Greeting fellow poets, tis Paul Scribbles hosting tonight’s MTB. I have long adored the poetry of ancient Persia and the ghazal form is a fine example of this. Hafiz (Hafez) is widely known as a master of the form. Translation from the original is notoriously complex and there are countless versions available of Hafiz’s work and I have found more than one description of the form. (See below and take your pick)

Manuscript of Hafez Diwan, decorated with Persian Tazhib drawings
Option 1:
The ghazal is a traditional Arabian verse form with the first two lines ending in the same refrain, which is then repeated at the end of each stanza. The ghazal consists of at least five, but often up to fifteeen, two-line stanzas.Each stanza should be independent, but should tie together with the whole. (Like a pearl on a necklace) The first two lines end with the same refrain. This refrain is repeated at the end of each stanza. The final stanza is a signature, where the author can use his/her name to seal the poem.The lines should be of similar length and rhythm. Themes are traditionally melancholy, introspective, loving, longing and thoughtful and in the Sufi tradition of Hafiz, directed to the Beloved [Source: Poetic Metre and Form: Octavia Wynne]
Option 2:
The ghazal is composed of a minimum of five couplets—and typically no more than fifteen—that are structurally, thematically, and emotionally autonomous. Each line of the poem must be of the same length, though meter is not imposed in English. The first couplet introduces a scheme, made up of a rhyme followed by a refrain. Subsequent couplets pick up the same scheme in the second line only, repeating the refrain and rhyming the second line with both lines of the first stanza. The final couplet usually includes the poet’s signature, referring to the author in the first or third person, and frequently including the poet’s own name or a derivation of its meaning. [Source: Academy of American Poets]
Below you can find an example in the classic style and something more contemporary.
Agha Shahid Ali: Even the Rain
What will suffice for a true-love knot? Even the rain?
But he has bought grief’s lottery, bought even the rain.
“our glosses / wanting in this world” “Can you remember?”
Anyone! “when we thought / the poets taught “even the rain?
After we died–That was it!–God left us in the dark.
And as we forgot the dark, we forgot even the rain.
Drought was over. Where was I? Drinks were on the house.
For mixers, my love, you’d poured–what?–even the rain.
Of this pear-shaped orange’s perfumed twist, I will say:
Extract Vermouth from the bergamot, even the rain.
How did the Enemy love you–with earth? air? and fire?
He held just one thing back till he got even: the rain.
This is God’s site for a new house of executions?
You swear by the Bible, Despot, even the rain?
After the bones–those flowers–this was found in the urn:
The lost river, ashes from the ghat, even the rain.
What was I to prophesy if not the end of the world?
A salt pillar for the lonely lot, even the rain.
How the air raged, desperate, streaming the earth with flames–
to help burn down my house, Fire sought even the rain.
He would raze the mountains, he would level the waves,
he would, to smooth his epic plot, even the rain.
New York belongs at daybreak to only me, just me–
to make this claim Memory’s brought even the rain.
They’ve found the knife that killed you, but whose prints are these?
No one has such small hands, Shahid, not even the rain.
Heather McHugh: Ghazal of the Better-Unbegun
Too volatile, am I? too voluble? too much a word-person?
I blame the soup: I’m a primordially
stirred person.
Two pronouns and a vehicle was Icarus with wings.
The apparatus of his selves made an ab-
surd person.
The sound I make is sympathy’s: sad dogs are tied afar.
But howling I become an ever more un-
heard person.
I need a hundred more of you to make a likelihood.
The mirror’s not convincing– that at-best in-
ferred person.
As time’s revealing gets revolting, I start looking out.
Look in and what you see is one unholy
blurred person.
The only cure for birth one doesn’t love to contemplate.
Better to be an unsung song, an unoc-
curred person.
McHugh, you’ll be the death of me — each self and second studied!
Addressing you like this, I’m halfway to the
third person.
*Note that she chooses to rhyme the second-to-last word before “person”.
Enjoy this reading of a Hafiz ghazal in it’s original language.
So my friends our task is clear this fine night. Pen a ghazal. Don’t be overly concerned with perfection but aim to bring the spirit of the ghazal to the forum.
Post to Mr Linky and spread the love.
Welcome one and all to MTB. I’ll be tending bar and am happy to serve whatever takes your fancy. Imbolc Blessings too this fine evening.
Bring me some single malt please…
Coming right up. This is a Festival Lagavulin. Complex fruity and packs punch. Enjoy.
Good evening Paul and thank you for bringing back the Ghazal to the bar… one of my favorite forms, a long time ago we had it as a prompt with the extra twist of writing it as a sonnet… since then I always write my ghazals with 7 couplets.
That’s why yours had a sonnet vibe. Clever.
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Thanks for hosting, Paul. I don’t recall trying the ghazal form before. I might have got it wrong. I liked the sound of the video, but of course I did not understand it. It is good to hear poetry in the original.
