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Cheers! Happy 2016, and welcome to The Bar. De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo) here. Pull up a stool, and let’s untangle a fun poetic form you won’t find much info about here in the Western world (at least not in English): the Ovillejo.
As with my introduction to most forms, I first learned about the Ovillejo from Robert Lee Brewer over at Poetic Asides.
The explanation below is offered from several online sources, which seem to be attributed most often to Rhina P. Espaillat:
…the “ovillejo,” an old Spanish verse form that means “tight little bundle.” “-ejo” is one of our blessed diminutives, and “ovillo” means “tangled ball of yarn.” The last line is a “redondilla,” a “little round” that collects all three of the short lines. The rhyme scheme is established, but the meter is at the poet’s discretion, although in Spanish the longer lines tend to be octosyllabic (8 syllables). Here goes:
OSTINATO
Evidence says I lie
But I–
Though all the world concur–
Prefer
One voice, and one alone:
My own.
The experts cluck and groan,
“No, no! It’s round, not flat!”
Their data second that.
But I prefer my own.
Ovillejos don’t have to be light verse, of course.
How cool is that? A poem that is literally a tight little bundle of tangled words that unravel themselves at the end? I like this explanation because I learn best by example, and it offers lots of room for interpretation with meter, etc.
A more strict explanation is offered over at Popular Poetry Forms:
The term, which derives from skein, refers to a tightly wound little 10-line verse that rolls out in measured segments, then goes back and picks up the short threads for the final unraveling. Iambic with a rhyme scheme of aa bb cc cddc. The first six lines alternate between tetrameter and dimeter; the next three are tetrameter, and the final line consists of L2, 4 & 6 all in a row.
Basically, broken down line by line, you’re looking at (aa bb cc cddc):
1. A longish line.
2. A shorter line rhyming with line 1, that will become the beginning of line 10.
3. A longish line.
4. A shorter line that rhymes with line 3, and becomes the middle of line 10.
5. A longish line.
6. A shorter line that rhymes with line 5, and becomes the end of line 10.
7. A longish line that rhymes with line 5.
8. A longish line.
9. A longish line that rhymes with line 8.
10. Line 10 combines lines 2, 4 and 6, verbatim, into a complete thought.
The earliest Ovillejos are thought to have been employed by Miguel de Cervantes, in Don Quixote. You can read a great explanation and translation here.
This Ovillejo about the Ovillejo is just too much fun:
The Ovillejo
by Rhina P. Espaillat
Admit you’re tempted by it:
Well, try it!
It’s full of kinks and quirks.
It works
by stealth: you steal a kiss
like this,
or steal a base—they’ll miss
the ball until you’ve stepped
to safety! It’s a plot kept
well: Try it; it works like this.
I’m no master, but here are a couple of mine, to get the ball (of yarn) rolling:
Full Disclosure It isn’t that I can’t trust you, just that even heaven up above never loved these dreams, so truth will fight me, right? Here in my arms wrapped tight, your heart concealed all is revealed: You just never loved me right.
Second Verse, Same as the First With its whole heart unfurled, the world (to hell, and back again) will spin a yarn, a web, ashamed; the same old tired tune, overplayed. By way of proof, here’s the full truth: The world will spin the same.
Still feeling tangled?
If you’re not feeling up to attempting this new form today, please do still join us at The Bar. Knit us a poem where something is hidden, or revealed. Write a poem about a bundle (of joy, of words, of twigs). Or write a poem that contains a tiny poem hidden within it.
You know the drill. Link your poem up below, and then barhop to see who all tried out (and mastered) this marvelous little form.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I really liked it… and I was still in the mood of Major Tom passing so I had some references to that… I might try a second. It was fun.
whimsygizmo said:
Glad you liked it, Sir! Thanks so much for kicking us off! Looking forward to reading some great poems!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I look so much to all of them as well.. the one’s I have read are great.
Mary said:
Cool form, De! Tricky but fun.
