Hello dVersians! Lisa here, ready to serve up drinks, snacks, and today’s prompt challenge. If you look at the pub’s schedule, you’ll see that this is the last prompt before Halloween as Thursday is Open Link Night. It is my pleasure to call in the spirits of the season as muses to delight and chill you.
Are there any among those cozied up to the bar that don’t have a pet peeve about some human attribute? :::looking around::: No hands raised? Good! If there is anyone who can articulate an irritating aspect of humanity, it is poets. I went out into the cyber-wilderness to find an example and was delighted to find this one right away, by Oscar Byrnes, called, “All in One Afternoon.”
All in One Afternoon
He laughed, and icicles of sound
Dripped from the roof, pink limestone stalactites;
He laughed again, and this time from the floor
The stalagmites, like echoes, grew up free.
He laughed a third time, and sealed up the cave
With millions of blind fishes and white bats
Rocking eternally with happiness
Inside the dark, secure from day and night.
I wasn’t looking for it, but we can also have pet peeves regarding ourselves. This poem by Judith Ortiz Cofer, “Saint Rose of Lima,” speaks to just that.
Saint Rose of Lima
She was the joke of the angels – a girl
crazy enough for God
that she despised her own beauty; who grew bitter herbs
to mix with her food,
who pinned a garland of roses to her forehead;
and who, in a fury of desire
concocted a potion of Indian pepper and bark
and rubbed it on her face, neck, and breasts,
disfiguring herself.
Then, locked away in a dark cell,
where no reflection was possible,
she begged for death to join with her Master
whom she called Divine Bridegroom, Thorn
in my Heart, Eternal Spouse.
She would see His vague outline, feel His cool touch
on her fevered brow,
but as relief came, her vision would begin to fade,
and once again she would dip the iron bar into the coals,
and pass it gently like a magician’s wand over her skin –
to feel the passion that flames for a moment,
in all dying things.
And yet again not searching for it but finding a poem speaking to “big picture” attributes like declaring war and sending young people to die that can haunt. Wilfred Owen’s, “Dulce et Decorum Est*.”
Dulce et Decorum Est
Bent double, like old beggars under sacks,
Knock-kneed, coughing like hags, we cursed through sludge,
Till on the haunting flares we turned our backs,
And towards our distant rest began to trudge.
Men marched asleep. Many had lost their boots,
But limped on, blood-shod. All went lame; all blind;
Drunk with fatigue; deaf even to the hoots
Of gas-shells dropping softly behind.
Gas! GAS! Quick, boys!—An ecstasy of fumbling
Fitting the clumsy helmets just in time,
But someone still was yelling out and stumbling
And flound’ring like a man in fire or lime.—
Dim through the misty panes and thick green light,
As under a green sea, I saw him drowning.
In all my dreams before my helpless sight,
He plunges at me, guttering, choking, drowning.
If in some smothering dreams, you too could pace
Behind the wagon that we flung him in,
And watch the white eyes writhing in his face,
His hanging face, like a devil’s sick of sin;
If you could hear, at every jolt, the blood
Come gargling from the froth-corrupted lungs,
Obscene as cancer, bitter as the cud
Of vile, incurable sores on innocent tongues,—
My friend, you would not tell with such high zest
To children ardent for some desperate glory,
The old Lie: Dulce et decorum est
Pro patria mori.
*Latin phrase is from the Roman poet Horace: “It is sweet and fitting to die for one’s country.”
Today’s challenge, if you choose to accept it, is to write a poem speaking to a human attribute that is particularly irritating to you — and it must have a Halloween or Samhain theme to it.
For extra candy corn bonus points, write the poem in the Duodora form!
Duodora Form
Duodora is a quatorzain that doesn’t claim to be a sonnet. Written in 2 septets, L1 of the first septet is repeated as L1 of the 2nd septet. The form was created by Dora Tompkins who was an editor of the Nutmegger, a poetry magazine published in Connecticut.The Duodora is:
a quatorzain made up of 2 septets.
syllabic, 4/6/5/5/5/10/10 syllables per line.
rhymed Axxxxxb Axxxxxb L1 is repeated as a refrain that begins the 2nd stanza. x is unrhymed.
Kerfe Roig was kind enough to give me permission to use her wonderful duodora poem, “An Expedition for Thursday Doors,” as an example of the form:
walking walking
looking for doors looking
for ways to connect
one with another–
walking and looking
for the one door that becomes the center,
the pivot that marks where I turn around
walking walking
should I retrace my path?
or sit for awhile
and consider how
I came to be here,
thinking of all the doors I haven’t seen–
they are not lost—just waiting to be found
If you are new, here’s how to join in:
*Write a poem (in any form – or a Duodora!) in response to the challenge.
*Enter a link directly to your poem and your name by clicking Mr Linky below and remember to check the little box to accept the use/privacy policy.
*You will find links to other poets and more will join, so check back later to read their poems.
*Read and comment on other poets’ work–we all come here to have our poems read.
*Please link back to dVerse from your site/blog.
*Have fun!
Sources:
Oscar Byrnes
Judith Ortiz Cofer
Wilfred Owen
Kerfe Roig
Hello All! Welcome! Drinks and eats are at the ready. Really looking forward to walking the poetry trail tonight.
You lead on the spooky poetry trail tonight. Thanks for hosting!!!
My pleasure, Grace. Glad you’re here.
Hi Lisa, thanks for hosting! I’ll take a cup of peppermint tea please: I’ve eaten too many halloween treats already tonight 😅
My pleasure on hosting, Ingrid. One cup of peppermint tea coming right up!
Many thanks!
You’re welcome, Cheers!
Hello Lisa, I am too tired to write tonight. I had to work extra and just left my office computer… I might use the prompt to write for OLN … so sorry.
