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Keats, Memories, Metaphors, Object Poetry, Pablo Neruda, poetry prompt, Sensory Description, Tropes, Victoria Slotto
A week or so ago I came upon an old spatula in the back of a kitchen drawer in a home that used to belong to my parents. It immediately transported me back in time to my growing-up years and a poem of memories and sensory description made its way into a rough draft that I posted for Open Link Night.
An object poem can offer a fresh look at something ordinary, something that is part of your everyday life. Or it can allow you to take an unfamiliar object and make its acquaintance. An object may have sentimental value, an unusual shape or texture or it may be something that teases your curiosity, that interests you.
For this week’s Meeting the Bar, I invite you to find some old artifact or even something newer that will tickle your creative muse. Here are some suggestions—a look at how to do that.
You could begin by enlisting the help of your senses. How does it smell, taste, feel to touch? Describe what you see or hear. Does it make you feel a certain way or engage a memory? Where did find it? Give some environmental details if appropriate. Are there any verbs that pop into mind when you see this thing?
Go ahead, take it a step further. Is it possible that this artifact can be used metaphorically? Does that stale bread remind you of a relationship, or the gravel beneath your bare feet the pain you find along life’s journey? Does it, perhaps, remind you of someone or something in your own life? Personify it, if you like.
I can’t resist sharing a fragment of Neruda’s famous poem, Ode to an Artichoke:
Around it,
demoniac vegetables
bristle their thicknesses,
devise
tendrils and belfries,
the bulb’s agitations;
while under the subsoil
the carrot
sleeps sound in its
rusty mustaches.
Excerpt from Ode to an Artichoke, copyright, Pablo Neruda.
Another example is, of course, Keats’s Ode to a Grecian Urn, in which he uses the second person to address the object itself.
Finally, here is a poem I have posted previously that allows you to see the transition from the thing to its effect on me:
Alternate Uses for a Steak Knife
I know better
than to dig blindly
in the tool box.
The knife—
sharp as it was
the day he died
ten years ago.
A bit of rust next
to the handle
crusted with dirt.
I can see him
digging
beside the Sago
Palm, uprooting
stubborn weeds,
opening boxes,
slicing through
years of crap
to get at truth.
Then he would
sharpen the blade.
Listen carefully,
hear the song
of steel meeting flint.
That last time,
could he guess that
I would bleed?
Copyright, Victoria C. Slotto, 2011
So come on down to the pub, bring someTHING to share and read your fellow poets. For those of you new to this community, here’s how to join:
• Write your poem and post it on you website or blog;
• Access Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post and add your name and the direct URL to your poem;
• Visit other poets who have participated and comment on their work…especially those who have cared enough to read and comment on yours;
• Have fun…and you think about inviting someone new to join us at the pub.
This will be my last post at dVerse for a while. I need a break to bring my second novel and a book of poetry to publication. The novel is ready to go. I just need the time to format it on CreateSpace. I’ve decided to self-publish this time. I do plan on returning in a few months. In the meantime, I will continue to join in with poems, perhaps a bit less frequently, and will continue to post on my blog.
Many thanks to Claudia and Brian for their support and to all the members of the dVerse team—not to forget each of you who, with your poetry, make this poetry community, this pub, the best place to taste poetry and friendship. Au Revoir for a little while.
Victoria – that is a very nice prompt and actually so much can be done around it – sounds like great fun –
I hope it’s fun for everyone.
I had something written and hope it works…objectifying rain, which has eluded the west coast of the U. S. lately…great prompt as I can think of utterly dozens of more ideas 😉
I’m here in the West…not a drop of rain. Can’t wait to read.
I love the prompt… I just might want to write a second entry.. so much fun to think around objects like this…
Go for it, Bjorn!
a wonderful prompt victoria– writing poetry about the things we see around us each day brings them alive in a complete new way
happy thursday– i’ll be out on the trail in a minute..
Loved yours, Claudia
thanks victoria
Welcome, everyone. Hope you have fun with it.
Thank you for the lovely prompt Victoria ~ I really admire the odes by Pablo Neruda. ~
I will be by to return visits ~
Thanks, Grace. I enjoy Neruda, too.
fun stuff v….
thank you so much for all your hard work…and enjoy your break…i look forward to seeing how your projects work out….
i will be around as soon as i get these kids out of here…
Thanks, Brian.
Thanks for the excellent prompt Victoria. I had written mine this afternoon working off a clue on Claudia’s wonderful write. I think maybe I got it wrong though- as in interpretation!…Nevertheless I have posted.
I word echo Brian’s comment re your hard work, enjoying your break and good luck with your projects.
Kind regards.
Anna :o]
Thank you, Anna. I’m sure whatever you come up with will be perfect.
This is awesome. I have some ideas that came to mind when I read your words.
Can’t wait to see your finished projects, stay in touch. You’ll be missed!
Thanks, Shanyn…I’m not going far.
can’t wait as well to see your finished projects victoria – and glad you’re not going far…smiles… thanks for all you’ve done as well
Thank YOU!
