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Hello, intrepid poets. De Jackson here, aka WhimsyGizmo. In April, many of us dig in our inky heels and write a poem a day, all month long. You might still be recovering from that. (I know I am!) And since it’s also Cinco de Mayo today, I think it’s time for a fun, fairly forgiving form: the Golden Shovel. This form is in the tradition of the cento, or erasure, but with a lot more flexibility.
Here are the rules, in a nutshell:
– Take a line (or lines) from a poem you admire.
– Use each word in the line(s) as an END word in your poem.
– Keep the words from the original line in order. When finished, you will be able to read down the right margin, and have the original chosen line intact.
– Give credit to the poet who wrote the line(s). You may also want to include a link to the original poem, so we can see your inspiration.
– The new poem does not have to be about the same subject matter, but it can be in a similar vein, if you choose. Or not.
For example, if you choose a line with 6 words, your poem will be 6 lines long. If you pull a whole stanza with 22 words, your poem would be 22 lines long. Etc. There are no rules for meter, syllable count, etc. You can place two words per line, or as many as you want, so long as the last word of each line stays true to the original inspiration.
The first Golden Shovel was written by Terrance Hayes, using Gwendolyn Brooks’ poem, We Real Cool. I’m not sure of copyright, so I’ll need to send you over here to read it: The Golden Shovel. As you’ll see, Hayes uses Brooks’ entire poem as a guide, twice, to create a longer poem.
Here’s a quick example, using Carl Sandburg’s first line from Fog:
Original line: The fog comes on little cat feet.
Golden Shovel poem:
Writing in Clouds of Gray
(after Sandburg)
Oh, how the
fugue of fog
tilts her. She comes
to the page on
timid fingers, little
curlicue cat
metered feet.
(I’ve used bold here so you can trace the path of the original poem. I wouldn’t leave it that way to post it, as I find it distracting to reading a new piece.)
I wrote a much longer one this past month, based on Brooks’ We Real Cool.
You can find a host of other examples here, submitted by poets at Poetic Asides when Robert Lee Brewer introduced the form awhile back.
Need to find a poem to use? Try this list of most popular famous poems.
Or use one of these lines:
since feeling is first, who pays any attention (E.E. Cummings)
The world is too much with us; late and soon (Wordsworth)
We wear the mask that grins and lies (Paul Lawrence Dunbar)
Let us go then, you and I (T.S. Eliot)
My candle burns at both ends (Edna St. Vincent Millay)
What happens to a dream deferred (Langston Hughes)
Often rebuked, yet always back returning (Emily Bronte)
or use this whole poem, from Basho:
Old pond –
A frog leaps in –
Water’s sound.
You could even use a line from a favorite song. (Songs are, after all, poetry put to music.)
And if you want to give it a Cinco de Mayo twist, here’s a list of Famous Mexican poets from Poetry Soup.
Are you diggin’ it?
Here’s what to do:
– Create your Golden Shovel poem and post it on your blog. Don’t forget to credit the original poet/poem that inspired your piece.
– Click on Mr. Linky and enter your name; copy the URL of your poem from your blog and enter it in the space provided, then click ENTER.
– Visit the links for other poets! Read. Comment. Enjoy each other. Poetry is all about inspiration and the exchange of ideas.
– Promote the poems you like on the social media of your choice.
– Please link back to this dVerse post from your site.
– Have fun!
– Leave us a comment below or join in the discussion:
Do you have a favorite Mexican poet? What are your Cinco de Mayo traditions?
If you’re from that part of the world, tell us about the celebration.
Helloooo! Welcome to the Bar, where I am pouring generous mojitos and margaritas for Cinco de Mayo. Hope you are all digging into some of your favorite poems to find a great line to get you started! I can’t wait to read your poems.
I will have some margerithas.. But it’s also Acension day today… And here in Sweden that’s a holiday.
I loved the prompt. A wonderful way to write something really long.. I used 4 lines from Pablo Neruda’s sonnet 17. One of my all time favorite poem.
And Pablo Neruda is of course not Mexican, but from Chile. Still he wrote in Spanish.
Bjorn, I have read yours and will be back for multiple reads. I LOVE that the Golden Shovel can produce a short poem, a long poem, and everything in between. Yours is a stunner.
