Hello everyone! We have a guest host, Rosemary Nissen Wade, who will handle our next poetry form, Dizain.
Hello dVerse! Many thanks to Grace & dVerse team for the opportunity to share one of my favourite forms.
Though free verse is my usual preference and I turn to it naturally, I also love to play with form. These days the circumstances of my offline life mean I respond to poetry prompts much less often than I once did – but a form prompt will often get me. (Such as those offered here this year.)
Brief History
The dizain is a 10-line form which – like so many good ones – originated in France. It was popular there in the 15th and 16 Centuries, and has also been used by such famous English poets as John Keats and Philip Sidney.
Basic Structure
The basic rules for the dizain are that it has one stanza consisting of 10 lines, with 10 syllables per line, and the rhyme scheme is ababbccdcd. Do you see how the second half of the stanza sort of mirrors the rhyme scheme of the first? Not using the same rhymes,but reversing the sequence. It’s more obvious if I make a break between sections: ababb ccdcd – though the poem is not usually written with a break.
Then again, I sometimes have put in verse breaks to make a dizain of two or three stanzas within the 10 lines, in a slight departure from the classic form. It’s fun to play with possibilities.
Or I have sometimes written a double dizain, of two 10-line stanzas, as many other poets do too. (Any more than that would get too far away, I think, from the intention of the dizain, which is a fairly succinct form – albeit able to express a lot in its 10 lines.)
I find it lends itself just as well to humorous or colloquial verse as to more serious examples.
Further research reveals an 8-line variation, of 8 syllables per line, rhyming ababcdcd. (Personally I think the 10-line version with its unusual rhyme scheme is more fun.) Some sources also say that although no metre is necessary, iambic pentameter is often used –but that’s really up to the poet.
Examples of the 10-line dizain
Although I so enjoyed the form, I haven’t used it often since the Poetic Asides challenge in 2016. I’ll have to see what I can come up with now! Meanwhile, from my 2016 efforts, here is my second-place-getter:
Burning
When the flame stretches a tendril of light
and catches the circling moth, there’s a flare
,a sudden incandescence, briefly bright …
then it’s as if nothing was ever there –
only silence, only the empty air.
Of you and me, I didn’t know which one
was moth, and which flame – until you were gone.
Mourning that death, I thought you the moth, who
in that blazing moment, vanishing, shone.
Then I saw how caught I was. Then I knew.
And here is one with a more mundane focus:
Feeling Frustrated
It is a serious issue for me
when I have no internet connection.
I need my hobby group (photography)
plus the whole online poetry section.
Lacking all access is a distraction –
not in a good way. I want to protest.
I want to protest vociferously
and do some violence too, if I’m honest.
I’m too far from the tower, they tell me.
Service is weak – too bad, end of story.
You can find many more online, e.g. at the Tir na Nog site. http://thepoetsgarret.com/2010Challenge/form16.html Only be careful: Google wants to change ‘dizain’ to ‘design’ – whereas on your own document autocorrect will try and turn it into ‘disdain’ or even ‘dizziness’!
So, for this month’s Poetry Form, please write a 10-line dizain: 10 syllables per line and rhyme scheme ababbccdcd; theme or topic of your own choosing. For this event we’ll exclude both double dizains and the 8-line version. But you are welcome to use more than one stanza within the 10-line limit. You know the drill – post to your blog and share via Mr Linky.
Options
You might like to take an old poem that wasn’t working to your satisfaction and turn it into a dizain. In that case, please show us the source poem too. The link will be open for a month, so there is plenty of opportunity to try more than one dizain. We also encourage you to post, as new links, any revisions to yourinitial attempts.Have fun!– Rosemary Nissen-Wade
About our guest host: Tasmanian-born, lived many years in Melbourne before going happily sub-tropical in 1994. Career in librarianship 1962-1980. Helped start Poets Union of Australia in the late seventies. Pioneered poetry workshops in Australian prisons in the earlyeighties. Formed Word of Mouth Poetry Theatre with Anita Sinclair, Ken Smeaton and Malcolm Brodie, 1986. Performance poet. Teacher of creative writing at tertiary and community levels. Widely published in paper journals and anthologiesbefore embracing the online poetry community.
For her various monographs, chapbooks and collaborations, search her Amazon and Smashwords pages.Note: Alphabetical listings should place her under N, not W.
Good evening dVerse poets and welcome to the Poets’ Pub Rosemary! Thank you for hosting and introducing me to a new form. I just hope I’ve got it right!
Hello everyone! Hope you will enjoy this form. Thanks Rosemary for hosting and helping out with this form.
