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Hello! Welcome to the first Haibun Monday of 2016. Toni (Kanzensakura) here behind the bar today. I am so very pleased to be able to present the first haibun prompt for the year. The picture is of my ages old flowering quince taken a couple of years ago. It is the earliest blooming of my flowering bushes and bloomed so early, it caught a late, heavy snow. Some of you are aware of my love of snow and winter. Yuki no hana refers to snow flowers (a term for a quality of snowflakes or, flowers blooming in the snow).
Like everyone else, I made a New Year’s resolution. Since this refers to haibun, I will share it with you. I am a perpetual student of Japanese poetic forms, constantly studying, reading, delving, etc. If you go back to the first Haibun Monday for d’Verse, you will find the haibun evolved from Matsuo Basho’s travelogue he kept and the haiku interspersed among the prose portion of his travels. One of our Pub Tenders, Grace, has a blog titled, “Everyday Amazing”. That basically is the key to Basho’s travelogue. Being a true master of haiku, he took great pleasure in the small details, the amazing details, the seasonal details and used them in his travelogue. Basically, his original haibun could be equated to “prose haiku”. I am not a journal keeper but have resolved to keep a journal based on his original travelogue. “Oku no Hosomichi” (The Narrow Road to the Deep North).
I hope you will seek this out and read – luminous prose and elegant haiku. One does not have to be Japanese or speak Japanese to write wonderful haibun. In keeping this journal, I will be using one or more of these key terms. Of course, none of these are required but based on several writing guides, both educational and from Haibun/Haiku or Japanese Poetry societies, these will be helpful in guiding my future haibun and I hope will give you all a new way to think when writing your own haibun; more layers and nuance, so to speak. I hope these concepts will help you or give you a different perspective when writing haibun.
aware — the quality of certain objects to evoke longing, sadness, or immediate sympathy. The Japanese believed some objects, especially in nature, always possess aware. Writers should try to find the aware inherent in a scene they are observing for their haibun.
fueki — the sense of some eternal truth that poets strive to convey in their works. In English, this may be understood as a theme. The theme should look to separate what is simply observed from what is significant to a general audience, what message can be derived from the observation, and capture the latter element.
fuga— true art. The Japanese strive to elevate the content of their writings to an art form and incorporate the artistic elements introduced.
fugetsu — natural scenery, which the Japanese considered essential to any form of art. They strive to find the element of nature or the natural scenery around them to weave into their haibun accounts as the anchor for their message. If the scene being considered for the haibun does not contain natural scenery, writers often introduce fugetsu through metaphoric comparisons.
kaketoba — the use of words which have double meanings. In Japanese this is very easy because most nouns also have another meaning as a verb. Examples in English include leaves: to go away/foliage; blossom: to grow up/flower; fall: take a tumble/autumn. These pivot words can act as the kireji in the haiku or the haibun.
So today, I would like you all to write a haibun based on the photograph. Please use the compact haibun form for this: one or two tight paragraphs with one haiku, in fewer than 200 words. The photograph will be used in your post. I ask only that you make note of the caption below the photograph and also add “Used by permission”.
- Write a compact haibun and post it to your site/blog.
- Enter a link to your poem and your name by clicking Mr Linky below. You have 7 days to post after the link goes
- You will find links to other poets. Read and comment on other poet’s work. This is what makes this such a creative
community. - Keep in mind that others may have posted after you, so do check back on the linky page for details.
- Promote your work on social media. You may use the tag #dversepoets and we will share you as well.
- Have fun and keep warm!
Hurray, another Haibun Monday! Thanks, Toni, for the inspiration & the information..
Mary, I seem to have difficulties commenting on the blogspot site, not just your site. So in case my comment doesn’t appear – herewith: The very act of writing and putting it out there is an act of faith, a jump into the unknown. And yes, ‘offline’ I’ve often experienced little wonders that made me gasp with delight.
