Lillian here. Delighted to host Haibun Monday.
BEFORE I EXPLAIN THE PROMPT: TWO IMPORTANT NOTICES FOR ALL D’VERSE FOLK!
1. Thursday’s OLN on June 25 will be hosted by Bjorn and will open for the first hour with LIVE VIDEO that you can participate in. Our chance to see and talk with each other. Promises to be fun!
2 After Thursday’s OLN, dVerse will take a 2 week summer break. We will reconvene on July 13th – which will also be the 8th anniversary of dVerse!
SO – NOW FOR TODAY’S HAIBUN PROMPT, which will take a bit of explaining, especially for those not from the U.S. and perhaps, for those not particularly familiar with sports.
Every March the U.S. experiences what is called March Madness. It has to do with collegiate basketball and a huge tournament that begins with the 64 highest ranked college basketball teams in the country. They are “seeded” by their records so if all proceeded mathematically, the 4 best teams would be left in what is called the Final Four. College fans and basketball enthusiasts go “mad” as they watch these games and inevitably, some top-rated teams get upset, sometimes by a much lower rated team. The final two teams play for the Championship. Throughout the tournament, behind the scenes, media people have been filming and splicing together scenes of great joy and jubilation, cheering, mascots, great plays, etc into one film. At the last minute, they add clips from the final game. This film is then shown on national television at the end of the tournament. It’s the last thing you see as March Madness comes to an end and the final credits roll across your tv screen. That final film is called “One Shining Moment” and it’s what I look forward to every year. While none of us are college basketball players and March Madness was cancelled this year because of Covid-19, I do think the words One Shining Moment are applicable to each of us. We’ve all had one or more “shining moments” in our lives. I’ve included a video below of the 2019 One Shining Moment film. Listen to the words…..even if you’re not into basketball.
So the prompt is to write about something that relates to One Shining Moment for you. It could be an achievement, something you worked really hard for, a particular scene in nature that was awe inspiring, an occurrence in your life etc. What do the words One Shining Moment relate to in your life?
AND —– WE’RE GOING TO TRY OUR HAND AT A TRADITIONAL HAIBUN FOR THIS PROMPT! See EXPLANATION BELOW – EVEN IF YOU’VE WRITTEN MANY HAIBUNS:
- 1 to 3 PROSE PARAGRAPHS that must be a true accounting, not fiction, followed by a
- Traditional haiku which means it MUST
- be nature based
- be three lines (5 – 7 – 5 syllables OR short-long-short)
- have a direct or subtle relationship to the prose paragraphs: enrich the prose without condensing it
- include a KIGO (word or phrase associated with a particular season). See suggestions below in section on the SAIJIKI.
- (trickiest part for me) although only 3 lines in length, it must have two parts including a shift, an added insight. Japanese poets include a KIREJI (cutting word). BUT there’s no linguistic equivalent in the English language therefore punctuation creates the cut: a dash, comma, an ellipsis, an exclamation point. Sometimes it’s simply felt in the pacing or reading.
Japanese poets often use a SAIJIKI – a book like a dictionary or almanac for KIGO. Divided into the 4 seasons, it includes categories within each: earth, humanity, observances, animals and plants. I found this VERY HELPFUL! Here’s some examples:
SPRING KIGO: Under Earth, warm (weather changes from cold to warm; water becomes warm); spring mist and spring haze. Under Animals: frogs (noted for singing); skylarks (in flight); swallows, ad twittering (singing of songbirds). Under Plants: blossoms, cherry blossom viewing, wildflowers.
AUTUMN KIGO: full moon. Under Humanity: scarecrow. Observances: grave visiting. Animals: crickets. Plants: apples, persimmons, colored leaves.
WINTER KIGO: Humanity: snow viewing, first snow, ice. Plants: fallen and dried leaves. New Year: first laughter.
In other words, you may or may not actually use the words summer, spring, winter, or autumn.
EXAMPLES OF HAIKU with a Kigo and a Kireji (added insight after a cut)
The crow has flown away:
swaying in the evening sun
a leafless tree.
Natsume Soseki (186 –1916)
fresh snow on the mat –
the shape of welcome
Michael Dylan Welch
too dark to read the page,
Yuki Teikei Haiku Society’s Season Word List contains KIGO hints/words I found very helpful.
So here we go! Write a TRADITIONAL HAIKU about One Shining Moment in your life.
New to dVerse? Need to be refreshed on the rules?
Here’s what to do:
- Write about one of your shining moments, paying attention to the definition of a traditional Haibun given above: it should include a traditional haiku with a KIGO and a KIREJI.
- Post the haibun to your blog AND add the exact URL for your poem to Mr. Linky below.
- REMEMBER to either TAG dVerse in your post, or include a link at the end of your poem that leads readers back to dVerse (https://dversepoets.com).
- If there is no Tag or link back to dVerse, I will gently remind you to add it or remove your post from Mr. Linky. Sorry to be so harsh…..but this is just part of the requirements AND it will bring you more readers and lead more folks to dVerse so they can participate as well!
