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Adelaide Crapsey, cinquain, Craft of Poetry, FormForAll, poetic form, poetry, poetry prompt, Tony Maude
Good afternoon/evening/morning everyone, depending on which of the world’s time zones you are in. My name is Tony Maude and this is my first time presenting Form for All.
A couple of Saturdays ago Fred hosted An Evening of Short Verse, using his Poetics prompt to challenge us to write poems of 12 lines or fewer. Many of us chose to use all 12 lines, thus neatly avoiding the need to be too brief;– I know I did … smiles.
When considering traditional poetry forms, which is part of what we do in Form For All, it seems to me that we are somewhat prone to overlooking the various short forms that have been developed over the centuries. I’m sure we’ve all tried our hand at haiku – and it’s just about a year since Madeleine Begun Kane taught us how to write limericks, but most of us are probably more comfortable writing longer poems.
Today, I would like to bring a short verse form to the bar for your consideration.
The Cinquain
Broadly speaking, any five-line stanza or poem is a cinquain, the term being derived from cinq – the French word for five – so limericks and Japanese tankas are cinquains (the older term quintain has fallen out of use). However, cinquain – sometimes expanded to American cinquain – also has a specific meaning; it refers to the poetic form invented by Adelaide Crapsey (1878 – 1914).
Here are a couple of examples:
November Night
Listen.
With faint dry sound,
Like steps of passing ghosts,
The leaves, frost-crisp’d, break from the trees
And fall.
Adelaide Crapsey
Photo © Dendroica cerulea.
Reproduced under Creative Commons License via Flickr
Mute Swan
Gliding
serenely by,
snow-white sails reflected
in the calm water, webbed black feet
paddling.
© A B Maude, 2013
It should be readily apparent that the cinquain is a form of syllabic poetry; that is, the form depends on counting the number of syllables in each line. The scheme is a first line of 2 syllables, followed by 4, 6, 8 and finally 2 syllables again. I believe this form has some advantages over the Japanese haiku (three lines of 5,7,5 syllables) and tanka forms (five lines of 5,7,5,7,7 syllables):
1) Each line contains an even number of syllables and can therefore be written in the iambic metre that forms the basis of most English language poetry. That this is the case is not surprising when one considers that Crapsey’s main work was her A Study in English Metrics, which was posthumously published in an incomplete form in 1918.
2) Being slightly longer than the haiku, the cinquain gives the poet a little more room for manoeuvre, but not much.
3) Unlike Japanese poetry forms, which traditionally do not have titles, cinquains are titled poems. I suspect that adding a fifty word title to your cinquain is not really playing the game, but there’s no rule against it … smiles.
Adelaide Crapsey is considered to have been one of the early imagist poems, and the cinquain form readily lends itself to capturing a single image, moment or mood. Many of Crapsey’s cinquains – 28 of which were published after her death in a 1915 collection entitled Verse – focus on images of fragility, death and dying.
So the essence of today’s prompt is to write a cinquain, BUT before you all reach for your pens/pencils/keyboards there is something else I’d like to raise.
Line Endings.
One of the potential drawbacks of writing poetry in syllabic forms is that simply ending a line when you have reached the required number of syllables can lead to some very weak line endings; words like an, of, from, to and so on etc. appear at the end of lines, reinforcing the view that some poetry is just chopped-up prose. Another issue that can arise is splitting words over two lines in order to meet the syllable count requirement.
In an ideal world each line of verse – be it form poetry or free verse – would end with a carefully chosen, significant word. Choosing these words is part of the craft of poetry; carefully chosen line endings can disrupt, emphasise or build up tension, invite readers to engage with the poem by asking questions, build expectancy, etc. Admittedly, it is difficult to give every line ending great significance, but it is possible to avoid really weak line endings.
So there you have it: today’s challenge is to write a stand-alone cinquain. In your poem try to capture the essence of a single moment, image or mood, pay attention to your line endings and avoid, if at all possible, using words like the, at, a or and at the ends of your lines.
To close, here is another of Adelaide Crapsey’s cinquains by way of inspiration, and one of mine by way of instruction:
Amaze
I know
Not these my hands
And yet I think there was
A woman like me once had hands
Like these.
Adelaide Crapsey
Photo © ashley.adcox
Reproduced under Creative Commons License via Flickr
Definition
Cinquain:
five-line poem;
twenty-two syllables
laid out two, four, six, eight, then two
again.
© A B Maude, 2013
So what do you do now? Here’s How It Works:
• Write your cinquain and post it to your blog
• Add a link to your cinquain via the ‘Mr Linky’ below.
