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Blank Verse, Flow, Milton, Rhythm, Scott Hastie, Shakespeare, Tony Maude
Hello and welcome, poets everywhere. My name is Tony Maude and it’s my pleasure to host this edition of Meeting the Bar.
A little under a year ago I began working as a volunteer at the Grassmarket Community Project in Edinburgh, where my role is to lead a weekly creative writing group. Pretty soon after I started, one of the group members asked a question to which I still don’t have an adequate answer. The question was this; What makes writing into poetry?
I’m fairly sure that at the time I will have mumbled something about the way that poetry is laid out on the page, particularly with regard to the deliberate emphasis placed on line endings. I definitely said that a piece of writing does not have to rhyme to be poetry. However, almost all of what I said would have been about the way a poem looks on the printed page.
More recently I have had cause to consider the question of what makes a piece of writing poetry again. This has been in the context of working with a mentor – Scott Hastie – who has been helping me to secure my poetic voice. As part of this process Scott read through a number of my poems and identified a worryingly small number of them – 5 to be exact – which he believed contained the essence of my voice, rather than my attempts to mimic other poets’ voices. He then set me the task of reading these 5 poems until I began to feel ‘the voice’. So I did …
over and over and over, but somehow I just wasn’t seeing what Scott meant. Then I read the poems out loud, listening carefully to them while trying to forget that they had come, via pencil, paper and then keyboard, from my mind. And it was only when I began to listen to these poems that I heard what Scott had hoped that I would see.
What I heard was a particular way that I have of using rhyme, alliteration, assonance and a number of other poetic devices as I seek to express my thoughts … and all of these combined are significant parts of my unique poetic voice. But there was something underlying all of these, present even when none of these poetic devices was in play. That something was rhythm – or rather a range of rhythms that appear in work that is identifiably mine and mark it out from other people’s poetry. What makes my poetry mine is not how it looks on the page, but how it sounds …
and that is ultimately what makes a piece of writing poetry and not prose. It is not simply a matter of how a piece looks on the page; it is about how it sounds … and, as it is in music, the basis of how a poem sounds is found in its rhythm(s).
Back to Basics
In a world in which huge amounts of information are communicated in printed form, it is easy to forget that, long before the invention of writing, history, religion, culture etc were passed from one person to another, from one generation to the next by word of mouth. The earliest literature was oral literature, which only much later came to be recorded in written form.
Now, if your literature is entirely oral, to succeed it must fulfill two requirements; first, it should be as easy as possible to memorize, and, second, it should hold the attention of the listener. As poets, we should not be at all surprised, therefore, to learn that the earliest literature was composed in rhythmic verse form, and it is in the oral cultures of our preliterate ancestors that the roots of our poetic craft are to be found. For the ancient bards whose role was to maintain a community’s identity by transmitting history and belief, and to supplement that history by recording contemporary events – both triumph and tragedy – for posterity, attention had to be paid not only to the meaning of the words used, but also to the way they sound together, particularly to their rhythm.
This begs a question of us as poets working in a literate culture: When we are choosing words to express our ideas, how much attention do we pay to how those words sound together, to the way the sounds of our words play off each other, and to the rhythms that our words create when they are heard?
Rhythm
Rhythm is simply the Greek word for flow, so when we are considering the rhythm of a poem, what we are concerned with is the way the words flow as they lead the hearer/reader through the poet’s thought. We all know what rhythm is; we can clap our hands or tap our feet in time to it in music. If we choose to, we can do the same with poetry.
The most widely used rhythm in poetry is the five-beat line of our old friend (or foe) the iambic pentameter. It goes like this:
and One and Two and Three and Four and Five
or, more beautifully, like this:
“He jests at scars that never felt a wound.
But, soft! What light at yonder window breaks?
It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.
Arise, fair sun, and kill the envious moon,
Who is already sick and pale with grief
That thou her maid art far more fair than she.”
(Romeo and Juliet, Act 2, Scene II)
If you are alone – or not too embarrassed about others hearing you … smiles – you might try reading that out loud. Can you feel how the rhythm almost tells you how to deliver the lines? Did you spot the change of tempo between Romeo’s complaint against Benvolio in the first line and the slower, gentler delivery of his words of admiration for Juliet’s incomparable beauty? (That word soft works really hard!) And all from the same meter, which can also be used to great comic or tragic effect too!
