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Poets, like any craftspeople, work best with a good set of tools–interesting, meaningful words. Inspiration may take a draft poem out of the box, but words are the tools that assemble it. The verbal tools that are often hardest for me to keep handy are, well, verbs.
Verbs can serve as an engine in a poem, hefting both cool images and heavy reflections. A strong verb, one with shape and body, functions like a specific drill bit or screw driver, one with a crafted point that will actually get the job done. (Sure, if you are like me, you can try to tighten your loose screws with a quarter or Euro or whatever other coin comes to hand. Just like you can chop cheese by hand because you’ve misplaced your grater. But these efforts don’t always work so well–i.e. your screws fall out and your parmesan is served in big oddly-shaped lumps.)
Keep in mind that all verbs are NOT created equal. Some, passive or generic, are kind of pudgy, blah, while more active verbs can be tensile instruments, verbs that really do things–sift, rattle, splatter, caress.
It is easy to slip into the groove of the passive voice writing poetry, relying for color only on nouns and adjectives — i.e. roses are red, violets are blue. When more active verbs are inserted, however, a whole new dynamic arises; different points of view can be instantly assumed and sharpened: i.e. roses burn, violets frost; roses rouge, violets shadow; roses lip, violets tattoo; roses redline, violets ink; roses kiss, violets weep.
One way of injecting some active verbs (or colorful words of any kind) into one’s poetic tool box involves thinking about a specific craft or trade. Just as specific jobs have specific skill sets, they also have specific verbs. A cook, for example, chops, broils, burns, curses. A carpenter saws, hammers, fingers, curses. (There’s often a bit of overlap.)
These technical verbs can be especially interesting when used in a completely different context from the craft or job with which they are associated–i.e.the ocean braises the beach. The job poached her brain. Her glance peeled his clothing.
An exercise that I sometimes do to spice up my own verb usage is to choose a profession – something relatively manual like a cook or farmer, sailor or sculptor, pirate! (To name a few.) Then, I think make a list of all of the specific actions that people in that job do – the job’s verbs.
With that list in mind, I then try to write about something completely different. For example, if the occupation is nurse, the poem might be about a sunset. If the job is carpenter, the poem might focus on family reunions.
Sticking to one single profession or craft, rather than a bunch of different crafts, is nice as it creates a single extended metaphor.
Here’s a short poem of mine that illustrates the exercise. (The chosen job was butcher.)
Summer Night
The frogs mince the night with
keening chants that haggle with the moon
for precedence: whether still, dead, light can outweigh
the cry of living tissue, deboning the memory
of barefoot afternoon in the black green
lurk, a leather of
heavy leaf and humid longing.
(Some of the butcher verbs: mince, haggle, weigh, debone.)
So! The prompt for today is to pick a craft, trade, job and to think about the specific verbs (or really any words) associated with the craft. Make a list of those words, if it helps to have them in front of you–if you push yourself a little, the list can get quite long. THEN, write about something completely different, incorporating, if you can, some of those specific strong technical verbs.
If you do not want to be bothered with this type of exercise (and I know it’s a SATURDAY!), then think about any craft or trade or job that interests you and use that as a jumping off point. But do try let some of the specific grit and intricacy of the craft’s words inform your poem.
Here’s how it works…
- Write your crafty poem! (If you’d are game to try my job-verb exercise, please do! If you want to just use a craft or job or trade as a jumping off point, go ahead.)
- Post your poem on your blog.
- Click the Mr. Linky button below, and in the new window that opens up input your name and direct url of the poem.
- Visit others who have taken the challenge.
- Enjoy!
karin, really nice piece….and i love active verbs…and present tense as they put the reader right into the writing and lets them experience it for them selves…not just read a story, so i am right with you there…cool idea as well on thinking through the job and the technical jargon of it then relating it to something else….this was a fun exercise…
got a little graphic maybe…smiles.
and i love your elephant..
Thanks so much Brian. I’ve been very busy this morning with visiting mother (90) so got post up but I want to do a new poem rather than an old one written in this way. But we’ll see how long that takes – and I WANT TO START VISITING myself. People should bear in mind – as you always do when you do form pieces– that the important thing in the end is writing your poem! The exercise just a jumping-off place not a strait-jacket! K.
true that…i think at times we let prompts constrain us when they are there to inspire us…like i was telling claudia earlier…once i write something it is no longer mine…but owned by the reader to interpret…same with prompts…how you interpret is up to you…as long as you hold true to the prompt in some way…
Brian, I was so intrigued I was writing ideas on my bulletin in church… BAD pastor’s wife, and also naughty premise emerged… ah, thank God I’m not a fundamentalist! Amy
Oh….this is fantastic! What a unique way to think about it, and yes, I suspect the resulting poems are going to be a lively and colorful bunch! This is awesome Karin…thanks so much…see everyone in a bit! 🙂
Thanks, Tash. Looking forward to it.
