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Hello everyone! It is Haibun Monday – again! For those of you in the US, I hope you had a grand Thanksgiving. Indeed, we should all be grateful, everyday, for everything with which we are blessed and given. Whether in the US or Sweden or Australia, we should all be thankful.
That being said, today is a Free For All…meaning, you pick the subject upon which you wish to write. There are rules of course – (1) The haibun must be non-fiction (2) The occurance must have actually happened to you (3) You are to write one to two tight paragraphs and (4) End it with a season based haiku.
I would like to share with you a couple of Basho’s haibun from his most famous trip,Oku no Hosomichi (奥の細道, The Narrow Road to the Deep North or The Narrow Road to the Interior. In one of the haibun, you will note that there is a paragraph and haiku and then more writing and a haiku. You will also note that the translation of the haiku goes to four or more lines in English. You will need to write the haiku in classic form of three lines but you can do a paragraph and haiku and another paragraph and haiku to end it. Enjoy!
Station 8 – Unganji
There was a Zen temple called Unganji in this province. The priest Buccho used to live in isolation in the mountains behind the temple. He once told me that he had written the following poem on the rock of his hermitage with the charcoal he had made from pine.
This grassy hermitage,
Hardly any more
Than five feet square,
I would gladly quit
But for the rain.
A group of young people accompanied me to the temple. they talked so cheerfully along the way that I reached it before I knew it. The temple was situated on the side of a mountain completely covered with dark cedars and pines. A narrow road trailed up the valley, between banks of dripping moss, leading us to the gate of the temple across a bridge. The air was still cold, though it was April.
I went behind the temple to see the remains of the priest Buccho’s hermitage. It was a tiny hut propped against the base of a huge rock. I felt as if I was in the presence of the Priest Genmyo’s cell or the Priest Houn’s retreat. I hung on a wooden pillar of the cottage the following poem which I wrote impromptu.
Even the woodpeckers
Have left it untouched,
This tiny cottage
In a summer grove
Crossing the River Natori, I entered the city of Sendai on May the fourth, the day we customarily throw fresh leaves of iris on the roof and pray for good health. I found an inn, and decided to stay there for several days. There was in this city a painter named Kaemon. I made special efforts to meet him, for he was reputed to be a man with a truly artistic mind. One day he took me to various places of interest which I might have missed but for his assistance. We first went to the plain of Miyagino, where fields of bush-clover were waiting to blossom in autumn. The hills of Tamada, Yokono, and Tsutsuji-ga-oka were covered with white rhododendrons in bloom. Then we went into the dark pine woods called Konoshita where even the beams of the sun could not penetrate. This darkest spot on the earth had often been the subject of poetry because of its dewiness – for example, one poet says that his lord needs an umbrella to protect him from the drops of dew when he enters it. We also stopped at the shrines of Yakushido and Tenjin on our way home. When the time came for us to say good-bye, this painter gave me his own drawings of Matsushima and Shiogama and two pairs of straw sandals with laces dyed in the deep blue of the iris. In this last appears most clearly perhaps the true artistic nature of this man.
It looks as if
Iris flowers had bloomed
On my feet —
Sandals laced in blue
So! If you have not played with us before at dVerse Poets Pub or, if you have, here are the rest of the rules:
If you are new to dVerse, here is how it works:
- Write a haibun and copy and paste the direct link to your poem into Mr.Linky.
- Drop into the pub, take a seat, relax, say hello.
- Visit other poets and comment on their work. Return again later in the week to read more.
About Toni Spencer (kanzensakura, hayesspencer) has been reading, writing, and studying Japanese poetic forms for 40+ years and is still learning.
Hello, have a wonderful evening… here we have another (small) dash of snow… but that did not prevent me from looking back on a warmer October.
No snow here but drizzles of cold rain.
We had a about a half inch yesterday, and flurries today.
Winter seems to have come evertwhere but here. I long for snow!
Love me a bit of Basho. Thanks for the lovely prompt, snippets of the masters work and wonderful inspiration to write with. I would like to submit something I wrote already that was inspsired by my reading Basho but I will attempt a new piece first and maybe drop the older one in as a second.
I look forward to read both Paul…. inspiring to write about whatever you feel like.
