When I first began blogging poetry, I participated in a critique group hosted by English poet, Luke Prater. Eventually he dissolved the Facebook Group, yet now and again, I run into one or another of those participants here at dVerse. In fact, that is where I first met Claudia and Brian and Luke was one of the original pub-tenders here at dVerse.
In December of 2010, Luke invented a form called the Octain, full name Octain Refrain. I recall enjoying working with the rhyme and meter and the results it gave me.
Here’s how it works.
It comprises eight lines:
two tercets and a couplet,
eight syllables per line or iambic tetrameter, your choice,
first line is a refrain, repeated as the last (some variation acceptable).
Rhyme-scheme:
A-b-b
a-c/c-a
b-A
A = refrain line.
c/c refers to line five having internal rhyme which is different to the a- and b-rhymes. The midline rhyme does not have to fall exactly in the middle of the line
The High Octain is simply a double Octain
I’ve chosen two of my poems for a sample:
The Call of Spring
An Octain
Outside my window, should I look,
a hummingbird has taken wing
while nightingale begins to sing.
A quail emerges from her nook
for her dirt bath beside the path
that moseys down along the brook.
Attending to the call of spring
to go outside, I close my book.
Untitled Octain
How many lives are spent in vain,
too conscious of the voice of fear,
thoughts muddled so that sight’s unclear.
They creep through days avoiding pain
or, warped by hate, they learn too late
to trust that love should ever deign
to visit them and draw them near.
Too many lives are spent in vain.
If you would like to see an example of a High Octain, I’ve posted one just last week here.
To participate:
- Write your poem and post it on your blog or website;
- Access Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post and add your name and the direct URL to your submission;
- We love to have you leave a comment and join in the discussion;
- Spend time enjoying and commenting on the work of your fellow pubsters, especially those who have taken the time to do so for you.
- Enjoy your time writing and reading poetry.
Good Thursday, everyone! Victoria will be a little late today, but the bar is now open!
Hi Mary, thanks for opening the bar ~ Looking forward to reading the poems ~
Thanks for opening the doors, Mary and Grace. Back home safely after a visit with my mom and looking forward to reading your Octains…and, hopefully, writing one of my own.
I thought this was a most interesting challenge! Thanks, Victoria, for introducing us to this form!
Hi everyone! Thanks for an interesting form challenge Victoria ~ I had to used the rhyming dictionary online to get it right ~
Happy Thursday and Happy Easter !!!!
Hi everyone…welcome! Grace, I had to use Rhyme Zone to help with my rhyming but I loved the prompt. Thank you, Victoria, it was fun.
Me too ~ I think I goofed on the mid-internal rhyme as it was the same as a ~ Oh, well 🙂
Thank heavens for Rhyme Zone!
Luke was the one who first hooked me into dverse. He gave me some of the best and most memorable comments and critiques I’ve ever gotten. He and Arron. I think they’re mostly Twitter-pated now. … I need to get back in touch; it’s been way too long since we hooked up.
I have learned a lot from Luke too 🙂
Thanks for joining in, Felicity–I’ve lost track, too…could not find a link to share. You’re right. Both Luke and Aaron were astute “Critiquers.”
Ha, I have a ‘primitive’ paper rhyming dictionary which I generally use!! Only occasionally do I use ‘rhyme zone.’
Rhyme Zone has served me well, Mary. A paper dictionary is pretty “primitive” these days; I have to agree! 🙂
I used rhymezone online too !
It’s my go-to helper these days.
What a fun form! And I definitely used Rhymezone.com. That and the online Dictionary.com thesaurus are my go-to resources for poetry writing. I’ll be back later to check out the other postings.
Glad you’ve enjoyed it, Linda.
Thank you for this challenge, Victoria. It looks so interesting, I’ll try to write something this evening,. No promises, though – I’ve had a very busy day!
I understand, Kim–I’m a bit swamped, too.
This form looks like a delight to try! Hopefully my muse will co-operate. Your musical high octane took me back to my piano lessons days 🙂
Music is such a great source for metaphor.
Glad to check in, at last, and looking forward to seeing what you have done with this unique form.
This was as fun as I hoped it would be…hopefully I followed the form…good prompt…
Glad you enjoyed it, Edward.
I remember these well. They are challenging but I wanted to write a new one for this challenge. Thanks for putting them up here today, Victoria. I think poets will enjoy these forms. They elicit something new while working to the strict meter and rhymes.
So glad you are here and, of course, not surprised you did so well with it.
Hey everyone,
Happy Easter to all those who are celebrating 🙂 sharing my poem “Easter Eggs” hope you guys like it.
Thank you Victoria for the lovely opportunity!
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thank you, Sanaa.
