For this week’s flash fiction, I’ve chosen a line from a famous poem by that preeminent American poet (as well as essayist, journalist, teacher and government clerk) Walt Whitman. He was born in Long Island in 1819 and lived in Brooklyn for most of his life. He moved to New Jersey as his health began to decline and died in Camden in 1892 at the age of 72 where he was honored with a public funeral.
Whitman’s poem “Out of the Cradle Endlessly Rocking” was written in 1859 and included a year later in the 1860 edition of his collection of poems, Leaves of Grass. According to Wikipedia, a reviewer described “Out of the Cradle” as “unmixed and hopeless drivel” but shortly afterwards a response to it was published reviewing the poem favorably. It’s thought that Whitman may have written the response himself! During the American Civil War he assisted in the medical care of the wounded, serving in hospitals in Washington, D.C.
“Out of the Cradle” is a poem that reflects the man, a man who some would say reflects the soul of America: a huckster, brash and unaffected, bold to forge an enterprise or avocation as much as the spirit of a young nation, daring to merge the free rhythms of his song with the song of all living things, his voice sounding the pain, the resilience, the maturing consciousness of life itself.
In the poem Whitman recounts how as a child on a beach at night he watched two birds build a nest together when one of them disappears, leaving her mate searching for her. Looking back on this event, Whitman says, “My own songs awaked from that hour.” Writes critic Mark Bauerlein, in that hour of his birth as a poet, Whitman “joins a procession of singers and listeners—mockingbird, boy, man, poet, reader—attending to the cries of lonesome love.” Bauerlein continues:
Here is Whitman narrating his awakening to death and his simultaneous projection into poesy. Out of this primal scene of eros and thanatos, of a ‘musical shuttle’ made of ‘pains and joys,’ Whitman derives an intense and somber lesson in mortality and inspiration.1
Your challenge? Write a piece of flash fiction of no more than 144 words that includes the following quotation from the poem. You may not alter the order of the words, though you may insert breaks or punctuation.
Out of the Ninth-month midnight.
Sakai Hōitsu (1809-1828), Maple Tree
The “Ninth-month,” by the way, is the Quaker name for September. The line is pregnant with meaning, is it not, particularly as the stanza following goes back in time to a place where the “Fifth-month grass is growing”? Now in the Ninth-month will his “reminiscence” birth something larger than his destiny as a poet? (Read the poem to find out!)
Meanwhile, I’m looking forward to reading the stories you spin using that third line from the poem.
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Wonderful to welcome all manner of spinners of tales to the Pub today! I’ve been battling an eye infection/corneal tear so I’ll be in and out of the pub giving my eyes a rest. Lagging behind on the story trail or not, I am looking forward to reading your 144-word tales.
All manner of autumnal treats and refreshments are at hand, yours to command! Pub doors are open. Let’s go! 🍁🍂🍁
Hi Kim! Here you go and I think I’ll join you in that hot chocolate and pumpkin pie. Hope your ankles are nicely healed and you were able to go to your grandson’s b’day party!
Thank you, Dora. Sadly, I didn’t make it down to my daughter’s. I ended up at the hospital instead, and left with a special boot and painkillers. But it’s getting better.
Thank you very much Dora…am a bit annoyed with myself as mine is technically not fiction, and would do a different one if I could delete from the list. Didn’t really think about the flash fiction side until after.
Had some good pumpkin soup though, highly recommended.
Hi Ain! I’m looking forward to reading it. The main thing is that it’s prose (not a prose poem) and tells a story (true or not). So you’re fine! Glad the pumpkin soup was tasty. 🍜🙂
Hoping your eyes get some respite in the nine-month midnight, Dora. I’m drinking tea, and alas not eating lentil soup because I let it burn to the bottom of thie pan while on a Zoom call… Didn’t need to call ou the fire service, phew. Take care of yourself and rest from the bartending x
Very kind of you, Kathy, especially as you had to deal with burnt lentil soup and a hastily averted run-in with the fire brigade! Exciting times, but I have been giving my eyes a break, and right now feel much better and looking forward to coming round your way for a piping good ninth-month midnight story! Thanks, Kathy. ❤
Thank you for directing us Walt Whitman’s way! I am going to abandon my low carb way of eating …. would love a candied apple. Most likely one of the last you have left from Halloween.
I’ve been saving one up for you just on the off chance you were wanting to pitch any and all diets! Do you know I can’t remember the last time I had one (way back in the mists of childhood), though I do remember the taste of tartness mixed with sticky sweet sugar?! Yummy. Enjoy your candied apple as I look forward to reading your Whitmanesque prosery!
