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Kisses, Michael Drayton, Neil Carpathios, poetry form, Siegfried Sassoon, The Kiss, x line stanzas
Hello Poets – did you know that August 25th is not only ‘Banana Split Day’ but also ‘Kiss and Make Up’ day (who makes up these ascriptions)? Frivolous they may be, though kissing is always a well-primed topic for poetry, whatever prompts it:
Michael Drayton’s Idea 61 however gives certainty that there will be no making up:
“Since there’s no help, come let us kiss and part.
Nay, I have done, you get no more of me;
And I am glad, yea glad with all my heart,
That thus so cleanly I myself can free.
Shake hands for ever, cancel all our vows,
And when we meet at any time again,
Be it not seen in either of our brows
That we one jot of former love retain…“
As viewer of Rodin’s sculpture, Neil Carpathios’ poem gives analysis to “The Kiss”
“By freezing passion at its blossoming
perhaps Rodin knew he challenged
Sophocles who said as lover you want
ice to be ice yet not melt
in your hands. How stone,
implying permanence, might let us believe,
a moment, the seated figures are beyond the leaf
that cannot keep from letting go the branch,
beyond even stupidly purpling grapes
that do not understand the process
by which they darken; darken nevertheless.”
Whilst Siegfried Sassoon gives us the kiss of death in his “The Kiss”
“ To these I turn, in these I trust—
Brother Lead and Sister Steel.
To his blind power I make appeal,
I guard her beauty clean from rust….
Sweet Sister, grant your soldier this:
That in good fury he may feel
The body where he sets his heel
Quail from your downward darting kiss”
And from the above, I’m taking some lines as prompts for our poems
- Since there’s no help, come let us kiss and part
- Shake hands for ever, cancel all our vows
- By freezing passion at its blossoming
- I guard her beauty clean from rust
- Quail from your downward darting kiss
Choose ONE of the above lines and write a stanza(s) taking each word as the start of each successive line i.e. the first word begins the first line, the second begins the second and so on. Basically, we are taking the horizontal line and making it vertical- its vaguely acrostic and I’m not sure if this form has a given name.
Rules: You must keep the same sequence though you may reverse it
Your poem should preferably be at least 2 stanzas long
Rhyme is optional but try to stick to the meter of your chosen line
And for those of you who like an extra challenge
Your chosen line will determine a stanza of either 6, 7, 8 or 10 lines which gives you the options of choosing a poetry form to match – see the Poetry Forms Index
Suggestions: You might want to make it a ‘kiss and make-up’ poem given the day!
Once you have published your poem, add it to the Mr Linky below. Then go visiting other contributors as that is half the enjoyment of our dVerse gatherings.
Hello Poets – its a coolish dampish evening in the UK and here at the bar, there’s a long list of kiss cocktails in various combinations. Let me know your preference and I look forward to reading your poems
Can you do a wolf’s paw… lingonberry cordial and vodka?
certainly – I’m tempted to have one myself
Lingonberry cordial (or syrup) can be bought at Ikea I think
Certainly – I think I’ll have one too
Hello… today’s writing became a little bit like laying a puzzle… but I do like constraints and hope it works.
will be over soon to look at your puzzle!
Hello Laura and All. I love the topic and the poetry you draw from for the prompt. Behind on writing today, will link up later. I just read what Bjorn’s having. I’ll have one of those, please.
I too am tempted by that cocktail – take your time Lisa – the Muse can’t be rushed!
Thanks, Laura!
Hi everyone…thanks for hosting, Laura. It was a challenging form but it does get those poetic wheels a turning! I will take any type of smoochy drink you have as long as it’s cold. 🙂
how about a velvet kiss Mish – that is cool and smoochy and also keeps those wheels turning!
Sounds perfect!
