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i tell you this up front, because i will ask you for a present here in a few moments.
no, really. i will.
even before i was a poet, i was a story teller. the art of telling a story has always inspired me. i love movies and books that find new ways to tell a story. i love poems that find new ways to tell a story.
today we are telling stories.
but
this exercise is about cutting and keeping. when you tell a story you have to know what to put in and what to take out of the story to make it effective.
over the last 4 years, one of the people that has helped me to condense a story and learn how to be creative in telling it quickly is Galen, or as several of you know him, g-man. he runs a weekly group on fridays that writes flash fiction or friday 55s. writers link up in the comments and read each other. (sound familiar?)
g has been there for me in a few tight spots over the years with a few wise (choice) words. so the gift i would like from you today—is to write a 55. it can be a poem. it can be prose, but…
it must be exactly 55 words.
it must tell a story.
then i want you to link up here—and link up at g-man’s. hey twice the fun today eh? his place is open now…just leave a comment letting him know you played.
he has no clue we are doing this. so if we bum rush his comments in a bit it will be a big surprise for him. for my birthday we are throwing a reverse surprise party. how’s that. ha. think of it as a flash mob. ha.
ok, so here are a few examples to get you started:
lingerie & edible things by Brian Miller
rocky road ice cream melts
in thick brown puddles, soaking
deep in the carpet
by the chaise lounge
where she lies in
sexy lingerie, dozing,
dreaming of prince charming,
as he sends one more email
from a desk miles away
picking at cold noodles
in a styrofoam container,
oblivious to flowers wilting
from loves inattention.
Evening Haze by Margaret Bednar
A muted silver haze
drapes its cloak
upon the winter pond,
envelopes me with a pair
of luminous swans
in a world of quietude.
Lethargic ripples
tickle the murky shore
where cattails
and winter grass
passively sway
and a blue heron’s
shadow sweeps
the water’s breadth.
I break the silence
whisper “Amen”
and walk home.
ok, there you go, now it is time to have at it. if you are new here, let me explain how this works:
- write a story in 55 words
- click on Mr. Linky below and enter your name and direct url to your poem/story
- go to g-man’s, after 8 pm EST and leave him a comment
- visit others here and there, seriously have some fun with it. they are 55 words…it take like 20 seconds to read.
- enjoy.
see you out on the trail. ~Brian
Happy birthday, Brian. I’m running out the door for a date with the hubby. Back soon to read.
nice… have fun!!
oo a date….nice….
First of all, Many happy returns of the day. 🙂
That was an interesting prompt. Writing a story in 55 words. I participate in some flash fiction challenges; so it was really fun.
yeah – it is fun – and a good training as well
cool….g-man is awesome….make sure you drop your link there in a bit as i bet all the 55s will make him smile…and its a great exercise in brevity….
nice… i like the g-man flashmob idea…oy… that’s going to be fun… and i love the cooking a poem down to its essentials as well…not always easy but fruitful as the two examples show as well… happy writing!
smiles…i hope that people do…i think he would be tickled to see so many blow his doors in…smiles.
Happy birthday Brian ~ What a lovely surprise for the G-man ~ I have participated in some FFF challenges before so I know the crafting and editing to just 55 words – tough !
Happy Thursday everyone ~
Grace
yes – i participated in g-man’s 55 fridays as well when i started writing poetry, then had to cut because of time issues but i just love how much can be said in 55 words
smiles….i hope it is…
and thank you for the bday wishes grace….
I forgot to share this link: it ‘s a word counter and helps you edit your words:
http://www.wordcounter.net/
ah nice….used to use on of those when i did the 160s…
Happy Birthday, Brain. 🙂
Can we write the 55 word poem here? or do it in our blog?
write it on your blog and link it up in the mr. linky
oh…okay. Thank you. 🙂
good to see you back charlie!
