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Brian Miller, online poetry, poetry prompt, senses, well this should be interesting, without eyes i can see
Growing up, we had a piano that sat in the living room, on which my mother learned to play and my sister years later. Every year, or so, a man would come and tune the piano.
He was a curious man. I knew him well enough, he and his wife went to our church and I would see her holding his arm each week as they walked the aisle. He was always just a bit dishevelled; shirt untucked in a shot. He wore a corduroy blazer, plaid shirts and khaki pants. His shoes were slip-ons.
He would sit on the piano bench and turn his head to the side, reaching long fingers into the hood of the piano while he played notes with his free hand. I would sit and watch, knowing that he knew I was there but that he could not see me.
He had no eyes. Where they should have been on his face were to shallow pits of smooth flesh—as if he had never had anything else to go in them. While he could not see as we see, he saw much—probably much more than most of us.
Throughout life, I have met several people that happened to be blind that often saw much more than most.
As poets we rely on our sight quite often in how we write. How often have you heard “nice imagery” or “i could see what you were describing.” One of the things as writers we often try to do it get the read to see what we are seeing, or to feel they are right there as it is happening.
Today, I want to take that away.
Today, as in your poem, I want you to write with any of the other senses, but you can not use sight. You have to tell the tale or build the poem using your taste, touch, smell, what you hear—but no imagery…nothing I can see.
Uncomfortable, isnt it?
Blindfold yourself if you must, just sit and let your other senses read the moment. Maybe go outside and listen, smell, feel the wind on your skin and describe that to us—but NOTHING that I can see.
Have fun…smiles.
If you are new, here is how this works:
- Write a poem to the prompt, and post it on your webpage or blog
- Click Mr. Linky below and enter your name and direct url to your poem
- There you will find others that have joined in the challenge, read, enjoy, let them know what you liked, how their poem moved you or how you appreciated the senses they chose to use
- If you use social media, use the tag #dversepoets or @dversepoets so we can find you and help with promotion.
See you out on the trail. (pun fully intended) Smiles. ~Brian
brian miller said:
pubs open…have at it…
the kiddos are taking a test so i get to hang out a few minutes before the bell and traffic duty…smiles.
Beth Winter said:
Wonderful challenge, Brian. Describing things without the sense of sight tests the ability to focus and edit. Thanks so much.
brian miller said:
ha it does…its an interesting exercise that forces us to be very conscious when we are writing…i probably went a bit overboard in mine…smiles.
brian miller said:
and yours beth was a warm respite on a very chilly day….smiles.
claudia said:
that is a cool idea to write blind… i was literally closing my eyes when i wrote mine and was surprised how much sounds there were in the seemingly quiet of the morning…
brian miller said:
the morning is def a fav time for me…to sit and listen to the world….
hearing it all awaken…
another thing i thought of…have you seen the vid where the clapping people make the sound of a thunderstorm…i almost tried to recreate that in a poem…ha….
claudia said:
i googled it…. so amazing!!!!
Mary said:
Hi Brian…this definitely was a good challenge. So true that oftentimes we DO rely on the sense of sight to get the message across in our poetry. This is an exercise we should all do periodically, I think. Not easy….but rewarding when accomplished!
Hope everyone is having a good week!
brian miller said:
glad you had fun with it…i would bet that most of our poems rely on our visuals…and leave the others out…so if this gets us thinking about even just incorporating other senses a bit next write…all the better….happy thursday mary
Mary said:
Yes, I do think that one of the important benefits of this exercise is that it opens up our eyes to other senses. I don’t think sometimes we consciously think about the fact that so much of our writing IS visual.
brian miller said:
i agree…smiles.
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
I think this was a great challenge.. and in the back of my mind I also had Victoria’s Synesthesia… I had fun writing a sonnet.
brian miller said:
most def…that was a cool prompt…i had forgotten about….
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
Used your prompt and it fits with your article..problem is, it’s more like an open letter than a poem – but I guess it is what it is.
brian miller said:
hey it is what it is…smiles…and as i said at your place, it would be hard to lose that sense for me…as sounds is one of my dependencies….smiles. i imagine the absence of it as quite haunting…
Gay Reiser Cannon said:
It’s frustrating at this point and laughable. I get words confused – wish, fish, dish all sound alike. I’m always saying did he say??? I just turn up the tv and ask for repetitions. I hear noises — they’re a wave of cicadas roaring inside my head.
brian miller said:
smiles….at least you are keeping your humor…ack
claudia said:
smiles…. i do hope the hearing stabilizes and here’s to many more pieces of music to be heard and understand….smiles
Grace said:
Thanks for the wonderful challenge Brian ~ I followed your suggestion of closing my eyes and letting the other senses read the moment ~
Will be doing my rounds when I get home ~ Happy Thursday everyone ~
brian miller said:
you did very well grace…some really cool lines in yours….
i am about to have to step out myself…collect tests…and out the door to direct traffic…so i will be back shortly myself….
claudia said:
have a good trip back home grace – and oh tests…. haven’t written one in a bit…smiles
rmp said:
hmmm…this morning when I read the poem you posted on your blog and you mentioned the theme for today, I recalled the poem you wrote awhile back where you spoke of a man with a visual impairment who came to your house to tune the piano…I shouldn’t have been surprised to see him make an appearance in this prompt.