If we exchange feet, swapping the ternary anapest for the binary iamb we get this rhythm:
and a One and a Two and a Three and a Four …
or, less prosaically;
The Assyrian came down like the wolf on the fold,
And his cohorts were gleaming in purple and gold;
And the sheen on their spears was like the stars on the sea,
And the blue wave rolls nightly on deep Galilee.
(from The Destruction of Sennacherib, by Byron).
Again, you might like to read this aloud. Can you feel how it has a more energetic, faster paced rhythm or flow, almost dragging you along in its wake? (That third line has an extra syllable in it, but that doesn’t upset the flow at all – at least for me. I just read “was like” more quickly to compensate.)
And then, of course, you could mix your feet up, to give other rhythms, for example,
and a One and a Two and Three and Four …
which you’ll need to write your own example for … smiles
Blank Verse
To enable us to focus on rhythm, today’s prompt is for blank verse, that is verse which does not rhyme. Blank verse has a long and noble history – much of Shakespeare is written in blank verse, (see above for an example) – and it predates the “troublesome and modern bondage of rhyming” that Milton complained of in his preface to Paradise Lost (published in 1667 and all written in blank verse), calling it “the Invention of a barbarous Age, to set off wretched matter and lame Meeter [sic]”.
So you don’t need to worry about rhyme; if your poems don’t rhyme you are following an ancient tradition … smiles. And you don’t have to concern yourself too much with meter either; free verse in which the line lengths vary still has a flow or rhythm to it that marks it out as poetry. Of the 5 poems that were the beginning my work with Scott, only 1 is not in free verse.
Today, I’d like to invite you to write blank verse, focussing on the rhythm or flow of your piece. Try to match your poem’s rhythm to your subject matter; smooth rhythms suit love poetry and more reflective pieces; more staccato rhythms might suit those of you writing about the darker, more dangerous sides of life. You might try varying your rhythm to change the mood between different parts of the same poem, imitating the way that composers vary the rhythm and tempo in a film’s musical score to complement the action on the screen… it’s up to you.
Here’s what to do now:
• Write your poem and post it to your blog.
• Add a link to your poem via the ‘Mr Linky’ below.
• This opens a new screen where you’ll enter your information, and where you also choose links to read. Once you have pasted your poem’s blog URL and entered your name, click Submit. Don’t worry if you don’t see your name right away.
• If you write more than one poem, it’s OK to link them separately … smiles.
• Read and comment on other people’s work to let them know it’s being read.
• Share your work and that of your fellow poets via your favourite social media platforms.
• Above all – have fun!
Goodnight.. as someone noted I cheated a little and wrote a blankverse already on tuesday… but today I wrote a new one. Thank your for this wonderful prompt.. I will clearly keep it and return to it…
Glad you liked the prompt, Bjorn. I’ve taken a quick peek, but I’ll be round to read properly soon. The US shifting to Daylight saving a couple of weeks before us has really thrown my schedule; we’ve not eaten here yet.
Ah.. here it is at least past 8.. but come next week and it’s normal again I think…
Great article Tony. So much appreciate what you are doing here! I woke up to fog and this is what I wrote. I hope it will suffice. Thanks to everyone for having patience with me. I write whenever I possibly can!
I’m having trouble finding time to write too, Gay. My father had a knee relacement a couple of weeks ago, so I’ve been giving more support than usual to my parents.
He’s doing well though … smiles
My thoughts are with you and praying for a speedy recovery. I hear it’s all about the physical therapy!
Hi all, and welcome to the Pub … smiles. It’s been a while; other demands on my time have taken precedence over participating here. I have missed you all – and it’s nice to be back … smiles.
Now, I just need to put the finishing touches to my own piece …
I so look forward to yours Tony.. a nice evening here…
I love writing and reading blank verse. Although my muse is reluctant, I’ve linked an older poem inspired by spring and written in blank verse. I look forward to reading what others offer. 🙂
Love spring poem… and I love blank verse. Yours was a great read.