Looking forward to reading about lots of shining moments!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Hello, Björn here, we have wonderful summer here in Sweden. After a very warm midsummer it feels strange working from home, but fortunately my working room window faces the North so it works quite well.
Hurrah for the Summer Solstice!
Welcome to Haibun Monday! It’s a hot bright sunny day here in Boston. Went for our walk along the Charles River early so as to avoid most of the heat. But now, it’s a perfect day to read about shining moments!
Lots of cool drinks available. Just put in your order….I’m ready to serve ’em up!
Good evening all! Hi Bjorn and Lill, and thank you Lill for hosting and for a thought-provoking prompt. It took me ages to think of something to write about and then, when I’d written it, I couldn’t find the newspaper article with a picture of the cast in costume. I won’t be staying at the bar for long as I’ve not been at all well all weekend and am still feeling under the weather. But I will be back in the morning to read and comment.
I loved your shining moment, Kim. Feel better….take care of yourself. 🙂
Thank you, Lill. 🙂
Hi Lillian, and all! I’m an American who does not follow any sports at all, so I knew nothing about this one shining moment thing. 😀
We had beautiful weather here in S. Jersey the beginning of last week, but now it’s hot and very humid.
Well…..I’m not into sports but as I mentioned….we sometimes follow the NCAA basketball tournament…and always seem to watch the final four. I’ve always loved the One Shining Moment film….captures the heart and soul of the college kids giving it their all. And the fans too. I think I’ve just liked the song and have always thought about the idea that even if we’re not in sports….we all have shining moments in our lives 🙂 Glad to see you here Merril!
Hello Lillian and All. Today is a perfect 70 degrees F, a little overcast and humid, grey and dark mottled clouds are blowing over. Bjorn, could you please post or email detailed directions on the “livecast” on Thursday? I have “Microsoft Teams” and “Zoom” but no facebook. At this time I have my first hairdresser’s appointment at 1:30 that afternoon but will see if it can be rescheduled as I don’t want to miss it and the last dVerse before the summer break.
Good to see you here! I’m excited about the livecast and connecting with people I’ve only been “wording” with all these years! 🙂 Now that will be a shining moment for us all! 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I will do it on Google Meet… it runs right in the browser so it should be easy to do.
We have blue sky, fluffy white clouds – and a cold wind! We’re taking down and rebuilding a wall in the garden so I’ve been outside all day, getting facefuls of dust blown at me.
Thank you for a lovely prompt, Lillian, and for the reminder about Thursday. Looking forward to the livecast very much.
Glad to see you here, Sarah. Fluffy white clouds sounds a little bit like cotton candy to me 🙂 Yes — I’m really looking forward to the livecast as well. It will be almost like we’re all at a real pub….seeing and chatting with each other! Perhaps we should each have a glass of wine or some libation in hand? 🙂
The excitement is palpable Lillian, not sure I’ve seen anything like it!
Thanks for sharing … and the tricky challenge 🙂
Glad to see you here tonight! Lots of shining moments shared!
I’ve got a busy travel schedule today so remains to be seen if I can arise to the shining moment 🙂
Absolutely okay….just glad to see you here 🙂
Okay folks…..so many wonderful shining moments shared thus far!
I am taking the evening off now…..shall enjoy a late dinner with my husband….yes, the person I wrote about in my shining moment! I shall leave the pub key under the mat….so come on in and don’t be shy. Come behind the bar and help yourself to a libation, as long as – instead of a tip – you leave a Shining Moment post!
I shall be back in the AM…..hot coffee in hand….for more reading. I look forward to it!
thanks, Lillian. Could you edit the post to include a time for the “first hour” with time zone? I have no idea what time any given post goes up! Thank you!
oooh….should have done that. Eastern time zone =Boston and New York in US.
3 to 4 PM.
And he’s doing it on Google Meet.
Linda Lee Lyberg said:
Hello Lillian and all- I hope everyone is doing well. Lillian, thank you for hosting, and sharing the information about a Haibun/haiku. Joining in this morning.
Nice to see you Linda. I love the challenge of a truly traditional haiku. It’s interesting right, to learn about the real requirements other than just 5-7-5 syllables?
Linda Lee Lyberg said:
Yes, it certainly is!
Hi to all poetic friends! Yes, thank you, Lillian, for the excellent explanation of Kigo and Kireji here. I attempted to fit the traditional standards and enjoyed the challenge.
Glad you enjoyed the prompt. I’ve always loved the challenge of a traditional haiku…..too often we think of it only as a three line poem with 5-7-5 syllabic requirements. Those can be pretty easy to put together. When we see what a traditional haiku requires, it takes a bit more time and works our poetic and semantics skills….Glad you enjoyed the challenge!
There’s always something to be learned and improved 🙂
Mary (tqhousecat) said:
I may have to miss the chat on Thursday due to work schedule. If I can attend at all it will be for a very short time. I am saddened by this, as I would so love a chance to meet everyone. You all are teaching me so much about this poetry craft!! I hope many show up and have a wonderful experience!
Hope it’s not too late to join in with my haibun. This one took down memory lane and back to end at a recent shining moment. Thank you for this prompt and the haibun lesson, Lillian!