A couple weeks before vacation, we took the boys to the skating rink. I was there for the laser tag. I know better than to put rollerskates underneath me — a skateboard, maybe. Not rollerskates — at least not when they are doing the LIMBO.
(Does anyone remember the “Help, I’ve fallen and I can’t get up” commercials?)
Anyway, I watched as young children bent themselves low to the ground and with their rollerskates nearly on their sides, slide under the bar. They were chanting “How low can you go? How low can you go!” It looked painful.
Then, on vacation, I read two books that got me thinking along the same lines.
Alice Walker, the author of The Color Purple, has written several poetry books. I was reading A poem traveled down my arm. In the foreword, Mrs. Walker talks about the creation of the book. As she was signing thousands insert pages to go in one of her books…thousands….she got bored writing her own name so she she started doing little doodles on each page. Simple line drawings. And those led to simple expressions. Little micro poems.
I also read I wrote this for you by pleasefindthis, yes, that is the moniker of the author — pleasefindthis. The book is really a love letter written in small little poems, many of them one sentence — a few a little longer.
The simplicity of these poems, while also the depth of feeling generated got me thinking about creating some simple expressions of my own. Truth be told, my journal is full of them…most of my poems start with a simple line i scratch down — they just seem to grow from there though.
We have written in several forms that would fit this prompt; haiku, senryu, sudoku (smiles), american sentences…but i dont want you to feel constrained though (especially after last weeks difficult form) and want you to focus on capturing simple expressions.
Your ticket in is 40 words. You need to say what you need in 40 words. Or less. How low can you go? Can you do it in twenty words? ten words?
Give it a try. Go as low as you can without losing the meaning, the feeling.
If you are new, here is how it works:
- write a poem to the prompt and post it on your webpage or blog
- click the Mr Linky button below and enter your name and direct web address of your poem
- there you will also find the others that have written to this challenge — read them, tell them what you liked, what challenged you, what lines were the strongest or a gentle critique.
- if you use social media, use the tag #dversepoets or @dversepoets so that we can find you and help promote
- have fun
& i will see you, out on the trail. ~ Brian
claudia said:
generally i find short poems more difficult than long ones cause you really have to focus on what you want to say…cook it down to its essentials… it’s a challenge… looking forward to read what you’re bringing to the table..
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
The short poems can be so difficult.. yet when you read one .. you will have that expression of ah… I understand — it talks to me..
Gabriella said:
This is how I feel about them too!
brian miller said:
oh i agree…i am a wordy fella at times as well…smiles…but the condensed poems can def have high effect though….
sorry i am late…been reading but cant get on dverse at work…
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Hi Brian, I low the possibility to write short poems.. the shortest I have ever written was 4 words I think.. Today I went for the maximum allowed.. but twitter is certainly a platform to express it… I look forward to what everyone has written..
claudia said:
i agree… loads of great micro poetry on twitter
Grace said:
I find that doing line breaks are good for micro-poetry ~ Doing this in a twitter is a challenge though ~
brian miller said:
i agree….line breaks can def make micro poetry…
did you see hamish’s///
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Twitter have line-breaks now 😉
brian miller said:
def we have done twitter poetry before as well….i squeaked under myself…your second one was pretty tight…i may have to see what the lowest word amount is tonight and see if i can limbo lower….smiles…
Grace said:
I agree that micro poetry is a challenge ~ I tend to write haiku or tanka to pare them my words ~ This time around, I tried free verse ~ Happy Thursday everyone ~
claudia said:
ah yours made me yearn for the sea grace…
brian miller said:
hope you are enjoying the ocean…it sounds like it…i still need to make it there soon….
