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Hello dear friends, today I thought we should take a look at waltz. I think most of us have tried to dance it at least once but I know that I for once have learned that in waltz you learn counting to three.
I wonder how much you have reflected on the “beat” of a poem in the same way you do with music. Today I thought we should make some effort counting to three.
When I searched for poetry and waltz I came upon this
My Papa’s Waltz
BY THEODORE ROETHKE
The whiskey on your breath
Could make a small boy dizzy;
But I hung on like death:
Such waltzing was not easy.
We romped until the pans
Slid from the kitchen shelf;
My mother’s countenance
Could not unfrown itself.
The hand that held my wrist
Was battered on one knuckle;
At every step you missed
My right ear scraped a buckle.
You beat time on my head
With a palm caked hard by dirt,
Then waltzed me off to bed
Still clinging to your shirt.
Yes this is truly a walz, with some slips just like you would imagine a drunk man’s dance. The lighthearted rhythm and the rhymes and slant rhymes contrasts eerily with the subject of abuse.
The feet in the poem above is mostly iambic (da-DAM) with some deviations which means that this is written in iambic trimeter which Frank hosted a while ago, but what counts today is the beat. You can use (again) anapests, a variation. Maybe you can listen to a wiener waltz, and imagine dancing around a ballroom… counting one two three.
Let the dance be your poem, and when it’s written on your blog, with a link back to dVerse you link up at Mr Linky below. Then go around visit, comment and enjoy, The prompt is open until Saturday but you can come and visit whenever you like at a later time.
Peter said:
I made a haiku about my pen’s dance. Click on the flag to find the Dutch version.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Will check…. sounds strange with a haiku in waltz beat.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ooops the prompt went up early today… My mistake.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
So welcome to a very early opening of the bar, I will come back later and check,. Unfortunately we are not allowed to serve any beer until normal opening time.
Feel free to link up and join the action of reading and commenting later.
Xan said:
So I shouldn’t have added the Bailey’s to my morning coffee is what you’re saying.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ha… Bailey’s in the morning sounds truly revolting to me… but then I find Bailey’s revolting at any time.
kim881 said:
It’s mid-morning here and a bit early for a drink, so I’ll stick to cranberry and raspberry tea. I like early opening; I’m not too tired to read and comment at this time of the day. I love the prompt, but I was stuck for a topic to begin with. Then I looked in my ‘new ideas for poems’ file and found my list of dialect names for hares! 😉
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I still need to write mine… hmm topic is hard, maybe I will rewrite an old poem to waltz.
kim881 said:
That’s what I was going to do if nothing else sparked inspiration. I’m so glad I have that ‘new ideas’ file.
Ingrid said:
I was inspired by this prompt Björn so I did my writing yesterday. I have linked up and look forward to reading more poetic waltzes!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I look forward to read as well, and will get back after my writing.
ben Alexander said:
Thank you for posting so early! I won’t be able to respond right away because I have to go collect my Mama from the airport, but I’m glad to have something to dwell upon over the course of today! 🙂
Yours,
David
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
It was a mistake, and some will be disappointed others will be glad…
ben Alexander said:
why would anyone be disappointed?
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Well there are those on the other side of the ocean who prefer to come in early…
ben Alexander said:
ok – I finally got around to it – thanks for the inspiration!
merrildsmith said:
I was surprised to see a few posts already, and the prompt. It’s only a bit after 6 AM here, so I’ll stick with coffee, and post in a bit. 😀
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
A little mistake … but I think it works anyway.
lifelessons said:
Love your poem, Björn. My college poetry professor studied under Roethke so I had an early acquaintance with him. He also affected many of his idiosyncracies, I believe.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
For me, he was a new acquaintance … but I do love this poem.
anotherkatewilson said:
It’s almost 10pm here, and I’ve already had a G&T. I like the early prompt, I don’t have to wait until the next morning then pretend to be working while actually trying to write a poem. 😀 And this prompt inspired me to get out my clarinet for the first time this year.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I look forward to a recording with poetry.
Ron. said:
Oh my, you ARE early! Just as well: I’m away from home & will be busy most of the day / evening; will try to read & comment tonight (if not too, um, otherwise occupied. ) Cool prompt, though. Thanks!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
It was a mistake, and now I have to write my poem as well.
Helen Dehner said:
With Mr. Cohen still on my mind …. your challenge brought me back to his music. Thanks. Poetry is music ………….