• This opens a new screen where you’ll enter your information, and where you also choose links to read. Once you have pasted your poem’s blog URL and entered your name, click Submit. Don’t worry if you don’t see your name right away.
• Read and comment on other people’s work to let them know it’s being read. This part is important because:
1) It helps to build your dVerse community, and
2) Reading other people’s’ work will enrich your own writing.
• Share your work and that of your fellow poets via your favourite social media platforms.
• Above all – have fun!
claudia said:
somehow, the shorter a poem is, the more difficult i find to write it cause you really must choose the words carefully…. so really enjoyed the challenge…smiles
brian miller said:
most def…this one boggled me for a bit as you know…smiles…and then today i have written like 4 in my notebook….dang it…smiles.
Tony said:
The form is like that – after a while you get to thinking, “Can I get that into a cinquain?” – or at least, that happens to me. It certainly tightens up your writing when you have so little room to play with 🙂
Tony said:
You’re absolutely right, Claudia. When you don’t have many words to play with, each one has to do more of the work. You also have to really distill an image right down to its essential components – you don’t have space to say more. That was part of the reason for bringing this form to the pub.
claudia said:
woohooo….tony’s in the house…how was poetry class?
Tony said:
Class was good. I have had the strangest day – I’ll maybe say more at OLN when it’s my turn to host 🙂
brian miller said:
oh dang…keeping us in suspense….smiles.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I love cinquains, it’s one of my favorite forms. Thank you Tony for that.
claudia said:
you did well with yours björn…
Tony said:
I knew this would be right up your street, Bjorn 🙂 Looking forward to dropping in at your place, once I’ve caught up here. That’s what I get for being late 🙂
Tony said:
Really enjoyed your cinquain, Bjorn. I should have asked you to give a class on them!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
🙂
claudia said:
now look at this…just björn and i in the pub… you could tell me some norwegian jokes björn while i polish glasses til tony is back from his poetry class
aprille said:
I went to town and ran to a Garland of five plus one summing up.
aprille said:
Never mind the quality, feel the width 🙂
brian miller said:
you know i am biting my tongue…lol
Tony said:
Will be round to read soon …
Tony said:
Your Garland of cinquains is exquisite. For anyone who is interested, the garland is one of the many ways that have been developed to string Adelaide Crapsey’s cinquain into a longer form.
claudia said:
my daughter just told me that two of her friends will arrive here in a few minutes to watch germany’s next topmodel with heidi klum in our living room….so i’m enjoying the last few quiet minutes here in the pub…just saying… smiles
brian miller said:
lol….well now wont that be fun…smiles….reality tv, consuming minds everywhere….
Laurie Kolp said:
I can hear the squeals from here.
claudia said:
they’re so sweet… we’re having fun…smiles
henryclemmons said:
Is Heidi Klum going to be in your living room? I really need to visit Germany again soon. : )
Laurie Kolp said:
I love your post, Tony, and am so glad you touched upon the importance of end line words. Although I have picked up the technique of sometimes dividing end words,I don’t really understand why it’s done.
claudia said:
good question laurie.. i do it sometimes because of the beat or to emphasize the meaning.. though today i was totally submissive to tony’s request…no hyphen.. smiles
brian miller said:
haha…i threw a hyphen in the first one just for tony…smiles….
Laurie Kolp said:
I saw that. = )
brian miller said:
it just goes against my nature to follow form completely…though i tried….
Sabio Lantz said:
we know
brian miller said:
all about being true to yourself you know…
Tony said:
Thanks Laurie. The whole line ending thing is a mystery to many people. In rhyming forms we tend to always look for masculine rather than feminine rhymes – masculine rhymes are the obvious ones like rhyme/time/chime etc, while femine rhymes have an extra syllable after the rhyme, so rhyme/timer etc.
To me there are 2 reasons for hyphenating line end words; the first is rhyme driven as above and I think we should try to avoid that; the second is to deliberately break up a word, forcing the reader to pause in the middle of it. Claudia does that sometimes.
Now, I’m off to hide behind the bar, before anyone starts throwing stuff at me … smiles
Laurie Kolp said:
Thanks, Tony. I’ve also used it to change meaning.
brian miller said:
there is a certain amount of word play that can be done as well in how you break a word to bring certain or multiple meaning to it…or the emphasis as you indicate…ee cummings was incredible at some of his word breaks…
brian miller said:
nice tony. enjoyed your explanation of the form but also the thoughts as to the end of lines as well….this was def not as easy as it may first look…..
