Hello all,
Today I wanted to revisit one of my favorite subjects of writing (poetry), and that is the metaphor. To expand on something and create something entirely new and unique.
First of all, the metaphor is not the same as the simile.
The simile compares something to something else…
Consider Robert Burns:
O my Luve is like a red, red rose
That’s newly sprung in June;
O my Luve is like the melody
That’s sweetly played in tune.
….
It does compares his love to a rose and a melody, but had it been a metaphor it would have said that his love was a rose.
The second thing about a metaphor is that it has to be new and unique. Otherwise it’s in best case repeating a well known cliche, and in worst case stealing (that said you can come up with the same idea independently)
Consider for example Emily Dickenson
“Hope” is the thing with feathers —
That perches in the soul —
And sings the tune without the words –
And never stops — at all —
I can see Emily sitting in her room watching a feather floating in the sun and connected this to something so abstract as hope. How would you describe hope?
Metaphors are also best used to express abstract concepts such as emotions, or describe someone’s character.
It often helps to make the metaphor exact and precise.
Consider for instance Pablo Neruda
I do not love you as if you were salt-rose, or topaz,
or the arrow of carnations the fire shoots off.
I love you as certain dark things are to be loved,
in secret, between the shadow and the soul.
Which also includes the negation of a metaphor (I do feel that he is referring Burns by saying that his love is not like rose or the gem, which is close to a cliche by now. Instead he digs deeper into the darkness and I feel that he refers to his love to something growing from the soil. He leaves the ethereal and seeks the roots.
So today I want you to invent new metaphors, try to surprise, combine them and paint your emotions or feelings in the you like (which is actually a cliche in itself). Do not hesitate to make them complex.
When you have written your poem, link it up below, and leave a comment below.
Do not forget to read, comment and learn from all the excellent poets who visit the bar.
Hello altl… it has been an intense week for me, and I still need to read most of the entries from Tuesday’s prompt… Hope you enjoy writing metaphors … I love inventing crazy metaphors.
Hi Bjorn! Thanks for reminding us of this took kit for our poems. Been crazy at work too for me but am here for this prompt. See you in the poetry trail. Happy Thursday everyone.
I really love where you took it… and I think we went down similar paths.
Hello Björn and Grace! Good evening dVerse poets!
ll this week, this morning and earlier this evening, I’ve been working on a small collection of flash fiction and short stories which I’m hoping to self-publish on Amazon. I’m almost halfway through. I knew which stories I wanted to include – they’re all kind of eerie – but the hardest thing has been deciding on their order in the book. If I can get this done, I plan to self-publish a collection of poems in a pamphlet (chapbook) in the new year.
Meeting the Bar is a welcome break this evening, and I’m looking forward to reading amazing metaphors and poems.
Hello Kim, I know what you say about the order… it makes a lot of difference, and if it is possible I would try to see if the pieces are somewhat connected so you can see a hidden narrative between the different pieces…
How exciting, Kim!
Hello Bjorn and All. Was out and about today and just got home. Metaphors and similies are still confusing for me. Please, if what I write is a simile and not a metaphor, feel free to correct! It’s a lovely September day here today, lower 60s F, with a gentle breeze whispering through the trees.
Oh… you a metaphor really is something… usually if it contains words like “like”, or “as”, it’s a simile. Compare the Emily Dickinson quote to Robert Burns.
Thank you, Bjorn.
Hi Björn and All, I don’t have time to join in–still finishing my book– but thank you for this reminder. It’s something I will come back to.
I think this is tool to use in most type of poetry.
Yes.
Liked your explanation. I find metaphors are easier to write when you’re not trying to create them at all… they just happen. 🙂
They are actually easier to find when you really try to describe something abstract such an emotion…
I know I’ve often created them in my poetry, but I also know that I did it completely unaware that i was doing it until someone else pointed it out. Always had difficulty pointing them out in school, too.
Hello Bjorn and all- This is a wonderful post. Thank you for the explanation. I will try to come up with something and join in, but it may be tomorrow. I have been immersed in reading about the Whistleblower and the impeachment.
Oh… that is exciting isn’t it?
Yes! It is.
Thanks for hosting, Bjorn. I just posted mine, but after finishing it I am no longer shore what it is about. It may not be quite finished.
I think it worked out well Frank… but look at the comments and see if it worked as you intended.
Thank you for hosting Björn!
🙂
Great topic, Bjorn. For me, the metaphor is like a spiritual aspect and the simile is the intellectual aspect. Sometimes, I use both to paint a full picture and when I want to dive deep in reflection, the metaphor provides the connection.
I can see your point… and from an intellectual point of view you can only make a comparison… a simile… the metaphor is something stranger, almost a deceit.
Metaphors are so much fun to use in poetry.
Oops! I had a typo in my first entry…. please delete! sorry!!
Quite fun… and also something that can work well… as when you paint with colors what you feel and not what you see.
exactly!
Hi Bjorn– you caught me with three in a row, including one from the archive. A bit greedy, I know, but it was a metaphorical sort of morning, I guess!
Metaphors can be quite rewarding to write.
What a delightful challenge Bjorn.
Glad that you think so.
Oh my…..so late to the pub with this one! As the saying goes, better late than never. I shall get on the reading trail tomorrow….from Tuesday and Thursday posts!
I am late catching up reading too..
Adding mine this morning. Will be along to read soon!
And I will be reading a bit tonight.
Hi Bjorn, I’m arriving late as I haven’t been feeling well. It seems my muse had to have a say 😉
Oh I hope you are feeling better now… anyway it’s good to have a muse around.
Hello, dVerse poets! 🙂 Ai wonder why aI cannot make use of my own smilies … Anyhow, aI know aI am late. It is almost two days since Thursday. This historical prompt by Bjørn aI could not pass by, though, so now aI have posted an entry. Please, make it your favourite. Ai don’t know how it is, like, around the globe. And, lately aI have been very much tortured. Ai feel, though, energy is a thing to take care of, so aI join in, with an amazing. not to speak of historically terrific and socially explicitly outstanding poem, meant for Christmas Eve, and anyone following, whoever that might be. Ai hurry slowly, step by step. Festina lente. So, maybe later aI will see how good the poem really is. Not to speak so much about it. 😊
I look forward to read yours…
You cannot possibly look backwards, to read it, can you … 😊