Hi everyone! We have a guest host today, Frank Hubeny.
A popular form used for poems, songs, nursery rhymes and ballads is common meter. It subdivides into many variations depending on where one puts the line breaks or end-rhymes and how one combines lines into stanzas, but its most basic structure is the repetition of seven pairs of unaccented-accented syllables which form an iambic, rhythmic pattern that is familiar and pleasurable to many listeners.
An example of common meter is Sarah Josepha Hale’s nursery rhyme about Mary and her lamb. I have highlighted the accented syllables and split multi-syllabic words with hyphens to illustrate the rhythmic pattern in the first stanza. Additional stanzas and a more traditional formatting may be viewed at the Poetry Foundation website:
MA-ry HAD a LIT-tle LAMB, its FLEECE was WHITE as SNOW;
and E-very-WHERE that MA-ry WENT the LAMB was SURE to GO.
Notice there are seven accented syllables that I put in CAPITALS on each line. These accented syllables are separated by a single unaccented syllable. In general there is one unaccented syllable preceding each accented syllable except for possibly the first syllable on a line. This alternation of unaccented-accented syllables sets the “iambic” rhythmic pattern of the poem. The seventh accented syllable rhymes and this rhyming leads the listener to expect groups of seven unaccented-accented pairs of syllables as the rhythmic pattern repeats itself throughout the poem.
Another example is John Newton’s hymn Amazing Grace which adds variation by introducing pauses that are also repeated. I formatted the first stanza of this song with line breaks to illustrate these pauses that the reader or singer would likely make. These pauses slow the poem down. An alternate formatting with all the stanzas may be viewed on Wikipedia:
a-MA-zing GRACE!
(how SWEET the SOUND)
that SAV’D a WRETCH like ME!
i ONCE was LOST,
but NOW am FOUND,
was BLIND, but NOW i SEE.
Note that there are still seven unaccented-accented pairs of syllables, however, they are arranged in subgroups, two in the first line, two in the second line and three in the third line. These subgroups provide an additional repetitive pattern the listener will expect to hear as the song progresses. The two sets of three lines are grouped using the rhyme words “me” and “see”. This rhyming allows the listener to clearly hear where the seven-pair pattern ends without having to read the poem with its visual line breaks and other formatting.
The rhyme words could be avoided if the poem is written so that the listener is able to expect, based only on hearing the poem, where each group of seven syllables should end. Pauses at the end of the seven pairs might do this as well as rhyming words. Also repeating parts of a previous line might suggest that the previous set of seven pairs had ended. Those who find the sound of rhyme too distracting or too playful for their themes or who cannot find adequate rhyme words to express their thoughts in a natural way might try such techniques. The poem I will post and link to for this challenge does not use rhyme. It is a common meter variation sometimes called a “fourteener”.
Here’s the challenge:
Write a poem using common meter as its core structure. Think of it as a poem that will be heard rather than seen. That means feel free to format the poem any way that helps you write or read the poem, but imagine that the ideal listener will not see this formatting any more than someone listening to a symphony will see the score used by the conductor to lead the orchestra. The poem does not have to rhyme, but it should be clear to that ideal listener that there is a repetitive, rhythmic pattern of pairs of unaccented-accented syllables that suggest the poet is using common meter.
To participate in today’s MTB,
* Post your poem on your blog or website using the common meter as its core structure.
* Add the direct link to your poem into Mr. Linky at the bottom of this post and leave a comment.
* Visit, read and comment on how others have responded to this challenge.
I look forward to reading your work- Frank Hubeny
About our guest host: I live north of Chicago near Lake Michigan and I enjoy walking and taking photos. I keep a pen and notebook handy.
Thanks so much Frank for an informative session! Let’s stretch those poetic muscles folks. See you at the poetry trail. ~ Grace
Welcome to MTB folks ! Thanks to Frank for hosting and stretching our poetic muscles.
Happy Thursday, everyone! And nice to have you at the bar, Frank. I grew up in Waukegan, Illinois so know the shores of Lake Michigan well. Spouse is from old Austin neighborhood in the Windy City
– family still spread over the area. We go back every Thanksgiving.
Well, I so admire folks who can write seamlessly in meter! I’m a free verse gal but I gave it a shot — back to writing about Namrah. Hope we see lots of folks stretching — I do learn lots here! 😊 And we are all a supportive group. Happens in pubs😊🍷
Lake Michigan is so huge that I assume when people say “lake” they are talking about something like that when it is closer to an ocean. We’ve lived throughout northern Illinois for over twenty years.
Your poem about Namrah fit the common meter pattern well.