Intrepid poets…haha yes, that be us! I love that poem “We Real Cool”, De, thanks for sharing that one. I came upon my inspiration by being on PBS and then searching Cinco de Mayo and then the perfect poem popped up! I love when that happens… Thanks for the fun today, De.
Thank YOU, Gayle. Your piece is wonderful, and a perfect choice for today.
I had to do a second with a Mexican Poet. A short little piece inspired by Octavio Paz…
Heading over now, B. I plan to peruse the awesome Mexican poets, as well, and do a second piece.
I went with Gary Soto.
What a fun form! I used a poem that I memorized as part of a Dramatic Interpretation speech I did for speech competitions in high school. It’s always been a favorite. I’ll be back later to see what others have posted. Right now I have to get back to work. 😦
Linda, I memorized that one once upon a time, as well. LOVED your piece!
I may have to write another with one of the other poems I memorized for speech competitions: Abou Ben Adhem. But that’s a much longer poem and I don’t know if I could pick just a line or two. We’ll see.
That’s the beauty of the form. You can pick as much of the poem as you like, as inspiration, and right margin fodder. 🙂
I really enjoyed this form, De! It wasn’t easy, but it was fun. Thank you.
Mary, I’m so happy to see you! Loved your poem.
Great to see you!
Mary, I just tried to leave you a comment but it appears to be staying in preview mode and will not post so will leave my thoughts here for you:
It’s always a treat to see a poem linked up from you, Mary…you never disappoint. I love the idea of looking at life through dreams…in all their forms. Lovely choice of inspiration and excellent work!
Gayle ~
I have some catching up to do. Two golden shovel poems after two of my favorite poets: Yehuda Amichai and Pablo Neruda. There’s a variation to the Golden Shovel, using the key words to begin each line.
Yes, I remember that variation, Walt. I didn’t want to complicate things too much. 😉
Great prompt. I’m tempted with some lines from a favorite of mine by Tennyson…..but soooo long. And then I keeping thinking of an old country song, You and Me Are Goin’ Fishin’ Tonight….channeling my Southern roots. Still thinking on this. So much potential. Who knows what will pop out of my wombat brain.
Anything poetic works, Toni…long or short. That’s the fun of the form!
Thanks for the fun form to try, De! I am ‘digging’ it. 🙂 … Hope everyone is well, and I wish you all a great weekend!
Good to see you! Loved your piece.
Very fun form and the poems you wrote as an example are so good, De. I am way behind in reading Quadrilles but will do my best to catch up with everything. What a great week for prompts.
Thank you, Victoria. I’m so glad you had time to play today!
Hey everyone,
This was a fun but challenging form 😀 sharing my poem “The Love Song” hope you guys like it.
Thank you for the lovely opportunity De, this one’s for you 🙂
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thank YOU, Sanaa. It was fun to see a departure from your usual form, but with all the beauty and language of your signature style intact. 🙂
You’re most welcome De ❤ ❤
If anybody’s feeling daunted or stuck, I’m gonna share what unlocked the form for me when I learned about it a few years ago. I simply started writing the line I wanted to use vertically:
we
wear
the
mask
that
grins
and
lies
…and started building from there (typing the new words in front of those words). I still do this, and it works very well for me. You’ll find what works for you. I am DIGGING everybody’s golden shovels!
Great help! Now, help me decide on the poem! I’ve been dithering over a couple. Decisions decisions…
You will pick something fabulous and do amazing things with it. I can’t wait.
This was a great help to me!
Hello all — early to post, late to the bar. My internet has been going in and out. We are about to have an enchilada dinner to celebrate cinco de mayo 🙂 I shall return tomorrow morning, with hot coffee in hand, to read everyone’s take on this prompt. I love doing my reading in the morning when I’m fresh, it’s quiet, and the sun is starting to rise (well — another grey day predicted tomorrow – but one can hope).
This was an interesting form, De. I’d been reading the City Lights Pocket Poets Anthology and opened it to the first page and Ferlinghetti’s first line hit me. Took me to the dark side — I’ve been writing so many happy pieces lately that the words tumbling out kind of surprised me.
So — will be ready for reading in the AM — gracias, De! 🙂
I will see if I can scare up some keoke coffee for us, Lillian. 😉
Sipping my first cup and ready to enjoy my morning reading!