I am so pleased you enjoy Basho. About 20 years ago on one of my trips to Japan, i recreated his trip. It was amazing.
hello everyone. Sorry to be late…a crisis with my mom, settled. Thank you Bjorn for stepping in.
Thanks for the Free for All, Toni! The Haibun is still awkward for me to write, but I enjoy trying them and of course reading them all! 🙂
You are most welcome. I thought a subject of any kind may open it up a bit. You know, years ago when I first began to write haibun, I too found it awkward to write. But I one day discovered that if I wrote a free verse poem and then went back and removed the line breaks from the various lines, it made it easier. I just inserted appropriate puncutation and then the haiku, and it began to flow from there. You can’t think of the prose as prose, but rather, poetry written in a block instead of lines. I think that helps a lot.
Thsnk you!
For those needing assistance or review in writing classic haiku, you can follow this link: https://dversepoets.com/2015/11/16/japanese-poetry-forms-twins/
Hi Toni…Thanks for the freedom for this week’s haibun, also for sharing Basho’s work with us. I was intrigued by the dark woods of Konoshita in the second one.
Just stopped by to say hello. Still working on mine. The American Thanksgiving kept me busy, but I’m looking forward to reading an eclectic mix of haibun. 🙂
Hi Mish! I guess us Americans are keeping you busy! Glad you are enjoying the prompt and Basho’s haibun. I visited there about 20 years ago on a recreation of his trip. It is still intriguing.
Haha…yes you Americans really are…but I feel blessed to have a connection to two different countries. 🙂
And many times, we forget we really are two different countries! I worked with a lot of engineers from Canada and frequently, they had a hard time differentiating between the two, esp. when they had worked in the US for several years.
Thank you for hosting Toni and for sharing the beautiful haibun by Basho :o) I have created a haibun by retracing my steps in finding the silence.
That sounds lovely. Finding the silence…I like that.
Mighty quiet here at the Pub. I guess everyone is working or, if on the other side of the ocean, getting ready for bed! Well, I have plenty of hot spiced cider, hot cocoa, and mulled wine here at the bar. Also some old fashioned Southern teacakes. So enjoy!
About time to turn in for me, but time enough to turn out a haibun. Thank you all for your words, be they the prompts, poems, or comments. So honored to be here among you.
Thanks for the free topic, Toni, as I’m not long back from choir. We had a performance at the weekend and there are several more coming up before Christmas – exciting! – so I had an idea up my sleeve for just such an occasion! I’ll be turning in soon, too. So I’ll post, say goodnight and come back to read more in the morning.
Great! Always happy when you post and now I am intrigued by your haibun!
Hello folks! Hello Toni! I am so grateful for what you posted on Basho. I have only been reading him for about 4 years….but he is certainly someone to learn from. How marvelous you retraced Basho’s footsteps! Wow. I live for this Haibun Monday, which is funny because I have only been writing them for about 2 months and was encouraged here at dverse to do so. I love them! They can be a challenge. Mine is called “Weather Report”….started out something else and ended up that!
Jane, I am so happy to hear this and that we at dVerse have encouraged you. Your haibun sounds intriguing.
It is getting close to dinner time here so I will log off for a bit but come back later to read and comment. You all take care!
I’ve added a haibun, the first one I’ve ever written.
Great! I’m looking forward to reading it.
Sorry I am late responding to this. I am glad this was your first haibun and hope there will be many more to come as I enjoyed yours immensely!
So enjoy your instructions, Toni. I’ll visit tomorrow, as soon as I can.
Thank you. One of my favorite forms of poetry!
One of mine as well!
Hey everyone,
Hope you guys are having an amazing day so far 😀 sharing my poem “Cloudburst” (something that occurred late last night) ❤️thank you Toni for the wonderful opportunity, hope you like it! 💝
Lots of love,
Sanaa
I always like your writing Sanaa! 🙂
Likewise ❤️
I have added a second contribution in the voice of Eivor, he gets to the point more quickly than I usually do :o)
I shall be sure to read. I do not often read or comment on second or third submissions because to be honest, I don’t have the time. But since it is written by Eivor, I shall be sure to read. I love me some Canine Literature.
Eivor says a warm thank you and sends you his love 💖🐾🐾
🙂