A warm welcome to you all! This is Gayle and I’ll be your host this evening and will be introducing a poetry form to you for Meeting the Bar.
Soon after I created my blog and started writing poetry, I started looking into the different forms of poetry and began learning about some of the seemingly endless forms that exist. Much of my instruction has come to me through Shadow Poetry, an online treasure trove of forms that gives detailed directions and examples. You can find classic poetry styles there as well as newer invented forms. I’ve also learned through prompts given by individuals within the different writing groups of which I’ve been a member.
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I’ve found that many times learning a new form can jump-start an idea into my head and provide inspiration. So today I’m going to present to you the Florette which was created by Jan Turner. I was unable to find any information on this poet who has invented several styles of poetry. She also developed the Florette #2 which is an alternative style of the Florette. But for simplicity sake, we’ll be working with the original.
- The Florette consists of two or more four-line stanzas.
- Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,a 3. Meter: 8,8,8,12 4. Fourth line requirement of internal (b) rhyme scheme, on syllable 8. Like the outgrowing of a small flower, the forth line of each stanza is longer, and enwraps the previous lines. Line #4 requires an internal rhyme scheme that rhymes the eighth syllable with the end of line #3, and continues to add on four more syllables than the other lines so that the fourth line ends rhyming with lines #1 and #2. http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/florette.html
The following is an example by Jan Turner:
The Healing (For Emily)
Perhaps you’d say she slept away
another long hot summer day,
but she’s been fiercely knitting bones…
so silence all your undertones that would dismay!
It might appear she’s been undone
but she could still give you a run!
You say she gives impassive stare
but you are simply unaware that she has won.
You cannot judge her anyhow…
just see that sweat upon her brow
as silently she treads along
the path that comes with winter’s song; she can avow.
Her courage you can’t contemplate.
You say it’s simply just her fate
that’s kept her there, in reverie:
incognizant of bravery, you understate.
Copyright © 2009 Jan Turner
I’ve highlighted the internal rhyming that falls on the 8th syllable in line three that will rhyme with the 8th syllable of line four and then line four continues with four more syllables for a total of 12 syllables. The 12th syllable will then rhyme with lines 1 and 2.
So there are syllables to count and words that need to rhyme. To assist me in finding words that rhyme I use Rhyme Zone and Grace suggested using B-Rhymes, a source for finding words that almost rhyme but still sound good together. So use whichever you choose to find what sounds right for your creation.
I hope you will enjoy this challenge and let me know what you think in the comments below or if you have any questions or need for clarification. Gayle ~
Here’s how to participate:
- Write your Florette.
- Post it on your blog or website;
- Click on Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post and enter your name and the direct URL of your post in the spaces provided.
- Come to the pub and visit other poets’ work. Take time to comment and return visits of your fellow poets.
- Most importantly, have fun!
Hello and happy Thursday.. a great new form to try.. I did mine in meter, easier counting feet than syllables.. 🙂 But it was a fun form to play with…
That’s funny. I can count syllables just fine, but get tripped up by counting feet and focusing on meter. Can’t wait to see what you came up with. Peace, Linda
Once you get a hang on meter… it’s just like walking.
Walking I can do…with meter I start to stumble. I think I need some instruction on the basics…
As long as it’s iambs and not anapests I’m usually fine.
What a cool form! I love it. I am definitely going to write one of these, hopefully today. 🙂 Thanks for sharing this. Also, another option for finding rhyming words is http://www.wordhippo.com. It’s a very cool site that also allows you to find words that begin with or end with a specific letter. Peace, Linda
When writing alliterative poetry that’s great…
Great, Linda…and thanks for the rhyming website.
Thanks, Linda
Once I understood the parameters 6 quatrains leaped out of me; like Victoria I wrote about Paris. I followed all the rules, except for the exact syllable count in lines; my internal rhyme was at 8 syllables though. At first, for me, rhyming feels tacked & artificial, but once into the poetic breach, it becomes fun & challenging.
So love this form. As for counting feet or syllables…I tend to think in iambs. In fact, I just returned from walking the dogs and came up with the beginning of another Florette. I guess I walk in iambs, too! Sad, huh? Thanks for the great prompt, Gayle.
So glad you love the form, Victoria, and will look forward to your other Florette.
Hopefully I’ll get to it….fighting with Medicare today! Ah, the joys of aging.
Sorry about that…
I feel the same way when I have to rhyme, though sometimes it comes out of me rhyming easily.
