Hey poets! Manicddaily, a/k/a Karin Gustafson, here in my first “Meet the Bar” challenge asking you to take a new slant on your writing.
Slant rhyme! I always think of it as rhyme that doesn’t quite.
Slant rhyme is imperfect rhyme, half-rhyme, rhyme that don’t fully stuff the cat in the hat, but let the cat’s head or tail or even whole mid-section lounge about the brim.
Slant rhymes are words like “slant” and “bent”. “Just” and “jest.” “Love” and “move.” “Cat” and “hot” (as in tin roof.)
Slant rhymes (to my way of thinking) are very effective in serious poetry as they allow for some of the music of a rhyme without its silliness.
Wait! Straight rhyming is great–but it can sometimes descend into a hurdy-gurdy sing-song. This is fun and may even be bitingly effective, but it can undermine the tone of a poem, and, because of a relative shortage of straight rhymes, overdependence on straight rhymes can lead to cliche. (Moon, June, spoon, tune.)
At the same time, a serious poem with no rhyme can sometimes edge into the prosaic.
Slant rhyme is used quite commonly today in rap poetry–where poets feel bound to rhyme but also want to reach for unusual combinations. One of the greatest more traditional poets using slant rhyme was Emily Dickinson. (She was quite criticized for it in her time; people thought she just couldn’t come up with regular rhymes.)
I heard a Fly buzz
I heard a Fly buzz – when I died –
The Stillness in the Room
Was like the Stillness in the Air –
Between the Heaves of Storm –
The Eyes around – had wrung them dry –
And Breaths were gathering firm
For that last Onset – when the King
Be witnessed – in the Room –
I willed my Keepsakes – Signed away
What portions of me be
Assignable – and then it was
There interposed a Fly –
With Blue – uncertain stumbling Buzz –
Between the light – and me –
And then the Windows failed – and then
I could not see to see –
Storm, room, firm, room, be, fly.
So, Poets, your task today (if you choose to accept it) is to incorporate slant rhyme in your poem, i.e. get bent!
A couple of further points–please (i) feel free to mix slant rhymes and straight rhymes as Dickinson does; (ii) do not feel obligated to end your lines on your slant rhymes (although this is pretty cool and if you want to make a poem of slant couplets or quartets you should feel absolutely free to do so.)
Also–please try not to manipulate word order to end a line with your rhymes–slant or straight: “Up the mountain I climbed to see, whether follow she would me.” This type of manipulation really isn’t necessary here (or ever, I would argue!) but especially not with slant rhymes because there are so many more word choices. (But, go ahead, do it if you want!)
Finally, slant your way over to your other poets to check out their posts. See you on the diagonal!
What to do if you are new here:
• Write a poem using some kind of slant rhyme and post your poem to your blog.
• Add a link to your poem via the ‘Mr Linky’ below.
• Check up on other poets. Read and comment on other people’s work.
• Share, if you like, via your favorite social media platforms.
• Above all- have fun!
(Last caveat–all text and drawings here are original to me, and under copyright. If you like elephants though, check out my little children’s counting book 1 MISSISSIPPI. I’ve also published a humorous teen novel NOSE DIVE, and poetry, GOING ON SOMEWHERE. And I hope hope hope to have a serious novel out soon, called NICE.)
Hi friends – Peter Gabriel is on concert just now – I will be by later to read your rhymes
ha – you always seem to be on a concert – or traveling – smiles
have fun!!
Yeah – action’a on
smiles… i love the pics.. ha… if elephants would understand slant rhyme they probably would’ve slam contests with the lions – fun
cool theme karin – and happy slanting everyone!!
Yes leaning elephants was my first thought too 😉
cool… i think slant rhymes are not as foreseeable as straight rhymes… and they come unexpected which makes it more interesting
Great prompt, Karin, and I too love your heffalumps! Thank you for being our sober host whilst we all get drunk and slant on poetry! 🙂
hahah.. cheers to that!
smiles
Hey all–sorry, I am at work and so will not be able to comment much for a bit, and then will be on a train, and using iPhone–but will visit all! The elephants thank you for kind words–the one on the cot is sorry to be so grim! k.
smiles.. i will try to hold the fort for a bit…
Love your illustrations Karin. I have been off on a period of extended blog-avoidance, but will see if I can overcome it.
it’s good to see you hedge!!!