You are most welcome! Hello everyone. Welcome to the first Haibun Monday of 2016.
I have hot spiced cider and Sunset Bellinis if you want something other than beer. Belly up to the bar and let’s talk.
I was saddened to hear today of the death of David Bowie. so many years he was an influence on me and his art always amazed. He was a living persona poem and like the picture for the prompt, he was bright spot of color and warmth in an often cold and black and white world.
Yes, that was sad! And his new album was just released!
Good evening… hot cider sounds excellent. A true wonder in our cold climate… we had a day of thaw… and bicycling to work was quite a lot of work…
I admire your mode of transportation and the fortitude to do it. Alas, I am a spoiled person and like ease. But sometimes, driving in it can be just as bad, even if warmer from the heater in the car!
It is so quiet here, I think I shall put some Springsteen on the player and let it rip! Maybe sneak up and dance on the bar!!! 🙂 After having flu last week and being brain numbed and body beaten, it’s good to get out and roar a bit. 🙂
Maybe some spiders from Mars… 🙂
Oh yes and Modern Love and Let’s Dance. Rock the joint. Since I have all but the latest on CD and some pristine vinyl, I can definitely feel the hungry maw of the juke box. Let the Thin White Duke come in and strut a bit.
It’s very good to be back at haibun Monday! Hope everyone is enjoying 2016. 🙂
So far so good. Good to see you! Hope all is well with you as well.
It is and thanks for all you do!
My haibun from last week was used for today; as I had announced. Do we need to assume that all the Haibun days will be to a specific prompt?
Yes we will always give a prompt… the idea is to use a simple one like a picture or a quote… but I try to write mine well in advance… 🙂
No, nor can it be assumed will always be “open” Both Bjorn and I advised there would always be a twist for Haibun Monday. I also said it would be a photo prompt with a twist. OLN can always be used if one misses a prompt. Wen you read today’s post, you would have found the photo and the format along with other information about haibuns. maybe sometime there will be an open haibn and you can use this then..
I really thought folks were aware of me writing a haibun for last Monday, & using it for today. But I read your comment on my site, & it appears that I will need to submit it on OLN, or it will not be seen at all. These inflexible parameters seem a little rigid to me, but hey, I’ll be glad to write a new one to your photograph.
I will try to read and comment… Glenn…
Just write a second one… we can link up as many as we want.
You can link a second one. No one ever said Haibun Monday would be “open”. Just as we have prompts for MTB or poetics. Again, I do not know if you check replies or comments to your postings, but it was noted today would be a photo prompt with a twist. I will be happy to read your new post and comment.
This should have been handled much differently
What a lovely post, Toni – I’m glad you’ve given us your short and pretty name as I always get in a muddle with Kanzensakura.
Thank you Viv. I usually use the other but I feel more comfy here so. I was almost Tonette after that ’50’s permanent for little girls. I’m glad mama settled on Toni.
Hi, everybody. I am still on holiday and have missed many prompts including at least one haibun Monday. Keen to write some more; a form I am fond of exploring. However, I thought we had a month to do so, not seven days? Have I mis-remembered?
Oh yes, checking back I see I have. Wishful thinking, perhaps. But I have some long train journeys coming up this week, which will be great opportunity for writing. 🙂
Good to see you back. You and Ted have had some wonderful journeys. Yes, seven days for the link to stay live. Happy new year to you.
It’s good to see more coming back after the holidays.
Is haibun plural haibun or haibuns? Well I’ll enjoy reading them but I’ll be passing on this prompt today. I’ve really been enjoying the haibun form and I would not have known about it were it not for dverse. The next time I do one I definitely want to try and stick to the rules. I have about 7 in my blog but they are not entirely adherent to the structure. That will be a great challenge in the future. Baby steps for me.
Like haiku, no “S” for plural form. Not really rules either – just a reminder that this is an ancient Japanese form and some concepts to maybe include in haibun to enhance or deepen the writing. always try to include the nature setting as well as the aware. But again,not rules, just clarification of concepts. Basho truly wrote his prose as “haiku” or poetic prose. Not just straight prose – lovely and true writing.