I’ve only read half of the article. I will finish reading after I did my chores. But I wish to thank you for taking the time to explain what voice is about. I am continually learning and I am very grateful. 🙂
I’m learning too – the real thanks should go to Scott Hastie who has been very patient in working with me.
I think I’m still finding many ways to express my voice.. hmm someday I will do it.. and I guess it’s hard to know.. at least today I wrote a poem of something I find important.
tony….much fun….mines a bit of a spoken word piece….i may have rymed a few times along the way but m rhythm is def not dependent on rhyme….pretty cool on finding your voice….and having someone to challenge you…that is essential…
Spoken word, eh? Of course, no-one famous wrote huge amounts of spoken word in blank verse, did they? … smiles
I thought I had a blank verse but after posting, I read what the definition is and it is not one 🙂 sort of oops.
So I tried to write a real blank verse and posted.
Will be out on the trail now that I’ve actually responded to my own prompt … smiles. Looking forward to seeing what you came up with.
It amazes me sometimes, as we wax in specifics about poetics, and about how we write it/them, that many of us are fairly well keyed into the essentials, without necessarily being able to identify or define them. In high school, I remember an English teacher telling me that I had already developed a writing style, had a voice, even though I had not yet studied the rules of grammar I was already deflowering. Nice to see you back, Tony-Man, missed the deuce out of you. As a n actor-poet, I thrive at open mic, spoken word events, and for the last 460 poems I have taped the recitations to enrich the reader with a more than one dimensional experience. So I love your introspection, and the path to today’s prompt!!!!
Knowing about meter, iambs, anapests, amphibrachs and all the rest doesn’t make people into poets; these words are just useful jargon for the discussion of poems by poets and critics alike.
I enjoyed your thoughtful post. But I have to make a comment that’s likely to sound crazy: I think that iambic pentameter is a misnomer, and that such meter should really be called iambic sextameter.
Why do I say such a nutty-sounding thing? Because there’s a natural breath that we all take at the end of each line — a silent foot — bringing us from five to six feet.
If you add the word (BREATHE) to the end of your example and read it aloud, you’ll see what I’m talking about (I hope.)
“He jests at scars that never felt a wound. (BREATHE)
But, soft! What light at yonder window breaks? (BREATHE)
It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. (BREATHE)
Arise, fair sun, and kill the envious moon, (BREATHE)
Who is already sick and pale with grief (BREATHE)
That thou her maid art far more fair than she.” (BREATHE)
Sorry for the sacrilege. 🙂
Interesting thought Madeleine… but breathe is not a whole foot, and I wouldn’t breathe between ‘with grief’ and “that thou her maid” if I were delivering these lines because that would interrupt the meaning.
In each case “Breathe” is the beginning of the line’s final foot. The second half of that foot is the first (unstressed) syllable of the following line.
In other words, the first foot of each line starts on the first stressed syllable of each line. But each of those lines starts with an unstressed syllable, which is really the second half of the previous line’s BREATHE. foot. ( In music, those unstressed syllables would be referred to as pickup notes.)
Interesting thought, but the BREATHE would not naturally fall as a stressed syllable or there would be two at the end. If it takes a more natural unstressed format, then it means two unstressed together. In my view, while the pause is always there (even if only mentally, with run-on lines), it is less defined than the formality of a pickup note.
Managed to sneak in for a few mins tonight and great stuff, Tony.. Interesting isn’t it that an open and liberating invitation to write ‘flowing’ blank verse has seemingly unlocked and prompted many key regulars to write what, seems to me, to be their strongest pieces for a while… Fascinating and glowing testament to the value of your initiative here tonight… Keep at it and be good to your voice, while I’m away… With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
Thanks Scott. I shall endeavour to be kind to my voice. You have a great time away. Hopefully you’ll come back laden down with inspiration … smiles
This is a very good (and honest) elucidation of what it is that makes poetry … what it is, beyond mere prose. Maybe there are as many answers to the question as there are forms and ‘voices’ of poetry. But this is very thought provoking, Tony.
Thanks, John.