tash…you set the place on fire…wicked cool write…
this is a great prompt karin and a really cool idea to pimp the vocabulary as well and write about specific topics in a more creative way…. just coming into the door from an inline skater trip….sweating…low blood sugar…ha…need a shower and a bite to eat before i’m hitting the trail…
Sounds pretty nice, actually – low blood sugar a nice thing to repair! K.
hehe..blood sugar ok again…and on the poetry trail…without inline skates though…haha
PIMP the vocab, nice, Claudia. I shudder to think of myself on inline skate, metaphorical or otherwise! wink, Amy
wow sounds like you had fun today…explored around the canals in richmond again and got to see the finished street art from when i was here last month….way cool…neither of my boys ended up in the canal which is a good thing too…haha…gorgeous day though
Yes, it is! And glad no boy needs antibiotics from canal water! K.
nice…sounds awesome…and lol on karin’s comment with the antibiotics…haha
Fascinating approach, Karin, and very effective in the poem you gave as an example. I shall have to go brood over this one a bit and see what I can come up with. My obvious pick would be horticulture, but that’s just too easy. ;_)
Thanks, Hedge. I have some others and may put up too, but I’m going to see if my aging brain can come up with something new unless it takes too long. K.
You will be thrilled to know I have mangled your prompt a bit, but –saving grace–included punctuation to bribe you. I combined it with a form challenge and actually it transformed a pretty dumb poem into one I like now, so many thanks.
Ha. I’m sure it’s great. I’ve got a lot going on in my apartment right now, but I’m sneaking to the side of the living room! K.
I just love this prompt Karin…I’m addicted to verbs! I think this is just what I need to get writing again. It’s been tough.
Hard to believe that coming from you, Victoria, as your work always has the grace of effortlessness (at least to the outsider!) I do find an exercise type of thing can be helpful though when stuck. k.
I think I mighta snuck a few in mine.
Whatta ya think, teach?
What an interesting, insightful article! I’m looking forward to trying out your ideas. Thanks!
I very much look forward to seeing this in limerick form.
k.
LOL! I just may happen. 🙂
Aaah now all becomes clear. I tried to jump the gun earlier today and write something about a job thinking that would do it. What a treat though! A proper lesson in poetry, which for someone without any kind of College or Univeristy qualification in literature, four kids and little time or cash to spare for retraining, is a real blessing. Thank you for sharing your poetry prowess and teaching me a new technique… Off to give it a go, will be back later…. any chance you could save me a bar stool and keep a G&T on ice til I get back?
Absolutely – and feel free to post what you’ve already written! I’m sure it’s very interesting. K.
That’d feel like cheating! I will try my hand at this little skill and then I might let you have a cheeky look at the other one once that G&T’s gone down…. ; ))
Off to the movies with my ladies. Let me know if you think this poem should be titled…’Colorless Existence’ instead. I like both titles! BBL
Will check it out! K.
I’m half way there. Mind buzzing like a dentist’s drill.
Great! k.
yikes…a dentist drill…that might give me nightmares…
Yes- I can’t help thinking of Marathon Man! k.
So I have something up at last – sorry for my distractedness! K.
another fine elephant at your place…is that sun glasses on the fish? smiles.
Goggles! k.
ah, makes sense…smiles.
actually i think your fishes with the goggles look pretty cool…do you think there is a market for selling fish goggles…? would probably be a nice business idea..ha
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Phew! Ok, I’m back. Thanks for saving my seat, oh and could I get a slice of lime in that G&T, thanks?! So take a look, I think I got it… Oh and there’s a little message hidden in there for all you lovely people (or maybe I didn’t hide it, but either way, enjoy)”””” sllluuurrrrpp, aaah that’s quenched my thirst,
smiles…this was a lovely little message you left for us…and a lovely and intimate piece as well……oh…and here’s your slice of lime…
I have learned something new today, thanks to you Karin ~ Such an interesting approach to writing though I will never write about my job ~
Wishing you happy spring day and weekend ~
i sometimes write about my job…encoded in metaphors…haha..
you worked your way around it well…i like the fishing touches in your piece…
Understood! Lovely poem. k.
Really interesting prompt. Had to dig deep to think about this one, thanks Karin and all at the pub!
very cool poem bren with the statue on the hill of miracles..
Wonderful poem, thanks!
ok…almost midnight over here and bedtime for me…will be back tomorrow morning to catch the overnights…
Yes!!!
I managed to do it!!
Phew!!
I wanted to write about this ache, this palpitation I’ve been having and surely it isn’t a Heart-attack! So, I HAD to write it down to make me feel better. As I was wondering how to put it into words, this family of mine, made things easier(or tougher! ) by giving the prompt. But it was very creative!
Hope you’ll like it! Do leave in a comment!