I mean, I always try to incorporate at least one of the concepts.
I’ve been reading up on it. I was interested especially how the haibun came about.
Not really inspired today though.Maybe another time.
Well, the link is open for seven days, just in case! Under d’Schedule, you’ll see when the next haibun prompt will be. I hope that prompt will inspire you. They are always different and varied so who knows? Hope you have a good week.
Yeah the negativity stole my interest. There are others that wrote haibun that do not follow the prompt and you did not make those comments to them.
I am coming from -8 C here so I am ready for hot cider and hot chocolate ~ Thanks for the additional pointers in the haibun post Toni ~ I specially like the last kaketoba ~
Happy Monday and see you all tomorrow for Poetics ~
It is interesting concept, isn’t it? Brrrrr, stay warm. Enjoy the cider. Nice and warm.
Grace, I can’t seem to leave a comment on blogspot today: 3rd time lucky: see comment to Bodhirose’s beneath please. Petru
Thank you for letting me know ~ I have received your comment in my blog ~
Hi everyone, although I have sometimes responded to prompts I’ve never introduced here. My name is Suzanne Miller and I’m Australian – from down on the south coast. Writing haibun is passion of mine so you will probably see me linking here quite frequently. My blog is called Art and Life but the URL is http://artifactsandfictions.com/ – this sometimes causes confusion when I comment on BlogSpot or Blogger so I will try and remember to always explain who I am. Thank you for the very interesting haibun prompt today. I really enjoyed writing a response.
Glad to see you. Welcome! Haibun, haiku, and tanka are a passion of mine as well.
Thank you for the warm welcome.
Nice to see a fellow-Aussie!
Good to know I’m not alone. 🙂
I am away for a bit now but will return to read, comment, and respond to conversations.
OK, I had some fun, & wrote a haibun to the snow flower image. Sorry about my confusion. I don’t know how to remove my first link, but others do, so if that needs to be done, Bjorn or Mary or Grace, perhaps can delete the first link. Now out on the trail to read the other responses.
Thanks for the explication, Toni; yes, & I finally read all the other comments. Thanks to Bjorn for being understanding as well. So for now, I will have two links.
Cool. I wish we could do two poems for OLN. That way we would get the benefit of Blackstone and any other poem you want to link. I am glad you had fun after all.
Hi Everyone … just a cuppa tea for me today. News at oncologist wasn’t good for Ron. Cancer metastatic. Still he has more issues than that for the present. We see cardiologist Thursday…to check on atrial fib. So…I escaped to poetry. This morning wrote on an ongoing dance project poem, and decided this p.m. to try my hand at my first haibun. Let me know if this fulfills the definition. I’m open to all and any criticism. Looking forward to reading yours. Thanks for tending bar Toni!
I am sorry to hear this news from you Gay. I for one will be sending up positive throughts for you and Ron. It is always good to have something to escape to/in. I am looking forward to reading your haibun.
Gay, so sorry…I don’t know what to say beyond that. I do hope things are treatable for Ron.
I’m saddened to hear your news, Gay. I wish for the very best outcome for you and your family.
Thinking of you!
Got to write something before ending my day. It is rather late here. I promise to make the rounds tomorrow.
I just read it. Very nice! I often take breaks to read, comment, leave, and come back later. It is good that even if a link expires, one can still read and comment.
Finally got done with dinner (had a guest tonight) and was able to link up. Whew! I always enjoy learning more about the Japanese short forms, Toni. Thank you for sharing your vast knowledge; I appreciate it. It truly is an art form to be able to write them effectively. I am really trying!