Thank you sir…It’s good to be apart of something special in this big group. 🙂
smiles..nice having you here
I’m going to post a poem I just did right now…and I will follow the link. trust me you will get a kick out of what I wrote. 🙂
look forward to what you bring this time around as well…
Trust me this is all for you. and you will get a kick out of this…I’m going to post my blog right now. 🙂
This is so FUN! 55’s are my favorite and I agree, Brian. Galen has encouraged me EACH WEEK with his kind comments and praise. Sometimes it has been his enthusiasm that has made me want to try again as am my own worst critic. Thanks for showcasing my poem! I was tickled pink. 🙂 Tonight will be a busy Thursday evening, but how fun.
it’s a beautiful poem…lots of great images and i love the peaceful mood
smiles…you are def a staple in the 55 group margaret….
and i love g—he is like a pops to me…and he is a great encourager….so i def wanted to give just a bit back…smiles…thanks for letting me use your poem too!
~ Happy Birthday! ~
thank you sir!
First of all Brian, happy birthday, secondly stories and limitations in term of words is one of my favorites… I do 33 100 333 but never the 55. Love to meet an exact limit and play a twist at an end.
smiles… this is such a men thing..isn’t it…ha…smiles
Ha.. I know a lot of women doing the same, but you have a point 🙂
ha. ahem. just keeping my mouth shut on this one…smiles.
Happy birthday, o mighty Brian, may He live forever! (I was just rereading A Horse and His Boy). And what a great way to celebrate! I don’t know if I’ll still be awake to post anything in 55 words, but perhaps I’ll still be able to do it tomorrow morning.
looking forward to it…and hey.. i think about writing that o mighty brian part on the mirror behind the bar…smiles
ha. i hope i dont live forever…that might get a bit lonely…smiles…but def like the sentiment…smiles….look forward to it….
it is def a fact that God and a throng of angels danced on golden streets the day you were born, and All that spiritual horsepower is intact in the glory we know as BM. Have a grand day, Brian. So many of us out here think of you as family. I followed you over to Galen’s Flash55 blog, and did enjoy my many stopovers since. Thanks for the tribute to G-Man, and the chance for all of us to kick brevity’s butt.
thank you man…haha and have a kick ass weekend…smiles.
Happy Birthday my friend! Be brightly blessed and have a great time! Neat prompt, can’t wait to see what everyone does. Will set my reminder to post at g’s place later on.
cool that would be great…i think it will be a great surprise if he doesnt catch wind of it first…smiles.
Happy Birthday, Brian! A cool idea for G-Man. I have never done these challenges, though I have read some of them that have been done for others. The very short story poem was fun to write. Waving to everyone who is here.
waving back….ok my arms are tired from waving traffic honestly…smiles. you did well with it mary…
cool…i will be back soon…i have bus duty so i have to get them out the door and i will be back to read and comment…..
Happy Birthday dear Brian! I wish you a magical day and a magical life!
thank you ayala…smiles.
Happy Birthday, Brian!
On Tuesday, I took a photo while headed east on I-90. It was a beautiful dawn and I just had to take it. I’d hoped to use it as an illustration for a poem. But then this prompt came along. On Thursdays I tend to write a five-sentence bit of fiction anyway, so this was — or is — a two-fer.
Congrats, again. 🙂
very cool…hope you had a nice trip and that stare not follow you for too long…and hey drop it at g’s ina bit and it can be a three-for….
Happy Birthday, Brian…. my little story is posted to linky 🙂
thank you martin…be over in a few….
