Hello, this is Frank Hubeny. The topic today is “frustration”, “disappointment” or “heartbreak”.
The following poem by Gerard Manley Hopkins inspired this theme:
Thou art indeed just, Lord, if I contend
With thee; but, sir, so what I plead is just.
Why do sinners’ ways prosper? and why must
Disappointment all I endeavour end?
Wert thou my enemy, O thou my friend,
How wouldst thou worse, I wonder, than thou dost
Defeat, thwart me? Oh, the sots and thralls of lust
Do in spare hours more thrive than I that spend,
Sir, life upon thy cause. See, banks and brakes
Now, leavèd how thick! lacèd they are again
With fretty chervil, look, and fresh wind shakes
Them; birds build—but not I build; no, but strain,
Time’s eunuch, and not breed one work that wakes.
Mine, O thou lord of life, send my roots rain.
And that made me think of the Bee Gees’, Barry, Robin and Maurice Gibb’s, song “Heartbreaker”. Here is Dionne Warwick singing it (Arturo Cayetano’s channel):
On the surface as a literal complaint, Hopkin’s poem shouldn’t work and perhaps it doesn’t for many. He whines. He’s weak in his self-centered frustration and envy of those he perceives as unworthy who nonetheless get a better deal than he thinks he does. I want him to stop. And yet all that is resolved in the last line, at least for me. It is the only line I’ve remembered over the decades when I first read it. All Hopkins asks for at the end is rain.
The lyrics to the Bee Gees’ song on a literal level are sentimental. Do they work any better than Hopkins’ verse up to the last line? With such a weak character portrayed in those lyrics, I can easily imagine why Dionne Warwick may not have felt comfortable singing them. Although this was her “most successful solo hit of the 1980s,” according to Wikipedia, she supposedly said, “I cried all the way to the bank.” The view of co-writer Maurice Gibb of the Bee Gees was very different. He likely spoke for the many whose tears over this song reached deeper soil when he simply admitted, “I cried my eyes out after we wrote it.”
Frustration and heartbreak are risky themes. The characters expressing these emotions of weakness look silly to some. That’s the risk. The reward, however, for writers who successfully take such risks is incredible. To those who sense what’s going on below the surface of this weakness, assuming there is something below the surface, find they are reminded of something they have forgotten, something they want art and poetry to remind them of, something they can hardly believe to be true that “love is stronger than the universe”.
Now it’s your turn. To participate write a poem and post it on your blog. It only needs to be vaguely inspired by the thought of frustration or heartbreak. Mine is simply a reference to homelessness. Whatever level or suggestion of frustration or heartbreak you develop, it may have a resolution, or it may not. If it has a resolution, it may be subtle or all over the place.
Copy your blog post and paste it in the Mister Linky below. Then enjoy the other poems linked with yours. See how the other poets developed the theme and leave a comment. You may also comment below. The Mister Linky will be open for two days.
The pub is open!
Yay!
Nice poem, Na’ama! Thank you for linking it with dVerse.
Thanks, Frank! Nice to pop into the dVerse pub once in a while. 🙂
Good evening all! I’m still having intermittent Internet problems, so I may disappear at any moment. I’ll keep popping back to read and comment but if it drops out completely, I’ll be back in the morning. This was a tricky prompt, Frank, and I thank you for making me think. I plumped for frustration in the end, the frustration of not embracing the things I once enjoyed because of limitations of age, while my husband refuses to give up!
Frustration is one of the options here. Nice poem and photo to accompany it. Fog can be beautiful, but potentially ominous.
Hello all.. I just came from a play reading, .. really interesting concept to have a play read by actors without really acting.
I wonder how movie actors add their dialog to the movie. I suspect it is the same way as a play reading without acting, but I don’t know.
I think it is difficult to write poetry that doesn’t center from the “I” perspective and especially when writing about something from a weakened state of frustration or disappointment. I find myself guilty of these self indulgences all the time. Eventually I hope to learn to write with any amount of detached clarity, but until then my disappointment and frustration is likely to spill out on the page like the poetic vomit is mostly is.
