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Today I am pleased to present to you, David James and two of his poetic form inventions. I was directed to his website by a link from Maureen Doallas. I found his article complelling and his new poetic forms exciting. I wrote to him and he has graciously agreed to host today’s FormForAll with the following article. Hope you will enjoy the challenge. Please follow Mr. Linky to link below the article.
The Resurrection of Form in Poetry
by David James
For 35 years, I’ve been a free verse writer. I was free to use any words in any pattern, flaunting the page without a thought of rhyme scheme, unhindered by syllable counting. Formal poetry was defined as that work from the past, by the Romantics, by Shakespeare and Chaucer, by poets of olden days. Of course, I dabbled with forms here and there, merely as exercises, writing a ghazal, sestina, villanelle, sonnet, pantoum. I wrote in these forms so when some wag confronted me with one of them, I could say, “Oh, sure, I’ve written that.”
As I get older, however, I am being drawn to form. And as I write more rhyming verse, using enjambment, slant and mosaic rhyme patterns to mute the obviousness of sound, I have come to the conclusion that we have fallen down on the job. Contemporary poets have done little, if anything, to further the innovative use of end rhyme in literature.
Looking at the major forms of rhyming poetry, it’s obvious that no new forms have surfaced in over a century. The ghazal, a Persian form with couplets, is over 1000 years old. One of the most complex French forms, the sestina, originated in the 12th century with Arnaut Daniel. The Italian sonnet’s origin, precursor to the English sonnet, dates back to the mid-1200’s, popularized by Petrarch (1304-1374). The French villanelle, our song-like refrain form of poetry, was standardized by the late 1500’s by Jean Passerat. The haiku first appeared in the 16th century. The most recent form, the pantoum, a Malaysian invention also containing repeating lines, became popular in Europe in the 1800’s. In the last 150 years, several generations of poets have turned their backs to formal verse, at least with regard to inventing innovative new forms for others to emulate.
As a lifelong free verse writer, I am intrigued when I venture into rhyming poetry. First, writing formal poetry alters my perceptions of the world. The rhymes, line requirements, and syllable restrictions change what I write and how I write in surprising ways. The restrictions send me into uncharted imaginative waters. My poems approach the material from a different vantage point, and I consistently end up saying what I never would have said if I was writing in free verse. The novelty and imaginative gyrations are both worth the attempts. The late great Richard Hugo voiced his appreciation for formal verse, particularly in overcoming writer’s block: “When you concentrate on the ‘rules of the game’ being played on the page, the real problem, blockage of the imagination, often goes away simply by virtue of being ignored. That’s why I write more formal poems when I go dry.”
Secondly, I have this longing to create my own forms, forms that thrive in today’s language and sensibilities. Personally, I find the age-old forms too restrictive and constraining. The sonnet and villanelle, though honorable, seem outdated for the world of the internet and global warming. Our challenge is to imagine the forms that speak to today’s culture and modern times. Our challenge is to create new and innovative forms that combine the music of language with the flexibility of free verse.
Some poets have written that end rhyme is dead and should remain buried, that free verse is the culmination of the evolution of language. I don’t see the world in that light. As writers, we shouldn’t be threatened by rhyme or forms, for that matter. We should consider rhyme as a tool in our poetry toolbox. In a recent interview in Rattle, Timothy Steele says, “I think free verse is a form additional to metrical poetry, and my sense is that free verse will continue. But I hope metrical verse will continue, too. They’re just different forms of poetry.” It’s clear that free verse is here to stay; what isn’t so clear is if writers have the courage and luck to create new poetic forms incorporating either rhyme and/or meter.
So this is the gauntlet thrown down at the feet of poets: to create the contemporary forms of rhyming poetry that will outlive them. What forms will young poets be cutting their teeth on 150 years from now? What are the new types of formal poems for the 21st century? What legacy of form will this generation leave to the future, if any?
To get the movement started, I’ll provide two new examples of 21st century formal poetry that I’ve created. My goal is to invent forms that
1) have a certain versatility,
2) do not emphasize the rhyming pattern, and
3) play off the strengths of free verse.
The first is called a Karousel. It is a twenty line poem, four stanzas of five lines each.
• The rhyme pattern is the following: abcda ecdbe fdbcf gbcdg.
• The three inner lines (bcd) rotate in each stanza until they circle back to their original bcd form from stanza one.
• Though each stanza is enclosed in a rhyme, there are no metrical restrictions.
Here are two examples:
AS TIME GOES ON
As each year came and went,
the man noticed the tree
outside, the one in back,
how its bark shed
like fur, how it bent
and swayed in time to the wind.
He remembered how his dog tracked
in his last dirt before being found dead.