Welcome, Bjorn. No worries, my friend, take it easy! Maybe a hot cup of chamomile tea?
Perfect… and then off to bed
❤
Greetings! I can’t help noticing the resemblance to my name and am only too, too, thankful that it is not Explorodora. *sigh* Just had to get that off my chest! Love, love, love the prompt and the great poetry quoted. It’s chilly and windy here, and my bones are rattling. How about a some spiced apple cider punch, Lisa, before I hit the poetry trail?!
pax,
dora
Haha! on the Duodora form. It can be used for other than Halloweenie topics also! Thank you and glad you like the prompt and poetry. One tall mug of hot spiced apple cider punch coming right up!
Thank you and cheers!
You’re welcome and Cheers! ❤
Thanks for hosting, Lisa! I took a bit of poetic license with the prompt and provided some Massachusetts history as well. Getting into the halloween mood….plus it is literally dark and stormy here! We are expecting a Noreaster in about an hour or so….to go through tonight and into tomorrow with high winds, tons of rain, flash flooding warnings etc…..spooky indeed! We are snug in our warm house and will be content to watch the trees blowing outside our windows!
Welcome, Lillian, and my pleasure on hosting. I love what you did with the prompt! Stay snug and warm during the Noreaster!
Thank you for hosting Lisa, and Happy Halloween to you, and to everyone! Fascinating prompt idea. I will give it a shot, and see what I can scare up. 👻🙂✌🏼
Happy Halloween to you also, Rob. Glad you are here. Tis the season for fascinating and strange things afoot. I know you will come up with some truly chilling 🙂
Great challenge! I will have to give it some thought, but I love the concept.
Welcome, Joy, good to see you here. Glad you love the concept and really looking forward to seeing what the muse brings you.
Hope I didn’t stray too far from the prompt–the irritating quality I chose isn’t too amusing, but I did use a monster. Loved the form as well. Thanks for hosting. I’ll be around as usual in the morning to read and visit.
You did just right on the prompt. I like how you described your monster. Glad you like the form. My pleasure on hosting, Joy. See you in the A.M.
Awesome stuff, and I am especially happy about the examples provided.
Shay, thank you and the poems came to me like they were meant to be featured. Looking forward to seeing what you write.
happy halloween one and all.
thanks Lisa for the challange of the duodora form had a go at my first.
candle lit bath time here after a long working day
i have a lot of reading to do before work tomorrow one and a half days worth of dverse poems to get through may take me a while
rog
Happy Halloween and Welcome, Rog. Glad you can relax in a hot bath after a long work day. I really like how you spun the prompt and great job with your first duodora!
Thank you
You’re welcome.
Thanks
I appreciate the poem about St. Rose of Lima. Also, the Wilfred Owen poem is one of my favorites, truly haunting!
Not sure how to incorporate a Halloween theme to my poem today, but I will try.
Welcome, Jenna! Very happy you are familiar with two of the poetry selections. I’m looking forward to seeing how you incorporate a Halloween them into your poem 🙂
Morning Lisa, a glass of slimy snail juice with a witchy tart thanks … couldn’t resist trying the new format you offered!
Love this piano piece with sound affects, what a treat.
Good morning, Kate. One glass of slimy snail juice with a witchy tart, coming right up. Cheers! Ooh can’t wait to see what you wrote. So glad you enjoyed the skeletons music 🙂
it was light and delightful, thanks Lisa 🙂
LOL 🙂
P.S. Kate, I see you were talking about the music instead of the slimy snail juice as light and delightful, but where I saw the comment it looked like that’s what you were talking about (hence my laugh, lol.)
oof, a poem about death. Well, I suppose I was going to write this anyway. I may play with it and do a rewrite with your complex form suggestion! Meanwhile, spiced cider with rum for me!
Welcome, Alexandra. One tall spiced cider with rum for you, and that sounds tasty so I’ll pour one for myself. Cheers! About the form, it’s not that tricky, just try it and you’ll see.
Very late to the bar. A morning coffee perhaps? Thanks for the spooky prompt Lisa. Posting when I can work out how to do it enroute. Looking forward to reading everyone’s posts 🎃👻.
Welcome, Marion, glad you are here. One freshly ground medium roast bean cup of coffee, with cream and sugar on the side. Can’t wait to see what you come up with 🙂
Thank you Lisa. Very tasty! I needed that.
You’re most welcome.
A new form to try and a creative challenge – thank you Lisa.
Welcome and you’re welcome, Paul. Care for your usual whisky?
Hi Li. Great challenge. Thanks for hosting.
Welcome, Punam, glad to see you. Drinks and snacks are still being served. Can I get you anything? My pleasure on hosting 🙂
A slice of pumpkin pie with cardamom flavoured black tea, please. 😊
One slice of pumpkin pie with cardamom flavoured black tea, coming right up!
Thank you so much! 😊
Thanks again for the mention Jade, and for reminding me about the duodora. I could not keep from going dark with this one. (K)
Kerfe, you are most welcome on both. I don’t see how anyone talking about politicians could go anywhere but dark. So glad you are here and love what you did with the challenge.
Always glad to join in (if irregularly)
Although I consider Halloween a commercialised American cultural intrusion into what little is left of our Australian culture
al heritage, I included reference to it in a spirit of goodwill because it was such a good prompt. The Duodera Form is clever and tricky. I really liked it.
Sean, happy to hear the Halloween spirits drew you in for the prompt, and thank you for the kind words. Glad you are here!
Oops, I so dislike making typos that are left for all the world to see!
Thanks for hosting Li. Enjoyed writing to it. 🙂
Hello Kitty 🙂 My pleasure on hosting and happy you enjoyed the prompt 🙂