Helen Dehner said:
LOL .. made a U-turn right to my cookie jar collection.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I’ll take this waltz then
Xan said:
Sadly, I have to work in an actual office all day so it will be hard to sneak this in during the day. I’ll add it to the list (I have several going right now, hope to post one or more of them eventually!)
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Oh I look forward to that… I will try to read every one.
Ren Powell said:
One of my very favorite poems!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I found it very good, but for me, it’s a new one.
lillian said:
Love the poem and actually fun to see a prompt go up early 🙂 I’ll be taking a turn around the floor with a waltz a bit later today….also doing the quick-step to do some reading of Tuesday’s prompts as well 🙂 As the old saying goes, “I’m dancing as fast as I can!” 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Maybe we shall change to early prompting… I don’t mind really
Sunra Rainz said:
Is there some kind of live sharing tonight? I haven’t done this prompt today but I’d love to hear other people’s poems 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
We have live reading only once per month, and then there is no prompt, you can bring any poem you like.
Sunra Rainz said:
That’s good to know, thanks Bjorn! When’s the next one?
Grace said:
June 24, from 3:00 to 4:00 pm. EST. See you there!
Sunra Rainz said:
Thanks Grace! 🙂
msjadeli said:
Hello Bjorn and All. I just linked up but will be back to the pub in a bit.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Now I’m ready to read and will waltz by your poem later.
robtkistner said:
Just now was perusing Monday links I missed because of medical issues, and saw the party had already started today. When I finish my lunch I will be back. Waltzing, something I know nothing about — might be fun! Thank you Björn … 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Sorry for starting early today… it was my mistake. You are welcome when you can.
Ron Rowland said:
I used the 5-2-2 beat of The Blue Danube Waltz by Johann Strauss II. For my drink, I would like a nice glass of Viennese Gumpoldskirchen.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ha.. yes we are well-stocked on wine tonight.
The Lonely Recluse said:
Creature of habit that I am, I’ve only just seen that the pub opened early today. Hope I’m not too late for a pint of Suttungr’s mead. Loving the waltzes being played today
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
We will keep open just as usually so I hope we will attract the same crows as usual.
revivedwriter said:
I will enjoy attempting to “waltz” with words this afternoon. 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
And now I finally have time to read the rest of the additions.
Truedessa said:
Fun prompt Bjorn – I think I waltzed to my own tune…it’s late here be back tomorrow to read more.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ha… waltzing to your own tune sounds good… have you ever drummed a waltz?
SelmaMartin said:
What a fun prompt to work on. Only, I had no knowledge of how this Thursday prompt worked. Advised by Sarah to post my Tuesday poetics that was late here. I came to do just that… I’ve added details to MrLinky. Hope I’m not too off in assuming I could fit here. Anyway, you be the judge. I will participate the proper way for next time. Thanks so much.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
every second Thursday we have a linkup where you may link up any poem of your choice. Every second we have one where we give some guidance on style or similar.
kittysverses said:
Hi Bjorn,
Thank you for hosting. Unsure of how iambic (da-DAM) and anapests work, even though I read about them today, I didn’t use them in my poem. I’d be happy to know how they work, though.
Thank you for introducing a new form, I hope you enjoy my poem.
Thank you all for stopping by and reading.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
In every word you have some syllables you stress and some that are unstressed, and when you combine these words into lines you might have every second syllable stressed and every second unstressed which makes it iambic. If you have two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed one you have anapest feet.
kittysverses said:
Thank you very much, Bjorn, for taking time and explaining, will try to make use of this form in the future. 🙂 Thanks a lot.
lillian said:
Well…..I’m quite late to the pub! These rhythm, counting beats are not my thing with pen and paper. I can bloody well dance and love to dance – great rhythm there. But I do struggle with prompts like this. Had a bit of fun….don’t know if I succeeded as you were looking for Bjorn….but gave it a try 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
One thing you might do is to read a text and simply mark the syllables you should stress and which to leave unstressed… after a while of doing this it comes naturally…
RedCat said:
Have been humming waltz since yesterday evening so had to give it a whirl even if it’s getting late here. Got a good photo of the moon around tenish also. Love the longer and longer evenings we got right now.
Hope everyone has a good weekend!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Nice to hear that you did with a tune in your head.
Xan said:
Late to the party (the words just wouldn’t come). I’ll post this to the next OLN, but I really like it, so I thought I’d drop it here as well, if it’s not against the rules: https://xanhaiku.wordpress.com/2021/05/23/a-garden-waltz/