Ha. Thanks. I felt a little bad to illustrate the Dickinson as it’s quite a serious poem, but I had the little elephant lying around so couldn’t resist. I’ve not written mine. k.
hedge!!!!!!
smiles. would love to see another poem by you…i miss you….
I miss you too when I’m away, bri and thanks Claudia and k for the welcome—-I’ve been so busy it’s silly, really, for a retired old woman, but fun. I will be by this afternoon to visit around the pub.
This should be interesting. 🙂
smiles
I look forward to what you’ll offer Charlie
I’m almost done with the writing. I hope it came out right and I hope I followed the example correctly. It’s a short trippy poem. 🙂
Mine was quite trippy too
i can not think of a single poem of yours that was not interesting charlie…
time for me to get some sleep… will be back in the a.m. to catch up…
sleep well c…
k, love the prompt…i use a lot of slant rhyme as it is to create rhythm and movement ina piece….had fun with this one though…..
Hey Brian–have not been able to check into any poems yet, but in a bit, I hope! k.
What fun! Loved this. 🙂
Much enjoyed your poems, Shanyn. k.
Thank you!
I am hoping to get caught up on reading, and commenting back to everyone who visited me this weekend. We are getting close to being done seeding and then I’ll have some more free time. Patience my poetic friends, I will visit back those who stopped by my blog – and visit a few more friends as well! 🙂
Good luck with the planting. k.
Thanks!
I love slant rhyme — which I am used to calling half rhyme (the first term for it I encountered, many years ago) — for all the reasons you give. I use it a lot, and I’ll be happy to have an excuse to use it yet again! 🙂
PS Such a marvellous Dickinson poem you chose, and one I hadn’t come across before. Her uncorrected punctuation of dashes really does work, if one reads it that way.
Hey Rosemary! So nice to see you and glad you liked the Dickinson– k.
i knew it as b rhymes as well….
Hi K, I enjoyed the prompt. Not easy…but I enjoyed the challenges.
nice…just got back from a baseball game…getting caught up…
happy thursday mary
Hey Mary–no it is not easy! But you did a great job. k.
thanks – this is a valuable tool.
Glad you think so. k.
good morning…. nice to read some slant poetry with my coffee… smiles.. caught up and will check back in later in the day
thanks for the great prompt Karin, not sure if i’m slant or straight 🙂
Hi Sumana! Probably some of both! k.
A great prompt: I much prefer half rhyme, slant rhyme, assonance and consonance to the full-blown rose and nose variety. And the end of the line is not always the best pllace for them. Bravo.
Thanks, Viv. k.
I also much prefer slant rhyme, but warning: I was feeling rather silly this Friday (it’s been a week of tax returns, school registrations and other silly admin boredom), so my poem is a bit wacky and childish!
Oh good, looking forward to a bit of fun! 🙂
I am always in the mood for silliness. k.
Thank you Karin, I have been absent of late and don’t think I can make this one either. Not for want of trying…or possibly -smiles. Good luck poets.
Thanks. k.
Emily Dickinson is on of my absolute favourites. I enjoyed this prompt.
Good prompt Manic, though I can’t say that I actually enjoyed it. Like iambic pentameter, this is one of those writes I’m throwing out to the poetic winds in hope something worked,
Ha. I will check out! k.
Your illustrations brought me back here, K. They’re irresistible. I leave you a little snippet of a big heart.
Oh, thanks so much, Susan. Your kindness is much appreciated. K.
I enjoyed this so much so I had to test a little sonnet too 😉
woot… have quite some catching up to do… sitting on the balcony and it’s a beautiful evening…
Yes balcony blogging is the best to do.. I’m catching up on Friday Fictioneers…
That’s great. Thanks, Bjorn. k.
Am late for a change, ha ~ Just had a busy week at work but happy to put on my writing cap ~ Thanks for the lovely post Karin ~ Happy weekend ~
Hey Grace– thanks for joining in– enjoyed those slurping clouds! K.
Thanks for the prompt, Karin. I am glad to be able to link even if a little late. 🙂
I am at the tail end too, smiles ~
Thank you, Imelda. Much enjoyed hearing about Philippine rain. K.
I use a slant rhyme dictionary to help me out ~ Its pretty tricky, I know ~
Ha! No worries! K.