Laura, I always love your prompts, and I always feel like I need a little lie down afterwards. I’ll have something gentle but intoxicating, if you have any suggestions!
your sestain was filled to the brim with passion – I needed to lie down!
hi Laura,
hi poets,
what an interesting prompt. found it a challenge so will need a poets mule kiss cocktail.
two parts cheap orang liqueur,
double espresso,
two shots Tia Maria,
over crushed ice and southern comfort.
a little creation of my own.
this serves two
some help required.
rog
the cocktail is as creative as your poem – sorry that I could not leave a comment there (not even showing the login form) but I tried to write …..
“you have cleverly added refrains and that makes the message even more profound
p.s. and the advert split your lines before ‘friendship failed, broken connections with physicality’ Happenstance?
Thanks for the prompt and the read♥️
Oh an interesting challenge Laura! ☺️
sorry I could not comment on your poem Christine but could not login. ‘Nobody’s fault?! A wise retrospective on letting go
Thank you Laura. WP is having an issue with ‘Anonymous’ comments i believe. I notice I am ‘anonymous’ when commenting on some blogs and vice versa. I could not log in to your blog this morning and changed something in my settings and then ‘voila’, I could. Who knows? 🤣
There’s no requirement to make sense is there? I hope not ….
Shake the tree to see what falls, on
Hands that through a forest crawls
Forever onward t’ward the light
Ever upward, birds in flight, might
All ways be a sight to see, please
Cancel all my vanity
Our wedding night we shall not sleep, on
Vows that we could never keep
And when the morning comes at last
When all our nights have been surpassed
We two loves might meet again
Meet in dreams of mornings when
At every moment, arms entwined
Any movement thus enshrined, in
Time, and in our memory
Again together. You and me.
Sense is one of those debatable aspects of poetry but you might like to join in with a poem linked to your website – sticking to the prompt line as (almost) in that first stanza.
I thought that the second stanza sort of followed the prompt, and maybe even made a tiny bit of sense. But my own website is a barren wilderness best avoided.
Fascinating prompt Laura, thank you — and thank you for hosting. I finished my piece in response to your directions, and in so doing, it carried me to a fuller expression of the inspiration thread I was unraveling — so I included the longer free verse poem that was sparked as well. I liked the inspiration you stirred in me with this one my friend. 🙂✌🏼
good to know it lubricated the Muse further Rob though the lines you wrote for the prompt were passionate enough
I remastered “Apples” to a tighter final edit.
Oh Wow, Laura–I love this prompt!!
please do join in when you can then
Thank you.
Good morning dVerse poets and Laura especially for this challenging but delectable prompt! I’m a little late to the party, morning is my time to write – too tired these hot evenings. I’m dying to see what everyone else has chosen and written, so I’m off to read and comment!
the heat came through your poetry Kim!
Hi, Laura, thank you for hosting. I enjoyed the prompt very much, the words just came to me without much effort, felt good.
made to fit
Hello Laura, thank you for this, I’m not much for structured writing, but I do enjoy the challenge nonetheless, it gets me moving and I did enjoy this form. I’d love a whiskey please, double of course.
it was the structure of your poem that made it so remarkable!
Wow!! Thanks for a challenging prompt, Laura. I enjoyed writing to this, I just hope my poem makes sense. 🙂
perfectly Kitty! thanks for joining in
Thanks, Laura. 🙂
Thank you one and all for joining in with such brilliant responses – I have struggled to comment on several sites where the login is not even visible and also have had to re-loginin for every WordPress site I’ve visited – not sure what the problem is but its frustrating – any clues?
I’m quite late sorry – super busy week. I love this prompt, nicely challenging, and I really enjoyed being reminded of Drayton. We read Idea 61 at school. 🙂
way ahead there – Drayton was new to me. Off to read yours
I don’t know if it was on the curriculum, or just something the English teacher liked. I’m lucky to have had a good English teacher that instilled a love of poetry.
Indeed!
OK, back from vacation, had a great time, our anniversary – and I correctly responded to the prompt this time. 🙂
and with an anniversary love poem – beautiful!