The rhyme in your poem today doesn’t feel artificial at all
Hello all, I’m happy to be here and am anxious to see what everyone comes up with. I’ll be in and out this afternoon as I’m babysitting for the wee lass after my chiropractic appointment.
Gayle~
What a lovely visitor.. I loved your florette..
Thanks, Bjorn!
Gayle, an interesting form. I think I tried this form earlier in my poetic career. (Smiles) I think I managed to write it correctly, but admittedly it is a bit tricky! Looking forward to seeing what others write.
I found out the trick.. it’s four lines of tetrameter, and then an additional part at the end.. it worked for me.
Mary, I didn’t use any specific type of meter…just counted my syllables . But even then it’s tricky with the rhyming words and getting that internal rhyme in the right place.
Hello everyone! Late joining you all. Thank you Gayle for introducing us to this form. I will be coming back later to read and comment, since most links seem to come in later. I may or may not be submitting a poem – it’s been a hectic few days. If not, I will see about doing one for OLN.
I hope you all are well this dreary drizzling day here. Warm but cold supposed to come in later today. I am looking forward to reading the poems!
Here the rain has been pouring down, but they promise it will freeze tomorrow… so we switched tires on the bicycles…
Yikes. You ride bikes with snow tires? In freezing weather. My California DNA would die.
You’re welcome, Toni. I hope that you will manage to give it a go when you get a chance.
Hey everyone,
Hope you’re having a wonderful week so far, sharing my poem “Obsession” hope you all like it. Thank you Gayle for introducing such an intriguing form 🙂
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Hi Sanaa, I’m glad you found the form intriguing. Loved your steamy poem!
Thanks Gayle 🙂 my pleasure.
Thanks for introducing us to a beautiful form Gayle ~ I will keep this post for my future writing ~ Happy Thursday to all ~
Happy Thursday, Grace. I know that you’re cutting back on your writing for a while. Let me know if/when you try a Florette, I would love to read it.
Got the 2nd one done waiting in line at a drive-through pharmacy. :0)
My goodness, Victoria, that seems quick!
Five cars ahead of me, so I made it an opportunity!
:~) Good for you!
This Florette was fun! Thanks for suggesting it, Gayle!
I’m so glad you thought so…you’re welcome!
I think this form is challenging, but with a satisfying, pleasant result. Now to read what all have written. Thank you, Gayle, for the introduction.
I think the same, Kathy. Just enough of a challenge but fun to do. You’re welcome!
Hi everyone. I got deep in my novel and a twitter prompt today, but I am going to take this challenge on. I hope I finish while the linky thingy is still up.
Hi, PS…I hope you make the deadline too, will love to read what you come up with. Thanks for joining in.
Good Evening – This sounded a bit interesting so I thought I’d give it a try. A bit of a challenge on a Thursday night.
Hi Truedessa, I think it’s an interesting form too…so glad you’re going to give it a go.
Great to learn a new form. Thanks! I enjoyed the challenge.
Hi Nato, very happy to see you joining in today…thanks, and you’re welcome! 🙂
Thanks. I’ve only joined a few from time to time as I’m still learning poetry. It’s been a while since that high school class in it, lol. So thanks for the new form lesson. 🙂
I think we’re all still learning poetry! 🙂 I consider myself a newbie on the poetry writing front but I do love to try new forms, but have definitely steered away from some as they seemed too far out of my league. So glad you’ve been checking in with us, Nato, you’re always welcome.
Gayle ~
I know what you mean, some styles/forms sound too forced when I try them. If it doesn’t flow, then I know it is not for me, or at least at that moment. I do enjoy the group. There are some amazing poets there:)
So glad you’re enjoying the group, Nato. And I agree, there are many amazing poets represented. 🙂
Just finished and thank you, Bodhirose for a great prompt and form. I had never done one. Looking forward to reading some now! ❤
You’re very welcome. I’m glad you joined in with us all today.
I think I’ve commented on everyone. Very much enjoyed reading them, but in doing so I realized I got the form wrong. Still it was fun. I just hope I didn’t mislead anyone. Smiles.
I’m glad you had fun, Victoria. Oh well, there’s always another time to give it a try. Smiles.
My appreciation to everyone for joining with me for some Florette fun!
Gayle ~
This looks so interesting as a form but am away on a course so will try it another time.
It is an interesting form and I look forward to reading your Florette when you get a chance to write one. Thanks for stopping by, Georgina.
Gayle ~