Fly Indie said:
Wonderful idea – 28 words from me…aaah…easier than before! Though I REALLY like being stretched, to see if poetry is something I can do or not, and read those who can!
claudia said:
i think you’re doing frickin well with poetry… just saying
Fly Indie said:
Long way to go, loooong way, but you really made me enjoy it, and I don’t mind seeing my limits. I have this theory about reading and writing anyway, and about being able to read poetry, and I notice the reading gets better after a while. No-one can claim you write poetry for the faint-hearted who want an easy fix, for example and there is pleasure in knowing your poetry well, as opposed to discovering it – a different sensation. Looking forward to it is more powerful.
claudia said:
i love both… the feeling at home in my poetry cause it feels so warm and familiar and the thrill of discovering as the world unfolds in a different way through a poet’s eyes
brian miller said:
dude…yours was awesome….
its good to think we are always learning as well…and getting better…
i never want to think i have arrived in writing prose or poetry
Fly Indie said:
You’re an inspiration matey! I actually felt a touch guilty not being able to do your prompt Tuesday think it was. That never happened to me before, but it amazed me how some did so well.
brian miller said:
hey thanks man…no sweat…it was a beast of a poetry form, that is for sure…
and for one that was created initially as a joke…some people did knock
out some serious pieces…
Mary said:
Well, from a poetry instructor one time I heard: “Poetry is crystallized thought.” I really like writing short poems, expressing the ESSENCE of an idea or concept without verbosity. I think this poetry instructor would like what we are all reading today. Thank you for this prompt, Brian.
claudia said:
crystallized thought…. i like.. that is a very good image
brian miller said:
i think in micro poetry you almost depend on the reader to bring even more meaning than what you can say in words…..
Gabriella said:
I really enjoyed today’s prompt, Brian!
brian miller said:
nice….glad you did…
i am having a bit of fun with it as well….
smiles.
Sumana Roy said:
what a feast !!… 🙂
brian miller said:
eat up….they are just nibbles of poetry today…smiles.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I really had to write a second one.. to write short without doing haiku or tanka… I’m down to 8 words.
claudia said:
ha – maybe by the end of the day we will crown you the limbo king
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
tomorrow then.. now it’s bedtime fore me 🙂
brian miller said:
bryan (quest4 peas) has us all beat at 3….not sure i am going to be able to get that low…just saying….ha
Grace said:
I so love micro poetic challenges ~
brian miller said:
ha. you did well on that second one.
tight.
arushiahuja said:
brian!! i barely finished in 40!! guess i cant go that low afterall!!
brian miller said:
woot. quest4peas (bryan) has the lowest at 3 words right now…
not sure i can beat that one….
Susan said:
35 words, 36 with title! I haven’t tried it with my faith or politics, though. That would be a major challenge. So I’m going to try. Thank you Brian. And thanks to everyone for visiting “Old Dear” even though you had already read another … sweet.
brian miller said:
give it a go…we have had several come back for a second dip already on this one…and i just might after i see the low point of the eve….
bryan i think still owns the low point at 3…
dkirk is in second at 6
viv got pretty close with her second at 7
and bjorn got to 8
brian miller said:
up, grace just moved up with a 4 word poem, taking second place.
Susan said:
I considered this a challenge. Teehee!
brian miller said:
and you got it….new leader…2 words…Susan!
Grace said:
Congrats Susan ~
Myrna said:
I mIade it in 37 words. Super simple though, no rocket science thoughts. Not that I ever have any. Ha.
brian miller said:
ha. oh you have had some stunners…the one this morning witht he different perspectives was really good….will pop over and see what you have….
voiceless2010 said:
Great challenge, though I prefer short poems to long poems anyway!
brian miller said:
welcome to dverse…glad you joined in
and they can def pack a punch when you condense down
what you are trying to say…
brian miller said:
ok, i hate to step away a bit because we are having so much fun
but i have an elders meeting at church….play nice…have fun…read
i will be back in a bit.
Raivenne said:
Brian, if I didn’t like you, I’d really, really, really not like you right now.
Haiku drive me crazy with their microscopic limits and you want us to go as low as possible? Didn’t I call you sadist recently? * smiles * I can only go, but so low, you know? <— wait, 8 words, rhymed by accident – that right there is it – I'm done
LMAO
brian miller said:
ha. hey wait…you said similar about the form last night…i cant win, can i….smiles…
ha those 8 words are perfect
billgncs said:
For me, short is sweet
brian miller said:
i remember you saying that last week…smiles.
billgncs said:
I have little thoughts. Big poems amaze me.
charliezero1.wordpress.com said:
This sounds like fun. hmmm…I wonder what I could write about?