Grace said:
This is a tough form De ~ I was so conscious of abiding by the form & guidelines that my first one is a bit loopy and funny ~ Thanks for introducing us to this form ~
whimsygizmo said:
Grace, I loved yours. Hard to believe it’s a first attempt. It made me hungry – both for the fruit, and for more Ovillejos. Get thee back to thine pen. 😉
Grace said:
Sure 🙂
whimsygizmo said:
Hey, all! Just stopping in to say hello, and to have fun with this form! And be sure to get around to read a few fellow poets. That’s the beauty of short forms – they make for easy barhopping! 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I agree… so we can do more than one… 🙂 I love how those three short lines became something coherent…
whimsygizmo said:
Me, too. Like they’ve been hiding there, all along. My favorite Ovillejos to read are when the last line comes together differently than expected, even when you are familiar with the form, and think you know what’s coming (a verb that becomes a noun, a slight change in voice, etc.)
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ah.. I will see what I can do… and if you use slant rhymes it can look like a free verse almost.
whimsygizmo said:
YES! Exactly! I love when the form itself “hides.”
Pleasant Street said:
Wow I’ve never heard of this. Cool. I definitely want to learn it but it will take me a few days to decipher it so not sure I’ll have an offering this time. I get lost with the meter.
I’ve learned many more forms on dverse than I used to attempt
whimsygizmo said:
Don’t worry about the meter! Especially for your first one. That’s why I shared the more generic definition of the form, first, to ease up on the form’s demands. I look forward to reading your offering, when you get to playin’. 🙂
Pleasant Street said:
Thank you, and I know I will figure it out in time but I’m just not that smart to do that in a day ^_^
I look forward to reading
whimsygizmo said:
That’s how I feel about forms like the sestina…or just about anything with iambic pentameter (or talk of trochees and other monster-sounding poetic words.) Hard for me to wrap my brain around it all. It’s like adding science and math to creativity. 😉 You’ll do great, and I look forward to reading it!
Linda Kruschke said:
This little form looks like just too much fun to pass up! I’m thinking the key is to write the ending line first and go from there, but I may find that doesn’t work. Time will tell. I’ll be back later with one of my own and look forward to reading everyone else’s Ovillejo. Peace, Linda
whimsygizmo said:
Looking forward to it, Linda! I know poets who do it that way, and it seems like it would work well…but then for me, it didn’t. Ha! I love how much this form forces us to look at the poem’s own building blocks, and where they go.
whimsygizmo said:
PS: Please feel free to do a double shot today. 😉 As you can see, I already did. These shorter forms get addictive.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Ah.. I did a second one too… but now it’s bedtime… it seems like this form was quite challenging.
whimsygizmo said:
Loved your second, Bjorn.
I’m hoping anyone who doesn’t want to play with the form will follow the prompts in the last paragraph of the post, and write anyway. 😉 I have non-form days myself, where my brain’s just like, “um…nuh-uh.” 😉
Sanaa Rizvi said:
Hey everyone,
Hope you’re having a wonderful week so far, sharing my poem “Demure” hope you all like it 🙂
Thanks for hosting De 😀 this one’s for you!
Lots of love,
Sanaa
whimsygizmo said:
Thanks, Sanaa. I was touched by your piece.
C.J. Black said:
Reblogged this on Gave the sawdust a shake look what fell out..
whimsygizmo said:
Thanks, C.J. I hope you try the form, and link your poem.
C.J. Black said:
In time.
Misky said:
Great fun. Thanks, De!!
whimsygizmo said:
Thank YOU, Misky! I loved yours!
Truedessa said:
This looks like fun, I may give it a run..
whimsygizmo said:
I hope you do, Truedessa! Can’t wait to see what you come up with!
Grace said:
I finally figured this out…and got my second one ~ Thanks De for the wonderful examples ~
whimsygizmo said:
Love love LOVE it, Grace.
lillian said:
Hello De and all! Well…..as De can attest, reading my piece several times and offering helpful and encouraging critique(s) — notice the plural! I thought I had it….first time to do this form. Never heard of it before — but that’s not unusual since I just began writing poetry about a year ago — Feb 1, 2015 to be exact. So learning I am.
What I discovered with this Spanish form (ole!) is: 1) I think it’s really a sudoko in poetic disguise; and 2) do not attempt to write one of these in the evening, over a glass of wine. Think I could have followed the rhyme pattern and last line (lines 2+4+6) more accurately over my morning coffee! 🙂
Seriously, loved the challenge and am sooo thankful to De for the patience exhibited in helping me get to the correct form. I really was close – twice! What you see now meets the requirements….Sidling up to the bar again I will be!