This is definitely an interesting prompt. I look forward to seeing how people tackle it. As for me…I guess we’ll just have to “see.”
claudia said:
….smiles… and to sense and hear and smell…. looking forward to reading yours..
brian miller said:
ha. or not see….smiles…
i did write about him just a bit ago…
he was a cool guy from my childhood…
Glenn Buttkus said:
I worked with the blind as a teacher for over 30 years, so my old expertise served this prompt well, even though 90% of the blind population are legally blind, or partially-sighted, the NLP (no light perception) group dwindles with each decade. In graduate school, we had to wear blindfolds to learn how to shop, travel, use public transportation, find something in a mall, cook meals, etc; nothing like immediate personal experience to heighten one’s empathy. To transfer the poetics to the other senses is a bold prompt, brother, & already out there on the trail I’m finding wonderful non-visual treks.
brian miller said:
i have done that exercise as well…with the blindfold…it is interesting—when it does not devolve into someone walking you into a wall on purpose…ha…its not as easy as one might think…but comfort can be found eventually…
Mary said:
Glenn, your poem was excellent. Both my mother and dad became legally blind….and some service people came out to the house for both of them to teach them various ways of coping with blindness. My mother even learned how to COOK being blind. Scared the heck out of me to have her do this (as I lived 100 miles away), but she managed.
brian miller said:
wow cooking blind has to be an experience…i dont know if you ever saw that blind contestant on masterchef…she won…she was amazing…
Victoria C. Slotto said:
I took a bit of liberty here, Brian, and imagined a scene of an encounter with an old friend…as prose, though. Love the prompt. Sensory description is so important in writing.
claudia said:
just read yours and liked it much victoria… esp. how you built in smell
brian miller said:
will be over in a few min…
happy thursday v
brian miller said:
V will have to get you when i get home…i just lost the ability to comment on WP here at school…again…but this one was open before it happened so hope it works….
Gabriella said:
Thank you for the challenge, Brian! I enjoyed it very much.
brian miller said:
glad you had fun with it gabriella…smiles.
Ella said:
Clever! I love it…I was going to write a Memory poem and now it will be I’ll make you hungry kind instead ;D
claudia said:
haha…looking forward to that
brian miller said:
smiles….cool..look forward to that ella….
welshstream said:
Good news …. I got my blog back 🙂 ….. the links were corrupted and thankfully I’m back in business … need a long drink after spending the week trying to sort that out 😉 ~ so will sort a poem out now
claudia said:
smiles… good that you have your blog back… looking forward to your blind poet piece…in the meanwhile enjoyed your micro poetry…
welshstream said:
Gah … wrong link … now linked the correct one …. use the 2nd one I’ve posted …. whisky gone to my head obviously!
brian miller said:
ha. are you sharing?
smiles. glad you got your blog back man…
freyathewriter said:
A brilliant piece of inspiration for us this week, Brian! I have found that using noise cancelling headphones (not necessarily listening to music!) whilst walking to work, or sitting on the train, forces me to notice my surroundings much more than if I could also hear what is going on around me. Paying attention in a different way really does get the creative juices flowing!
claudia said:
cool… i think our senses shift if one is not used or used in a different way. which makes us “see” things from a different angle..
brian miller said:
that is very interesting…dampening another sense…oy that might be hard for me…i rather love my sounds….smiles.
claudia said:
ok – bedtime for me – literally closing my eyes… see you tomorrow morning…
brian miller said:
sleep well c….
hanna said:
This definitely called for a touch of hedonism 😉
Tricky but fun.
Where’s that chocolate….
brian miller said:
ha…here let me get you something chocolate….smiles….
Laurie Kolp said:
well, I wrote something finally. I’ve missed you guys…
brian miller said:
woot….good to see you laurie….
hugs
Victoria C. Slotto said:
Hugs, Laurie. So good to have you back.
Grace said:
Lovely to see you Laurie ~ Hugs ~
Gabriella said:
We missed you too!
Susan said:
I rushed through earlier and think I forgot to leave a comment. I cheated a little in my poem, but got to your prompt, Brian, by the last verse. I love coming here and feeling the flow of conversation, the sense of a reading and gathering. So, if you are breaking out the chocolate vibes, I’m going to stick around!
brian miller said:
ha. sending some chocolate your way as well susan….loved the blend of smells there in the end susan…and killer last line too….smiles.
hypercryptical said:
Love this place dear Brian – oh how it offers me solace. Due to life circumstances – did not respond to all others entries last time I visited this wonderful bar – despite my hope to do so – but hope I will do this time!
Loadsa love
Anna :o]
brian miller said:
heya anna…
i am glad you came…your piece was intense…and brought back another memory to me as well….
we have a pretty good group tonight…quite a few out visiting…think only 3 i havent heard back from…and some nice creative responses
hypercryptical said:
Thank you dear Brian – do so love being here.