The man buried him, like the others, religiously.
With each year, something pinned
itself to the inside of his heart,
which he imagined was not red
anymore, but bruised and mildly
dry, an item to be stacked
on a shelf or a cart.
The years began to rain down,
one suddenly became three.
The man looked up into the black
sky. And then a strange thought in his head
fell, like the whole world, into the swollen ground.
HOW TO CREATE PEACE IN THE MIDDLE EAST
I want to eat the sky
in chunks, gulp down the lake
in one fell swoop.
Let me grab a glowing star
and twirl it like a pie
on a long stick.
I want to wear a grass hoop
and dance through the bazaar
like a man on an earthquake.
I want to fly up to the moon and lick
the cheese off, wiping my hands
on the dress of Venus. With a cigar,
I’ll blow new rings around Saturn and rake
Jupiter’s moons into a chicken’s coop.
And for an encore, I’ll lift up the Holy Land
and make everyone hug and kiss
until something human shakes
out of their mouths, eyes, ears, and they scoop
it up in their callused hands. Like old scars,
only love will grow in their fists.
My second example is called the Weave. It is less restrictive than a
Karousel and can be written in two line stanzas, five line stanzas, or no separate
stanzas at all.
• Its rhyme scheme follows this pattern: abcad befbg ehiej (and so on).
• The first and fourth lines rhyme, and the second line rhyme from the first stanza becomes the rhyme for the first and fourth lines in the following stanza.
• So, the second line from stanza one weaves into stanza two; the second
line from stanza two weaves into stanza three.
• This form has no definitive number of lines.
The following poems are examples of this form.
MILLIONS OF MINUTES
I’m drowning
in a pool of my own making
like a minnow at the bottom of the ocean.
It’s too dark to see. There’s a pounding
between my ears, peeling the flesh
off my brain, breaking
each good thought
into dust that dissolves in water.
Much of what we do could be called faking
it, going through the motions
so we won’t get caught.
But we learn too late, this one life,
these millions of minutes
can’t be bought
or sold, only used or wasted.
I’M GUILTY: (originally published in Poem)
“There is a terrible blindness in happiness.”
Pascal Bruckner, Perpetual Euphoria
I’m blind as a bat
without radar.
Maybe it’s luck or fate or random chance—
but I’m blessed, gorging myself, a rat
in a cheese factory, dancing
on a huge block of brie with caviar.
I know kids go to bed hungry and beaten, crying
for help, that people sleep in alleys and trash cans,
that a woman opens a knife, cuts a long scar
down her left arm, lost in a trance,
but I wake in the morning—a wren singing
outside my window, a sunspot growing on the kitchen floor.
Coffee brews as I grab my favorite mug
and sit on the sofa, daydreaming
of our next vacation on Lake Huron, sand
sifting through my toes. I don’t mean to ignore
the hurt, the displaced and abused, the addicted
and suffering. I just don’t see them.
I stare out and my children, strong as sycamores,
run through the flowers blooming—tulips, dahlias, rosebuds.
It has been my experience that both of these new forms stretch and challenge me as a writer. I am able to generate lines and images that I would not have generated if I wrote the same poems in free verse. That is a wonderful side benefit to these forms. I also note that when read out loud, no one ever catches that these are formal poems with particular rhyme schemes. Again, that is my whole purpose in creating them: I want the music in the poem but not the constriction of a rigid form.
Whether or not the Karousel and Weave last or evolve is not important. Only time and fate will determine that. They are, however, forms that I have used and reused to make dozens of poems, new forms that have allowed me to see the world in a different light. Even though rhyming poetry has fallen out of favor and practice with most contemporary poets, that does not mean formal poetry must die a slow death. It is our right, perhaps our duty, to resurrect rhyme and meter and transform its use to capture the day. With a little imagination and attention, a new formal poetry can speak out in this terrible world.
David James teaches for Oakland Community College in Michigan. His second book, SHE DANCES LIKE MUSSOLINI, was published by March Street Press and won the 2010 Next Generation Indie Book Award for poetry. More than twenty of his one-act plays have been produced from New York to California.
© David James, PO Box 721, Linden, MI 48451
dljames@oaklandcc.edu
Revised Jan. 9, 2013.
thanks for bringing david to the pub gay…really two interesting forms…i def. had fun with it and took full freedom with the meter…line lengths…ha…smiles… happy thursday everyone
Gay–I really enjoyed exploring this form! Thanks for the prompt.
A very interesting form and much simpler to follow (no meter) ~
Thanks so much for introducing this to us Gay ~
(oops someone linked me earlier, but I am posting as Grace)
I deleted the Heaven link, Grace. I think our angel. Brian, may have linked us up today – He put me first…(or perhaps it was Claudia)…anyway angel — thank you.
