A while back, Gay Cannon, who you will recognize as “Beachanny,” invited the dVerse community to create their own form. I suspect that, for many, this felt a bit intimidating. If you didn’t post to the prompt for Meeting the Bar, perhaps you missed out on some of the brilliant creations.
I thought, for this week’s MTB, it would be fun to focus in on one of these form—the Tilus, created by Kelvin S-M. As a form of micro poetry, it challenges our ability to express ourselves with both clarity and brevity—both characteristics of superior writing. Here is Kelvin’s explanation of his form as well as his sample.
Tilus [tee-loo-hz] is a form created by Kelvin S.M. and falls under the category of micro poetry. The form is divided into two parts: the first part is composed of two lines following a 6-3 syllable count; the second part, a one-syllable word to close and/or complete the subject layered in the first part. The whole piece must, only, contain 10 in overall syllable count. The main focus of Tilus is on the world of Nature, and how it can open a new door to a wider understanding of life and beyond. The form aims to be epic in emotions expressed, more importantly, than to be epic in words.
The notion behind the name ‘Tilus’ was actually derived from the reversed spell of my mother’s maiden name, my middle name—‘Sulit’ which is used in Philippines as an expression to mean something precise, practical, worthy, etc. There is a lot of usage depending on the current scenario. I have never given much attention to its meaning until recently when I decided to use it as name for my invented form. I even figured out lately upon research that in some countries the term ‘Tilus’ means ‘a piece of land’.
It’s almost like a year of conceptualizing this form until I finally completed the final concept and launched it last Oct. 2013. To date, I have written several sets of Tilus poem & 5 have been published in this blog. The rest are saved for good & eventually will find their time for public read.
Tilus by Kelvin S-M
I.
Life—let me fall in you
clean as a
dew.
II.
Old crow wears red; night has
settled on
him.
III.
River blue: I quaff clouds
on river
skin.
Thank you, Kelvin, for allowing us to share this creative form. I look forward to working with it myself and, especially, to reading what other members of the dVerse community accomplish.
If you are new to dVerse, here’s the process:
• Write your poem and post it on your blog or website.
• Access Mr. Linky at the bottom of the post and provide your name and the direct URL to your poem.
• Take some time to visit and comment upon other poets who’ve taken part in this prompt. Enjoy each other. We’re a community!
• Put the word out on the social media you frequent. Let’s bring in some new readers and writers of poetry!
For dVerse Poet’s Pub, this is Victoria, returning after a brief hiatus in which I completed not a single goal I set out to accomplish. And that’s life with its own unpredictable agenda!
Welcome everyone…and a big thank you to Kelvin for allowing us to play with his creation. I will be by a bit later to read…enjoy.
Thank you Victoria… & sorry for the hiatus… i have had to accompany my boss in a corporate meeting earlier… & fin’lly i find my way here…. i’m thrilled to the quantity of response… thank you all.. smiles…
The responses are indeed gratifying, Kelvin. Thanks again.
Way cool Kelvin – I feel honored to write in this form, to bring something new into the world is no small accomplishment.
Nice work, Bill
ha smiles… we’re getting all confused with the pub opening hours… but there are some early guests already – so – let’s get the party started… smiles
Oh, oh. I thought we’d decided to open earlier. Sorry about that!
oh and thanks so much for allowing us to play with you form kelvin… i found it quite challenging but so cool
A very fun form indeed.. the punch of the one syllable made it really cool..
uh-oh, is that a catching disease, early opening hours? I love brief forms, so I will most certainly try and play along later on tonight. Thanks Kelvin for inventing it and thanks Victoria for suggesting it.
Looking forward to it…try one in French!?
Ooh, now there’s a challenge…
Do today’s topic is “Tilus” aka Micro Poetry?
Question: the topic is going to be about Nature, correct? or does the topic have to be about anything? or just Nature?
Awesome blog!
it can be used for nature predominantly…but any topic…i tried a few that were not nature…
Give me 5 minutes to post the new poem up. Trust me you’re gonna laugh hard. 🙂
As Kelvin puts it, it’s supposed to include an element of nature with a deeper message….that’s how I understood it, anyway.
i think duct tape is an element of nature with a deeper message… haha… smiles.. you’re right… only read the instruction carefully after i had written mine alreay…..
Stay tune for I will post a poem that will blow you away. And its based on this topic “Tilus”.
Thanks for the Tilus, Victoria and Kelvin. I know I cheated by linking four and not trying the brevity of one. But it was quite stimulating to write it and remember a favotite old U2 song. I’ll put one here:
River carries your spite
and spit to
Sea
Smiles…I did a dozen and had a hard time stopping. And more keep dancing around in my head!
And I felt that flow when I visited. I might have to return to this form another time. It’s brevity and line length helps to articulate experiences in silence.
You & I were the Tilus gluttons tonight; for I did a dozen too, & was just getting warmed up. Interesting form, Kelvin; once you try it out, words line up like lemming, and syllables count off like military marchers. Had a hell of a lot more fun than I thought I would; hate to admit it, but counting syllables always irritates me; but such parameters represent growth, right?
I felt a bit dried up and withered, for some reason. But glad to hear that you had a ‘moreish’ experience with this. Really enjoyed your flow!
ha. you never know when we are going to open the doors….smiles…
glad i stopped in early…and will be around here in a bit…
this is a cool form…nice job kelvin
Early opening of the pub works fine for me –given that I leave in Norway. It gives me some time to get inspired before the day ends.