Poetry may or may not be many things, – I doubt it can be closely defined – but I do think it has to have a rhythm or flow that prose does not need to contain in order to be poetry.
And provoking thought was certainly one of my hopes in preparing this article … smiles
Your belief that poetry needs rhythm and flow matches my own. It must be ‘easy’ to read in this respect.
Blank verse is defined in Wikipedia as “Blank verse is poetry written in regular metrical but unrhymed lines, almost always iambic pentameter”, which is the way I always understood it to be. For what it’s worth, I found a fine example of this (incidentally in fourteen line, sonnet-like sections, but without the rhyme) in John Updike’s “Endpoint”, the title poem, which he wrote for his last collection. It left a lasting impression on me.
That’s how I understood blank verse too, but rather than have people sweating too much about meter, I wanted to focus on rhythm or flow. Meter is basically the formalisation of rhythm.
Thanks for the pointer to John Updike; I’ll need to try and get a look at his work sometime.
Yes, thanks Tony. I think I have the iambic pentameter rhythm imprinted somewhere in my cerebral cortex and I don’t quite understand why. It might hail from my school days when I discovered English Literature and the Bard …
ha. i do not.
i have a wild rhythm…well my words do…they refuse to be tamed
that is my excuse anyway….smiles….
Weighing in on rhythm. When I initially took piano lessons my teachers complained I couldn’t keep even rhythm. Yet, every time I played with a metronome I was right with it. Every time I wasn’t I played measures somewhat unevenly. I have had this pointed out over the years and I thought — oh well, it’s a flaw of some sort in my makeup. Then I played for dance, and for students going to contests in other instruments as an accompanist.
I had to be quite strict with meter then, and I realized something that I hadn’t before..that I had grown up with jazz rhythms, with strange time signatures like Brubeck’s. I also realized that as a child of modern music, we have grown much freer in our thinking of what should go into a bar of music, or a line of poetry (which I think of as similar).
I think it’s wise to know how to do a thing as that is technique, and it is skilled to be able to deconstruct that requirement to make the thing our own. But as true poets, we need to be able to, at the very least, identify the techniques used by our fellow poets. Then we are free to realize our own voice by changing that technique.
thanks for explaining a complex concept in a way that I could understand. Rhythm is hard to maintain – it’s like the sprinter away quickly from the line – it is so easy to lose stride and falter.
Thank you … smiles.
Thanks for the informative post Tony ~ Hard to me to understand rhythm and beats, but I am trying, smiles ~
Happy day to everyone ~ I’m making my rounds now ~
You know how you can’t help tapping your feet to the beat of a favourite song? That’s rhythm … smiles
P.S. I cheated even more, Bjorn! I wrote mine a year ago!!
Great prompt Tony, thank you! Thank you for the really helpful post – as always, i’ve learned!
Thank you, Freya.
Ah.. now I once again have an appointement with a pillow… but I try to catch up tomorrow morning..
Great article, Tony. I am enjoying making the rounds.
Thanks, Mary. I’m out on the trail myself. Maybe bump into you out there … smiles.
And don’t forget to remind everyone that this Saturday is our OpenLinkNight ~
just got out of a meeting…
playing catch up on the last 10 or so…
You’re a little ahead of me then boss – I hit the trail late after struggling to write something for my own prompt! That’s not the first time that’s happened either … smiles.
ha. i have def been there…and cursed myself for my own idea….smiles.
its great to see you tony…i know you are busy, but its nice to see you around…
alright, floating out the door for a bit..taking in a play at the school tonight…be back in a bit to catch up again….smiles.
OK folks, it’s head-to-pillow time here in Scotland. I’ve made it to the end of the trail as it stands; I’ll be round at some point of tomorrow to catch up with the overnights. Have fun y’all … smiles
sleep well man….
