One of the most important things in poetry is the use of unique metaphors, and today I thought that we should work with them a bit.
My wings are poetry
Let us start with some definitions.
A metaphor states that one thing is another thing. Remember that it’s not “like” another thing (that is a simile).
A metaphor equates two things not because they are the same but because there is a symbolic resemblance or comparison.
A metaphor can not be taken literary. In many cases I think that the more surprising they are the better they are.
A metaphor can be used not only in poetry but also in other texts and in day to day speech.
What is special in poetry is that the poet has to find unique metaphors. Our day to day language is filled with metaphors that have become idioms, cliches or just part of our day to day language.
Today I would like you to take words and things around you and try to equate them to something symbolic such as an emotion, or the description of a person.
To make them unique fill the imagery with descriptions. For example don’t just say a car but say a rusty yellow 1977 Volkswagen Beetle… Make them as rich and specific as you can.
When you have a few description try to equate them to something abstract such a sense of love or another person’s rage. You can also equate them to something hard to grasp in a person. Maybe your boss has axes in his mouth…
I made a small effort the other day trying to equate sorrow to the leaves on a tree.
You left when leaves were dirty rags,
when foliage shrunk to tattered shrouds
dangling on the barren boughs.
When you have one or several metaphors build a poem around them.
Remember that you can also combine your metaphors with other prompts, for example using two contradicting metaphors or a negation can make for very interesting poetry to strengthen the emotions you want to write about.
You can use any form (or lack of form) except forms that actually “prohibits” metaphors such as haiku (then it’s not haiku).
If at the end you prefer to tone them down to similes I’m fine with that too.
But most importantly make them you own, don’t recycle old metaphors…
When you are ready link up your poem on Mr Linky below, leave a comment and most importantly never forget to read other poems. I think it is most helpful if you describe how you feel when reading about a metaphor.
Hello all… welcome to the bar… who will write a metaphor on a ten year aged bottle of Jose Cuerva tequila… if not I can make some mojito for you 🙂
“Maybe your boss has axes in his mouth” … Ooh, nice.
Tequila leaves me crawling. I have to stay away from that stuff. 🙂
So maybe as a metaphor it works:
I am a glass of tequila taken
in morning, bone tired crawling.
I am the 1942 bottle
of Don Julio tequila
you grip, and twist,
but should not
drink.
Awesome
Hi Björn and dVerse barflies! I love the prompt and I’ve written a poem but I’m not sure whether I’ve met the bar with this one.
I’m sure you have… but if not you have to find a metaphor involving tequila
Ooh, that sounds like one of those drinking challenges that I never took part in when I was much younger…
I really like going back to the basics of writing and this is a good reminder of how powerful metaphors can be. Thanks for the examples Bjorn.
I do love writing metaphors… and I actually start with the description of something instead of starting with an emotion.
I know! I know! I’ve been gone a while .. but the good news the publishers of my first collection in 2015 came back to me in the spring wanting to now do another!! So there’s been much work collating, rewriting and proof reading .. and its out next spring. That said, I have missed the dverse nights in the pub so its great to be back in again 🙂
Oh… what a great set of news… you have been missed, and I look forward to read your entry.
Big congratulations!
excellent ideas in your post. same ideas apply to prose writing too. thanks for sharing.
Indeed it does… as does most poetic devices actually. When I write prose I usually care about meter for instance.
I’ve entered mine. Interesting prompt. And here’s my tequila shot:
I’m the salt on the rim of the glass
and the sharp lime kick
in the ribs
Love the shot… perfect one.
You mentioned roses. You have some.
Coming over…
Some great information, Björn
Metaphors are like finding a great story in a picture.
Yes!
Thanks, Björn, this is going to be a fun prompt!
My pleasure… look forward to your entry
a very challenging prompt and I am reworking one I wrote earlier in the week, hoping it meets the bar. metaphors are like the back bones of poetry.
Good to see… I always find it’s a good exercise to do some metaphors… I will soon get around, but it’s getting late here.
I learned something new. I was not aware that metaphors are not to be used in Haiku!
That is what I have learned at least.
The only drink metaphors I can think of are dirty…and I’m too old for that nonsense, so I’ll leave it to you younger ones, and just say hi.
Like a dirty martini?
Ha ha….I was think something frothy, which as metaphor….well….
You’ve set the bar high, Bjorn, to come up with unique metaphors. Not sure I succeeded but good exercise reaching for it….and something from my heart considering the divisiveness we see in society.
Serve me something to induce a peaceful sleep tonight 🙂
I hope you did get something… the bartender was sleeping 🙂
Next time I’ll take whatever you had.
Thank you for this Bjorn! 🙋🏻♀️
Posted a poem I wrote a while ago that I think meets the bar, been wanting to share with dVerse for a while.
No tequila for me, I will just sit quiet over here nibbling on some milkweed.
Ha… milkweed sounds … hm … good.
Munch munching,,, shwy yesh Björn, itch isch (munch munch) pritchy goosh (gulp)
A great challenge as similes rush to the fore and have to be beaten back
similes can be pesky… sometimes we just have to do the real metaphor.
Interesting prompt, Björn. As I’ve waited till morning to post mine, I’ll pass on the tequila right now, but perhaps later. 😉
There is always a tequila waiting… but we can do tequila sunrise for a morning.
🙂
This is a terrifying tale of killing Vlad Dracula – Vlad the Impaler, Vlad is a metaphor for Trumpster Dumpster. You will like this. It will terrify you! ENJOY!?
…rob from http://www.image-verse.com
Lots at stake with sucga
Good Morning Bjorn- Interesting prompt- thank you! Joining in this morning.
And here it’s evening already
Yes, of course. Happy evening!
I do believe that metaphor is the language of the soul. Jung said symbol was the language of the soul and of course they walk hand in hand.
I have not thought of it that way but I like the it’s the language of the soul.
Can’t believe I missed Mr. Linky again, but here, nonetheless, is my metaphor! https://judydykstrabrown.com/2018/11/10/dropped/
I just tried to add my link and linky expired. Didn’t realize there was an expiration on it. Here’s my offering:
https://tao-talk.com/2018/11/11/dream-cave/
Hello, we have a 48 hour limit so we can go around and read each other’s poem. On Thursday there is an Open Link opportunity to link up any poem you want.
OK, thank you for the info.
Nice post. BTW, I think when you said this: “A metaphor can not be taken literary.” you meant this: “A metaphor can not be taken literally.” I’m great at finding typos in everyone else’s blogs but can never see them in my own!! Anyway, I think you might enjoy this take on metaphor. https://petersironwood.com/2018/12/12/metaphors-we-live-by-and-die-by/