Have at it, Adriana!
Brian,
Mea culpa!
i take earl grey in my cuppa…with just a dash of sugar…
smiles.
i’m so glad that the pub doors opened early…though it’s almost midnight now…thanks Victoria and Kelvin for this new form…
oh wow.. yes – you’re a few hours ahead of us… maybe we have to re-think opening hours… sleep well
I really liked the form – as I try to write haiku every day this is a nice change.. Spring is a wonderful time to do this.. I’m not yet home, but reading poetry in the subway is fine 😉
reading poetry in the subway is cool…
I think so too
as long as you keep signal if it dips far enough underground…ha…
We have underground coverage – works perfectly
nice…it is probably my beater phone…which cuts out going through the shadow of a tree…ha…
ha – the good thing with such phones is that foreign spies will lose track of you all the time… smiles
you been spying on me again?
smiles.
Like you, Bjorn, I like the brevity of it, and kept thinking of it as a great alternative to haiku.
Now I’m home.. catching up on even more poetry…
I think this might just be the perfect evening for a challenge like this… *smile* Great prompt and interesting form.
your poem made me wanna pack my bags and drive to a lake for a few days…sigh
ok – think i will go to bed early… suddenly my ear hurts and my throat feels sore.. and mondo tired….so… see you tomorrow…
are you just trying to get out of work tomorrow? smiles…
hope you feel better claudia…one more day til the weekend
Oh, please don’t get sick. We’ll cover here for you.
Hope you feel better, Claudia!
I need to ask a question (having read so many of these now)… Did I miss a memo or something when I did just one? Are there supposed to be more than one? Not that I want to change what I’ve done, I just want to know so I can do it differently next time… *blushing at stupid question*
nope. you can do more than one…some have chained them…mine are all separate…
a lot of times with short forms i will do a handful…just to play….
Not a stupid question. One is all it asked for but some of us just couldn’t control ourselves. Same thing happens with haiku. If you have more, feel free to add them. If not, that’s fine.
Ooh! I cheated a little, offering three… they are themed… 🙂 Great prompt, and love the form!
Not cheating. I did a dozen!
going out to dinner….i will be back in a little bit to catch up with other joining in…
Less is more ~ I love the short form challenge ~ Hitting the poetry trail now ~
Happy Thursday to all ~
You too, Grace.
Being out on the dVerse trail, running with the poetic dog pack, is always exhilarating. To hang out with, to belong to such an esteemed loving talented group pushes privilege past all parameters; just saying.
I’ll second that, Glenn.
Writing one haiku, even just one sonnet, as we did recently for Tony, makes me feel that I warmed up for a 200 yard dash, & only ran a couple of feet; too damn verbose for my own good, I guess; and yet, when I read some of the poems that are that short, often they speak volumes; quite the conundrum for this old poet.
This shows your versatility with words and openness to try new things ~ Also, writing in different ways & forms make it interesting for both you and the readers ~ I am happy to see you for a change, writing micro poetry just as well with long verses, smiles ~
You did just fine, Glenn. I’m having just the opposite problem–I can’t seem to get anything more than a wee bite these days.
Kelvin, thanks for the form. Thanks, Victoria, for bringing it to our attention. 🙂
You’re welcome!
Oh! I missed the prompt too – Thursdays are getting increasingly difficult for me to join and write. Thank you so much Victoria for sharing this one – it is only in recent times, that I have come to realize the immense potential micropoetry has. If possible, I would try to participate.
The link will be open through Friday! Hope to see you.
Yay Victoria! I have been wanting to try Kelvin’s Tilus and I kept putting it off. I have the beginnings of an idea, so it may be a while, but I’ll link before it closes. Thanks for the reminder and opportunity. And very cool form Kelvin!
Have fun with it, Heidi.
Thanks Victoria! I had fun tonight. Goodnight y’all!
Oh my, Tilus, reading poems on subways, duct tape, foreign spies, and I haven’t yet read the poems !
hahaha never know what you might find when you show up at the pub eh? smiles.
Poetry is everywhere!
This form is intriguing and I wanted to try it when Kelvin first posted his examples, so I was very glad to get this nudge. I found it astonishingly versatile. Will definitely be doing more with it!
Btw I assume that the plural of “tilus” is also “tilus”?
That’s how I used it.
Lots of comments. Nice. I had to give the form a try.
So glad you did, Yousei.
Be careful…it’s addictive
I have some more to read and really looking forward to them…have a few things to tend to–I’ll be back soon. I can’t stop writing to this form.
Victoria, I’m gratified that you’re using Kelvin’s original form for today’s prompt. I am just returned from the Nashville graduation which was a non-stop whirlwind, and have a few days to pay bills, clean house, and get ready to head off to the next graduation which is a high school one for the next oldest granddaughter. Having eleven growing up is surely keeping me busy, but if I get a little time later I’ll try my hand at this, because I want to so much. Talk to you later!
Have fun, Gay. Family comes first.
Hamish–enjoyed your Tilus but have no idea on how to comment. Thanks for joining.
Glad you enjoyed it!
I just wrote my first Tilus poem. I couldn’t add my link to Mr. Linky because I see the challenge has expired, but I wanted to thank you for the challenge–I enjoyed it. Here is the link to it on my blog if you would like to read it: http://leonaslines.com/2014/06/26/orchid/