Welcome to the dVerse Poets Pub for Tuesday Poetics. I’m Kim of Writing in North Norfollk, bringing you a splash of ocean.
I recently read a wonderful poem by Marjorie Saiser from her collection I Have Nothing to Say about Fire (Backwaters Press, 2016) entitled ‘The Print the Whales Make’. You can read it here:
https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/91808/the-print-the-whales-make
What I love about this poem is the way the poet links the ring a whale’s diving draws with a human relationship, physical and spiritual, and always in the background of the poem is the ‘dark mammoth shadow’ and ‘flick of flipper’.
It’s a very personal poem, written in the first person, a love poem, but also the capturing of a moment on a boat, and the whale itself, an endangered species, a mystery of the sea. Unlike the extended metaphor in Rumi’s poem in my last Poetics prompt, this poem isn’t about how we humans differ from other creatures on this planet, but about something we have in common, a trace that always remains.
The challenge is to write a poem in the first person that compares some trait of ours with something animal. It should not be a whale, but another creature (mammal, fish, bird, insect, etc.) with which we have something in common. The title should be the animal thing, in the same way Marjorie Saiser chose ‘The Print the Whales Make’.
If you are new to the Poets Pub, here’s how to join in:
- Write a poem in response to the challenge.
- Enter a link directly to your poem and your name by clicking Mr Linky below and remember to check the little box to accept the use/privacy policy. You will find links to other poets and more will join so check back later to read their poems.
- Read and comment on other poets’ work – we all come here to have our poems read.
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- Comment and participate in our discussion below, if you like. We are a friendly bunch of poets.
- Have fun.
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Good evening poets and welcome to this week’s Poetics! The pub is open, there are snacks on the bar, drinks chilling in the fridge, and coffee brewing, along with a wide selection of poems. I’m looking forward to seeing what you all make of the prompt!
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Hello Kim, and thank you for this prompt… I took a really simple approach and wrote about the geese we saw over the weekend.
Ah, not so simple, Björn. There are subtle underlying complexities in your geese through through a camera liens! I love it!
Thank you for this prompt Kim, the Marjorie Saiser poem made me cry, which is the mark of greatness in my book! I don’t know how long I’ll be around tonight as I’m not feeling my best, but I look forward to reading everyone in the morning 🙂
I hope you’re not coming down with something, Ingrid. Maybe you’re tired from all the poetry writing this month, I know I am! The poem made me cry too, that’s probably why I chose it and, as I wrote in the prompt, it links nicely to my previous Poetics prompt.
It’s ‘just’ PMDD in my case, but at least it’s giving me plenty of writing material. I know lots of people have been composing flat out for NaPoWriMo!
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Hi Kim- such a beautiful prompt. I hope I did okay with it. I hope everyone is well and safe.
Hi Linda! I’m delighted you like the prompt – and you did more than OK, you brought tears to my eyes. 😉
A day for tears, then. But that’s more than okay. I am touched my words moved you.
Hello Kim and All. I very much enjoyed your prompt. A nice hot cup of coffee sounds perfect, with cream (or Baileys) please. Looking forward to reading what others wrote on this one.
Lisa, for you I can do cream AND Baileys! I predict some excellent writing today.
Thanks Kim, just the Baileys then. Cheers!
Good evening, Kim. A gorgeous poem. After reading Ingrid’s comment, that the poem made her cry, I realised that it did the opposite for me. It made me remember al the people I’ve known and loved that has passed away, and how they blessed my life. Parents, grandparents, aunts, uncles, cousins, friends, friends of friends, and two beloved pets. I am quite certain that I’m still within their “rings” even though they’re long gone. Don’t you love how poetry speaks differently to everyone? …… so how do like my new haircut? I no longer look like a Dickensian nag with a knotted mop of hair.
Good evening, Marilyn! I’m so glad your haircut makes you feel good! I imagine this poem will evoke different reactions from our dVerse poets. I know what you mean about being in our loved ones’ ‘rings’.
My entry is both in Dutch and English. Sorry it is not in the first person.
No problem, Peter. I look forward to reading the Dutch, which I haven’t read in many years, as well as the English. First person isn’t as important as linking the emotions and feelings of animal and human..
Thanks for visiting!
Hello all. Thank you for hosting Kim, and thank you for a fascinating prompt. Well done! This will be challenging, but also quite exciting.
Hi Rob! I’m glad you find the prompt not only fascinating but also challenging and exciting, and I look forward to reading your poem.
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Loved, loved the prompt, Kim! I have battled the internet connection goblins to make it here tonight haha 😀 but how could I miss out?
Heading over to read everyone and comment. 💝💝
So you have the goblins too! I have been battling them on and for a few weeks now. I’m so glad you made it, Saana. 😉
Thank you! 💝💝 Delighted to be here! x
hi all your prompt reminded me of a joint effort between me and some of my siblings last summer during lock down number 1. now all i have to do is work out how to a link to this back to them. stay well and stay safe all
Thank you for joining us Rog and for your kind comment.
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It’s getting late and my eyelids are threatening to close, so I’ll wish you all good night. I’ll be back in the morning to continue reading and commenting the wonderful poems you are all sharing.
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Thanks for hosting, Kim. I’m really slow to get to the pub today! Apologie. I struggled a bit with this prompt….got all done writing and then looked at the prompt again and saw it needed to be in first person! Back to the drawing board. I like the way it ended up though so that’s okay.
I too will come back in the morning to read the posts. I’m all caught up with the Prosery…and there will probably be a few late ones. So Wednesday will be a reading day!
Sleep well….see you in the AM!
I had a very slow day yesterday too, Lill, what with lots of reading for other things and writing a poem a day for NaPoWriMo. I want to get out for a cappuccino today or tomorrow, the first one in a very long time! No hurry, plenty of time, and I have your poem to look forward to. 😉
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I may get to the prompt, but today is my daughter’s 32nd birthday; I have written her a poem every year of her life, so thats what I’m working on today. It’s a lovely little prompt though, so I’ll tuck it away somewhere!
Hi Xan! Enjoy your daughter’s birthday, and please wish her a happy one from us! There’s plenty of time to write, post and link up to this prompt, and I’ll have something to look forward to. 🙂
Hello friends. Kim, I love your poem, seeing the migration birds each spring and fall always give me such a transitory feeling. Excited to see what I can come up with for your prompt.
Hello friends. Kim, I love your poem, seeing the migration birds each spring and fall always give me such a transitory feeling. Excited to see what I can come up with for your prompt. Most of my working day is over and I am ready to settle back with a nice glass of red.
Thank you so much for joining us, and I look forward to reading your poem.. A glass of red coming up!
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This got me a little silly. Thanks for the prompt, Kim! I’ll probably get to reading more in the morning, can’t wait to read all the responses! 💕
I’ve only just got around to reading and commenting after a good night’s sleep, Tricia! Thanks for joining us. 🙂
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Thank you Kim, that poem by Saiser gets under my skin so carefully. I need a whiskey.
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looks like i have some reading to catch up on . i will leave a comment here and there to let you all know when and where i have been
Welcome Rog! I’m still catching up too!
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