are preparing for flowers and sunshine. Wherever you may be, we have poetry and good friendship. Spread the word to others who may enjoy a shot of creative expression.
Laurie Kolp said:
Great prompt! It says Linky expired, so here’s mine:
http://lkkolp.wordpress.com/2013/09/26/the-toga-party/
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I will come over and read… and here is mine
http://brudberg.wordpress.com/2013/09/26/an-empty-chalice-for-dverse/
Mary said:
Mine is here:
http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2013/09/death-comes-when-it-will.html
Victoria C. Slotto said:
G’day all. Huge apologies for my mess-up with this post. There is a new Linky up now, so hopefully that will work. Those of you who linked (4 of you) when I put up the post over the weekend, please link again. Bjorn and Laurie, I will add yours. This is a good reminder to me to slow down and pay attention. I’ll be visiting soon.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ah this prompt is great … love it… but it took time. And just too cryptic… more of a riddle actually.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
But yours worked so well.
Mary said:
Very interesting prompt, Victoria. It made me think. And thanks for hosting the bar today. I wrote without euphemisms or platitudes, I think. Ended with quite a STARK poem really. (But then death to me IS stark.) Hope it was a bit metaphoric as well.
Victoria, I really liked YOUR poem today!!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Thanks, Mary. Funny we both chose death. Could it be an age thing?
Mary said:
LOL, Victoria. Probably! Smiles.
Glenn Buttkus said:
I guess it is fortunate that as poets we get to recharge our synapse daily, and question the nature of matter, the political leaders, the end as another beginning. I feel like time is often only a reference point, some vague sense of the measurement of movement, however cyclic, and like salacious serpents we pounce on each day with a bucket of wordsmithing, our 2 cents plus change, accepting our role of jester, sentinel, whistle blower, lover, good samaritan, and devil’s advocate.
Marya said:
Great prompt, Mary. It just so happens I have been writing a lot about some of these subjects lately 🙂
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Thanks Marya (it’s Victoria). I look forward to reading.
Marya said:
Sorry, Victoria, of course, thank you for the prompt.
Glenn Buttkus said:
Who am I, where is this poet’s pub anyway, was this post up then down, then up again, are there hard boiled eggs in jars on the bar?
Victoria C. Slotto said:
You are where you are. Yes it was up and down again…pilot error as someone noted. Glad you’re here.
grapeling said:
Victoria, matched this to an old write I just found again yesterday. Brian – you visited already – save you some time 🙂
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Mine matched an old one, too.
brian miller said:
heya! just swinging through….i will be in a meeting til 5 pm…but be back then….look forward to reading!!! great prompt v!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Ugh, meetings. Aside from not having to hurry in the morning, no meetings is one of the best things about retirement. See you later, Bri.
Glenn Buttkus said:
Retirement, what a reality….seem to be busier, happier, & more productive poetically than I ever was while still a wage slave, and hey, we earned our poetic bliss with our 50 years of labor.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
It’s a huge MYTH!
brian miller said:
ha. i just need to retire….40 years from now….smiles…..
Glenn Buttkus said:
Yeah, Victoria, somehow I came across the link to this over the weekend on FB, and when I clicked on it, it was already taken down; just another example of FUBAR cyber gnomes I thought; turns out to be pilot error; cool. I was busy this morning with family issues, so came to the prompt late, and worked at a feverish pace to come up with GERRYMANDER IS A PIT VIPER http://bibliosity.blogspot.com/2013/09/gerrymander-is-pit-viper.html (thanks for your comment already). It is beyond cool to rub shoulders with another peer poet that is as ancient as I, and can still recall the 50’s; 22 pounds of chrome on a Buick door, telling the world that America is the most prosperous country in the world, & we don’t give a damn about the price of gas, or that Joe McCarthy was a rabid dog, for we have DD Ike in the rose garden, with JFK in the wings. Nice prompt, thanks.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Glenn…that’s two ancient poets. I learned in one of your recent posts that we are the exact same image, although I add another year to mine before the end of 2013! Ha! Loved your poem.
Susan said:
Where are the metaphors when demanded but out playing hide and seek. I could have spoken of broken glass or glasses, I suppose. I’ll be back to read.
brian miller said:
funny how some times what we always do can seem so hard when we actually think about it…smiles….