And I am specially thrilled that the author himself is commenting on the linked poems ~ Thank you David ~
that is very cool…look forward to david’s feedback…
Hi Everyone – a little late for the pub today – out getting supplies – and coming back from the eye doctor with Ron. I think y’all will have fun today with these..they’re rhyme and free all at the same time — yipee! I’ll be round to see what you’ve linked! Help yourself today at the bar – taps are open and there are snickerdoodles on the table!
snickerdoodles…cookies…ha…awesome…love that word…had to look it up…smiles… welcome back Gay
Thanks Claudia..tons of fun on the cruise. Glad to be back. Looking forward to today!
I’m impressed with all the karousels and weaves already written by you poets! Hope you’re enjoying the forms. I write almost exclusively in these forms lately. I also have a “modified weave,” and it has the same requirements except a slightly different rhyme scheme:
a
b
c
d
b
c
e
f
g
e
f
h
i
j
h
The second and fifth lines rhyme, and then the THIRD line in the stanza becomes the first line in the following stanza. Again, you can keep going as long as you want. Once done, I often break the poem up into two line or three line stanzas. That further hides the rhyme pattern.
Have fun!
David James
ok, tucking that one away for maybe this weekend….very cool david…
for the record, david do you have an online home for your writing? a webpage or blog?
No, Brian, I don’t. I have two books (A HEART OUT OF THIS WORLD, Carnegie Mellon U. Press and SHE DANCES LIKE MUSSOLINI, March Street Press) and four chapbooks–DO NOT GIVE DOGS WHAT IS HOLY, I DANCE BACK, I WILL PEEL THIS MASK OFF, and TREMBLING IN SOMEONE’S PALM. Since I teach six courses of composition and creative writing at Oakland Comm. College, I’m really too busy to do a blog/webpage. If I have free time, I want to write, not fool around with uploading poems, etc.
I probably should have one. Maybe I’m too lazy for it. Thanks for your comments!
nice…will hit amazon here in a bit and see if i can find your books. are there any other forms you have created?
The only other variation I’ve used for the weave is this:
abcad befbd eghed
It can keep going. The last line (d) is the same in each stanza. I have no name for it, but the (d) provides a consistent sound weaving through all the stanzas.
Thank you David. I like this additional change. I think I will use it soon, too. I’m pleased to be able to present you here. You certainly honor us today with your article and your presence. It’s much appreciated. I want to spur my fellow poets into any conversation they may have regarding form and free verse. We are all welcome to it.
Gay, thanks so much for introducing us to David and his forms. I enjoyed his article and agree that as I age, form becomes ever more attractive and useful to me, especially when I’m in a slump. My new computer arrives tomorrow. Hooray. But it will be a while before we get programs loaded. Maybe for OLN.
nice…i know that will be great relief to have a computer again…that would def bug me…smiles.
Thanks for finding a way to us Victoria. I feel as though “my red wagon broke” when my computer goes down. Wishing you much memory and a very fast processor (smiles)!
see this is my kinda form…haha…fee verse with a little rhyme….keep the meter away…i like that…smiles…this was fun…
err that was supposed to be free verse…smiles…
thnks gay…and david….
On the other hand, if we had a fee for every verse we wrote we would all be super-rich.
David, thank you for a fascinating post. I will have a go at your forms. My poetry life is the reverse of yours – starting as a child, exchanging doggerel with Dad, then during my studies it was all form, form, and more form. In my dotage, I write a bit of everything – mostly free verse.
I did invent a new form for a Poetic Asides prompt: Called Five/Four, it consisted of alternate lines of iambic pentameter (the most natural rhythm of all) with tetrameter. Rhymes (aa, bb, cc etc) were at the beginning of the lines. The whole idea was to jolt myself out of kilter, like music in 5/4 time does.
SHE DANCES LIKE MUSSOLINI…what an interesting book title…great having you in the pub David and very cool that you take the time to comment on the poems as well…much appreciated
David, what a joy to have you as guest at dVerse Pub! I, too, have written free verse for 50 years, but in the last year, secondary to my connection to dVerse Poets, I look forward bi-weekly to the FFA challenge; giving me a chance, forcing me, to write within some kind of parameters. Late in life, a bit like you, suddenly I want to stretch my poetic chops, to feed my Muse more creative data, so that when the verse begins to stir in there, in has a new richness to it, enriched by form, classic or otherwise. I love both of your new forms; like the lune, they do not really restrict one’s creativity. Thanks for your challenge.