Heaven (@asweetlust) said:
Thanks for the lovely challenge Tony ~ I do love cinquain ~
Happy day to everyone ~
Grace
Tony said:
Poor Adelaide would be blushing to think that her poetry form could be put to such use, Grace … but I enjoyed your cinquain … smiles
Heaven (@asweetlust) said:
You know I love writing these poems Tony ~ No form is exempt, ha ~ Smiles ~
Mary said:
Greetings, everyone! Tony, thank you for the interesting article. I hadn’t written a cinquain in a long time, so this was a nice exercise for me. I will be looking forward to reading what others come up with. Hope everyone is having a good day!
Tony said:
Glad to have given you a nice, gentle (?) poetic workout. I really enjoyed your cinquain, Mary.
Kelvin S.M. said:
…thanks Tony for introducing Cinquain form to us… mine’s didn’t quite follow your request re: the choice of word/s to use to end each line… maybe i might have try this later again in more strict execution… smiles…
brian miller said:
they do get easier….my first one is in the waste basket….ha….posted my second and third…and wrote a few later today as well…that first one, though rubbish, took a bit….smiles.
Tony said:
Hi Kelvin. I really enjoyed your cinquain – and the line endings you have work well. The one I think you might be worrying about is fine – it leads the reader to ask a question, to wonder what is coming next, which is a great use of a line ending. Your layout adds value to your poem as well 🙂
Kelvin S.M. said:
Hi Tony,
Thanks for that… well that ‘Only to’ pertains to the next line.. as you noticed my take in cinquain is somewhat reads like a prose cut only to fit the count of syllables… which i also find cheating & quite unfair… ye know at times i find it hard to write in independent lines as my thoughts are quite hard to limit too… when i write it’s like pouring water in a wide basin not even care if the water is free from dirt or of tiny shrimps or toads… i just let it flow down the basin… filtering process is way too long to be done…but i do it when it feels right…i really enjoyed cinquian Tony…maybe i’ll another one for it but this time in strict compliance with the rules… let me see if can make it sooner or later… smiles.
Linda Rogers said:
I’m really excited about this poetry form Tony. I’ve only written Haiku and thank you for telling us about Cinquain and Tanka. Now I know three~Woo Hoo. I am off to the bar to write my first Cinquain. I sound so smart 🙂
brian miller said:
woot…looking forward to it linda…
and tony should be getting home from class just in time to read it…smiles.
claudia said:
looking forward to it as well…. busy with photo shootings at the moment though…ya know…girl’s talk…smiles..
brian miller said:
lol…i would probably need a translator…smiles.
Tony said:
Looking forward to reading it, Linda. Beware though, it’s not quite as easy as it might appear … smiles.
Tony said:
Your first cinquain, huh! That’s a mighty fine start 🙂
Grandmother (Mary) said:
Thanks for this, Tony. It let me pull together a poem I’ve been working on for 2 days.
claudia said:
loved the being schooled by the wind to howl praises..how cool’s that….
Tony said:
It’s funny how that happens sometimes; having more constraints actually helps us to focus on what we really want to say and makes us discard anything that is not absloutely essential.
ManicDdaily said:
Such a cool article, Tony. k.
Tony said:
Thank you – bends down behind bar to blush in private.
ManicDdaily said:
Ha!
kkkkaty1 said:
I’m sure there will be some very cool cinquains….thanks Tony for the practice 🙂 They are a bit of a challenge but not as much as the limericks are….. for me anyway…sorry MGK;)
kkkkaty1 said:
…I mean MBK 😉 enjoy the girls Claudia..and don’t you know that you can always throw out the first pancake Brian..so it is with poems 😉
brian miller said:
ha….i might have better luck with pancakes…smiles….i can even do star wars shaped ones for my boys…
brian miller said:
and i am def down with peanut butter and pickle….smiles.
claudia said:
nice…can i have a star wars shaped pancake as well..? smiles
brian miller said:
sure…come on over…do you want a yoda…or a stormtrooper? i used chocolate chips for eyes and visors, if you dont mid a bit of chocolate…smiles.
claudia said:
ha..not at all… i want a yoda then please…smiles
brian miller said:
if anything to say about it I have, pancakes, you will have.
(really a rough paraphrase of the little green guy)
Imelda said:
Nice. 🙂 This Cinquain is markedly different from the one I learned from my son’s lesson. That one repeats the first line or gives its synonym in the final line.
brian miller said:
studying the form a bit myself before writing mine i found quite a few variations on this form…
Tony said:
Hi folks. Sorry to be late to work, but I was at a poetry class at Edinburgh University. It finishes for the term next week, and next term it’s on Wednesday, so there won’t be a clash in future.
Thanks to Brian and Claudia for holding the fort while I was unavailable. I’m looking forward to all the cinquains that you have for me … smiles.