I’ve heard you can see Chicago
From Michigan, under certain conditions
I’ve seen Chicago from Indiana at one of the dunes parks on the south-eastern side of Lake Michigan. I suspect it could be seen from the dunes in Michigan as well.
Such long time since I wrote in meter…. hmm I thought this would be right up my alley…
It reminded me of the past sessions with Gay and Victoria. It took me a long time to understand it. These forms would be right up your alley Bjorn!
Ha… I used to be able to write a sonnet in no time… but it took time this time.
I fall back on the rhyming dictionary as my meter is off-meter.ha ~
Ha.. yes rhymes work well..
I often use http://www.rhymezone.com/ when I can’t think of anything, but the words don’t have to be perfect rhymes to get a similar sound effect. Also the meter doesn’t have to be exact. Sometimes a pause signaled by a comma can take the place of an unaccented syllable.
Good to know about the comma/lpause being an unaccented syllable! Another lesson learned on dVerse 🙂
One could occasionally add in a few unaccented syllables that would mess up a strict count or even flip the order of the unaccented-accented syllables to add variety to a potentially tedious iambic pattern. Beverly Crawford did that well in her submission, “The Optimist”. If one is reading the poem to make sure the constraints are met one might have objections, but if one is listening to it, it sounds nice. Sounding nice is what counts whether one strictly follows the rules or not.
Thank you, Grace. I have attached a type of common meter based poem called a “fourteener” to show that these forms do not have to rhyme. It has fourteen syllables with seven accented syllables forming the underlying common meter base.
I used to write meter all the time, and now I just had to work real hard to do it… 🙂
What I find hard about writing is coming up with something to say.
Funny….I’m never at a loss for words….it’s putting them together once, then twice, then reading aloud for the sound…and if there’s rhyming or a required form, it’s struggling to get the words into sounding like the sense of the totality rather than just the form. If that makes sense. So for me….the first words on the paper flow……it’s the editing to the final poem that’s the work. But I do enjoy it — so not really work.
Once I know what I want to say, the words flow as you mention. Sometimes they flow so quickly I wonder where they come from.
With the editing I sometimes add in constraints. For example, with the prose part of the haibun I have been restricting myself to 50 words since I heard it should be “terse”. (I probably should increase that to 75 or 100 words.) This extra constraint forces me to rework what I wrote when I otherwise would not have bothered until a better solution appears that an imaginary reader might find acceptable.
When you mention getting “the words into sounding like the sense of the totality rather than just the form” that is adding a constraint that should improve the final poem. One can technically follow the explicit constraints of a form, but if the overall poem doesn’t say what one wants to say in a pleasing way it is not satisfying.
Thank you Frank for the introduction to this form. I will be back to comment and visit when I get home.
This one is right up my alley. Thanks, Frank for suggesting it.
I enjoyed your ballad.
I like common meter. When I start writing a poem it is the first form that pops into my head. I guess it is not called “common” meter for nothing.
Thanks. It’s a style I use often. I like the rhythm and I enjoy refrains too.
I like refrains as well. If one puts in refrains and “bridges” (I think that is what they are called) one has a song lyric. I like the shift in perspective and the repetition that occurs in them.
Exactly. A song isn’t a poem (sorry BD but that’s my opinion) but you can make a poem that you can sing.
It is hard to say what is or is not a poem. One can probably classify texts in multiple ways to keep everyone happy. When I think of things like, however, I wonder if the lyrics to the Trashmen’s “Bird is the Word” would count as a poem or not?
I don’t know what the experts would say, but a bunch of repeated words that mean nothing, add up to nothing, have no rhythm or intrinsic beauty or punch, and have no point to make, to my mind do not constitute a poem. The tune might be catchy, but the words certainly aren’t. I’m no expert though.
Grace, once again your blog wouldn’t let me leave a comment so here’s what I was trying to post:
I do like the images in the first stanza, burning sage until your fingers are numb, and the sun as a drum. They’re slightly off beat, exactly the kind of images that work best.
Thanks Jane. Appreciate your comment. My blog settings actually allows anonymous comments as I am aware that some WP poets can’t comment on bloggers.
I tried that too but it said my open ID couldn’t be identified. Never mind, I can always reach you on the dVerse page 🙂
Actually I recommend not to use the open ID. I always use my Google ID – works like a dream.
I’ll try that next time 🙂
I think meter is one of ny bigger challenges. My entry might be backwards. The idea of stressed syllables, in English, is, I can change where I put the stresses. I guess I don’t really listen enough. Thanks frank for this challenge, you all have helped my writing so much. I’ve seen both shores of the Michigan lake at once. Vastness is fascinating
I enjoyed your poem and I liked the reference to those “three (left) feet”. Sometimes I think the more feet the merrier.