Glenn:
That’s exactly what I like about the forms–they release a different kind of creative power. I still write in free verse, but I’m drawn to the music of the forms more and more.
It all looks very cool. I am traveling today and by car (not train) so don’t know that I will be able to do until very very late, but will see. Thanks much, David and Gay. k.
yasniger…if you stop back in…i deleted your link as it had nothing to do with the form we are writing today….if you write to the form please feel free to link back in…
Gay, thanks for bringing David to the Pub and David, thanks for coming. I had fun writing my Karousel – it’s harder than it looks, calling for a little planning ahead and a great deal of use of the editorial pencil 🙂 The customers round here are a talented bunch and I’m confident that there’ll be some really good examples of your forms on the trail.
Thanks Tony – fine ones already. Always takes a little time to write with new forms. I’m checking in periodically. Definitely recommend folks stop by your place. Powerful piece of poetry today, my friend.
These both are very interesting and creative uses of form. Thanks so much for introducing us to them, Gay and David, and also for the introduction to David’s poetry, which I greatly enjoyed. Don’t know when I’ll be able to work with this, but will have to try it out someday soon.
Gay and David, thank you for presenting these interesting forms. I tried the weave and will try the karousel at another time, I think. I also like to do forms occasionally to stretch myself as a poet and for some mental stimulation as well, and I really like these two forms. Looking forward to reading what others have written / will write.
David and Gay, these are very interesting forms. I have written a poem using the weave and will keep this article in mind for later and try to write a karousel. I think writing forms stretches us as poets and is mentally stimulating in a different way than free verse. I am looking forward to checking out others’ poetry!
OK – it’s late on this side of the Atlantic so I’m off to catch some zzzz’s. I’ll be back on the trail in the morning. Once more, thanks to David for inventing these forms anbd for challenging us to consider creating new ones. I now have one I’m mulling over – although I haven’t written anything to it yet. Also, there seem to be at least 2 weave variations I need to try out too.
Thanks, Gay, for introducing us to David. I was unexpectedly taken to new poetic places. What more can I ask?
This is the best “comment” possible. Thanks, Mary.
Thanks, Gay!
I find your forms intriguing, David… I tried my hand at Karousel, but can’t wait to try the (modified) weave, too. Can’t wait to hear what you think! http://lkkolp.wordpress.com/2013/01/17/the-beach-is/
These forms are well named…I tried my hand at a Karousel..thanks for this opportunity to meet you and thanks to Gay.
If I haven’t been by your place yet, will do tomorrow. Long and taxing day for me as it turned out. I’m going to sleep early but will be around in the a.m. to read. So impressed with what David has brought to us today and with the results of your labors. See you tomorrow. g’nite.
Very interesting article, David… and thanks for introducing him, Gay! It’s an interesting challenge, creating forms for the next century. I myself have played with my own forms, but only to challenge myself, and never with the intent of propagating them as memes. I will keep these new forms in mind as I journey on!
Call me a Luddite but to me poetry has always been form and rhyme – real poetry. I can appreciate what is called ‘free-verse’ but to my mind it is simply creative prose. Poetry by its very nature is song-like and the earliest bards not only spoke their poetry they sang it. The era of free-verse has been interesting as an exercise but I don’t happen to believe it has added anything at all to the rich trove of poetic expression. The greatest poetry we have ever known has form and some rhyming capacity and therein lies the template.
Because poetry, like music, has a rhythm, a metre, a ‘beat’ there will be, as with music, always a basic and traditional form and the future may bring variations on the theme but nothing substantially different. There is a structure and order to mathematics and music, and the two are closely linked, and I believe poetry is the same. There is a reason why in ancient times poets or bards were not simply honoured, but revered. They were seen as links to a sacred expression at work in the material world. Beyond everything else I still believe that is the true foundation of the poetic template.
i am def not as conservative as you in my definition of poetry…
I think most poetry before the 20th century was rhymed, for sure, but it had to do more with literacy. Anything rhymed is easier to memorize. That’s why songs are rhyming; the peasants could sing them in church even though they could not read.
Once literacy became commonplace, as well as books and printing, there was less need to use rhyme in poems. Hence, we see the rise of “free verse” starting with the genius Whitman well before the culture was ready to embrace it. For me, free verse is not creative prose…it’s poetry that uses rhythm and sounds to convey experience. It’s simply freed from any restraints of end rhyme or meter.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts…
I vacillate between these two definitions of poetry all the time. I came to poetry very early because to me it was “verbal music”. The music in rhythm and rhyme continues to enthrall me. As I studied I found an “inner music” in the poems of Whitman, Dickinson and Wallace Stevens – words that carried sounds inside them as they spoke next to one another, sounds they implied in their meanings and context. I agreed with Dickinson when the unexpected happens, when my hair stands on end, when a fire rises up inside me, when a cold shiver runs down my spine, when a voice inside says ” I felt that way too…who knew someone else did”, I think that’s poetry. I guess that’s what makes me want to try everything, why I enjoy forms, why I find freedom in “stream of consciousness”, why I like playing with personal dialects, and regional rhythms as well as training my thoughts to conform with beautiful repetitions, rhymes, dance structures. It’s all poetry to me.
