Bear with me and please read my entire post here, even if you’ve done haibun many times before.
DID YOU KNOW?
** THE HAIBUN WAS ORIGINATED by 17th century Japanese poet Matsuo Basho, who often wrote haibun as travel accounts, the most famous of which is Oku no Hosomichi (Narrow Road to the Interior).
** FIRST ANTHOLOGY OF ALL ENGLISH-LANGUAGE HAIBUN: Bruce Ross’s Journey to the Interior: American Versions of Haibun, published in 1998.
A HAIBUN IS: 1 or 2 short prose paragraphs followed by 1 haiku.
The PROSE PARAGRAPHS must be a true accounting, not fiction; not flash fiction.
The HAIKU, in the traditional manner, is trickier to me. Notice the musts below:
- It must be nature based
- It must be three lines (5-7-5 syllables OR short-long-short)
- It must have a direct or subtle relationship to the prose paragraphs; enrich the prose without condensing the prose.
- It must include a KIGO (word or phrase associated with a particular season). See suggestions below in section on the SAIJIKI.
- Trickiest for me – although only 3 lines, a haiku must have two parts including a shift, an added insight. Japanese poets include a KIREJI (cutting word). BUT there’s no linguistic equivalent in the English language therefore punctuation creates the cut: a dash, comma, an ellipsis, an exclamation point. Sometimes it’s simply felt in the pacing or reading.
Japanese poets often use a SAIJIKI – a book like a dictionary or almanac for KIGO. Divided into the 4 seasons, it includes categories within each: earth, humanity, observances, animals and plants. I found this VERY HELPFUL!
For example, under SPRING KIGO you find words like warm (weather changes from cold to warm; water becomes warm); spring mist and spring haze. Under Animals: frogs (noted for their singing); skylarks (in flight); swallows, and twittering (singing of songbirds). Under Plants: blossoms, cherry blossom-viewing, wildflowers.
In AUTUMN KIGO: full moon. Under Humanity: scarecrow. Observances: grave visiting. Animals: crickets. Plants: apples, persimmons, colored leaves.
In WINTER KIGO. Humanity: snow viewing, first snow, ice. Plants: fallen and dried leaves. New Year: first laughter.
In other words, you may or may not actually use the words summer, spring, winter, or autumn.
EXAMPLES OF HAIKU with a Kigo and a Kireji (added insight after a cut)
The crow has flown away:
swaying in the evening sun
a leafless tree.
Natsume Soseki (186 –1916)
fresh snow on the mat –
the shape of welcome
still visible
Michael Dylan Welch
Nightfall
too dark to read the page,
too cold.
Jack Kerouac
Yuki Teikei Haiku Society’s Season Word List contains KIGO hints/words I found very helpful.
So today,
**Let’s journey together into an interior. Go back in time to one of the very first houses you remember living in. Try to recall a room or place in that house. Take your mind around the room to see what details you can picture. Do you remember this room because of something that happened there…..or someone who habitually sat there?
**Your haibun will begin with 1 or 2 tight paragraphs of prose describing that room. Take us into its interior. It must be a true accounting; not fiction.
**Add a TRADITIONAL haiku. Follow the haiku musts given above. If you just skipped down the post to read this prompt, go back up to read the musts for a haiku – and the section on the SAIJIKI. Let’s try our hand at a traditional haiku!
I’ve always said, I learn so much at dVerse! I love its camaraderie in the writing, learning, and appreciation of everyone’s posts.
I look forward to, in the words of Bruce Ross, your Journey to the Interior – and seeing how traditional you can be with the haiku portion of your haibun!
Photo: Cherry blossoms are a spring KIGO.
NEW TO D’VERSE? HERE’S HOW TO JOIN US!
- Write a poem as the prompt suggests, and post it to your blog.
- Click on Mr. Linky below to add your name and enter the direct URL to your poem
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- And most importantly, please do read some of the other responses to the prompt and add a short comment or reaction. Everyone likes to be appreciated! The prompt is “live” for several days – as you’ll notice by the comments you’ll receive – so do stop by another day and read a few of the latecomers too!
Pub is open! It’s a hot sultry day in Boston — occasional rain storms too. So it’s nice to be inside the cool dVerse Pub! Looking forward to going inside with some of your haibuns today…..and sharing some traditional haiku wthin them!
Here it’s hot but no humidity… we have not had a decent rain since April I think… and wildfires are raging across the country…
So nice to see you back in the pub, Bjorn! Trust you enjoyed your vacation — and it was a wonderful anniversary week!
I’ve seen pictures of fire engines heading up through Europe. It’s unbelievable – grass fires in Sweden! Hope you and yours are ok.
I’m so glad the pub is open – I’m gasping, The weather in England is hot, hot , hot! We’ve had two crop fires in our area over the weekend, which is unheard of, and we’ve had warnings to stay indoors. So a long cool smoothie with lots of ice would be most appreciated, Lill! I hope everyone had a great weekend and has had a good start to the new week. I hope my haibun has met all the criteria – it’s hard to keep track in these conditions!
Ice cold drink coming right up, Kim! I enjoyed your haibun very much. Felt the kireji in Tahoe reading, as I mentioned n my comment. Love the detail you’ve given!
