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In Flanders Fields
In Flanders fields the poppies blow
Between the crosses, row on row,
That mark our place, and in the sky,
The larks, still bravely singing, fly,
Scarce heard amid the guns below.
We are the dead; short days ago
We lived, felt dawn, saw sunset glow,
Loved and were loved, and now we lie
In Flanders fields.
Take up our quarrel with the foe!
To you from failing hands we throw
The torch; be yours to hold it high!
If ye break faith with us who die
We shall not sleep, though poppies grow
In Flanders fields.
John McCrae
As we are entering the season of Remembrance, it seemed appropriate to bring the Rondeau to Form for All today for your consideration. In Flanders Fields, written by Canadian John McCrae in 1915 and reproduced above, is probably the most famous rondeau in existence, although the rules for the form were finalised in France around 400 years before McCrae wrote his poem.
The form we are considering – as always there are variations – is the traditional 15-line rondeau in three stanzas based on 2 rhymes and a rentrement or refrain with the scheme R-aabba aabR aabbaR. Typically, the rentrement forms the opening part of the first line of the poem; it can be as short as one word, but is more usually a complete clause or phrase.
If we look at In Flanders Fields more closely, we can begin to translate all that poetry technospeak into plain English.
First, the rentrement i.e. the repeated phrase, which in McCrae’s poem is In Flanders fields. This is the opening phrase of the poem, and reappears at the close of the second and third stanzas. Note that the rentrement doesn’t need to rhyme with any of the other lines of the poem – McCrae’s doesn’t – although there is no reason that it shouldn’t. Finding a good rentrement – a phrase that actually bears repetition and in being repeated contributes to the poem – is one of the main challenges of writing a rondeau.
After the rentrement, the next most obvious aspect of the form is its layout in three stanzas of 5, 4 and 6 lines respectively. As far as I can discover, this arrangement of stanzas is considered an essential, rather than optional, part of the form.
Thirdly, there are the two end-rhymes that give the rondeau much of its musicality. McCrae has used blow/row/below/ago/glow/foe/throw/grow for his a-rhymes, and sky/fly/lie/high/die for his b-rhymes. Finding 8 rhyming (or near rhyming) words for the a-rhyme is the second major challenge that the rondeau delivers; compared to that, the 5 b-rhymes are much less difficult to find.
Lastly, McCrae’s poem, in common with most rondeaux, is written in iambic tetrameter – and it is the rhythm or meter that is the other significant contributor to the music of the rondeau.
Just in case you think that the rondeau is yet another esoteric form that no-one writes today, our very own Björn Rudberg lists it as one of his favourite forms and has written quite a few. Here’s an example taken from his blog:
We’re Fabulous
We’re fabulous, we are the best
adorned with ribbons on our chests
a brand of excellence for us
the common man we can repress
’cause our club excludes the rest
come look at us, the fair noblesse
we’re better bred there is no test
just DNA that makes us blessed
we’re fabulous
you say plebeians are oppressed
society has now progressed
why should this ever be discussed?
your simple manners don’t impress
remember this in your protest
we’re fabulous.
Björn Rudberg
If you compare this with the scheme outlined above, then you can see that Björn’s refrain (rentrement) is the phrase We’re fabulous, which appears as the opening of the first stanza, and at the close of the second and third stanzas of Björn’s poem. Björn’s a-rhyme is clear; best, chests, noblesse etc. The b-rhyme is a little trickier to spot, partly because it is very close to the a-rhyme in sound, and partly because Björn has disguised it by the use of partial rhymes; us/repress, discussed/impress. Or perhaps Björn has adapted the form to suit his needs by using more a-rhymes and fewer b-rhymes.
So there you have it, poets, the rondeau in all its rhyming and repeating glory. My name is Tony Maude, and it has been my pleasure to bring you this edition of Form for All.
What to do now.
• Write your rondeau and post it to your blog.
• Add a link to your poem via the ‘Mr Linky’ below.
• This opens a new screen where you’ll enter your information, and where you also choose links to read. Once you have pasted your poem’s blog URL and entered your name, click Submit. Don’t worry if you don’t see your name right away. If you write more than one rondeau, it’s OK to link them separately … smiles.