Just out of interest, how many people found this harder than it looks?
brian miller said:
hey tony! hope class went well….alls good…a fun bunch so far…and a good crop…
def not as easy as it would seem….
Tony said:
Ach, Brian – you only broke it a little bit first time round … smiles
brian miller said:
i was trying man…95% there…smiles.
Sabio Lantz said:
Tony, I don’t understand this request:
“if at all possible, using words like the, at, a or and at the ends of your lines.”
just prior to that you tell us that it would make a poem seem choppy — so why do you want us to do it??
puzzled? Seems odd.
brian miller said:
there is an ‘avoid’ right before where your quote starts….
Tony said:
It says avoid on my screen – puzzled too
Sabio Lantz said:
wheew, got it. that is a relief
claudia said:
smiles…three happy giggling girls under the door and i hand the dishcloth over to tony… have a wonderful evening everyone…smiles
Tony said:
I only came to get the keys! You mean I have to do some work … smiles
claudia said:
smiles…you should head over to jane’s place and get some biscuits, butter and berries before you start….hmmmm…. smiles
brian miller said:
what is up with the food..between food and spring i todays poems…i am craving sun and dinner….but dinner is cooking so i am half way there…
Glenn Buttkus said:
Yeah, there are so many variations on the form, we can’t go astray easily; stresses, lines & syllables always set up tantalizing boundaries for old free verse addicts like Brian and myself, but FFA always intrigues. These are my first cinquains.
claudia said:
see i didn’t even check out if there were variations…i just trusted tony…that’s how i am…smiles
Tony said:
There are loads of variations, but I chose to bring the original because it is a really tight form that makes us think about our word choices. In a form this tight, each word has to really earn its place in our poems, which I think is good practice.
brian miller said:
i agree…the discipline of weighing each word…even in long form is important….
myrthryn said:
Happy Pi Day! I didn’t write about pie, though.
Good evening all..
Tony said:
That’s why everyone is obsessed with food – pie day! smiles …
Tony said:
OK – I’m out on the trail. I can trust you not to wreck the pub, right? I’ll be checking … smiles
heidi said:
Thanks for the cool prompt, Tony! Happy Pi Day, y’all!
Tony said:
My pleasure, Heidi. Looking forward to seeing what you’ve come up with.
Tony said:
Well folks, it’s late here, so I’m going to ask Brian to mind the bar overnight (my time). If I haven’t visited you yet, rest assured that I will.
brian miller said:
oh yeah, i got it covered man…
will be in and out as i am writing a grad paper tonight
on collaborative learning and direct instruction techniques
yes, it is as fun as it sounds….smiles.
henryclemmons said:
Bad news
For me that is
I have and engagement
And won’t return until way late
Can’t play
Yet:)
aprille said:
Nice one!
brian miller said:
haha…but you just did! smiles..
have fun at your engagement
and i will hold on to that yet…
smiles.
Grace said:
Yes, you can ~ Looking forward to your share Henry ~
Cat Hill said:
Really enjoyed playing (and struggling) with this form. Thanks Tony 🙂
brian miller said:
struggling is right…ha….you did well though cat….
Sabio Lantz said:
A fantastic explanation, fun poems — looking forward to the critique. (missed it on the last one)
brian miller said:
there you go…gave you a little…
Sabio Lantz said:
Hmmm, waiting for Tony’s too. Replied to your critique, Brian
Tony said:
I’ll be there – you can be sure of that – but I have this feast of cinquains to enjoy, and I want to take my time 🙂 They’re too good to rush.
Margaret said:
I love this form and I will be back later this evening to read and comment on other’s poetry – off to clean my horse’s stall right now (not very poetic!) Thank you for all you do at dVerse. I love Form for All and hope to participate more in the future.
brian miller said:
oh you know there is poetry in cleaning a horses stall…hahaha
dare you to write it…smiles.
there is poetry everywhere.
another
shovel of sh–
it’s almost clean, plop
back to the beginning, another
shovel…
lol….
brian miller said:
oh darn tony…another hyphen made its way in…smiles.
Heaven (@asweetlust) said:
Brian, this is hilarious ~ Smiles ~
brian miller said:
whew…thanks i was thinking i might have jumped ship there….ha….
Tony said:
Well now Brian, I could choose to read that as a divided word, but instead I chose to read it as an elision for comic effect 🙂 However, unless your pronunciation is way different to ours, another is 3 syllables … smiles
brian miller said:
ha…us southerners tend to drop the a at the beginning….nother….you know….hhaha…
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
Thanks Tony. I enjoyed that so much, I did three.
Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) said:
My time so different from most of yours, I’m now off to a late lunch and will return later for reading other people’s cinquains.
brian miller said:
wow…i am almost ready for bed…ha.
so what are you having for lunch?
might give me good dreams.
smiles.
Samuel Peralta / Semaphore said:
Tony, welcome to Form for All… I enjoyed the article, you put together a great introduction to the (American) cinquain, with many really wonderful examples.
Tony said:
That means so much coming from you, Sam. I always enjoy your FormforAll articles, even if I sometime struggle to respond to the prompts.
Bodhirose said:
I was out of town all day so am late (as seems to be usual for me) but enjoyed this immensely, Tony. Thanks for the instruction and good pointers. I do love those short forms!
brian miller said:
Alright, grabbing the last couple before hitting the hay…
be back in the morning for the rest…
much love to those out visiting others…
remember we are a community.
Linda Kruschke said:
This is awesome! Another short form of poetry. I just wrote one, but it won’t post until tomorrow morning. I’ll be back to add my link to Mr. Linky. Thanks Tony. Peace, Linda
henryclemmons said:
Okay, I’m playing now, but me thinks I should not drink and write. It should be a crime. because I am sure i abused the rules. My father would be so shocked.
Enjoy, I will read and comment as long as I’m able . Peace not war and love without
claudia said:
good morning… managed to return comments but running out of time now as i have an early work meeting scheduled… so back in the evening to catch up
Akila said:
wow! wonderful Tony. a new form of poetry to experiment and learn. 🙂 thank you…
Tony said:
Back in the bar – looks like Brian and Claudia have managed to keep some sort of order in here … smiles. Coffee is brewed and while it’s quiet, I’m going to hit the trail. Already flattered that so many of you have tried your pen at this deceptively simple form.
MarinaSofia said:
Excellent exercise – I love short verse forms, because it really forces you to think and be concise (rather than my usual rather verbose self)! Thanks for bringing this form to our attention, Tony. I dashed off a quick one, so as not to miss Mr. Linky again (as I so often do…), but it’s a form I will come back to, and try again and again.
Question: does it have any conceptual constraints – you know, like in haiku you have some allusion to the season?
Tony said:
I agree about the impact that short verses have on our writing – weighing the impact of each word is not something we do often, but when we do the results are always worth the effort.
As to conceptual constraints – in the cinquain there are none. You have an entirely free hand about what you try to squeeze into the form.
I’m glad you enjoyed it – and especially pleased that it’s something you feel you want to come back to.
zennjennc said:
I love Cinquain. I never worry about putting it in iambic pentameter or anything though.
Tony said:
There’s not enough room in the form for pentameter – the longest line is only tetrameter if you choose to write strictly metrically
brian miller said:
kids rolling into the classroom….will catch back up at lunch…have a good day all…
Tony said:
You too Brian.
Melissa Hassard said:
Reblogged this on 20 Lines A Day and commented:
Sharing this with everyone because it’s a new form for me and I thought you might like it, too. Plus, if you’re not familiar with dVerse, check them out!
Today, finally, is a poetry day, so maybe I’ll be able to tuck one here today too!
Cheers, and happy writing!
Melissa
Tony said:
Phew – made it to the end of the trail (so far). There is some truly brilliant poetry out there folks – too many outstanding ones to pick favourites. I’ll check back later for any who have found time and/or inspiration hard to come by.
claudia said:
ok made it back and catching up…and oh it’s almost the weekend….nice..
Tony said:
If you’ve finished work for today – it is the weekend 🙂
brian miller said:
at lunch…so i have a bit to go…
claudia said:
nice..enjoy your lunch… PBJ….?
brian miller said:
ha leftover meatballs, today…
claudia said:
hehe you’re right….happy dance over here…smiles
Cat Hill said:
Great prompt Tony, thanks for helping me step outside my comfort zone and helping me express a concept that I previously failed to do in free form. There are some brilliant poems on Mr Linky 🙂
Cressida de Nova said:
Thank you Tony. I hope I have got this one right. Good fun.
Tony Maude said:
Well, it’s time for me to wipe down the tables and the bar, sweep the floor, clean the glasses and get everything ship-shape for Karin. With Sunday being St Patrick’s Day, I’m anticipating quite a party!
Thanks to everyone who took part and shared your work with us. Special thanks to everyone who has made time to read and comment on other people’s work; that is by far the best way for us to help each other grow as poets.
And … if you have wirtten one or more cinquains and missed Mr Linky, please bring them to Open Link Night on Tuesday, leave a comment indicating that your poem was written to this prompt and I will visit you and comment on your work. That’s a promise – and not one of those political promises that’s not worth the air it was breathed with.
brian miller said:
great job tony…