55 to celebrate 40? The speed limit on most highways…whatever metaphor that might be. Same old story for me but had a fun ending with hubby’s influence. Getting to a specific number of words is fun and challenging. I like it. Happy Day!
nice…off to read…
haha… and don’t talk to bri about speed limits…just saying…smiles
hey what are you saying…just cause i made it to new york so fast…hahaha
Hope you’re having a wonderful birthday, Brian. Sorry I’m late. It’s been a busy day and it’s not over yet. This high school stuff might just wear me out (until she starts driving, but I’m not ready to think about that yet).
haha…i hear you…i work in one…smiles….oh yeah, driving is a whole other story…..shivers…smiles.
have to start working very early tomorrow morning – so off to dreamland… have fun writing everyone – and bri – enjoy the rest of your birthday.. would love to have a piece of that key lime pie…smiles
will link up with g-man tomorrow morning…
oh yes, no birthday cake here….its key lime pie on my birthday every year….xtra tart….mmm…..
This note for Claudia…b/c Bri M probably out there doing 110 mph on a city street.
It prob was YOU who put my “55” in there. Without knowing, I posted it again. Could ya just delete the one I shoved onto the site few minutes ago? So much thank yews for that.
Really inspired you were to let us know all this goin’ on. But you are just a thoughtful girl. (And sexy, too)…WHAAAT am I writing here? OK, I go away now and be a good boy…
🙂 Oh, also thanks for getting me on the page…..
PEACE!
110…i have only ever broke that mark twice….once in a police car…in the front seet mind you….smiles….
ha. ahem. i will leave the rest to you steve…smiles…
i took care of that link as well…not above doing a bit of work on my birthday…smiles.
gonna head home from school now…will pop back in once i get there and before dinner….thanks for all the bday wishes….i will see you shortly!
These are the good ol’ days Brian. Enjoy.
Thanks for hosting on your B.D. I bet G-man will be surprised.
ha. i hope so…smiles.
its the ol’ part that worries me…haha
Happy Birthday! Did my best, guess I was too early for G-man?IDK
yes, he does not open for another couple hours…figure we can get a good crowd together and then go crash it…smiles.
Happy birthday to you!I wish you all the best,the prittiest, the most beautiful,the most fullfiling and everything else that you dream of,wish for, need!!!
smiles…i will take it…thank you….
Happy birthday!!! 😀
thank you ma’am
Happy Birthday Brian! It’s late over here, so I’ll write and link tomorrow … and that’s a promise.
cool….look forward to seeing you then…and thank you tony…smiles.
Hey Brian – Happy Brian Day Birthday – ummmm … so so so tired right now. I love Galen and will try to come up with something. Hope you are having a wonderful day. Loved your examples – Margaret’s beautiful, yours typically sardonic but funny but winsome but all kinds of things. k.
got your email but could not respond at work…
get some rest friend….
hugs
Thanks, Brian — could not resist the call of you and galen combined. Hope you had a great b-day. k.
Happy birthday, Brian!! Hope you are having a great day! Afraid my piece isn’t all sugar and frosting, however the results were my own “icing on the cake!” Not sure if its the kind of thing to share with GMan (I have posted there once or twice.) Had two lines written and wasn’t sure where to go–the 55 word brevity works for me! Thanks for the idea. Enjoy the rest of your day!!
hey it was great news for sure…and that is def what matters…oh he will love it…he’s like a big teddy bear for happiness so….smiles…thank you ginny
I’m glad to join the group in wishing “Happy Birthday” Brian! Although it’s getting late in the day where you are, I’m sure there is daylight left..and the evening is far from over…enjoy!
oh yeah, just getting ready for dinner….how are you? smiles
Happy Birthday Brother! Just for you I shall take on this challenge now! Posting soon… Have a great day and a greater year ahead. It is an honor to be your friend.
smiles…back at you mosk…
will be looking for it….
and look forward to reading more of you in the new year…that will make it all the better….smiles…
Here’s today’s 55 words – consider it your birthday present!
I’m back and enjoyed your post, Brian. I’m more and more attracted to brevity in poetry lately. Enjoyed yours and Margaret’s 55.
Now, you enjoy every moment left of your birthday and this new year of life coming up.
most def…chasing every moment….