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Uh, Susan…I think perhaps your comment is a metaphor, no?
nico said:
Hey everyone–it’s been a good while. I’ve commented on a few blogs, but I need a few hours to get the kids taken care of. I promise I’ll be back in a bit for more good reading! Thanks for this great prompt, Victoria.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
So nice to see you here again Nico
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Glad to see you back, Nico.
brian miller said:
def taking care of the kids is important man…always good to see you…
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
A classic poem that could be a great example of these difficult metaphors could be William Blake’s “the sick rose”… I read somewhere that it could be about about illicit love and maybe even VD…
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I’ve read those up to 17 so far and a side note I’ve noticed in some of the posts is, “I’m not sure it fits the prompt.” I haven’t read any that don’t. My own view of prompts is that they are a jumping point for writing. I say, go where the muse leads you. All of the poems have imagery and metaphor…I think most of our poems do anyway. And these deal with touchy issues. Relax and enjoy whatever happens for you in the writing process! Please!
Freya said:
A great prompt – not sure if I have fit the bill with my poem, but hey, it’s still writing, and it’s all I can do today.
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Yes, I see Mr. Linky expired. Have to get a new Mr. Linky. In the meantime, here’s my poem which may not quite fill the requirement but I started out thinking about writing about death from my point of view and this is what evolved. Hope it’s all right:
http://beachanny.blogspot.com/2013/09/we-were-ones.html
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Oh, my comment earlier just now posted. I see Mr. LInky is fixed and I have linked there. Oooops sorry!!
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Oooh, you scared me. Glad you’re here and I’ll be by to read soon.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Will have to read it with those in mind. Thanks Bjorn.
Glenn Buttkus said:
Prompts are double edged critters, yes they are a starting point, but sometimes I just don’t zero in on the wave length and obsess about being off on some red herring foolish poetic avenue; so thanks for reminding us that much of what you requested just appears naturally in the body, the context of the poetry. We all have our own style, working off our own filters, and I do dearly love to cruise the blogs and bathe deep in the language, imagery, emotion, bathos, pathos, irreverence, romance, & muckraking. It is a good time to be a poet in the company of poets.
brian miller said:
smiles….prompts are def a starting point…its pretty cool where we end up from there though…hey g…happy thursday…smiles.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Going to break for awhile. I’ll be back later, perhaps in the morning to read more. Thanks to all who have joined in.
brian miller said:
i need to check out that how to book v….that one is a new one on me…
finally caught up…had a late meeting…then my mom surprised us with dinner…
sorry i am a bit slow getting around…but i will be there…smiles….
Mary said:
Lucky you, Brian, to have your mom surprise you with dinner. DO hope you enjoyed.
brian miller said:
we did…not so often i get steak…smiles..
t is heading out of town on a recruiting trip…so mom wanted to be here to help me out in the morning getting the boys off to school…and me off to school…
Lisa A.Williams said:
This great prompt stirred up a lot of things. I was going to re-post a poem about my father dying but decided to do something different. Hope everyone is enjoying this beautiful fall, don’t want it to end.
brian miller said:
oh i dont want it to end either…
good evening lisa
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I’ll be back in the morning to catch up, everyone. Great offering up to now.
shanyns said:
Shared something for you, thanks for the challenging prompt. It got me thinking, and that’s a good thing 🙂
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Thank you shanyns.
MarinaSofia said:
I tried to connect to this last night, but it didn’t work, I now understand why.
My poem sounds like it’s about a joyful, nostalgic memory, but it’s actually about someone whose name I still have difficulty pronouncing or hearing. I was suddenly reminded of the scene when I was in London earlier this week and writing the poem was perhaps one of the most emotional experiences I can remember in a long, long time.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
A serendipitous delay!
ManicDdaily said:
Wonderful post, Victoria==mine new – maybe draft like, but found a wonderful post, inspiration. Thanks. k.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Thanks Karin. I’m looking forward to seeing what you came up with. I’m just now getting on board, Friday AM here. Had to watch my 49ers win last night!
Seasideauthor Sharon Rose © said:
Well I have read them all and tried to post, breakfast at the pub may be a little
out of the norm, but there was a lot of inspiration in there today. I was good
straight coffee, no ice. Very moving! Read you next time.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I see it posted. I think Mr. Linky and I have had a rough week. I’m off to catch up!
Grandmother (Mary) said:
One big difficult thing on my mind just now, so I’m writing about it. Good post, Victoria. I’ll pick up the book, too.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
And I just suggested another book for you, Mary, on your blog. It’s so relevant to what you wrote about.
festivalking said:
HI PEOPLE!!! 🙂
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Welcome!
gailatthefarm said:
I entered one but was too late to link.
http://gailatthefarm.blogspot.com/2013/09/dversepoets-pubmy-death.html