Hi Victoria! I loved your spatula poem, and the idea you are giving us to write with. Hopefully I can write something today, if not, it will be percolating in my mind for sure! Looking forward to reading everyone’s poems.
Thanks, Lupita. Enjoy the process whenever it happens.
looking forward to what you come up with lupita – and reading is always much appreciated as well…
Thank you Victoria. Good luck on your books.
woohooo! myrna’s in the house…over to read in a minute
Thank you, Myrna
Victoria, I really enjoyed your prompt. I think that there are many ‘objects’ that deserve to have a poem written about them. Your prompt could have me busy for days. I always liked the “Ode to a Grecian Urn” by Keats. Great poem, and good example.
I am sorry that you will not hosting dVerse for a while, as I ALWAYS enjoy your prompts. I do ‘follow’ your blog, so I will find your poetry, in any case. Best of luck on your projects…..and hope that you will find your way back to dVerse sooner rather than later.
i went the easy way out with my chair…but after writing it i kept having ideas pop in my head at things i could have done an ode to…might have to file that away for later….smiles.
I so appreciate you, Mary.
Victoria, I enjoyed your prompt today! The hardest thing was to decide what object to choose.
I wish you all the best with your writing and publishing projects and look forward to seeing you back at dVerse.
ha. true…see my response to mary above…
I also have been looking at “things” in a new way…things begging to be written about.
I wrote something – not sure if it’s poetic but it’s meaningful to me and true. Thanks, as always, Victoria for your great prompts. Sorry life sometimes takes me away and I don’t participate but we all do what we can when we can as I know you understand.
its always good to see you gay…smiles.
You too Brian – I just left a long and perhaps strange comment on your poem. Ha…I am getting weirder as I get older.
not weird at all gay.
smiles.
much appreciated
though i like weird so…
smiles.
Wise words.
So sorry I’ve been MIA–I have a minor family situation re: my mom’s caregivers. If I don’t make it back tonight, I will read and comment tomorrow.
oy i hope you get that worked out v….sorry.
i will hang out in the mean time and be sure to greet those stopping in…
Thanks so much, Brian. I’m hoping to catch up this morning.
All the best for your books, Victoria, and many thanks for all your work here.
hiya rosemary…
happy thursday to you
Thank you, Rosemary. I’ll be around.
I love this prompt. I’m really hoping I can find some time to try it before Mr. Linky expires. 🙂 Peace, Linda
you have 33 hours…well about 27.5 as of right now….
hope to see you back in a bit…
Plenty of time! I made it back and posted my link. Now to read a few other wonderful poems. Peace, Linda
shalom
If not, there’s always OLN
I do love that there’s always OLN, but I made it in time for this one. 🙂 Good luck with your publishing ventures. You’ll be missed. Peace, Linda
Yeah. I’ll be off to read it soon.
Bittersweet…wrote about a pocket knife of my Dad’s that I found after he died. Got me thinking…
a moving write gayle… i use my victorinox mostly to cut watercolor paper…ha…smiles
smiles….my father and my FIL both carry pocketknives….
i can not as i can not have one in school…
they gave one to my son though that he carries on the weekends….
So cool how things tell stories of loved ones.
Thanks Vick – it amazes me how I have something written and I hold and then a prompt comes up and it fits…well hopefully it does 🙂
and I so forgot to mention enjoy your break – self publishing – I did it… it simply is the way of the future – as much as holding a book in your hands solidifies the experience, it’s a long hard road with Publishers. I wish you success and happiness Vick – its’ n Aussie language – see ya later – not goodbye 🙂
Thanks, Jenny. You’re right. Self-publishing is so satisfying…if only I could pay a marketer!
Good luck with your book and poetry collection. You will be missed, but what a lovely prompt to end on. (Still, I hope it’s not the end, merely au revoir).
hows your week going marina?
Bless you, Brian, thanks for asking. Bit busy this end, hence no contribution, but I do try to read as much from you guys as I can!
I do hope to be back soon, Marina. Thank you.
An interesting prompt. Thanks.
yes, it was
You are so welcome, rosross.
Hi there Victoria,
I have had a dizzy week, with no time to contribute last night – but just wanted to say how much I enjoyed your ‘Steak Knife’ poem – terrific writing… All the best to you and hope to catchup properly one dV night, when the dust settles…
With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
hiya scott….what got your week so busy?
Thank you so much, Scott. I always enjoy seeing your here.
Au revoir, Victoria, and blessings on your publishing project (and family matters too).
Thank you, lynndiane. And thanks for the blessings.
Thanks for the prompt which showed me how much I’m missing my Honey! Good luck on your project.
awww….smiles.
loved it…
I hope you find comfort in writing of something of his, Mary.
I’m back and off to read. Looking forward to your offerings!
Come back soon Victoria! love your prompts….best wishes for your soon-to-be published works
Thank you, Akila. I do offer prompts on my blog and monthly at http://intothebardo.wordpress.com Not such large venues as here.
I have to leave again for the afternoon. Not quite caught up but I will, I promise!
smiles. just caught up myself.
Thanks all for you fine contributions. I’ll stop by in the morning in case there are any late ones. Have a happy weekend.