I love the whole post, your experiences with Scott and taking us through the rhythms of poems … I am in a quandary because I am in the process of moving, so I have little time these days, and just not “feeling it” in terms of poetry, so instead of spending time writing, I am going to link up to a poem that I wrote in blank verse a couple of weeks ago. This way I can spend my time reading everyone else’s poems and commenting on them. Can’t wait to come back to this, though, Tony 🙂
where are you moving lupe?
that is a good question 🙂 not sure yet, somewhere in FL most likely. It’s a bit stressful not knowing, but trying to focus on the positive!
that is a good question 🙂 not sure yet, somewhere in FL most likely. It’s a bit stressful not knowing, but trying to focus on the positive!
interesting….i lived outside tampa for a couple years…hope all goes well with the move…
thank you, Brian. I’ll be sure to keep y’all posted … just kind of sucks all the inspirational juices out of me 😦 Hoping it doesn’t last since I was planning on participating in NaPoWriMo this year, and it starts in 4 days!
yeah, i did that a few years ago…
it will wear you out
i bet florida brings some inspiration though
it does! I wrote a poem about pollen 🙂
i miss my lime trees.
and orange trees
and black panthers chasing my neighbors dog up on his lanai
i miss calling porches lanais
and alligators in my back yard
and bottle nose turtles.
not the canibal ants.
little cuba, yum.
cafe con leche
swimming with dolphins
being close to the ocean.
winning cowboy size steaks
for bat spins at the minor league park
Cool!
Thanks, Lupe. Working with Scott is challenging, but fun too. I’ve written much less than I might have in the same time, but I think what I have is of higher quality. Of course, that remains to be seen….
Love this essay which demonstrates blank verse in your own way, a very good way. I’ve written a little bit of a sonnet, something that was on my mind from a worship group that transformed my understanding. I lost track of time writing it–I was supposed to be packing for a trip! I’ll catch up with everybody this weekend.
where are you heading susan?
Thanks Susan. It’s great when you lose track of time because you’re so engaged in what you’re doing … Hope you got packed on time and that you have a great trip … smiles
Tony, I find this metered blank verse fascinating. Thanks for the very detailed explanation and examples. I write a lot of metric rhyming and structured format poetry, but haven’t written much in blank verse, so will definitely have to try this. I think this old one of mine, shared at d’Verse some time ago, comes closest to what you describe: http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2012/06/speak-easy.html
Wish I had time to explore this further tonight, but afraid will have to wait until my free time on the weekend. Thanks for such a great Meeting the Bar topic, Tony!
Saturday works well, Ginny; it’s Open Link NIght for this month … smiles.
alright…sleepy time!
Sleep well boss …
good morning…. sorry i’m way late… busy day and evening but will be out on the trail to catch up in a minute…
Missed you yesterday, Claudia, although I did enjoy your poem.
I THINK this is my first time linking up, here, although I’ve been following the blog for awhile. I followed Brian here, I’m sure. Thank you for the opportunity to share, and I’ll look forward to reading some of the other offerings, tomorrow.
cool… over to read…
Will be round to read soon, Brandee. Welcome to the Pub … smiles
This was a wee bit more challenging than I anticipated, but it was fun!
I like to challenge … and be challenged … smiles
I had written something not knowing what the prompt might be…then, revamped it into what I think is iambic pentameter; not wanting to write a new poem, preferring to use what I had already done, I’m not sure I was successful in transforming it as sentences are broken up more..ah well, my brain is a bit foggy today too ..smiles…thanks, Tony for the cool exercise
smiles… i think you did well katy…
Hi Katy, I’ll be round soon …
ok – off to work… will catch up in the evening…
..thanks…and good night from here..will catch up in the morning tha
This reminds me of the first OU Creative Writing tutorial that I attended (in Florence, lucky me!) where the tutor asked us “What makes a poem”? Silence for a bit. Then a rush of suggestions which grew until they filled a whole wall of whiteboard. Memorable.
As you say, rhythm is of primary importance. A poem must be musical to attract me. In contrast to your view, that intrusive “the” in the Sennacherib extract really jars. If the rhythm is lumpy I usually stop reading … That doesn’t mean that the metre should be the same all the way through – I just like a poem to flow.
Wow, that would have been a great tutorial to attend! I’m hoping to address a whole host of other poetic devices in future articles, but rhythm has to come first. Once the rhythm is in place – and suits the subject matter and adapts to its twists and turns – we can start layering the ‘tune’ on top.
I look forward to the layering process.