Looking forward to reading others tomorrow morning!
lillian
whimsygizmo said:
Lillian, I loved your piece, all three times. 🙂 And yes, you now have a perfectly beautiful Ovillejo. And now I want a glass of wine. 😉
lillian said:
Must share: talking with my husband last night – I’d been telling him about this group — the poets’ pub, the open mike night etc and last night he turned around and said, you know, you should get the address and we can stop in the next time we’re in London. It would be fun to see the place! 😊 So I told him it was a virtual pub and he was really surprised – then said, well, it sounds like a lot of them get together somewhere so maybe we could figure out where to meet them!
So there you go! the poets’ pub lives!
whimsygizmo said:
Ha! I love this! Cheers, Lillian! (Wine’s okay at 7am, yes?) 😉
RJ Clarken said:
So, yeah. I took up your challenge and wrote a quick little poem in this sweet form. Thanks, De!
Bodhirose said:
I didn’t keep to the meter that was suggested for each line but it seems that this could be up to the author so I took advantage of that! 🙂 Tricky little form…I’m glad it wasn’t longer, whew! And not really sure if that last line makes sense–oh my… Thanks, De, I do like a challenge.
whimsygizmo said:
I like to ignore the meter “suggestions,” too, Bodhirose. 🙂
whimsygizmo said:
Ha! Have just been over to your piece. LOVE it.
Bodhirose said:
Haha! It was fun, De. Thank you!
C.C. said:
This looks super tricky….I think my brain needs unraveling now 😛 Really cool introduction, De!
whimsygizmo said:
Looking forward to seeing your take, Cacophony!
C.C. said:
I don’t know if there will be one, but thanks 🙂
lillian said:
Yep — I felt like I was doing a sudoku in poetry!
C.C. said:
That’s a great comparison 😛
RJ Clarken said:
Edit completed. (Blush!)
whimsygizmo said:
You rocked it, RJ! Knew you would!
RJ Clarken said:
Aw gee. Thanks!
Got an English degree
to be
a clever fount of thought.
(Or not.)
Applied myself. The key
to be
a writer. Don’t you see?
But, paid with ‘exposure’
I’m now in foreclosure.
To be or not to be.
whimsygizmo said:
Ha! LOVE it!
Add the double major of Communications, and I feel ya! 😉
whimsygizmo said:
Sumana, your site won’t let me comment, for some reason (can’t choose a profile). I love your piece. Here is what I said:
WOW! I’ve never seen such a nice long 10th line work before. Strong imagery here. Kudos!
Sumana Roy said:
This was fun to write De though I’m not sure if I got it correctly…as it’s quite late at night here I’ll visit everyone tomorrow morning 🙂
whimsygizmo said:
You did great. I love that some poets are playing with longer 10th lines. That is such a challenge, for me. I may try to do one more, and make a nice long 10th line, like that.
angieinspired said:
missed it by 47 minutes. sorry, here’s mine:
https://angieinspired.wordpress.com/2016/01/16/for-delaney-upon-entering-college/
whimsygizmo said:
Angie, as you know, I commented over yonder. So glad you linked up in the comments. Love your work, always.
C.J. Black said:
Take this with a pinch of salt.
For the sake of a poetry menu
Step up to the plate
This little secret I share with you
I’m a hopeless cook
Just can’t follow a cookery book.
Complicated menus I’ll always give a miss
Omitting this would be quite remiss
Of me
Not to bring this to your attention
Step up to the plate, I am a hopeless cook omitting this would be quite remiss.
C. J. Black©β
http://www.chrisblack2012.com
As the saying goes God loves a trier – possibly got this horribly wrong but worth giving it a shot.
whimsygizmo said:
A fine try, Chris, and a fun message. I, too, am a hopeless cook. 😉
You’d need to revisit the rhyming rules (aa bb cc cddc) to get this just right for an Ovillejo, but this made me smile big.
C.J. Black said:
Thank you – smile is good, big smile is very good.
whimsygizmo said:
Nan Mykel, your link doesn’t work properly, and our Linky has expired, but I found you! 🙂
Here’s the proper link:
And I can’t figure out how to comment on your site. I love this fun little piece. So glad you shared with us! Thank you!
Bodhirose said:
I too was unable to comment on Nan’s work. Nan, if you see this, I enjoyed it!
Gayle ~