• Read and comment on other people’s work to let them know it’s being read.
• Share your work and that of your fellow poets <em>via</em> your favourite social media platforms.
• Above all – have fun!
Welcome back, brave poets … smiles. Bring your rhyming dictionaries; you might need them for today’s challenge.
This is great Tony! I am one of those people that hates to use form, but I tried it and I must admit, I kind of like it, mainly because of the concept of the refrain, I like repetition in poetry. I also like the rhyme scheme, but often feel it is artificial in my own poetry, or like a crutch sometimes. The rondeau makes the rhyme essential, though, and that’s cool too 🙂
I must add, Bjorn’s poem is really, really good.
As I think you can guess, I like the challenge of writing to forms. Lots of people find rhyming forms particularly tricky because it is hard to make the rhyme natural rather than forced. But, if it is well done, it really does add something to a poem, in my opinion.
Oh yes, I agree 100%!
ha. much fun tony…i think i got it right…well except for the syllables but i dont have enough fingers….smiles….look forward to reading once i get these buses out of here…this was fun tony…even for a form…smiles.
Tetrameter = 8 syllables. Last time I checked, most people have that many fingers, and two thumbs as well … smiles.
Yours is great fun – it has that certain Brian Miller something … smiles
this is why i am a math teacher…smiles.
Despite its sad words ‘In Flanders Field’ is the most beautiful thing, which never fails to make me emotional, almost reduces me to tears.
On a lighter note – thanks so much for this prompt Tony. Gleaned clues from Björn’s post this PM and despite donning decorating togs – did none – got scribing instead!
Anna :o]
Just come from reading yours, Anna. I enjoyed it a great deal; very clever use of the refrain/rentrement
Thank you Tony.
Just came from a concert – and it’s so fun that this form – my favorite I think is actually the form I used the very first time at dVerse… The article is great.. And just so fantastic that this poem is the reason for the red poppies worn to remember the veterans .. Out to read poetry 😉
I am liking that our poems are back to back 🙂
That was an amazing coincidence 😉 we should do it planned next time
Sure 🙂
There are some good poems out on the trail already, Bjorn – yours included … smiles
smiles…you two play very nicely together today….
A lovely but challenging form Tony ~ Of course, I cheated using the rhyming dictionary ~
You have selected a classic & moving poem, In Flanders Field ~ Thanks and wishing you all Happy Thursday ~
It’s perfect to illustrate the form – and it seemed appropriate at this time of year too.
Your rondeau is beautiful, Grace
Thanks Tony ~ 🙂
Well, I tried. challenging indeed, Tony. ~ M
Trying some of these forms gives me a new appreciation of the skill of the poets from previous generations.
Hey Tony–I was almost determined on a blog break–I am really worn out –but I love formal poetry and this one is so intriguing. In Flanders Fields such a beautiful poem–and great great job by Bjorn. I will see if I can come up with something–it may be belated–as I’ve not had much time of late, but we’ll see –thanks, Tony. k.
Fully understand, k. This form is much trickier than it looks – but aren’t they all … smiles
look forward to seeing what you bring k…and if not enjoy your break…..
Hiya Tony, you’re busy here this week.
Did you find that you had to unwind after the course? Usually one gets such a high from an intensive week like that, needing a slow down.
I find this rondeau form difficult to accommodate, and cannot quite see why that is.
The Flanders poem always give me the shivers.
I came home from Lumb Bank with a cold, so I had to take a break. But now … smiles
Wow! So much fun! I didn’t think I would be able to do this (day from hell, here!), but I am so pleased I did. It wiped away a lot of grumpiness for me… 🙂
Nothing like a workout for the brain cells; a few minutes concentrating on something you want to do always makes it easier to relax after a bad day … smiles
you did well…especially for writing it on the way home from work….sorry you had sucha rough day…
Absolutely! I was in a much better frame of mind by the time I went to bed 🙂
Hi Tony – great challenge! I love this form. I do appreciate your prompting us on! Thanks! Jay Blue
There are so many poetry forms – and it’s good to stretch the poetic muscles every now and again and try a new one. I really like the musicality of the rondeau, and the challenge it presents too. Of course, I’ve only ever written one … smiles
An excellent exposition and two marvellous examples. I have written rondeaux before, and I certainly can’t come up with one quickly enough to post here, but I’ll try tomorrow. Thank you for the reminder, Tony.