I think you did a great job Frank. From what I read around the subject there appear to be many ways to pen a ghazal but this seemed the most common.
You missed out the bit about the rhyme before the refrain. Only saying because I find this one damn hard to get right!
I did find a site that suggested such but more often tha ‘rhyme’ before the refrain was not included. I went with this description from Octavia Wynne’s book as I didn’t want to over complicate things. Feel free to ‘rhyme and refrain’ though 😉
ps…I have added an alternative description to the post. Offers the option.
I wish I’d seen the non-rhyme option 🙂 The rhyming version is a bit too mathematical for my taste.
I agree and hence my choice…I did consider offering both and have now done so. There may be mathematicians among us!
Don’t look at me. I’m just the masochist 🙂
I expect an algorithmic masterpiece from you now 😉
I cheated and posted one I wrote a few months ago. My brain’s tired this evening. What’s algorithmic? 🙂
Something mathematical 😉 I’ll be over to read soon.
🙂
Hi Paul! This happens to be one of my favourite forms and I’ve just finished. Just a sweet wine for me today…..in the spirit of friendship.☺
Sweet wine for a sweet poet coming right up. Over to read soon.
Thanks !😊
Good evening Paul, Bjorn and all! Although I have written a ghazal before, I still find them tricky to write without them coming across as forced, I got back yesterday from a trip to Venice and am just getting back into the swing of things, having picked up a nasty chest infection. I hope everyone else is in the best of health – it’s very cold at the moment!
Loved your write Kim. Felt natural.
Thank you, Paul!
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Hello Paul- whew! This is one I have never attempted. Working on one now, I welcome any constructive feedback. And to get me through this, I think I need a brandy! 🙂
Brandy coming up. I’m sure all will be well.
Afternoon, Poets. Thanks, Paul, for the challenge. I may experiment and use renga-style two-line stanzas in my Ghazal. As I’ve never written a ghazal before, this should prove interesting! 🙂
I’ve written another version of falling leaves using option 2…I can’t remember if we can post more than one poem for MTB so linking here.
https://paulscribbles.wordpress.com/2018/02/01/falling-leaves-ii/
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Alright folks…that’s ghaz-all from me tonight. I am traveling South tomorrow and must pack and sleep. I’ll be dropping in again tomorrow once I hit Yorkshire. Thanks for all your sterling efforts tonight. Sleep tight.
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this is a challenge Paul! Ghazal here in Malaysia it is a type of music performed at weddings and official events, I immediately thought of its hypnotic melody and languid poetry. Brought here by Indian settlers during pre-Colonial days it’s become an art form in the southern state of Johor. I am thinking my poem out and hope to write something as close as possible to form. thank you for this unique ghazal prompt.
Wow. If you can incorporate the rhythm of the music it would be amazing. Look forward to reading.
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Excellent prompt Paul, Thanks!
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Yeah I think I missed the mark. Might be worth a read anyway. Pour me something ethnic, please
Palm wine perhaps?
It’s been a while since I wrote a ghazal. Thanks for the challenge.
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Thank you, dear Paul. I was just thinking I hadn’t been to play at dVerse for a while, when you enticed me back! I love the ghazal, but up to now have been intimidated about writing them myself, even though I have had a few attenpts (usually with variations from the strict form). This time I decided to have fun with it – and I did! I adhered to your instructions and even gave myself a couple more constraints just for the heck of it; but I must admit the mood is very far from the typical ghazal. 🙂
Oh well, actually one of my “extra” constraints IS according to instructions – lines all the same length (as in number of syllables).
Lovely to see you Rosemary. I will be doing more reading once I am on the train.
I haven’t tried a ghazal in a quite a while. I’m not sure if I’ve done it correctly, but as I was looking up samples, they all seem wildly different. Oh well. I had some fun with it. 🙂 Back later to read more.
I’ll take a peek shortly. There is indeed a wide variety of ghazal out there which is why I offered two options.
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Thank you for this ghazal intro. It helped to have the examples to refer to. Cheers!
Thanks to everyone who contributed to the ghazal challenge. I have learned much about the form, both classic and contemporary, and will most certainly pen more now.I’ll leave the prompt up over the weekend and drop by from time to time. Have a fabulous weekend y’all x
I remember writing one awhile ago here but did not take time to find it. My first post in the new year. Thanks for the good cheer offered here!
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Seven couplets later, I hope I have a reasonable ghazal. My first time using this form and I liked it. I always like when rhyming is involved. Be around to read this weekend. Have a nice one!
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Thanks to everyone for their participation in this challenging prompt. I have learned much myself about the form and can’t wait to write some more ghazals. The prompt will close today.
I enjoyed this prompt, even if I’m late (again)
https://methodtwomadness.wordpress.com/2018/02/05/with-the-moon-on-my-wings/