Happy New Year 2017 poets! I’m wishing you all peace, prosperity and all things good in the coming year. This is Gayle of Bodhirose’s Blog and I’m pleased to be able to offer the first Form-For-All of the new year.
Several of my family members (8 of us!) decided to ring in the new year in Savannah, Georgia. We’ve never gone away at this time of year and certainly not with so many of us. But we love Savannah and decided to rent a beautiful home in the hub of the city. I’ll have to let you know how it went at another date since I’m writing this before our trek takes place.
But getting back to my task at hand, today I’ll be telling you about the Chōka. The Choka or Long Poem is believed to be the most intricate of Japanese poetry and was used to tell a story; many were epic with over 100 lines. This form was popular between the 1st and 13th centuries, the earliest example was discovered in the 1st century and described a battle. It was 149 lines long. The Choka had a tradition of being recited in a high-pitched voice.
This form is based on a series of Katauta joined together. The Katauta is considered the basic unit of Japanese poetry using either the 17 (5-7-5) unit onji or the 19 (5-7-7) unit onji. In Western terms an onji is what we call a syllable. Many of us are familiar with these particular onji as we have used them in writing haiku, tanka and sedoka.
The Choka is an unrhymed poem alternating five and seven syllables that ends with an extra seven syllable line. You can use the 17 or 19 onji (syllable) style. It can be any number of lines that you choose.
When delving into Japanese forms and doing research, the information can be quite involved and perhaps daunting so I’ve chosen to keep it simple as an introduction to our group of poets who perhaps haven’t been inducted into the deep and meaningful culture that is Japanese poetry and all it entails.
Vintage Art; publicdomainpictures.net
Tale of Honor by Judi Van Gorder at Poetry Magnum Opus
Kilimanjaro
fresh snow crunches under foot
narrow mountain path
traveled by lone samurai
seeker of vengeance
returned from war, tracks his prey
young brother’s killers…
at rise of the waning moon
sneak thieves strike village
novice boy challenged jackals
dagger drawn thrust low
youngster’s entrails ripped and spilled
cowards run to hills
with sun high in winter sky
sibling soldier stalks
prowling panther poised to kill
disciplined, steadfast
trained warrior against pack
jackals ring soldier
jab, snap, samurai honor
blood on Kilimanjaro
And one of my own:
The River’s Path; a Choka by Gayle Walters Rose
with eyes gently closed
third eye streaming energy
I feel the river
my mind loose and free, follows
its path, moves downstream
flow is effortless and calm
eddy of water
catches twigs, leaves and debris
momentarily
trapped but not knowing struggle
organically
they dislodge and float onward
all moves as it should
no tension is inherent
nothing impedes its
progress, even whilst frozen
and its reflection opaque
So today our prompt is to tell a story in the Choka poetic tradition. I believe that all topics are fair game, although I found that many were accounts that commemorated public events; so share a tale with us and channel the historical and significant storytelling culture of the Japanese.
Here is how to participate in the prompt:
- Write your poem.
- Click on Mr. Linky and enter your name where indicated, copy the URL of your poem and enter it into the space provided and then click “Enter.”
- There you will find links to all the other poets. Others will join during the next 48 hours so check back for more reading.
- After linking, leave a comment or join in with our discussions. We love to hear from you and get to know you better.
- Read and comment on other poet’s work, we all come here to have our poems read and to be acknowledged.
- Promote the poetry that you like on the social media of your choice.
- Please link back to dVerse from your site.
- Enjoy and have fun!
Good afternoon, poets, and Happy New Year to everyone. It’s nice to be back after our break and after my few days trip to Savannah with family. I look forward to reading your choka and what stories you have spun for us all to enjoy.
Gayle ~
Hi there! Had never heard of this form…very interesting to work with. Has been delightful to see the return of folks to the bar. Rather a grey day here — shall go light our Christmas tree and brighten things up! 🌲😊 Look forward to reading these – they should be choka full of good words 😊
Hi Lillian! I have our Christmas tree lit up today as well even though it’s bright and warm here. I just love the lights… I also loved your meaningful choka; thank you for joining in today.
I spent a few days in Savannah a few years ago visiting the daughter of some friends of ours… she studied at SCAD at the time, but is now back in Sweden. A fantastic city, and we got a great tour of the town.
Savannah is such a great city with much historical meaning. Our nephew’s girlfriend is a graduate of SCAD and spent four years there as she studied. She was our guide through the city during our stay. We took a carriage ride tour around downtown one evening…very informative and relaxing.
Was she on the swim team? in that case they might know each other.
No, she was not on the swim team.