As Robert Frost said, so succinctly, “Poetry is what poets write.”
There is a professional song writer / singer who has set a couple of my poems to music and performed them in public at his gigs. They work beautifully. The interesting thing is that he chose free verse pieces both times! I woudln’t have thought it possible without regular metre at least, but he picked up on the rhythms that were there and had unerring instinct about which line/s to turn into a refrain.
Fascinating post – perhaps even more fascinating because I was already set on the subject! (not sure I would have chosen it otherwise for this exercise. Much thanks though. I shall have to return anon to do my visiting.
Hi everyone! I am so thrilled to see this article. Thanks Gay!
And thank you Mr David James especially for the inclusion of the pantoum in your list of forms. While pantoum arrived in France from Semenanjung Tanah Melayu (Malaysia) in the 18th century, its original form the Malay pantun has been around since the 16th century at least.
I have been writing since I was 11 and that was a l-o-o-o-n-g time ago. I have kept most of my poetry throughout the last 30 years or so and I find today that they naturally fell into some form or the other. I do write free verse with structure more nowadays preferring haibun for English poetry and pantun for Malay. I use Haiku for my humble attempts at French poetry.
I just saw this, but will not have time to post anything new as I work long hours today and tomorrow, and after that the link will have expired. I love formatted poetry, and am quite intrigued by your style. Will definitely get back to this as soon as I have a chance! I have written two poems that encompass a rhyme, free verse and really no established format that I am aware of, but that I will share the links to:
http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2012/06/speak-easy.html
http://insideoutpoetry.blogspot.com/2012/08/on-cusp.html
The poems have already been shared at one time or another here at d’Verse, so I hesitate to link in again.
I look forward to trying your Karousel soon. Thanks so much for coming by and teaching us something new!
snow here today….so out sledding and snow boarding….and will check in through out the day to warm my hands by your verse…smiles.
quote of the morning by my son, ‘ugh. i just picked the worst icicle flavor ever.’
hahaha
Brian,
I still remember my first ever snow and snow ball fight…I am sure the boys will have fun!
nice…have fun, wasn’t snowboarding forever…i wanna go…sigh
they are having a blast….i broke a sled going over a jump we made…lol…and cole and i had a no holds barred sno ball fight…it was awesome…lol
just coming online..catching up… and enjoying the conversation…smiles..snow over here…sunshine…birds singing and freezing cold…ha…awesome…
Excellent forms David. Glad I had the chance to try the Karousel for this prompt. I like it and can easily see myself using it again. But first, I am going to attempt the Weave.
You are welcome. I’d have to admit I use the weave far more than the karousel. I think it’s less restrictive and as a free verse writer, I thrive more on that form.
I just barely made it. My Karousel is up.
Wonderful poems and so sorry I didn’t get to this. My life very busy the last couple of days! A lot of job work and travel. They are very interesting forms though. Thanks. k.
I kinda liked this form.
me too…smiles.
Not thrilled with my karousel, but the form will definitely require another exploration at some point soon…
i just made it with a few minutes to spare on the linky.. When I saw these two wonderful forms, I had to try.. so did try out the karousel based on a conversation I had with an old and dear friend earlier today.. and I love the poems here on this post for both forms.
(LadyInRead @ My R and R Space on the Linky)
I want to thank everyone who linked and especially thank David James for honoring us not only with his article but also with his comments on poems and here at the pub. The forms have provided a fine structure for many good poems and will be a vehicle for many others I believe. Thank you again, David.
My pleasure, Gay. I have essays like “A Trail of No” and others that might be relevant in the future. You have my email. Peace.
Thanks. I do, and I’ll keep it in mind.
Oh, I’m too late for this, but will have to try these exciting forms some time soon. I like them very much and also think their inventor has used them beautifully. However, must take issue with the suggestion that contemporary poets don’t create new forms. On the contrary, there are many new ones around, although not yet so well-known as the older ones. One of several good lists of old and new forms is at http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html
My misstatement. My intent was to imply that there are no new forms created that have the swagger and “staying power” as the tried and true (sonnet, villanelle, ghazal, etc.)
Thanks for the website, however.
David James