Just wanted to say Happy Birthday Brian, hope you have a great day! 🙂
thanks di….nice bit of a tale you spun there this evening….
thank you 🙂
Happy Birthday, Brian 🙂
thank you rene
as I sing in my perfectly pitched morning voice…. *cough* Happy Birthday to youuuuu”, that’s all I can muster for this hour of the morning. Happy Birthday Brian- will try my best (oh – and thanks Grace for the counter). PARTAY!
have at it…it is fun…have def enjoyed playing 55s over at g’s place…its a little work…smiles
and thanks for the song…
well you have introduced me to G’s too, though I don’t know how I shall keep up lol..
you are welcome the pitch wasn’t very good…but I just woke up 🙂
with time differences – when do I post to the G Man? It’s 9.30am Friday morning here.
about 8 minutes from now….
ta 🙂
What! I’m late to the pub again and haven’t toasted to the good health of OUR Brian!!! A round on me y’all and best wishes for many many more – For he’s a good fellow – hurrah!
ha. smiles…thanks gay…..
alright 8 minutes til g man opens…
Brian, if you get a frosty mug of beer cold enough, it’s JUST LIKE ice cream. Cheers, hope you’ve had a kicking birthday! ~ Mike
ha. were you the one that commented the other day about my inclusion of ice cream in poems? someone did…that is funny….thanks man
not I….
Happy birthday Brian!
And thanks for always being there when I need help in a tight spot!
aw shucks….thank you good sir for all you do educating me…smiles….
Hi Sam ~ I think the timing is perfect, smiles ~
I’m not sure if mine is a story or simply prose…help? *smiles*
2nd thoughts – I’ll pop it in and hope it fits.
You’re a good friend, Brian, to ask for a birthday present for someone else. Way to go, and double Happy Birthday.
smiles. i hope he likes it…well he already emailed me and was smiling so that is a good sign…thank you joy…
Happy Birthday, Brian 🙂 I think birthdays are special and hope yours is fantastic.
55 words is a challenge. I’m working on it. I guess I’m just talkative today 🙂
Um… Any extra cake? A corner piece with lots of icing, maybe?
will key lime pie do?
thanks for the bday wishes….
55s are def not easy…esp if you really go for telling a story….its hard to build and then relieve tension so quick…but it def can be done….
Yes. Key lime sounds wonderful.
Would you mind changing the challenge to 178 words?
Happy birthday, Brian. Many many happy returns of the day. Hope the boys made you pancakes and baked a cake!
even better…they made me a key lime pie….my favorite….mmm….
hey everyone, HAPPY BIRTHDAY, BRI!! (& many more…………………..)
(did you know today is also my sister’s b/day? -no i guess you wouldn’t 😉
i have to run off now – dress rehearsal for 3 concerts my choir is putting on this w/e – but will be back later tonight to read & comment, promise
yay happy bday to your sister as well…
wow you are in for a busy weekend as well…hope all goes well at practice and you will have to let us know on the performances as well…
I’m so glad I popped in to see what today’s challenge was! Hope your birthday has been wonderful! I have to say, I love G-Man’s Flash 55. It has been one of those links to prose that helped me take the leap into novel writing.
that is very cool…and congrats on your book…
alright…i am done for tonight…be back in the morning…
thank you to those that popped in at g’s…that is awesome….
oh wow…almost 50 entries…goodness… i got something to read….smiles… need a coffee first though…smiles
returned comments….linked up with g-man and have to leave for work now… will catch up in the evening… and bri… i just love that on your own birthday you gave this present to galen.. shows a bit of your heart…smiles
Happy bdday! Brian! already into friday. ll see if I can pitch in! 🙂
happy friday to you….smiles.