The River’s Path: beautiful, effortlessly flowing ,realization of the flow of the Tao.
The Tao te Ching is my inspiration…thank you, Bob!
Elegantly written in its simplicity. No need for adornment–it’s the Tao
Many thanks for your generous compliment! The wisdom of the Tao seems to translate well to the Japanese forms where you say more with less words.
Good evening Gayle and all poets currently at the bar on this chilly January evening. Thank you to Gayle for the interesting background to the Choka and for two fabulous examples. I’m interested to see the poems that are produced this evening – I’m sure we’ll read some beauties.
Ha… chilly indeed… it’s freezing outside right now. I think it has dropped below -10 C now. Winter is really here.
Bjorn, it’s much too cold there! But something tells me that you’ll soon be enjoying your skating activities. I do enjoy your videos!
Ha.. currently the ice will be covered in snow I fear… I just read the thermometer it has dropped to -15 C
Yikes, I couldn’t stand it!
I think I prefer your weather to Gayle’s – she says they’ve had temperatures in the low 80s!
Good evening, Kim, nice to see you. No chill here, it’s been in the low 80’s F this week but we did feel some chill in Savannah. We did a lot of walking so the lower temperatures made it more comfortable for that.
I can’t remember the last time we had temperatures in the low 80s, even in the summer. I think I’d melt!
I guess you would melt, Kim, if you aren’t used to it. We’re having an especially warm winter but it’s not over yet so we’ll see if the temperatures get colder for us.
Good evening on the 12th night… tomorrow is a holiday in Sweden… so this evening was a bit different for me compared to any ordinary Thursday… Writing Chōka has always seemed like a huge challenge to me… but I did my best.
What holiday?
I think in English it’s called Epiphany… 🙂 we are the most secular christian countries in the world.
Ah yes….epiphany – if I remember correctly our grandson was baptized on an epiphany Sunday – glorious red balloons in the church and joyful vestments.
Enjoy your holiday tomorrow, Bjorn. Your best usually means that you did a superb job. Will be over shortly to read your choka.
Hello, everyone, and Happy New Year!~ yes, Epiphany….January 6th. Thank you, Gayle for hosting this marvelous poetry form. I used to write a lot of choka about 10 years ago, but got out of practice. I had almost forgotten this wonderful form. We are expecting SNOW here tomorrow night, so today was a whirlwind of grocery shopping, stopping up drafts, and generally preparing the house and property for the 4 inches we are expected to get here in Atlanta. But this is the earliest I have ever seen for snow in the new year. I am so excited!!! The cats and dogs seem to know something is different in the air. A stocked woodstove, a can of Swiss Miss and an anthology of Robert Frost is ready for tomorrow!
You sound like you are prepared in the best of ways Jane… of course 4 inch of snow is less of a stand-still here… but I can imagine how it is. Stay in, stay warm
Happy New Year, Jane! Sounds like you have things well under control as you await your snowfall. I guess some of that cold is coming our way as we’re going to be dipping into the low 50s at night this weekend. Brrr… I’m glad you enjoyed revisiting the choka and I enjoyed your ghostly offering very much.
Thank you, Gayle. I’m originally a Northerner….and I MISS the snow, even though I have been south for almost 50 years. So it’s a big thing for me. And yes, the cold is going to be dipping your way, but not to 27 degrees which is what we are expecting Friday night. low 50s would be a heat wave! LOL! It’s plumb funny how a couple of mere inches will stop this city in its tracks for days! I;m looking for our old Red Flyers though I probably will break a hip! Thank you for the choka challenge. Have more of these, please!
I, however; do not miss the snow. I lived in the Boston area for a few years and the snow and wind just about did me in although I loved the city and how much fun it was to explore. I’ve heard about how the more southern states come to a halt when it snows a couple of inches. Okay, if you find your Red Flyers be careful of all your bones not just your hips! I’m so happy you liked this challenge…thank you.
“The Choka had a tradition of being recited in a high-pitched voice.”
That made me smile. 🙂
Yes, I imagined the sound of that too…not so gentle on the ears, right?
I am jealous of you with the snow. We had rain all day yesterday…boo! I love snow — it makes the city a bit magical. I’ll take snow any day but January 28th — that’s when we leave for Bermuda again 🙂
Choka choka … time for hot choka with marshmallows please 🙂
Where are my manners? Hot choka coming up…with marshmallows of course! 🙂
Okay, my friends, I’m heading to the kitchen to prepare some dinner and will return afterwards to continue my reading and greeting. Thanks to all for your wonderful poetry today!