Thank you so much, Lill.
I’m still writing my haibun… soon ready. Here it’s warmer than ever, and so very very dry… some of the trees will probably not survive this drought.
I added mine. I hope it meets the constraints.
Will move over to read now. I find the haiku is the trickiest part of the haibun…..as long as we’re all striving for the traditional today😊
Heads up everyone….my internet is a bit slow this afternoon…..I’m in the pub and beverages are available….just may be a bit slow serving them because of the internet today.
I love what you shared in this post. I knew little of nothing of writing various kinds of poetry when I started here, but I have learned so much from all of your helpful posts and explanations each week. Thank you.
Dwight
Thank you Dwight! As I said at the end of the post….I keep learning and enjoying at dVerse!
I remember how I really detested writing any form that required rhyme because mine always sounded as simple as “Roses are red, violets are blue. Sugar is sweet and so are you.” Until one day, someone on dVerse mentioned RhymeZone and another website you could use to find rhyming words! A technical guru I,m not! I felt like a doofus for not knowing about it — but hey!!! I now use it all the time😊
Thank you for a lovely prompt. It’s good to be taken back to the basics. I enjoyed this one very much.
Read my comment to your haibun, Sarah. You’ve indeed taken us into an interior with beautiful details -and finished your haibun with a stunning and thoughtful traditional haiku. So very glad you enjoyed the prompt!
It’s been a while, it’s good to dash in for a cold one. What a double shot of challenge! Not at all sure if I met it, but there it is, for better or worse.
Oh my…..I didn’t mean to demand! Just thought it would be fun to try our hand at writing a traditional haiku within our haibuns. So many times….I find it much easier to write a micro poem. That’s what dVerse is about though, at least for me. Learning and enjoying too! Have to break for dinner! Will get to reading again in a bit.
Ha! All good. I appreciate the pours here. It was an educative post, reminding us of the “rules” of haiku, as we all can get a might liberal with the term and the form at times.
Oh, yeah… (I edited, toned down my word choice.) There are no demands, just opportunities. This was a fun and informative prompt with many wonderful results.
Have to break for dinner folks. Key is under the mat….there’s pitchers of sangria on the counter. Come on inside and enjoy! I’ll be back in a bit.
Thank you for this lovely prompt and for the detail on what a haibun is and isn’t. I have also done that as well as what is a haiku. Most people seemed to ignore that part.
I really enjoyed doing the research on this. I think a lot of people read and enjoyed.
This is such a great prompt and I want to participate, but am away – I’ll try to throw something together anyway. Really enjoying all the stories.
If you don’t have time, you can always post it for a Thursday OLN and just refer in your post’s notes back to to this prompt! Glad you like it. 🙂
I did a quick and dirty – now off to bed.
Thanks, Lillian, for sharing excellent information on haibun and particularly traditional haiku. I’m still learning and find the “cutting word” or ” turn” the hardest part. Will the sangria help?
Well….for me, it was the gin and tonic that brought a little bit of understanding 🙂
Yes…that’s the toughest part for me as well. But so fun to see how everyone is working toward the traditional haiku for this prompt! 🙂
Fun to have a bit of a challenge!
Going to get some shut-eye. Leaving the key under the mat and the lights on at dVerse. Hope you’ll help yourself to libations sitting out on the bar…..and get into the traditional by leaving a haibun for us to read….to take a peak into an interior that you remember from your past. See you tomorrow in the AM!
Ai really had difficulties with coming up with a seasonal word in the haiku. Ai mean, aI did not even think about it.
I think I posted a reply on your post….not sure. I enjoyed reading about all the hubbub in your childhood house….the running and having fun and scrambling and even the dog spilling milk. The final three lines are a micro poem – and I enjoyed them as that. My comment (hope you can see it by your post), explains how to make it into a haiku. Primarily, in addition to the mentioning of a season, it also has to be about nature.
Glad you posted and replied to the prompt.
When plain insults are it
by which people are fit,
it is time to go home
and make web reader chrome.
Hello all! Have enjoyed reading and entering all these interiors this morning….accompanied by my hot coffee 🙂 Pub will remain open and hope many more stop by to try your hand at a traditional haiku within your haibuns. I will be in and out today….so will catch up on reading and commenting as the post remains open.
Have a great Tuesday everyone!
Good morning, Lillian! Coffee now–drinks later. Thank you for the helpful information. I didn’t go back to the first house I remember, but one that I lived in as a teen (which is pretty far back). 🙂
Wrapping up these haibun this morning. It’s been a lot of fun!
Hello Lillian- Adding mine soon. Thanks for a thought provoking prompt and a lesson as well.
Glad you enjoyed. Sometimes the old teacher in me comes out😊🤔🙃
😊
Hi Lillian,
Thanks for hosting. I like the subject matter this week. I’m always trying to do better with haiku but I’m afraid i sometimes vere off. Will be back later to read. I’m trying to out manouver my afternoon drenching rain:)
Pat
Wrapping up the haibun this morning. I know exactly what you mean about the haiku portion. I always struggle a bit with them but this research helped me a lot. Will be sure to aim for “nature in the double Ks!