As said – do not take it personally if those I respond too do not respond to mine – know those who don’t comment unless I comment first – which is quite a lot – nigh on 50% of entries.
Some don’t return a comment ‘whatever’ and so be it. But I don’t enter here for glory – it is because I love it!.
Thank you dear Brian and for all those at the Bar!
Anna :o]
brian miller said:
glory is fleeting…
i will take the sense of community and comraderie along the way any day….
Abhra Pal said:
I may have come slightly far from the theme – but, well – we shall see. Thanks Brian for the great prompt.
brian miller said:
abhra, good to see you friend…another rather arresting last line….
shanyns said:
This will be a cool challenge – looking forward to it. Like blind contour poetry!
brian miller said:
ha. after your email last night—i have no doubt you will do fine blind shanyn…
off to bed…be back in the morning for the over nights….
shanyns said:
Have a few ideas I am working on.
biggerthanalasagna said:
Why am I always so late to the pub? Loved the posts this week!
claudia said:
smiles.. not late at all… cup of coffee and out on the trail to do my morning reading…
biggerthanalasagna said:
Good morning Claudia!
brian miller said:
smiles….we still have all day today so you are good…got my coffee and ready to read…..
biggerthanalasagna said:
Hey Brian! I like the prompt this week! Coffee would be nice with some apple pie.
brian miller said:
hey and it was Pi day today too…and einsteins birthday…
biggerthanalasagna said:
🙂
ManicDdaily said:
Brian–I’m afraid I’ve done this my own way, which is a bit of a cheating way. I don’t think I actually use sight too much, and mine is pretty faulty–but could not resist. k.
brian miller said:
it was very interesting…if i knew that of homer i forgot…maybe with all the IEPs that i am writing i am stuck in another place…ha…
ramblingsfromamum said:
I like and I shall try thanks Brian..morning…evening to all
brian miller said:
good morning mum….smiles
Akila said:
a bit far and near…so much for sight!! i wonder if i have done justice! it is out, nevertheless….
brian miller said:
i think you did just fine…and i understand the feel of uncomfort in trying to write completely without visuals…
Ginny Brannan said:
Sharing a brief little piece today. Will be back after work to read and comment. Catch you later!
claudia said:
have fun at work… for me the weekend started already and i’m playing catch up with those that linked through the day
brian miller said:
hey ginny…great to see you…
been a long day and just catching up with everyone….now that i am home…
Ginny Brannan said:
Finally home and ready to read. Am actually off tomorrow too (woohoo a Saturday off!) so what I don’t get to tonight will come back to follow up on tomorrow. Happy weekend to all!
MarinaSofia said:
What a fantastic prompt! Sadly, I don’t think I will have time to participate, although I will try to read and comment.
I’ve always been more reliant on my ears than on my eyes, but even I was stunned to discover on a recent poetry workshop that virtually all of my descriptors of a childhood day at the beach had to do with the sounds and smells, rather than anything visual.
claudia said:
that is interesting… for me i think as well the eyes are not my first sense when it comes to poetry… often it’s more smell and the emotions something evokes that gets me started with a poem
brian miller said:
that is very cool on the discovery at the workshop marina….
def mine is audio…smells too are so evocative…..
geraldine snape said:
this one came solely from stirred up emotions while watching “Orlando” by Virginia Woolf at The Royal Exchange Manchester this week…but the feelings really had nothing to do with the play…brilliant though it was …it was something deeper and older that came out of it. Thanks for the prompt!!
shanyns said:
Shared mine, finally, been packing all day. After supper I’ll be by to read everyone’s poems, and work on a blind contour drawing, and a touch blind contour drawing…will share later if they are worthy!
brian miller said:
nice…i wanna see them….smiles.
enthusiasticallydawn said:
OK, Brian, Shanyn- all…I am going to sit with this a bit and return. My teen girl just headed for an overnight, I am up for a poetic challenge!
enthusiasticallydawn said:
Or maybe I will just read… hmmm… will see!
brian miller said:
cool…i hope you come up with something dawn…if you do…let me know….
lynndiane said:
What a challenge, Brian! Hope you all forgive me for a winter theme…just saying “goodbye” to the season…got anything hot to drink while I read?
brian miller said:
i can set something up for you…was movie-ing with the wife so just slipping back in….smiles.
Loredana Donovan said:
Brian!! I made it, at the 11th hour! Ha! Thanks for a fun prompt! 🙂
brian miller said:
hey, good to see you….smiles.
Lila said:
What an awesome theme and prompt, Brian. Thanks for the inspiration, I made sure I wrote something for this.
Linked it up finally (: time to check out the rest.
brian miller said:
cool…cant wait to see what you did….be over in a few….
lupitatucker said:
Sorry I missed it, I just was able to read this post today. Loved this! Great exercise … Here’s my contribution: http://notenoughpoetry.com/2014/03/15/silk-cashmere-linen/