Hello Gayle ~ Finally home and ready to hit the poetry trail ~ I have not tried my hand in choka yet, so it was fun trying it out for the first time ~
Snow coming on, and we are below 0 C…very cold. Thanks for hosting ~
Hi Grace, your choka was very touching, a beautiful story of hearts shared. Stay warm, I can’t even imagine what that temperature feels like! You’re welcome.
Thank you for the prmpt gayle. interesting form. Your go at it is very good.
-Eric
You’re very welcome, Eric, it is an interesting form, long instead of the usual short forms of the Japanese that we’re more familiar with. And thank you for the compliment, I appreciate that!
hello Gayle and pub folks, Happy new year to you. 🙂
Hello Imelda and Happy New Year to you! So nice to see you. 🙂
Signing off for the evening and will be back here tomorrow afternoon after my time with Miss Mira. Have a good night everyone.
I haven’t tried this form before. Thanks for the introduction!
You’re very welcome and I hope you give it a try!
It’s so hot here I fled indoors from working in the garden at 11am. Think I’ll try my hand at the Choka. The bit about the high-pitched voice got me …
Hi Petru…we’ve had that same hot weather here although it’s supposed to cool down a bit this weekend. Yeah, that high-pitched voice thing got me too. 🙂 Happy New Year to you!
Gayle and petrujviljoen, where are you? And how hot is it?
Eric, I live in Sebastian, Florida USA. It’s a small town on the eastern coast of south Florida. I live minutes from the Indian River and the Atlantic Ocean. It’s been very warm this winter…yes in the low 80s F! Where do you live?
Thanks gayle, im in New jersey, united states. It seems too small to specify further, yet there are significant distinctions among the locals. I’m in the woods near Clinton.
Nice to find out where some of our members live, Eric. So I’m sure that New Jersey gets it’s share of snowstorms during the winter months…stay safe!
I believe we tried this form awhile ago, but I would have to check. I am late and will be late posting tomorrow. Thank you, Gayle.
Hi Kathy, in 2011 Lady Nyo (Jane Kohut-Bartels) presented a piece that included the choka. When it’s been so long and we have new members that haven’t been exposed to the form, we have been known to revisit them. And it’s fun to give them another go, right? I look forward to reading your choka tomorrow, and you’re welcome!
Thank you for introducing me to the Choka Gayle, I had not come across this form before and I love what you have written here. I have added my link and will swing by later to read when we are back from the dog walk. The weather is mild here today and the snows have melted again.
You’re most welcome, Xenia. I’m just done with watching the granddaughter for the day and am looking forward to reading your choka. I’m sure you and the dogs will enjoy the milder weather for your walks.
Wow…this is a superb challenge and one I feel genuinely exited to take on….and another one I am late to!!!
I’ll give it my best over the next 48 hours and continue with comment catching up on the previous two prompts.
Hey, Paul, very glad that you’re excited by this form. I love the choka and most Japanese forms really. You’re not too late until you miss the cutoff time, so no worries there. I look forward to reading your offering.
Just about caught it. Phew.
You made it…great! And I loved your poem of an outward journey that reflected the journey within…right up my alley. Good luck with your book endeavor, Paul.
Thank You x
The Japanese forms puzzle me, I must admit. There is a way of thinking in them that I’m often not in tune with. As such, I was planning on skipping this one. But then I caught a ghost post of a bridge… Muse said, write this.
Well, it doesn’t seem to puzzle you any longer! I was delighted to read your choka of which you did a wonderful job…your muse was right. Thanks very much for joining in, Eric.
Thanks for the inspiration to write again, Gayle. Also, thanks for this new form. It is always fun to learn something new. 🙂
I just read your choka, Imelda. It was heartbreaking but is a testament to how families can tough things out. I feel for all those who have to be apart from their loved ones. And I was very heartened to know that this prompt helped you feel inspired to write again…thanks for adding your story today.
Welcome, Gayle. 🙂 Having been a part of that group, I can say that having an OFW for a parent is not so much fun at all. While some families remain whole despite the strain of separation, others don’t unfortunately.
Oh, Imelda, I didn’t know this about your growing up years. I’m sorry you had to suffer through that. Yes, I can see how difficult this would be and how it could certainly tear families apart. It’s amazing to me what some people can endure.
thank you for this form Gayle. The Japanese strictures are a good discipline and make us find words that fit without loosing flow or thread – a timely choka!
I love the discipline of the Japanese forms, they do seem to suit me and you too it seems. I love your offering. Thank you for joining in with your choka.
Loved this challenge, Gayle. Thank you!
So very glad you did, De, you’re very welcome! xo