You set me out on a trawl of my poems, and I’ve put a link in today’s post to the Florence sonnet written mostly on the bus to catch my flight at Pisa,, as well as another iambic poem and a new bit of blank verse.
Like Ina, I totally misunderstood what Blank Verse is and didn’t come close to it. I wasn’t sure while writing but now that I googled to make sure (only after posting it, oops!) I see I was completely off. Since I already shared it, I’ll try to write another one properly. Sorry about that, but thank you for the inspiration nonetheless.. smiles.
I almost forgot to say that I love that you mentioned the importance of voice here.. it’s something I try to commit to the most while writing, though I would need another pair of eyes to tell me how I’m doing with that.. smiles.. can’t always say for ourselves, that is. Honest, transparent writing isn’t always easy.
Great post, and speedy recovery for your dad.. smiles.
Though mainly I’d not care to thank all those who write in verse that’s blank, the points you make, I clearly see, do have some real validity. But sadly, I quite lack such skill, and trying it makes me feel ill. The only thing I can do well is scribbling in doggerel.
good morning….i caught up with some overnights…will drop back in here in a bit
Hi Tony – Very interesting information about meter and also about your unique “voice” as a poet. Do you think you could have come to it on your own? I wonder about “voice” in my writing. Especially when writing to prompts, which are imminsely helpful, but maybe sometimes…exterior, rather than from within how does that affect one’s writing, particularly if you don’t have a well defined voice already.
I might have discovered it eventually, but having someone help with the process of wading through the clutter really speeded the whole precess up. Having found and learned to trust your voice, the next challenge is to write in a way that is consistent with that voice, irrespective of the topic at hand. Scott has been challenging me with some interesting prompts; any response is valid as long as it is expressed in my voice, rather than mimicking another voice.
Thanks for the interesting post and prompt Tony. I have entered, but for the life of me I don’t know if I have it right., Ah well, we can but try.
Just about to hit the trail again, Jennifer. I’ll be round at yours soon enough. Looking forward to visiting … smiles
Just wrote a second poem this morning for this.. funny, I never done that before but, as promised, should be in the linky in no time.. smiles.
Enjoyed. Even though my attempt is too floppy to be true blank verse, it was fun to try,
Will be round to read later.
Well..my life has become one of free verse overall..and i truly think this is how humans are naturally evolved to be..both in movement and language..
Unfortunately the English Language is ‘littered’ with angles and structures that have no flow..a semi colon is only an illusion of stop of life in fluid language that does not reflect the language of song..that is inherently the particle ..the wave..and field as one…
AS what i see as the ‘Nautilus’ of life in song..more fully the movement of elliptical orbits..and curves of life..IN overall golden spiral of life..
But the form of waves of ocean and sea are in words too..as when language flows..
The form of IT can be reflected as word morphology in tapestry of poetry viewed from letter of particle to wave of words..to a cosmic view..of poetry…as..FIELD!
Whole
and
ONE
a life spent in poetry..is simply natural…
The illusion of life..
IS
NO poetry
in
living..or rhythm..but rhyme or meter of preconceived structures..are
never necessary…
when
life
simply
flows….
as
ONEbeautifultapestryONE
Thanks as ever, for the stimulus to try something new.
G
On my way round to read in a few minutes …
I never thought of rhythm in free verse though acknowledged the presence of one in almost everything around me. hope this fits in!
smiles…be over in a min to check it out….smiles.
It is probable that it is the presence of rhythm in almost every aspect of life – the rhythm of a heartbeat, the cycle of the seasons etc – is a significant part of the reason why the earliest literature is rhythmic verse.
Hey Tony–this is a wonderful prompt. I’ve been quite busy and have a bunch of engagements this weekend–but if I can pull something together at some point, even after the prompt is done, will credit it. Thanks for this thorough exposition and the delightful examples. The Shakespeare is a favorite, but the Byron were lines I’d heard but didn’t know where they were from! I am so glad to know. Thank you. K.
Thanks k. I’ll look forward to reading it when it’s done … smiles.
OK folks, it’s time to tidy up the pub so that it is ready for Open Link Night. The bar re-opens at 3pm EST. See you then … smiles