Will be around in the morning to read and comment – it is one of my favorite things to do. Drink coffee and read poetry by you lovely poets!
coffeeeeeeeee…..just putting down my first cup…..smiles…good morning shanyn
Happy Birthday Brian. Inedible lingerie is my favourite poem of yours. 55 suits you although I do not believe you have reached that age yet:)Hope you enjoy your day!
thank you…smiles
and its one of my fav 55s i have ever written
Happy Birthday Brian… hope you have a great one! Cheers…
thank you good sir
As promised, I’ve wirtten my 55 and linked here and at G-Man’s – it’s my first time linking over there. Now that it’s not your birthday, allow me to say Happy Unbirthday, Brian. Whaddya know, it’s my unbirthday too … smiles
ha. i must find you an unbirthday present tony…smiles….
Wish you a delightful Birthday. First time here and first attempt at 55. Will submit soon 🙂
welcome to dverse…i met you over at PJ earlier this week, right?
will be over in just a moment…
Happy “belated” Birthday! Thank you for this wonderful prompt. This is my first “55” I’ve ever written – it was fun. I linked here and now I’m heading over to G-mans. Have a fantastic Friday
very cool…have fun with it and thanks for the bday wishes….
It was fun and a wonderful lesson in moderation 🙂
Happy birthday Brian. I’m off for a birthday Japanese buffet. 55 words exactly? Geez. I’ll have to think on it.
yum, i love japanese, so i am a bit envious….
hope you get a chance….
55 exactly, giving you the present you asked for. Even though Thursday has left us. Of course, I believe in 30 day birthdays with many many happy returns!
oo 30 day birthdays….now that sounds fun…ha…thanks susan….
Many welcomes, Brian. I’ll be back to read more later.
most def….good morning….smiles…
Don’t you have that feeling? The fortnights either side of my birthday are the best weeks in the year. Every year, so I count on this now.
I’m making my way through the comments: sounds like a glorious time was had by all at your party do.
thank you for the wonderful card as well aprille….smiles. hey i am def in for a good week…
Know what?
I could hear the scratching of the fork on the styrofoam tainer, and the sound plus the cold noodles made me queasy. Now that is writing!
A Happy (if not belated) Birthday wish to you Brian. Hope you had a wonderful day!
Anna :o]
thank you ma’am…hope you have a great day as well…
Happy (belated) birthday, Brian. I hope it was absolute fun.
Pamela
smiles…hope those kids dont wear you out too much today…smiles.
Did a ‘proper’ one: an actual story in 55. How difficult that is.
…..hello Brian…. happy 25th birthday… hihi… 😛
ha.yes….maybe in how i act at times…smiles.
…coming late & almost out of cake… i see… no… but we also celebrate my grandma’s 70th birthday today…ha… just a close family celebration & gathering ye know… grandma has like 11 siblings so that’s quite more already to create a full blast party… hihi…. hope you had a wonderful celebration Brian… smiles…
…shall polish a bit my 55 & link soon… smiles…
yay tell gramma happy bday for me….
def had a bit of fun yesterday myself….
Happy birthday Brian! That is my third wish!
Kelvin! Your grandma is 70 today. Both Brian and her on the same day 😉 she must be a storyteller too! Mine was, and she is unforgettable.
smiles. i bet she is as well…
Happy birthday wishes, Brian, and thanks for the fun prompt. 🙂
woot. good to see you misky….and thank you…
Happy birthday and have fun:)
woot woot thank you sir
Brian, I know we are supposed to write about someone else, that is typical of you. But I pick you – however, were I to try to write 55 words about you, they wouldnt be enough to laud your humor, your big heart, your kindness, and the way you manage somehow to comment on everyone in the ‘sphere’s poem (I dont know HOW you do it!) Just thank you, Big Guy, and Happy Birthday.
ha. you make me blush sherry…smiles….
When I dropped by MR. KNOWITALL this morning, as you hoped, he has a huge turnout for his Flash Friday 55.
Brian, Great prompt! I’m a little late, but better late than never. 🙂 Peace, Linda
i’m way late…busy day but out on the trail now to catch up…
Oh shoot – late again – happy day after your birthday, Brian – smiles! K
ha. you are good…i am late tonight….i am just getting home from the HS football game and filming…playing catch up…