You’re most welcome 🙂
Happy Easter, Sanaa. We are celebrating this year in Bermuda — return home to Boston on Tuesday. Happy Easter to all! Bermudians celebrate Good Friday — it is a national holiday….there is a Passion Walk in St. George’s and then traditional kite flying (home made kites with hummers attached!), fish cakes, hot cross buns, soap box derby….family time. The day has dawned sunny with a slight breeze — perfect for kites!
That sounds wonderful Lillian 🙂 wishing you Happy Easter as well.
xoxo
Sounds so beautiful, Lillian. Kites with “hummers”?
I’m having a problem writing at this time of night, so I’m posting one poem that isn’t strictly true to form. I think I might have another go in the morning!
Glad you are here–I haven’t written mine yet, either!
Hello all. Will be back later to link, read and comment. This is an interesting form to follow….not persnickety or full of rules…a nice tight form. Hope you all are having a ggod day. 75F, sunny, flowers blooming, DC and Japan cherry blossom viiewing and festivals in full swing…in spite of all the bad news and politics, it is still a world of beauty and hope. And I have hope the people of Brussels will continue to be brave and to be strong.
Thank you. My hopes mirror yours. It’s a gorgeous world, and most people carry peace in their hearts and hope for that peace on earth.
I also believe this. Let there be peace, let it begin with me.
Amen, Toni!
I hope you enjoy the form, Toni–and with you, heartbroken about yet another tragic attack.
Finally got my Octain written. Also used De’s prompt for Poetics.
….it’s been awhile…this was fun. Thanks, Victoria
Good to see you and glad you enjoyed it, Kathy.
There’s a problem, Victoria: reading your octains and your fabulously musical high octain has left me feeling inadequate! I have an idea brewing, which I doubt will make it before the bar closes, so I’ll probably save it for OLN.
I’ll be sure to check it out on OLN, Viv. I do that, too.
It’s another poetic sudoku! 🙂 Bermuda is calling this morning — and we’ll be off to see the fully costumed passion walk right here in St. George’s — and then take the bus to St. Davids cricket club with this end of the island has wonderful festivities on Good Friday, which is a National Holiday in Bermuda. Kite flying (Bermudians pride themselves on making their own, complete with a cross somewhere on the kite and hummers — they make noises when they zig and zag in the sky) is a national tradition on Good Friday. We are so looking forward to joining in this wonderful day. So — I suspect I will be very late to the bar again — probably post tomorrow. Rhyming isn’t my au naturale way — but I’m game! 🙂 See you all tomorrow.
And everyone who celebrates Easter, have a joyous weekend! and now, as the saying goes in that song from Mary Poppins, “….let’s go fly a kite…!”
Wonderful traditions, Lillian. And Blessed Easter.
I just had to pop in to read. The Octain is one of my favorite formats, and I’ve written several. What I like most is that it is the format is short and concise, and is very specific with 8 syllable lines and internal rhyme. For me, because of it’s brevity, the format is an easy one to work with. Its been awhile since I shared here and have not been writing as much (husband still recuperating from illness), but thought I’d participate this time, if onlyshare the last one I wrote. I will pop back in after work today to comment on others!
So glad to see you. I understand the what happens when you are a caregiver, and it’s good to see your husband’s progress.
Hello everyone. After reading some of the posted poems, I decided to give this prompt a try.
Have a good Friday and weekend everyone.
So glad you are here. It helps me to read other’s poems, too.
Did it! Just posted. I cheated a bit and used the same end word twice….hope that’s okay. Had fun with this poetic sudoku!
Yeah!
I found Rhymebrain Rhyming Dictionary. Worked well. Thanks for this prompt.
Thanks–never heard of that one.
Phew! I made it. Now to read some more octains.
Wonderful–and a High Octain, no less.
Thanks Victoria, for taking me out of my comfort zone.! At first I found the rhyme scheme awkward for me to work with (as an amateur in structured form) but I loved the challenge and in the end, I hope it worked out. 🙂
Bravo, Mish! That’s what MTB is all about. Off to read it now!
Thanks for joining in, everyone. It was a delight to read your work. I will check in again in the morning in case there are any last minute poets out there. Happy Easter to all who celebrate it. And happy spring to all of us. It’s all about rebirth, new life.
Very late to the party. Back later to get high on everyone’s Octains. Thank you, Victoria. Once I dug in, I liked this form.
Glad you made it! I love your poetry and had fun with Tuesday’s prompt incorporated into my Octain.
Back home and heading over now, Victoria. 🙂
I’ve been around to everybody, and LOVING the responses to this fun form! Glad you got such a great turnout, Victoria!
It is a fun form. Thanks, De and Happy Easter.