And @ManicDdaily, you’re awesomeness! Thanks for the prompt!
http://www.priyankazneverland.blogspot.in
Well, thanks so much. I am having a lot of family issues at the moment – all good, but hard to write so looking forward to yours! K.
http://priyankazneverland.blogspot.in/2012/05/this-ache
This is the link.
Take care there! It’ll be good.Hang in!
Posted before, but if you’re interested in verbs, then this is definitely relevant. 😉
verbilicious….haha
Try this link:http://bit.ly/JFW1P8
musing on friendship using the terminology of a vigneron or a vintner…
Very nice! Both develop a wonderful savor with age. Good comparison. k.
Thank you, this is one technique to write a poem, I’ve got to try it. I do not have a poem yet, I’ve got to try it, thank you.
looking forward to it OG
It is not a new poem and it does fulfill the prompt fully but it is filled with verbs 🙂 I guess the job was leisure boat operator 🙂
..it does not..
You are very welcome. K.
I gave it a shot. I loved the idea of playing with the verbs. Cute image, but I worked with where I was in life. Thanks for saving me a spot.
THIS was an excellent exercise! Thank you! I’ll be reading lots of these tomorrow…I’m excited to see what everyone has done! Smiles!!
Thanks, Hannah. Look forward to yours. K.
Wonderful poem, Hannah. k.
A brilliant challenge. I have not done it justice, but it is definitely something I shall experiment with in the future. Endless thanks for.
Great prompt! Apologies for being a little late to the pub! Need the hair of the dog this morning! So looking forward to reading!!!
great piece stu…you nailed this….so how was the party last night? and no sweat on being late man….just getting home myself….was at a birthday party last night myself…
thanks buddy! Yeah party was good! Few to many different drinks- heads a little delicate- but totally made an ass of myself on Karaoke- TOTO- killer- toooo funny- I’m an idiot
hehe…karaoke is fun…we should throw kind of a karaoke party in the pub one day…smiles
http://8thavesouth.blogspot.com/2011/08/ode-to-old-nurseryman.html
this is one i posted last year
LOVE strong verbs. LOVE this prompt. Thank you!
Whimsy – Im not Sure I saw your poem — am in a car now en route to daughter’s graduation so may have some delay in checking out but will try. K.
I konw, I know .. its Sunday. But in the gentle ride of the weekend surely this is a 24-hour pub?. Excellent prompt … I’ve taken nature and applied it to human emotion. 🙂
Absolutely 24 hour! All time zones. K.
er…may have gone off message with this poem. But it’s about history and my son’s a historian so ahem it’s about work 🙂
Looking ahem forward to it. k.
Great prompt and emphasis on verbs as little motors. Thinking of my hairdresser’s tools jumped me right to death.
Yours worked very well. Thanks. k.
Karin, an intriguing premise… so much so that I scribbled ideas on the back of my program in church. And I’m the pastor’s wife! Yikes… Thanks for a great prompt. Amy
Ha! Very funny. Thank you. Enjoyed your poem! And church programs are a great source of inspiration if not always in themselves but a place to jot. K.
Loved the article and the exercise K. Sorry I couldn’t play. Spent all weekend writing a training manual required at work and will spend tomorrow training new employees. Might free me up a little after a time, though. I’ll try to use the exercise in an upcoming poem. Thanks for the challenge!
Thank you. k.
I think I’ve gotten to everyone but I am in the lucky position tonight of going to my daughter’s graduation from her masters’ program–amazing! with my 89 year old mother and others in tow so not quite able to be systematic. Thanks so much for your interest, and am very glad people enjoyed the prompt! k.
ps – do give a shout-out if I missed you. I know Brian and Claudia are indefatigable and never miss anyone, but I really want to check out the poems so do let me know if you haven’t heard from me. k.
hope that graduation goes well k…
Thanks. A lot of stories – too long to relate. I think it will. I feel very blessed. k.
It’s been too long since my blog has been active, but thanks to all of the poets who’ve been reminding me about this group. And thanks for the great prompt!
It’s a very supportive group and we’re happy to see you back! k.
Thanks, Karin! It’s great to be starting my morning again by reading a batch of fabulous poets!
Got one into Mr. Linky just in time. Cool prompt! Has lots of potential for multiple attempts…
It has been a long weekend. On Saturday we drove from Michigan to Ohio to watch the Avett Brothers perform. They were in Michigan the day before, but that did not work with our schedule. We were checking into our hotel when the prompt posted, but the excitement of it all kept me from thinking. Back home and exhausted I post. Thanks to my wife who would not let me not post.
Also got rid of intensedebate for my comment section along with all of my comments 😦
I’m also sending thanks to your wife! k.
getting a coffee and then catch up with the overnights….good morning..
Used my legal experience to write something…not especially “active” though…but was a fun prompt. Thanks, Karin!
Thank you, Bodhirose. As a attorney myself, I am curious and will check out. k.
nice…great to wake up to some more to read….i am out on the trail…
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