Since today is the 9th of the 9th month it is fitting for that numeral to inform today’s poetry form – so let’s meet The Novelinee!
“From mists of Avalon she came in white
supernova who split my heart in two
and left untouched silence in endless night
no skyward star to guide my passage through.
While drinking wine I gave my love away
for whispered promises given out of lust,
believing hearts could breathe again today
my dreams now lie amid unwanted dust,
my heart shattered by betrayals of trust.”
Yes, it’s a nine line stanza poem overlaid with this rhyme sequence:
a,b,a,b,c,d,c,d,d
But that’s not all!! The novelinee was invented by Sarah Rayburn from the Spenserian stanza but written in iambic pentameter or 10 syllable lines (decasyllabic) with alternate stresses.
“With trust the sweetest breath to keep us strong,
my jewel of love to whom I grant my heart,
with words and smiles for days that seem so long,
so fate has cast the miles to keep apart.
In crystal vagaries we’re hand in hand,
whilst waterfalls cascade a rhythmic beat,
as when we kissed upon the golden sand,
below the rugged crags in love’s retreat,
our passion found in nature’s dancing feet
Your novelinee poem can be just one nine-line stanza (do not split it!)
OR
you may choose to write several stanzas in this form (an open novelinee)
OR
you might like the two stanza closed novelinee form, in which the beginning line of the first stanza is mirrored at the end of the second stanza, whilst the last line of the first stanza is reflected in the first line of the second stanza:-
“Across the bay where beauty waits for me,
beneath the sun-kissed mountain waterfalls,
enchanting eyes shall tame the wild and free,
my heart is bound by love as Cymru calls.
The cloudy blue of railway smoke dissolved
against the ageing roofing slates of old,
attractions mined before our time evolved,
and children chalked their words in letters bold,
when mountain streams still flowed with yellow gold”
“The mountain streams that flowed with yellow gold,
and wrought the wedding bands of royal kings,
still whisper love and tales the bards oft told,
and magic echoes o’er the valleys and springs.
The land where dragons roam and wizards dwell,
where singing voices set our fathers free,
returning home my heart begins to swell,
rejoice my pride in Wales, her mystery,
across the bay her beauty stood by me.”
Note: because the 2nd stanza is mirroring we are reintroducing the d and a rhymes into it hence:-
d/e/d/e/f/a/f/a/a:
Hint: If you find it difficult to count in iambic pentameter then choose any of the above lines and recite them until you can hear/tune in to, the rhythm
Whichever Novelinee form you choose, remember to add the URL of your post to the Mr Linky widget below. Do leave a comment too and visit your fellow poets as that is half the fun of our Meeting the Bar prompts.
References:
All novelinee poems quoted here are by Sarah Rayburn – see The Poets Collective
Useful Links:
A syllable counter
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Good evening and thanks for a challenging prompt, Laura! I’m off to put my son to bed, but I’ll be back later on to read…see you on the poetry trail everyone!
see you then Ingrid – you have been quick off the mark too
Hello Laura and All. Looks like a fun one to try. Will link up in a little bit.
ok Lisa – no rush 😉
Hi All – to be frank I was out of my comfort zone with this one as most of my poetry is unconstrained by form! Nevertheless, it is good practice and I hope others find it so. Look forward to reading what I can tonight and then off on my travel in the morning, so will not have internet till tomorrow evening when I can catch up further
An incredibly ‘novel’ challenge! I am going to belly up to the bar … Corona with a wedge of lime please.
CertainlyHelen – but is a Corona strong enough to get your Novelinee off the rocks? 😉
LOL, beginning to have doubts.
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It was such a long time since I wrote iambic pentameter, so this was a real challenge this time… But just as usual I started to write without know where it would take me. I let the rhymes guide me.
you always seem at ease with forms, whatever the meter, so I shall see what emerged in the rhymes
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Hi Laura, and all! Thanks for the fun challenge, Laura. I was determined to try this one, and I might come back to it at some point to revise and perhaps add another stanza.
good to know you have been enticed into this one Merril – and may even expand once the Novelinee rhythm takes hold
Perhaps so!
there is more voyaging to be had somewhere, sometime, someplace!!
So very true!
Hi Laura. Thanks for the challenging prompt. I am not sure with the alternate stresses of the lines but hopefully I got the form correctly.
the stresses seemed to rely on how we pronounce words and where their natural stresses are so I may have not quite got that right! I shall come over soon for a read!
hi Laura and all poets
meter is one of those things i have always struggled with. and with an over tired head you have beaten me with this one tonight. i am struggling to type let alone get my head around rhyme.
i will catch up with reading in the morning have fun
rog
fear not this was the most challenging for me too but I had time to cogitate it – there’s no hurry as I shall be popping back tomorrow and after that, when I have free moments
thanks
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I’m excited to try this form. I’m making plum shrub for the first time. I infused apple cider vinegar with basil, and balsamic with sage. I have no idea what shrub tastes like, but a friend recommended it for my abundant plum crop this year. I’m willing to share if anyone wants to add it to their cocktails in about three hours.
how novel – perfect for this prompt, too!
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Perfect, Laura! This shook the lines loose for a prompt that Jade Li gave me! I’m driving today, so just a sparkling water with a twist of lime for now!
something refreshing coming up whilst you keep your eyes on the road and watch the white lines of the freeway instead
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This was an interesting form, I found it challenging, not really sure I’m proud of the result, I am going to go write another one, see if it is any better.
you met the challenge so well!
Thank you for introducing a new form to try, Laura. I enjoyed writing to it. 🙂
and I enjoyed reading yours 🙂
Thank you very much, Laura. 🙂
I think I was a little off-beat with mine tonight but I always appreciate the challenge Laura! ☺️
joining in is half the fun – I found the experience of the novelinee uncomfortable but we both got there in the end
I tried Laura, but nothing of worth came forward today. I erased my initial offering, so if you will be kind and delete my link. Thank you. ✌🏼🙂
I have left your link because I like what you left there!
Thank you Laura for your faith. I wrote and posted a new poem that the original link connects to. Yay! 👍✌🏼 So folks can have at it! Hope you enjoy. It is a bit irreverent.
Your perseverance paid off Rob
I edited 4 more times Laura, now I am leaving it alone. The stumble was, I was trying to satisfy both your prompt and an image prompt from another site. It made it too confining. I should have ignored the image prompt, and wrote a seperate free verse piece for it — but, oh well… 🙂
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This was fun (as is the norm with all the prompts here) I will return to read. Thanks so dearly.
Your poem shows what fun you had with this prompt
Glad you saw that, Laura. Thanks so much.
Oops, I messed up royally and wrote my poem with seven lines and the wrong rhyme scheme, thereby totally missing the point of its message. I rewrote it , correcting those ills, so if you read it early on, try reading it again. Hopefully the second version is in Mr. Linky.
Well the re-write was so worth it!