I remember seeing the Chicago skyscrapers from the Indiana Dunes long ago. That was as close as I’ve got to seeing both shores at once.
Wonderful prompt, Frank and happy to have you at the bar. This has been an “unusual” week for me–one that has kept me away from poetry. I hope to post this later or for OLN next week. Meter is always a good discipline when the poet muse slips behind the clouds. Time, not inspiration, has been the issue for me…company calling, for one.
I hope your week turns out to be less stressful than it sounds like it has been so far, Victoria.
Although it might not be the right word, one can get “hypnotized” with meter which is one of the things I like about it.
Rhythm and rhyme aren’t usually my thing. But I made a go of it.
I enjoyed your poem about your great-grandmother. It got me thinking that if we have something we want to say we will want to say it in the best way we can so that a particular audience will be receptive to it. That might involve free verse or prose or a metrical pattern.
Thanks! I like challenging myself sometimes. The subject matter kind of lent itself to the form I think. Thanks for the prompt!
Also known – for obvious reasons – as ‘English Hymn Meter’. I have used it a lot in the past, at times when I have been experimenting with ‘form’. I’ll not blog one anywhere, as my poetry has moved on into many different areas since, but please allow me to share with you, here, something I wrote in 2006, as part of a series of seasonal poems:
autumnal
There is a garland on the land,
Each tree is like a bloom
Cast down by an immortal hand
On winter’s readied tomb.
The gilded beams of beech and oak,
The sliver wands of birch,
Where once the flitting swallows spoke,
Are silent as a church.
The woods are decked in autumn’s best
Upon the hillside high…
Will I be in such beauty dressed
When I lay down to die?
[Yes, I know, it’s utter garbage, but it was by way of a compositional exercise.]
oh i dont think this is utter garbage at all…
I agree with erbiage that what you wrote is not garbage, kvennarad. Before leaves fall from trees they often become very colorful depending on the species. That can be used as a reminder of death, however, the tree itself hasn’t died. You’ve provided one perspective on that process clearly enough that a reader can accept or reject the content. I would call that success. Other poets may come up with something different and also hold the reader’s attention.
There are a lot of names associated with common meter because there are a lot of variations to it. In particular there is a “long” common meter that uses four accented syllables on each line for a total of eight rather than the seven in my examples. It is still an iambic pattern. Yours also includes an extra rhyme pair on lines 1 and 3 and I suspect there is a special name for that variation as well but I can’t think of it at the moment.
Morning all…missed the opening last eve but will have a pop at this now and catch up with reading later this morn.
Thanks for joining. I enjoyed your poem. Your comment on the “gravitas” available with the form has kept me thinking this morning.
I’ve had another stab at this Frank and whilst the content can most definitely be more serious, there is something in the rhythm that lends a certain jauntiness to this form for me.
The repetitive iambs in the fourteener, or even iambic pentameter which is similar but with shorter lines, does get in the way of the message. People don’t expect to hear such messages today in that format.
However, I think free verse would also get in the way except for those used to hearing the message delivered in free verse.
I know little about the mechanics of classic poetry…thank you Frank for this guide. Mary had a little lamb is a classic I know well 😉 I gave it a try … a few rough spots but it was fun.
I liked the break at the end of your poem to make your point stronger, Janice. That would be one use of a repetitive pattern: it gives one the option of shifting that pattern somewhat after the reader gets used to it.
An interesting observation Frank. Thank you.
I went to bed very early and had to go early to work.. will catch-up now as well as I can…
It is always good to be rested. I like sleep and look forward to what pops into my mind upon awakening.
Mary had a little iamb…
Nice start! That poem is a fun one to parody along with a few other well-known nursery rhymes.
Frank, I loved this and am going to definitely do another. For me, this is my favorite way to write rhyme, or no rhyme. After reading some of the comments here I cringed a little. I read autumnal and I’ve written poems like it…hope they’re not garbage! Of course, I like to write free-verse and express myself but there’s something to be said for musical poetry, Frost and Dr. Suess…lol!
Have a good weekend Pub I’ll be around to read! It’s a fine weekend to write about images. Hugs!
I enjoyed your poem. It’s not garbage. I’ve written poems like “autumnal” also. I’ll probably write more of them.
Lol! Me too.
hi,
can I have a Guest post of my English Poetry on your blog?
I will send you very Heart Touching Poetry,if you allow me
thanks
AATIF