Homemade vanilla latte in hand (6:30am here). Joining you in reading…
I am looking forward to reading. Not only the created poems but learning about the writers by what they chose to use. Cinco de Mayo isn’t one of the holidays on my do list so it has been quiet around here. Cold, rainy – bah humbug. I want it to dry out and warm up so I can celebrate setting out the veggie plants in my garden. but this was a fun form to do. I may do another. De, your examples were perfect!!!
Do as many as you like! I shall enjoy them all!
Off to make (and enjoy) carne aside. Back soon to catch back up on reading. Keep it up! LOVING everybody’s shovels. 🙂
Is it cheating to not use consecutive lines? To use two lines separated from each other by a few lines but who are melded together by their sentiments and context?
Use what you like. As far as I have read, there are no rules, other to use the words from the line as your last words for each of your lines, and to credit the poet you are using as inspiration. 😉
Groovy!
I’m going to go ahead. If it breaks the rules, let me know and I will delete my link.
Loved it, Toni. The lines go so well together, I would never have known the difference.
I forged ahead and now am glad I did. Poetic license, I guess. I love the last four lines in their entirety but just didn’t want to write such a long long poem.
Another new form for me! Its name is fun. My poem, not so much.
Heading over soon this morning, Patti.
Hello De…just wanted you to know I am “diggin” this. Hope to join in tomorrow. Dealing with a racoon issue in my attic!
Oh ugh! Those little masked critters can wreak real havoc if they get inside! 😳
Yikes! Little bandit! Heading your way in a little bit, Mish. It’s early here. I’m brewing the coffee. 😉
I’ve just got here and am really excited by this form. I couldn’t decide on a poet, let alone a poem! One of my favourite poets, and I have so many, is the l ate Seamus Heaney. My husband gave me a copy of Heaney’s New Selected Poems for Christmas, so I have just been scanning through it for inspiration and came to the conclusion that I could be writing golden shovels all day. But then I had a light bulb moment – why don’t I start with ‘Digging’, one of Heaney’s most famous poems, and tale it from there!
How PERFECT, Kim! Heading your way as soon as I pour my coffee. 🙂
Something to get my teeth into, thank you. Coincidentally, I read a prompt just now for a similar form at For http://chevrefeuillescarpediem.blogspot.fr/p/troiku-new-form-of-haiku.html, so I shall have a go at both later today.
Fun, Viv! I’ll have to check that one out, too! Thank you!
Such an intriguing prompt. This one had my journey wandering into rather odd directions.
Good morning, Gemma! Heading your way soon! 🙂
Gotta get the kids off to school this morning. Pouring a big round of drinks for you afternoon other-side-of-the-world folks, coffee for the rest of us. LOVING everybody’s golden shovels. Keep ’em comin’. I’ll be back for more in a bit!
There’s a gentle rain falling here, this morning. Would be a perfect writing day, if Life wasn’t a bully. 😉
Okay, it’s after 3 here in Southern Nevada, and it’s 5 o’clock somewhere, so I’m pouring drinks again. Sangria, anyone?
I’m late to the bar. Anyone still pouring? 🙂 It’s been a nightmare of a week . . . so I am looking forward to diving into some good (golden shovel) reading this weekend!
Awesome drinks still on tap! 🙂 Welcome!
I just finished my poem that I started Friday (because the link was still open) and it closed before I could list it!! Please link me up even though I was last and late?
I had to put my beloved cat down yesterday and it delayed me but I wanted to finish what I started. Even if you can’t I look forward to reading during the week. Here’s the link to my Golden Shovel poem: https://capriciouspoet.wordpress.com/2016/05/07/so-much-has-fallen/
I enjoyed learning this form and some of the others I’ve learned here.
Hugs! Bekkie
Hey, gang, I hope you will all make it over to Bekkie’s link to read her poem:
https://capriciouspoet.wordpress.com/2016/05/07/so-much-has-fallen/
{I do not know how to re-open Mr. Linky to add it.}
Thank you! And thank you for all of your beautiful Golden Shovels.
de ❤
Oh my. This was harder than it looks! Anyway, I DID finally post a golden shovel poem on my blog (better late than never…? ) with a link to this site, and I’m hoping you can get there from here… maybe. Now, to read and see how others made out with this form. 😉
OK… I think this link will get you over to my blog posting (instead of the fb post)… maybe… or not.
Here’s the link to Pamela’s poem:
http://wanponpopix.blogspot.com/2016/05/inimitable-trees.html
Be sure to swing by and read hers, and Bekkie’s, if you can! 🙂