I enjoyed your poem. It is better than I think you realize. The “I” perspective adds concreteness and potentially depth. It is like the poet talking directly to the reader. Thank you for linking it with us!
Thank you, Frank, for the vote of confidence. This has been a year of transition for me. My previous focus was on exploring/exploiting the easier things. War, Social Injustice, Nuclearism. These things were easier to write about. They were subjects that I was able confront without having to take personal ownership. But this year I decided to dive deeper. To explore my place among these things, but more importantly to discover how my paralysis of being and inaction exposes the weaknesses in myself. It is difficult to reconcile that the subjects I thought afforded me clear ability to detach from responsibility are actually the things that I now feel most responsible for. My poetry doesn’t always do my thoughts and feelings the justice, but I still have quite a few years to get it right. 😉
Trying to get things right sounds like what many of us are doing perhaps with different focus. dVerse should give you a chance to experiment and see how things work out. Best wishes with the quest for strength.
I love it when I come to the pub to find that the prompt fits with my sentiment of the day. Will be back shortly, with my version of down and out, written on a ride through the city today.
I am glad this prompt fit for you!
This is so thought provoking it is going to take me some time to think about –
I am glad you found it thought provoking, Laura. For me this was the most difficult prompt to write so far.
Actually Frank I also meant to comment on how well written it is too – back later!
this is a hard one Frank, sitting here thinking about it is frustration too! i may have something soon
These poems are difficult. You captured frustration with that car that wouldn’t start even when the heart was ready.
Intriguing prompt Frank. Thanks for the challenge!
I am glad you linked a poem, Linda! Your poem made me think that sometimes not forgiving allows one to continue loving through the remembrance of the other person.
That’s an intriguing thought Frank.
Wow, Frank, I’m ready to cry here, reading all this heartbreak and frustration. Great prompt!
There are resolutions which may turn the tears to joy. Or at least leave that possibility open.
Such an evocative topic … it took me different places in my mind, but one idea rose above the others, and with that I went … (left the link with Mr. Linky, but am copying it here, too, just because …).
https://naamayehuda.com/2018/09/04/almost/
Very nice description in your poem. I loved the holding hands at the end.
🙂 I remember being a child and being mesmerized by the length of time it took for stalagmites and stalactites to grow. The concept of millennia upon millennia was just beyond my perception (it still is, but now I can pretend to understand … ;)). It still boggles the mind: according to Encyclopedia.com, cave stalagmites grow rather slowly—0.00028–0.037 in/yr (0.007–0.929 mm/yr)!
It boggles my mind as well. Although I rarely go into caves I remember one time on a tour when the guide showed us what complete darkness was like: he turned off the lights. Space seemed to disappear. My mind is boggled by both space and time in caves.
appreciate this intriguing topic for the day.
I find it at times both haunting and intriguing as you mention. I am glad you liked it.
This is quite a different prompt! It will be interesting to read.
When writing it I wondered if I could find something to post that would fit. I do think that going through heartbreak and frustration can lead to beautiful poetry.
What a wonderful post. Thanks.
Thank you!
Hello, everyone. This is my first time here. I was watching the movie ‘Falling Down’ and the theme Frustration resonated with me. As you mentioned, this topic can easily lead one towards the corny territory. Hope I managed to jump over the pits.
https://looseendoftheredthread.wordpress.com/2018/09/06/almost-enough/
Welcome, Varad! I saw your link in the Mister Linky. You jumped over the pits well. Thank you for linking with us!
Hello, It looks like I forgot to link up last night. I guess I was frustrated before retiring for the night. I’ll be around to read. Thanks for the prompt Frank.
Thank you for linking your poem, Truedessa! I like the sound of the repeating line that matches the title.
Good Evening, Poets! Thanks, Frank, for the inspiring post. I’m a day late but (hopefully) not a dollar short! 🙂
Perfect timing, Frank! It is only too late after the Mister Linky stops accepting links.
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Frank this is an incredible post not only have you chosen a favorite poet to illustrate the concept but also the perfect song. Not sure how you did that other than put a lot of effort into it. This is a verifiable treaty of heartbreak and it’s very inspirational as a stand alone. Thank you