OH! WAIT! I just did write something and I have it up now. 🙂
brian miller said:
hey anything with watermelon and clowns in it…i am there…
Bodhirose said:
Mine came to me in a flash…11 words…done! :~)
brian miller said:
eleven, because it is one more than ten…
movie reference, anybody?
markwindham said:
ahhh…back in the pub…it has been a while…boy, am I parched
brian miller said:
hey mark…where you been?
markwindham said:
missing writing…after a year and a half my business finally took off. NOT complaining, just working non stop until I can start hiring. Does not leave a lot of time for more pleasurable pursuits. Another stage. Sun shining, making hay. 😉
brian miller said:
hey its good to have business take off and do well…
what kinda work?
markwindham said:
Uhm..well… I am kind of afraid I will be banned from the pub. 🙂
Outsourced accounting and consulting, no taxes though
brian miller said:
ha. you are fine.
its an honest trade.
now if you were slaver
we may ban you.
but a number jockey
i can live with that.
i used to work in the finance world
so…
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
Oh, I enjoy micropoems, writing and reading. Off to do a bit of both now! 🙂
brian miller said:
cool look forward to it…
brian miller said:
alright…i am back…and playing catch up…
Anthony Desmond said:
man, I am loving how many poets are coming out for this prompt… havin fun reading everyone
brian miller said:
and thank you for reading…even when you did not play…
you are setting the pace, man
margaret said:
I am playing tonight, but am packing to go on vacation – I WILL visit and comment off and on in the next few days … as lounging ocean side and hiking nature trails, biking down quaint roads, and small island cafe’s … get a little tiring after a while. Ha ha ha
Anthony Desmond said:
enjoy your vacation, Margaret… sounds fun. smiles
margaret said:
If there isn’t comment on some, it is because I’m having trouble with wordpress again. I wonder if some of my comments go into people’s spam?
brian miller said:
oceanside and nature trails…you got a best of both worlds going on….nice.
lynndiane said:
Liked this prompt, Brian…and Raivenne’s rhyme in her comment! I baked bread today which led to the subject of my post…gonna go taste others’ poems now 🙂
brian miller said:
home made bread is amazing…
esp still warm…fresh out…with a dollop of butter….
mmmmm….
purplepeninportland said:
Mine is up at: http://purplepeninportland.wordpress.com/2014/08/08/hank/
claudia said:
good morning… caught up with most of you and will read on after work today…. now off to bike into the morning mist… smiles
brian miller said:
good morning…just caught up as well…and gotta get ready for school…have a great day
arathi said:
the less said the better it is…when one hello can say so much and one bye can say that’s it..40 words is being too generous…Brian you are too lenient..smiles..enjoyed this challenge a lot smiles..
brian miller said:
ha. maybe we will drop the limbo stick a little lower in the future….smiles.
rosross said:
I find it easier to write short than long. It is as if a thought draws itself together in a line and drops into my mind.
ManicDdaily said:
Hey Bri–I feel like this deserves a little love poem, but I took the exceedingly gloomy route! Thanks for your indulgence. k.
brian miller said:
ha. a gloomy love poem…will check that out.
Soulsong of Sharonlee said:
Ohhh 😦 missed this by 7 hours… I wrote & Posted if anyone wants to read.
brian miller said:
hey, you know i will read it…smiles.
Glenn Buttkus said:
On Twitter, many of us write the #sixwordstory & it sharpens the mind to think “small”, to choose words that imply, suggest so much more; good training ground fo this Miller prompt.
Victoria C. Slotto said:
So sorry I missed this wonderful prompt! I do love writing tight, loaded poems.
rosross said:
I had a notification for a new Dverse thread at the weekend but could not open the site.