Wonderful prompt Dora. I don’t know for certain, what comes after our coming out of the 9th month midnight — but I know I will love, write poetry, thrill to music, laugh, and cry until then… or until I can no longer. 👍🏼✌🏼🫶🏼🎭🎼
It’s a fateful time, for sure, Rob, but life goes on and you’re right with all there is already in our lives, personally, we’ll have our fill of laughter and tears, and not worry. Or try not to. Peace to you, Rob. 🙌🧡🍁🧡
Hi Dora, Thank you for hosting. We live only a short distance from the Walt Whitman Bridge, and I like his poetry–but this one was a tough one to work into prose, at least for me. I will catch up with reading during the week, as I’m on pub duty later today. 🙂
Rising to the challenge is your middle name, isn’t it, Merril, especially in working a line into your serial. 🙂 — I can’t wait to read it. And I’m lagging behind in my reading too, so no worries! 💖
Wonderful to welcome all manner of spinners of tales to the Pub today! I’ve been battling an eye infection/corneal tear so I’ll be in and out of the pub giving my eyes a rest. Lagging behind on the story trail or not, I am looking forward to reading your 144-word tales.
All manner of autumnal treats and refreshments are at hand, yours to command! Pub doors are open. Let’s go! 🍁🍂🍁
Good evening poets and thanks for hosting with a line from Walt Whitman, Dora. Hot chocolate and some pumpkin pie, if you have it, please!
Hi Kim! Here you go and I think I’ll join you in that hot chocolate and pumpkin pie. Hope your ankles are nicely healed and you were able to go to your grandson’s b’day party!
Thank you, Dora. Sadly, I didn’t make it down to my daughter’s. I ended up at the hospital instead, and left with a special boot and painkillers. But it’s getting better.
I’m so sorry to hear that. It’s getting better though. That’s the important thing. And all in a good cause too 🙏🏽🤗
At least I got a certificate. 😄
😂🥰💖
Midnight is crying. Wine, please!
Vintage for the witching hour! Cheers, Nolcha.🍷😊
Thank you very much Dora…am a bit annoyed with myself as mine is technically not fiction, and would do a different one if I could delete from the list. Didn’t really think about the flash fiction side until after.
Had some good pumpkin soup though, highly recommended.
Hi Ain! I’m looking forward to reading it. The main thing is that it’s prose (not a prose poem) and tells a story (true or not). So you’re fine! Glad the pumpkin soup was tasty. 🍜🙂
Hoping your eyes get some respite in the nine-month midnight, Dora. I’m drinking tea, and alas not eating lentil soup because I let it burn to the bottom of thie pan while on a Zoom call… Didn’t need to call ou the fire service, phew. Take care of yourself and rest from the bartending x
Very kind of you, Kathy, especially as you had to deal with burnt lentil soup and a hastily averted run-in with the fire brigade! Exciting times, but I have been giving my eyes a break, and right now feel much better and looking forward to coming round your way for a piping good ninth-month midnight story! Thanks, Kathy. ❤
Thank you for directing us Walt Whitman’s way! I am going to abandon my low carb way of eating …. would love a candied apple. Most likely one of the last you have left from Halloween.
I’ve been saving one up for you just on the off chance you were wanting to pitch any and all diets! Do you know I can’t remember the last time I had one (way back in the mists of childhood), though I do remember the taste of tartness mixed with sticky sweet sugar?! Yummy. Enjoy your candied apple as I look forward to reading your Whitmanesque prosery!
Wonderful prompt Dora. I don’t know for certain, what comes after our coming out of the 9th month midnight — but I know I will love, write poetry, thrill to music, laugh, and cry until then… or until I can no longer. 👍🏼✌🏼🫶🏼🎭🎼
It’s a fateful time, for sure, Rob, but life goes on and you’re right with all there is already in our lives, personally, we’ll have our fill of laughter and tears, and not worry. Or try not to. Peace to you, Rob. 🙌🧡🍁🧡
Thanks for hosting this evening, Dora. You picked a real humdinger for a prompt. I gave it a whirl. I would love an iced mug of cider!
Iced mug of cider coming up, and so glad you dropped by, Dwight! Can’t wait to read your what’s-sure-to-be humdinger of a tale. 😊
Thank you, Dora. Oh, yes!
Hi Dora, Thank you for hosting. We live only a short distance from the Walt Whitman Bridge, and I like his poetry–but this one was a tough one to work into prose, at least for me. I will catch up with reading during the week, as I’m on pub duty later today. 🙂
Rising to the challenge is your middle name, isn’t it, Merril, especially in working a line into your serial. 🙂 — I can’t wait to read it. And I’m lagging behind in my reading too, so no worries! 💖
Hahaha. Thank you!
Thank you for taking along the Whitman way Dora.
I’m glad you liked it, Paul. It had been a while since I’d visited his poetry and it was time. 🙂