We all try. I know I often struggle with them until I have the words and feelings right. Like your glosa which you did so wonderfully. It seemed like to came to you naturally yet I know you dedicated much thought and inspiration to it. I am so hard on myself, I am often dissatisfied with my work and often revise. Wish it wasn’t cold and was hot summer. I’d love to be able to walk down to the creek and dabble my feet and watch the clouds drift overhead. Or play in my own mud river! 🙂
I find that more than the words, I have to tap into the feelings I want to portray and if I focus on my heart, the words often follow and allow the meaning to emerge. You’re not alone in the being dissatisfied boat. That’s completely normal for artists of all types, right?
Just last night the weather turned “cold”…65 for our high today, high 40s tonight. We’re freezing down here! 🙂 Oh yeah, you could play in a mud river, haha!
Grace, can’t seem to comment on blogspot today so herewith my comment to your haibun please, in case it doesn’t appear on your site:
Beautiful, simply just Beautiful!
I am so thankful to all of you who have so far linked poems to this prompt. As usual, the quality and variety of poems astound me and humble me. Bless you all. I may post another in a few days. It just depends on if I can jump start my brain.
Don’t Forget! People will be posting all week so please please check back to read and comment.
After reading all your lovely haibun, I am actually hungry! Nest time I will eat first 😉
Early yesterday morn I linked back to the first explanation of haibun on this site….had never heard of the form and didn’t know what this was all about. I’ve always enjoyed haiku and tanka though. Thank you for the explanation here again….and especially for the terminology which was not included in that very first explanation. I especially enjoyed reading that first link to the poet who wrote a haibun from South India — so beautifully elegant and simplistic at the same time. So — I shall contemplate this beautiful photo and give it a shot. Do enjoy sidling up to the bar here — although I have a coffee cup in hand — but it is a beautiful rosebud, gold gilded cup and saucer from England this morning — feeling a bit elegant myself! 🙂
PS: since I just joined before the holidays, will repeat – I am originally from the midwest USA (Illinois and Iowa). In ’97 moved to Boston — right in the city in a high rise, although not too high — floor 7. Enjoy the city….and an annual 2 week trek to Provincetown on the very tip of Cape Cod. Spent last February in Bermuda — missed Boston’s 108 record inches of snow, although we came home to the mounds. Leave Jan 30 for all of February and March in Bermuda this year — it’s quite a muse!
On to more sips and picking up the pen….lillian
PS: Is there a way to “pick up the photo” and save it on my computer…so I can then insert it on my blog with the haibun – and photo credit of course. I can’t seem to get to it to save it?
Never mind. I figured it out! I actually like having the photo prompt! 🙂
As an idea, a suggestion: maybe a haibun without a photo prompt? To make sure the writing doesn’t rely on the image for explanation? A few contributors did this and it works really well.
Thank you for your inputs ~ I will share them with other pub tenders ~
APOLOGIES to Toni! After posting my haibun, I read others and so many referred to quince blossoms. Went back to the prompt and realize the photo is indeed of quince. I did not notice that — and my mind immediately went to cherry blossoms — googled them and they sure looked like the photo, plus you spoke of the Japanese form etc. So — my haibun refers to cherry blossoms! 🙂 😦
Toni! The words and phrases you offer are always so luscious, so poetic. Thank you for sharing them. I’m super intimidated by the haibun, but I am going to give it a try.
This is a fantastic post and I would like to reblog it if that’s ok with you … I to love Japanese forms and in this post I’ve seen an explanation of the form which is unique to any other I’ve read so far. I enjoy the idea of a “prose haiku” (I enjoy writing prose poetry 😉 ) … on the other hand you might find this link interesting too:
http://chevrefeuillescarpediem.blogspot.it/2016/01/carpe-diem-ask-jane-13-haibun.html
Wrote one on the train today, posted it just now – but still in transit over next little while. Meanwhile, at present stop, the luggage hasn’t come too and though it has been found and is being sent on, I am temporarily without chargers for the devices. With one thing and another, I apologuise that I shall be slow with reading and commenting.
Also apologise for typo.