Bjorn writes quite a few – and how can you not include the McCrae, especially at this time of year? I look forward to seeing what you come up with, Viv.
I’m really impressed with the rondeaux that have been written so far … I’ve read up to Anders; now I need to sleep. I’ll check back tomorrow for the overnights … Have fun now, y’all … smiles
Wonderful invitation, Tony. In Flanders Fields is an old favorite of mine…had to memorize it in grammar school! I’m not sure I’ll be able to participate this week but hope to give the form a whirl in the near future.
I always look forward to seeing what you do with these prompts, Victoria.
Love this. Love In Flanders Fields – it is a favorite. Did a rough rondeau, and as Brian noticed a variation as well. Great prompt!
hiya shanyn!
Hey.
Hi Shanyn,
Rondeau and variation – I’ll be round soon to read … smiles
This was my first rondeau. I can see why Björn likes them so much. Thanks for the challenge!
My first rondeau too – will be round to check both of yours in a mo…
These poems are amazing! I will check out this guy rondeau.
Hey brian check out your message I sent you today. 🙂
got it. just catching up. had the boys on my own this eve so been busy.
respond to you in a bit. smiles.
Agreed on the standard of the entries this week; everyone’s really risen to the challenge. It makes me wonder why this form isn’t used very much.
OK – coffee brewed, it’s time to get back out on the trail …
I have written something for the prompt but also included one I wrote many years ago after visiting Ypres.
fixed your link ros
I’m just heading back out onto the trail – I’ll be at your place soon; looking forward to it.
I think this is a beautiful form and would lend itself to the worst poetry in the world and make it sound wonderful…thanks for the great exercise, Tony.
It is a lovely form – perhaps this might be the beginning of a rondeau revival? smiles
kkkkaty, I couldn’t get onto your blog – blogger said it has been taken down. Is that true?
kkkkaty…pout…your blog is gone….
Sorry I am late. I struggled with this one! My mind went where it wanted and my will made it write to form–almost totally. But it is an odd duck of a poem.
I am happy to say that my poetry is featured this month in the little rag “Types and SHadows,” a publication of The Fellowship of Quakers in the Arts. I have my copy, but I must wait for it to go on line before showing the pages and the poems.
Congratulations, Susan!
Thank you!
woot awesome susan!
Congratulations on being featured; it’s well-deserved.
I’ll be round to read your rondeau very soon.
Many thanks for the clear explanation and lovely examples. I managed it despite giving myself a challenging main rhyme. You didn’t say rentrement should also be title and at first mine wasn’t, but on second thoughts I decided it would be better so, and rushed back and changed it.
The rentrement doesn’t have to be the title – mine isn’t – but it very often is. Finding those 8 rhymes for the main rhyme can be a real devil; but using partial/slant rhymes can help to get a poet out of a tight corner. There have been some really good rhymes produced for this exercise.
I gave it a try. Thanks for these fun prompts.
Will check it out soon … smiles.Thanks for playing.
The prompt is so lovely, it is worth a try. 🙂 Thanks, Tony.
Thank you, Imelda. I really enjoy putting these prompts together. I’ve not been writing all that long myself, so it makes me try new things … smiles
I really liked this one! Just came back from I do not know where.
ha. welcome back…smiles.
Welcome back, Sharon. Loved your rondeau … smiles
Thanks to everyone who took part in writing to this prompt. Reading all your rondeax has been a real treat – you have to one of the most talented clientelles in any pub in the world … ever … smiles.
Time for me to get the keys over to Shanyn post haste … or even faster than that … smiles.
I did not make it in time, Tony, but do have a Rondeau out there thanks to you and this inspiring prompt.
Just picked up your comment , Lydia … heading over to read now.
Couldn’t see how to comment on your site, but did enjoy your rondeau.