Hi Rosemary and All. The form looks user-friendly. Your dizain, “Burning,” is illuminating in more ways than one.
I like this form! I actually use that rhyme scheme (ish) quite a lot, so I’m intrigued. In the meantime, I just wrote 5 p.m. for my Hours cycle, and I love it so much I’m going to blog whore here and post this link, unrelated to the prompt (and thank you)
https://xanhaiku.wordpress.com/2019/07/18/the-hours-a-poem-cycle-12-5-p-m/
Hello everyone- Rosemary thanks for the introduction to a new form. This looks very interesting!
Thanks for hosting, Rosemary. I will have mine linked shortly.
Good morning, all! (Well, it’s breakfast time here in Australia, lol. Lucky that the pub serves coffee too, eh?) Thank you for the welcome. It’s great to be here, and I very much look forward to reading your dizains. Knowing this was coming up, I recently wrote two new ones which I have just linked. I am also playing with the idea of rewriting some of my older poems that haven’t worked in their present form.
When Grace and I worked out this date for the dizain presentation, I didn’t know I was going to be away from home a few days, so I’m not sure when/if I’ll get to that rewriting of old poems I just mentioned, and do please forgive me if I can’t read all your poems immediately. I’m sure I have treats in store when I do! 🙂
Having now had a look at those already linked, I’m very thrilled and impressed at the wonderful and varied things you have all done with this form!
Woah Rosemary, this was a challenge. I was seeing inside-out trying to get the inverted rhyme pattern correct. Had to flip, then edit the second 5 lines of my early drafts. Making two separate stanzas worked better for my eye. I hardly ever work with a 10-syllable line when creating a rhyme pattern, given I am not drawn to rhyme by nature. When I do create rhyme, I need to find a tempo’d rhythm that feels comfortable to my ear. Perhaps because I spent many years writing music lyrics for my bands, so I seek musicality. My solution was to look at most of the lines essentially as two 5-beat sections. In the end, this was fun in the end. Great prompt!
Loved your dizains Rosemary, but your blog won’t let me leave a comment for you, keeps disappearing them the moment I try — so I will tell you here.
Many thanks, Rob. Comments on my blog are moderated, but should show up later.
Hi Rosemary and everyone! I have been out and about and I am happy to be back, but so sad that I have written a dizain for a one year old boy raped by a drunk man. It’s been disturbing me and I have to let it out and write my soul. On a lighter note, looking forward to reading everyone’s dizain.
Sad and disturbing yes – and very much needing to be written.
Thank you, Rosemary. I am grateful.
Just discovered that I’d put the wrong link into Mr Linky. Done now.
No worries! It’s nice to read two by you!
Nice of you to say so, but the first one isn’t a poem—it only links back to this site, that’s why I had to add my poem twice.
What a wonderful form! I wrote one, but I’m sure it won’t be my last. I’m actually teaching a class on poetry forms at a writers conference in October, and I added this one to the list of forms I’ll be teaching.
Great! And you aced the form.
I was trying for humor and it wasn’t working. Then this came out. https://xanhaiku.wordpress.com/2019/07/19/sediment/
Far from humorous, but wonderful and, i’m sure, necessary.
Rosemary: thanx for hosting. I loved your two poems. The first for its deep yet earthy philosophy/insight, and the second for your raw spicey nature! Very fun combo. And mostly, because all your poetry is understandable, not sickly flowery and not pregnant with hidden meaning. That said, I broke a few of my own preference in today’s addition for some reason. Again, thanx for hosting.
I think your title was the only thing that might be a tad obscure, but it doesn’t prevent understanding of the poem – and in any case, you kindly explain it.
I can’t access Jane Swanson’s poem; it seems there’s a bad link. Can anyone contact her and/or fix this, please? Ta.
Thanks for hosting, Rosemary! This is the first time I’ve heard of this form, and I enjoyed it. 🙂
Is this one of those form post where
(1) staff will choose some for a book.
(2) we can write as many as we like
(3) we are suppose to offer feedback to each other (for as in most d’Verse challenges, I see no real feedback here, but in prev. “Form Challenges” there was.)
Yes, Sabio, to those questions – though the third is an optional ‘yes’. The lack of in-depth feedback might be because the standard has been high!
Great prompt thanks Rosemary … sorry it’s taken me a while to ‘create’ counting syllables is not my forte but totally enjoyed the challenge!
Thanks for the challenge of a completely new form. (K)
As warned, I had to be away a few days without opportunity to check in here. Now that I’m back, I’m catching up. I’m very much enjoying all the excellent dizains that have been posted in my absence!